Chapter 414 is a poetry routine

Li Junge said with a smile: "'The crowd does not dare to distinguish between the people, and secretly throws money to the distant people', this shyness and longing, the expression of gain and loss can be depicted!"

Qiu Ya clapped her hands: "Ouch, don't say it's true, this look needs to be changed, it's not enough to just focus and be serious!"

Li Junge covered his head with his hands: "You are guarding the second standard here every day, of course you can't experience this kind of mood, you have to bring in the mood when you were painting alone in the Shudu studio!"

Qiu Ya's face was flushed and she was about to hit him with a pen: "Oh, you're so annoying!"

Xiao Zhi smiled and said: "I can't stand the book because of your trouble, I can't afford to hide!"

After saying that, I took the notebook and ran to another pavilion.

The autumn girl said, "Look! It's all your fault!"

Li Junge said: "How can you blame me? Eh, what about your works during this time? ”

Qiu girl said: "That's right, the inscription poem is my weakness, two days ago the master called, praise you are boundless, by the way scolded me to write, said that Piwa wrote in minutes is better than what I came up with in a semester! ”

After speaking, I opened the folder, and there was a stack of watercolor sketches inside.

Li Junge picked out one at random, which is an ancient courtyard in Panao Township.

On the left side of the courtyard is a white wall, and on the top is a fan-shaped decorative window, which is shaded by green bamboo.

On the right side of the courtyard is a wooden structure house, with green tile stone steps, and two stone drums are placed on the side of the stone steps, and two pots of jade and ice clear orchids are placed on them, which are antique.

The courtyard is empty, paved with bluestone slabs, and at the end is a moon gate, on the left side of the door is an old plum tree, and on the right side of the door is a few plantains.

The picture is empty, giving people a quiet, ethereal feeling.

Li Junge said: "Then take this painting as an example, as soon as I turned to this painting, a sentence 'banana leaf roll empty garden' popped up in my mind." ”

"Sentences like this belong to the clever hand, and you can't let it go. Then we'll take it as an eye, and the rest of the sentences will unfold around it. ”

"There is an ancestor of the inscription poem, Wang Wei, he is a great painter, everyone says that he is 'there is a painting in the poem, there is a poem in the painting', you are a painter, you have to figure out his poems well. ”

The autumn girl nodded secretly.

Li Junge continued: "The inscription poem does not need to be too complicated, it can accurately express the artistic conception and rhyme in the painting, without the need for allusions and deep ideological connotations. For example, 'the bright moon shines among the pines, and the clear spring stone is upstream', which can also become a swan song for the ages. ”

The autumn girl seemed to have an understanding in her heart, and her eyes began to brighten.

Li Junge said with a smile: "There are many places where this painting can be included in the poem, such as the bamboo outside the window, the moon gate, plum blossoms, plantains, carved windows, green tiles, wooden floors, stone steps, stone pestles, and columns......

"But we have to take care of the charm of this painting, and we have to choose a few scenes that best reflect the artistic conception of the painting's emptiness, I think the bamboo leaves outside the window, the moss marks on the stone steps, and the orchids and plantains. ”

"The last sentence is already there, let's scrutinize the first three sentences, first find a small opponent, such as bamboo leaf green, moss mark green, it's good, isn't it?"

Qiu Yatou nodded yes, and then said, "But this is not a poem!"

Li Junge smiled: "Take your time, the bamboo leaves are green through the windows, and the moss marks are green, I guess that's what you can think of now, right?"

Qiu Yatou smiled: "It's not as good as you, just now what I thought of in my heart was the bamboo leaves through the window green, hehe, how do you know?"

Li Junge said with a smile: "Because I also came here like this, but if we look closely, we will find that these moss marks are small round spots, so can we replace 'moss marks' with 'moss money', so that it is more visual?"

Qiu Yatou smiled: "It's true!"

Li Junge said: "Continue to refine the words, go up the ladder, how to get up? If the poem can reflect this layer, is it more layered? For example, if you want to write the thickness of the moss, you can use the word 'press', you can write that it is integrated with the stone steps, you can use the word 'Qin', if you want to write its lightness, you can use the word 'shop', in short, to write the static scene, is the artistic conception a higher level?"

Qiu Ya clapped her hands and said: "Exactly, then you pick a word!"

Li Junge said: "If it were me, I would use the word 'rust', because our poem is to write a slow change in the empty court. This character can not only reflect the slow process of moss eroding the stone steps, but also reflect the solid integration of moss and stone steps, and can also echo the word 'money'. ”

"One, three, five, two, four, six are clear. The word "step" and the word money do not rhyme, so it must be replaced with "majesty", "brick", "level" these words, which find the same words with different rhymes, but also a piece of poetry. ”

Qiu Yatou asked, "Is the grade a sound word?"

Li Junge said with a smile: "Pinggo up, the grade word is on the modern pinyin language family, but in the ancient sound and Jiachuan dialect, it is in, and it is included in the voice." ”

Qiu Yatou smiled: "Then use the word 'level', it's not particularly obscure." ”

Li Junge said with a smile: "The next step is to be simpler, Shanglian takes care of the battle, and it has to be changed, money is a concrete noun, so it is not appropriate to use bamboo shadows, the picture is empty, the bamboo leaves seem to be full of water vapor, and the tips of the leaves are still dripping water, we replaced it with the word 'bamboo rain', is it another layer of imagery?"

