"I'm done. Wake nodded.

"I've finished reading it so soon?" Guo Pan didn't expect, "It took me months to write these things, and you read them all in just one class?"

"To be exact, I only used half a class. "It took you months to write tens of thousands of words, it's too slow, and you can't write these things." ”

"Why can't it work?" was denied, Guo Pan was very shocked, "I wrote very seriously, and I thought about every plot for a long time." ”

"No matter how seriously you write and think about it for a long time, what's the use of the plot not being attractive?" Su Xing said, "There are a few questions about what you wrote, do you want me to mention it to you?"

"Say it. Guo Pan also wanted to know.

"The first one, the sentence is not thorough enough, there are too many bells and whistles, the story is to explain a thing clearly in the most simple and smooth language, and your sentence is too cumbersome. "Let's say you have a paragraph at the beginning, the morning sun is burning with morning mist, a golden light. In the forest, frost-resistant pines and cypresses, as well as holly, the moist bald branches and dark green leaves shine with spring-like life. As soon as the sun basks in, the morning mist descends and seeps into the dirt, creating puffs of moisture everywhere. "What's wrong with that? I think it's good. Guo Pan said.

"There's a big problem, this passage can be described in a few words, you have to use so many sentences, and those sentences don't make sense. Su Xing said, "All descriptions can be described in the words "rising sunrise." ”

This description is too simplistic, and it seems a little superficial. Guo Pan said his thoughts, "This sentence was not written by me, it was copied from a book, and the author who can publish the book should not be low." ”

"That's traditional writers, and they're really capable, but they're going to end up being online. Again, it is enough to tell the story clearly and smoothly in the simplest language, without complicated rhetoric, which will make the article too far away from the reader and make people feel unreal. Su Xing said, "There is another one, you have seen the Deer and Ding Ji, you have seen the Condor Heroes, and you have also seen the Heaven and Dragon Slayer?"

"I've watched them all, and I've watched them more than once, I've watched Lu Ding Ji four times, Condor Heroes have watched it three times, and I've watched Heaven and Dragon Slayer several times. Guo Pan nodded, "I've basically seen some of the others, otherwise why do you think I should watch Dream of Red Mansions when school starts, it's forced, there's no way." ”

"You can't read the Dream of the Red Chamber, but some people can watch the Dream of the Red Chamber five or six times, and they will also take out the Dream of the Red Chamber for study. Su Xing said, "The truth is the same, the vocabulary of these things must be simple, after reading so much, have you summed up anything?"

"Wonderful, so exciting, how nice it would be if I could have that kind of martial arts? Guo Pan longed, "Sometimes I dream that I am flying on the grass, and there is no problem with jumping from the building, but unfortunately, the dream is gone." ”

"That's what you've come up with?" asked Su Xing, "Wonderful, wonderful?"

"Yes, aren't these exciting?" Guo Pan nodded.

"Wonderful is wonderful, but you don't summarize it properly. Su Xing didn't guide you step by step, and said directly, "The most important thing is to make people feel comfortable, what is called comfort? Have an adventure, fall into a cave, pick up martial arts cheats, or meet a master who taught you martial arts, or meet a woman, entanglement with her, or rebirth, know some information that others don't know, make money from this, pick up girls, these can make people feel comfortable." ”

"In the Lu Ding Ji, Wei Xiaobao entered the palace, and he was at ease in the harem as a fake eunuch, and he met the master to teach martial arts, these are the cool points. Zhang Wuji fell off the cliff and went into the cave to pick up the martial arts cheats, which is also a cool point. Yang Guo entered the ancient tomb and met the little dragon girl, and the double cultivation of the little dragon girl was also cool. ”

Of course, there are all kinds of emotional entanglements in this, and if there is a man, there must be a woman, otherwise all that remains is passion, and after a long time, passion will become a base and make people unappetizing. What you write is mainly for men, and what men yearn for is nothing more than money, power, women, and women can't be less. ”

"You look at what you've written, it's too flat. A woman does have one, but she has no characteristics, her personality is not distinct, she is either rude, gentle, or cold, she must always have the same. Su Xing said.

Guo Pan hung his head and looked at Su Xing dejectedly: "Hearing you say this, I feel that I am not suitable for writing." ”

"Take your time, I told you, it's a process of accumulation and progress. Su Xing said, "I'll give you an idea, you can write and read." ”

"Do you have an idea?" Guo Pan watched as he woke up.

"Yes. Su Xing nodded, "Combine traditional martial arts with myths and legends a little to write an oriental fairy tale work." ”

"Similar to the legend of the swordsman of Shushan?" Guo Pan has indeed seen a lot.

"That's right, it's something like that. Su Xing nodded, "I'll tell you a little bit about the general idea, there is an ordinary young man at the foot of a certain sect mountain, one day he met a high monk, the monk taught the young man's secret method, and then encountered an accident, this young man was included in the sect, but his qualifications are relatively dull, the progress of martial arts practice is slow, and others look down on him." ”

"Later, there was a coincidence that the young man obtained a magic weapon, and his cultivation continued to improve, but no one else knew about it. Later, in a competition in the sect, the unfavored boy won a good ranking with his hidden strength and the magic weapon in his hand, and met the cold girl of the sect in the process. And then there is the invasion of the Demon Cult.,The boy and the girl don't give up at a critical moment.,Mutual affection.,The young man met an accident again.,Fell into a dangerous place.,In the danger of knowing the Demon Cult girl.,The two had an entanglement.。 ”

"That's pretty much it, there are feelings, there are adventures, and there are also pigs and tigers. Su Xing said.

Guo Pan looked at Su Xing with admiration: "You are really amazing, I feel the urge to read just by hearing you say this, have you also written, the idea you provided me will not be what you wrote, right?"

"It's hard to write. Su Xing returned the notebook in his hand to Guo Pan, "You spent months writing so much content, but I finished reading it in half a class." I also gave you a bad review, how do you feel in your heart?"

"It's hard. Guo Pan said, "I feel that I am worthless, and I have not written the story well." ”

"Look, writing is a very difficult road, and you have to think about the plot and code words for twelve or thirteen or four hours a day. Su Xing said, "There are not many interpersonal relationships, even girlfriends may not be found, the amount of toilet paper is increasing, people are sleepy, do you hold on?"