Back at home, as soon as the door opens, Lulu pounces on him, rubbing affectionately at his feet, wagging her little hairy tail at him.

Lulu is a stray dog he adopted, and the dog breed is Pekingba.

When I saw it, it was on a hot night, and the tiny little Lulu was placed in a cardboard box and abandoned on the side of the road.

The carton reads: This dog is three months old, has a small child, can't afford medical expenses, and begs a well-wisher to adopt.

He passed by the cardboard box, glanced at the bitter little Lulu, and sent it directly to the pet hospital.

Under his careful care, Lulu gradually got better.

He touched Lulu's head affectionately, closed the door, walked to the study, analyzed Gu Xiaoni's book, took a pen and paper, and wrote and drew while reading.

Lulu stayed at his feet all the time, and did not bark, and the aura of the master made it feel an endless sense of security.

After the analysis, a whole bunch of questions emerged.

The first is the opening scene, which is too old-fashioned.

It is also an intimate scene between the hero and heroine, and almost more than 80% of the scenes used to write romance can still be seen in her novels.

100% unchanged beginning, nothing new at all.

After that, it's a matter of rhythm.

A thing can be written in 3,000 words in one chapter, but she has to water to 4,000 words or even 5,000 words, doesn't this consume the reader's patience?

There are some things that can be described without going into detail.

For example, the expensive cup owned by the male protagonist, under normal circumstances, can be written as: The transparent glass in the hand of XX looks plain, but it is actually the work of Master XX and is worth XXX yuan.

And then use the side description to tell everyone that the male protagonist is very powerful: this is not a cup that ordinary people can have, it seems that this man's status is not ordinary, because this cup is only one in the world, and the wave embossing at the bottom of it is unique.

But Gu Xiaoni's description made him vomit blood.

Her content is: the glass in the hero's hand is filled with water, which looks crystal clear under the sunlight, and at the bottom of the cup, there is an embossed flower that she has never seen before, embossed into a wave-like, like the undulating waves of the sea.

The female protagonist recognized the cup in the male protagonist's hand, and hurriedly muttered XXXXXX in her heart.

In fact, such mental descriptions are superfluous.

If you want to show surprise, you can use it: the heroine's eyes lit up, and she understood the status of a man in her heart. So he got up with it.

The description of language and demeanor should be accurate, expressive, and superfluous, and redundant, which is a burden to the reader.

To put it bluntly, it's in hydrology.

Gu Xiaoni's hydrological problem is very serious. And she must watch more and learn more. When writing an article, be sure to think deeply and check for revisions.

In her 10,000 words, there are many typos, which makes him embarrassed.

After analysis, he replied to Gu Xiaoni with a private message on Weibo.

"There are a lot of typos, too many useless words. ”

When she went home in the evening, Gu Xiaoni couldn't help but feel happy when she saw Lao Ying's news, and immediately replied: "Thank you Lao Ying for your advice!

Ahh

Lao Ying, who sells air conditioners, actually read her own book!

Holding the phone tightly and placing it in the beating heart, a great joy rushed towards her and surrounded her.

Being able to get the guidance of Lao Ying is something that many people dream of!

Lying on the bed, she laughed wildly, as if Lao Ying's news was not news, but the 50 million he personally sent.

In the past month, she has been thinking about whether to become Lao Ying's apprentice.

The results were beautiful, but the process was tough.

But she thinks about it, and the hardships are only a matter of time, so it is impossible to give up this good opportunity!

Besides, the old man should be a human, not a monster.

She wants to bargain with Lao Ying and lower the task of 10,000 a day.

She still doesn't believe it, she knows it with reason, moves it with affection, sells cuteness and pretends to be miserable, and can't impress Lao Ying's hard-hearted heart?