1. Characters

Lao G's character creation can be regarded as the top level in online articles, in fact, half of the success of this article depends on its character building. Except for Xu Xiaoqing, who is a little weaker, the four heroines are all very brilliantly written: Tao Da, the class leader who is upright and sullen, Miss Sun who is straightforward and fast-talking and loves to toss (it is said that the most honest of these four girls is actually her), Mi Bobo, who is wise and foolish, and Xu Xiaofox, who is soft on the outside and black on the inside, (I don't like her very much). Compared with those authors who only use labeled royal sisters, Lori, married women, etc., to create the protagonist**,It can be said that it is more than a little bit higher.。

What's even more valuable is that many supporting characters are also well written. Even if it can't be said to be alive, at least it has escaped the fate of NPCs. The seventh brother will not mention it, the old man himself has a lot of scenes, and his flamboyant character itself is relatively easy to write. There are also characters like ****** Yu Wenjing who don't have much ink, just a few strokes, and the image and personality characteristics of the characters are outlined, and the pen power of the Dragon Boat Festival can be seen.

However, Lao Wei also has the same problems as other novels of the same type, the shaping of the male protagonist itself seems a little blurred, and the character of the male protagonist is not full enough. In fact, compared to Niu Bu Itchy, Wu Wending is already considered good, especially before opening the golden finger, it has a bit of the market flavor of Chang Shuxin's characters. But as soon as the gold finger was opened, the male protagonist's waist became an all-round athlete, but it became pale. However, Wu Wending has a full-fledged foundation and opportunities, especially the experience of falling out of love and the estrangement between him and his parents when he was a child, there is a lot of room to play. But I don't know if the Dragon Boat Festival is ready to hold back and play a big game or I haven't thought about it at all, I have always been there to leak a little bit from time to time with a hammer in the east and a mallet in the west, if this piece can be used well, it will be of great help to the character of the plump actor.

II. Plot

If it can be summed up in one sentence: that is, the pace of the start is slow, the early stage is too fast, the middle stage is getting better but slightly flat, and the future trend is unknown. The beginning of the old man is actually well written, but as an online text, it's just that you don't have any abilities in the novel, but since you're going to write a cool article, it's definitely going to die if the golden finger appears so slowly, especially the girl who appeared at the beginning, from the current state of complete disappearance, it seemed a little redundant at the beginning (of course, it is not ruled out that the possibility of returning in the subsequent plot is not ruled out).

And after Wu Wending's golden finger came out, whether it was the formation of the four ** or the establishment of the business group, it seemed that the plot was advancing too fast, except for Tao Sun and the two who were entangled for a while, it can almost be said that they were not shocked. Although the masses don't like to watch abuse, as the saying goes, how to see a rainbow without experiencing wind and rain, with enough foreplay, the climax will come more violently, and the Dragon Boat Festival is a little hasty in dealing with this paragraph, and it seems that it is a little impatient to enter the harmonious ** stage.

From this leads to another problem in this article: that is, the question of balancing the fun of the boudoir thrush with the development of foreign business, or how to grasp the cool point. From the style of this article or its main readership, the focus of this article is definitely the former, the bits and pieces between Wu and his four wives, the little warmth and fun in life, these can be said to be the soul of this book. But then again, although it is also a way to write around the table skirt and children, and to be honest, I don't have any opinion on writing like this during the Dragon Boat Festival, at most, there will be aesthetic fatigue after a long time (Guan Xian is almost the same now, although the slap in the face is still the same, but it has been a long time since there has been a climax like being taken away by the Commission for Discipline Inspection at the beginning and pretending to vomit blood), of course, we don't want Wu to engage in a business empire or to mix up any career. But occasionally it is still necessary to dress up Superman outside the underwear, in fact, the Dragon Boat Festival should also be aware of this problem, so a lot of this content has been added, but how much to add, when to add, to what extent, when to flat, when to get up, (I can't help but complain about Oscar here, Grandpa Ao is the other extreme, one climax after another, and there will be a feeling of suffocation from time to time when I read his text...... It's too much), the Dragon Boat Festival has a lot of room for improvement in these aspects.

Finally, let's talk about the prospect of the follow-up plot, on the one hand, of course, whether ** still needs to be expanded. On the one hand, because Wu Wending's ** is formed too quickly, so the contradictions in this regard (mainly between the heroines, not the woman's family, this aspect of the Dragon Boat Festival is very exciting, each family has its own characteristics) has not been written much, and from the perspective of adding new stimulation points to the article, the appearance of the fifth or sixth person seems inevitable (I also buried the foreshadowing of the little junior sister and Qi Dabing before, so I don't know if I can use it). But from the current ** harmonious state, I think the Dragon Boat Festival should be cautious in terms of adding people, and if it is not handled well, it will inevitably feel like a hard stopper, which will inevitably outweigh the losses.

3. Miscellaneous

First of all, I want to praise the author, as a newcomer, I am very diligent and easy on the premise of ensuring quality, on average two to three more per day, I hope to keep it up (by the way, urge the end of the change: you can't be so lazy if you buy out, if you fish for three days and dry the net for two days, the reader's enthusiasm will be extinguished for you).

Finally, I have to say that the name "Lao Gu is still young" is really a bit ...... ,I believe that many people were like me at the beginning.,Ninety percent of you won't click on this name when you see it.,Fortunately, there is a recommendation from Longkong.,Otherwise, I'm afraid this book won't stick to the shelves.。 Finally, I would also like to thank Long Kong for not missing a good book.

From: Dragon's Sky