The autumn girl said: "Yes, yes, yes!"

Li Junge said with a smile: "The text seems to look at the mountains and does not like the flat, and some images can be used in reverse, so I replaced the word 'wear' with the word 'points' to create an abrupt feeling for the reader, how can the bamboo rain be divided?

The autumn girl praised again and again, and said: "Then these two sentences are settled, 'bamboo rain divides the window green, moss money rust grade green', right?" 'The bamboo leaves are green through the window, and the moss marks are green on the upper steps' Well, it's not a star." ”

Li Junge nodded and said, "Let's do this for the time being, and then let's deliberate the third sentence." The fourth sentence is the banana leaf scroll empty garden, which is written about space, so in the third sentence, can we find another way and start from the time point of view? In terms of time, what can we do with the word "empty garden"?"

Qiu Yatou didn't think about it for a long time, Li Junge smiled and reminded: "The mist is thick and the clouds are sorrowful......"

The autumn girl's eyes lit up: "Eternal day! Eternal day to the empty court!

Li Junge said with a smile: "By the way, let's see, the three sentences that have been finalized in this poem are all visual perceptions, so the remaining sentences, can we change the routine and start from other places, such as ......"

After speaking, the finger pointed to the two pots of orchids next to the stone steps: "Smell!"

The autumn girl laughed: "I know! The verb is good to use the word 'Shu' that fights against 'roll'!" Lanfang Shu Yongday, banana leaves roll up in the empty court. 'Hahaha, it's a poem!'

Li Junge said with a smile: "It's about eight or nine, but if I want to choose, I would rather choose the word 'elimination', which not only writes the diffuse state of orchid in the air, but also writes that orchid makes people comfortable, so that people can spend the hot summer unconsciously, and it is also from a simple visual and olfactory direct perception to the spiritual experience." Although the words "Shu" and "Juan" are not as rigorous as the words "Shu" and "Juan", the meaning is richer. When we compose poems, we can't fight to the death, because the text is harmful. Therefore, I would rather choose the word 'elimination'. ”

Qiu Yatou suddenly found a problem: "Brother Erpi, there seems to be a problem with the fourth sentence of the scroll, the scroll is from the outside to the inside, but the banana leaves are grown from the inside out." ”

Li Junge smiled: "Then what words do you think is better?"

Qiu Yatou thought for a long time and said, "I think it's better to use the word 'exhibition'." ”

Li Junge said: "It's very good to be able to see this layer, sometimes the sentences that are instinctively obtained are problematic in themselves, so they should also be scrutinized, and the word 'exhibition' is better than the word 'volume'." ”

The autumn girl said: "Then this poem is finished? Hahaha, it's really not hard! Lanfang disappears eternal day, and banana leaves are empty. ”

Li Junge said: "'It's not hard to see people carrying the burden, and you can break the spine by yourself', girl, you still have to practice, but this is the way of thinking." ”

After speaking, he sighed and said: "In fact, there are many problems in this poem, such as the first two sentences, which take care of the imagery, but lose the natural; Of course, if you are a big guy who can write 'The desert is lonely and the smoke is straight, the sun sets on the long river', then how do you like to use it, when I didn't say. ”

Qiu Yatou laughed: "Brother Erpi, are you jealous? Hahaha, I heard a strong jealousy!"

Li Junge couldn't help but sigh again: "Chinese poetry shines through the ages, and it is already remarkable that a person can have ten words to leave a history of poetry." The demeanor of the predecessors, the younger generations can only look up to! The guy of the Qianlong Emperor was an elite literati education when he was a child, and he wrote tens of thousands of poems in his life, can you know a sentence? Therefore, characters such as Li Du belong to the realm of being unable to touch the edge in a lifetime, and they can only be jealous. ”

Qiu girl grinned and said, "My requirements are not so high, I just want my poems to match my paintings." ”

Li Junge said with a smile: "If you don't accumulate steps, you can't go thousands of miles, girl, you are also a beginner, so continue to work hard." Writing still scenes, the main thing is to highlight the rhyme, and then write the still life, which basically meets the requirements. For example, the sentence 'banana leaves show the empty garden', does it have the feeling of watching a fast shot of plant growth on TV? It makes people feel the taste of time passing slowly? At the beginning of composing a poem, you don't need to think too complicated, it can convey a kind of charm, it can express a kind of emotion, and the poem is considered a success. ”

Qiu Yatou said to Li Junge solemnly: "Brother Erpi, thank you, you have helped me a lot!"

Li Junge said: "No thanks. Teach you another one, you copy this one first, don't panic and meditate to improve it. This thing pays attention to inspiration, the so-called 'article is natural', and it will be terrifying to get into the tip of the horns. Throw it aside, eat, drink, play, come back and read it after a while, maybe the inspiration will come again, and you will find that many places can be changed again, and this is how the poem is refined. When it comes to refining to the point where it can't be easy, that's the finished product!"

Qiu Yatou understood it thoroughly, but asked another question: "Brother Erpi, according to what you say, the richer the meaning level of the poem, the more difficult the poem, can the five-word poem be one word and one layer?"

Li Junge said with a smile: "This kind of extreme is not without in the history of poetry, the stacking of ten nouns, 'the sound of the chicken Maodian month, the track of Banqiao frost' is a model!"