Writing the script was not as fast as everyone thought, and it was not until dinner that the boy had just written a part of the outline, and at the urging of Ainiah, he was ready to write a part of the text first, and a few hours after dinner, he finally came up with half of the text of the first part of the story he had imagined. Pen | fun | pavilion www. ｂｉｑｕｇｅ。 ｉｎｆｏ

handed over the draft to Ainiah, Luo Yiyi immediately came up, she had already painted several paintings, of course, they were all random paintings, there were characters and landscapes, all of them were very magical, but she didn't have a little self-consciousness, and she was complacent that she thought that she could admire the five-body throw.

Luo Yiyi finished uploading a painting she had just drawn, and was about to rest for a while, when she saw Ainia reading the draft written by the teenager, and immediately came over to join in the fun, ready to criticize what he had written.

The background of the story set by the teenager is derived from the curse of a certain demon king in history.,After reaching a certain age, girls will have a certain chance of attacking.,So as to become a middle two disease.,Obtain a special power from the curse "Middle Two Fantasy World".,And the protagonist is a student who has a second disease and attends a school that specializes in managing this kind of children.。

The first third of the story is a slow-paced daily life, mainly between the protagonist and several of her friends, although there are also fight scenes, but most of them are jokes, the biggest of which is just the sports day held by the school to vent the energy of the secondary two patients. In the middle of the story, there is a mysterious organization outside the school that thinks the students are prisoners and wants to rescue them, and some students quickly respond to the call to join them, while others don't think they are students, and the story finally comes to an end after a long conflict of various adults going offline.

However, the ending boy hasn't thought about it yet, so he only stopped writing until he reached the end of the position, and at that time, Ainia urged the boy to start writing the text directly, ready to write while thinking about how to write the ending.

Of course, the main text of the boy hasn't been written much.,The main friends of the protagonist only appeared two or three.,It's just to introduce the extent of the worldview.。

Neither Ainia nor Lo Yiyi were interested in reading the outline of the story, and after reading the thousands of words in the text in a few minutes, they immediately began to express their feelings after reading.

"This won't work. ”

"Huh?" said the same thing that made the boy a little confused.

"You can't be a protagonist, you don't have any personality at all. ”

"What kind of character do you want?" can tell in detail what is not going to make the boy still settle down, and if he finds the problem, he will change it, and he is most afraid of saying that there is a problem but can't say where the problem is.

"You see, aren't all the evil genres popular now, I think that's pretty good......"

"But ......"

"The gender of this protagonist is not good. ”

Before the boy could defend himself, he heard the other one start to criticize as well.

"Clams?" the teenager who heard the criticism was even more confused, "Are you going to make the protagonist who is just a student not a girl in the girls' school?"

"That's right.,The protagonist is also a girl, isn't there no characteristics at all.,Since it's the protagonist, of course, it has to be a little special.,For example, the second disease caused by this curse is only available to girls.,But the protagonist is a man who actually has this disease.,So it doesn't raise the reader's curiosity all of a sudden.。 ”

"How can I explain him if he were a man?" the already confused young man answered.

"To put it bluntly, the curse of the demon king is actually a prank made by a large magic, and we can completely say that there is a mysterious organization studying this curse behind the scenes, and wants to master the power of the 'Middle Second World'......"

"Are you saying that there is a mysterious organization that has successfully researched and that the protagonist is its test subject?"

"That's right, it's great to expand on new stories, right?"

"Not really. After answering silently in his heart, the boy asked, "Do you have any other grievances?"

"I think you can delete the content in front of you.,You've been talking about the setting for a long time.,It's also a setting explanation inserted in the daily plot.,It's even more boring.,Like the setting can be compressed into a few sentences.,And then explain it in detail at the right time.,And the plot at the beginning is too bland.,It's not interesting at all.,It's not interesting at all.,If the beginning of a story can't attract people, then it's undoubtedly a failure......"

That makes sense. The boy thought about it and felt that this criticism was very serious and acceptable.

"That's basically it.,According to what I said, change the protagonist to a man.,Isn't it easy to write at the beginning.,In a school full of girls, the protagonist is a man.,Isn't there a highlight all of a sudden.,It's able to attract readers.,Even if it doesn't create a big conflict, it's also very interesting.,It's going to make people want to watch it.,Want to see why the protagonist can enter a girls' school or something like that......"

“…… All right. The boy glanced at the outline he had in hand and let out a long sigh, "I'll give it a try." ”

If you follow the story that these two children think,Then what the boy thought before will have to be overturned and restarted.,Although I don't want to.,But it's also a fact that the impact of the beginning they said is not enough.,The teenager decided to try to modify the previous stories to the extent that the plot in the middle and late stages is not changed.,It's a big deal to talk about what they envisioned in the first half.,After solving these in the middle of the middle, develop the story they want.。

Anyway, this is a script to make a game, and it's a big deal to make one or two parts.

It's just that they say that they will write the story themselves, why does it end up that they make up the story and describe the specific plot in detail for them? Is it really necessary for me to write the script? I can spend some money to find a gunman on the magic web.

The boy thought dissatisfied, and threw all the text he had written into the garbage.

"Aren't those settings still going to be used?

"I don't need it. "If you write the plot they give, many of the parts will be conflicting and need to be revised, and in that respect those things really don't need to exist.

"It's good to compress these settings and put them in the appropriate plot later.,Are you going to think about it again when you throw it now?" They didn't know that their proposal needed to let the teenager tear down almost all the story and rewrite it, and still easily put forward various opinions that made the teenager's head big.

"I don't have that bad memory. The teenager who was trying to think about the plot was criticized and became a little irritable.

"Haven't you heard of 'a good memory is better than a bad pen'? I kindly remind you, that's your tone? Hmph, no matter what you are, let's go play the game." ”

The boy was the only one left in the room, and he could finally calm down and think carefully about how to develop the story more logically, the plot more interesting, and the characters more fleshed out.