After thinking about it, he gently rubbed the girl's soft hair, and said with a gentle smile: "The reason why your comics are not interesting is mainly because the story is too poor, and the characters are too bland, as long as these two defects are filled, coupled with your painting style, I believe there will definitely be many people who like it." ”

Even an old driver like him, who has read countless comics, was amazed by her beautiful painting style when he first saw Shiina Mashiro's comics, and I believe that others will definitely do the same.

"yes, I see. Shiina Mahaku nodded, then tilted her head again, "What do you mean by storytelling?"

"Storytelling is the beginning and end of a storyline, an excellent story, can show a lot of twists in a short time, so that readers are very engaged and interesting, this kind of work is very storytelling. Xia You explained.

"For example, the hero and heroine in the story have some kind of misunderstanding when they meet for the first time, and this misunderstanding allows them to have a second or even more meeting, and the misunderstanding is not clarified until the end - this kind of plot has a strong story, which makes people not boring to read, and has the desire to read on, and wants to see the hero and heroine clarify the misunderstanding. ”

And the plot of the manga is too empty and bland, without the slightest beginning and turning - the hero and heroine meet like this, fall in love with each other, and then decide to date, and the story ends. ”

"Running accounts like this can't attract readers at all, like I just read it once and then gave it up. ”

After Xia You finished speaking in one breath, he realized if he would say it too harshly.

His purpose is to teach Shiina Mashiro to draw manga, and it would be bad if he accidentally hit her and stopped drawing.

But...... Considering Shiina Mashiro's talent for drawing, it's not a bad idea to abandon manga and go back to oil painting.

Of course, having said that, rather than talent or something, Xia Yu still thinks that it is more important to let Shiina Mashiro choose what he likes.

The most important thing in being a human being is to be happy.

"Brother, what then?" Seeing that Xia You suddenly stopped talking, Shiina Mahaku urged lightly.

Seeing the girl's appearance of not being hit at all, Xia You was stunned, and immediately breathed a sigh of relief, it was good that she would not be hit so easily.

Then he continued: "Mashiro, what you lack most now is the control of the storyline, the writing is too bland, if you want to correct this, I suggest you start by writing an outline. ”

"Write an outline?" Shiina Mahaku blinked.

"Well, it's to organize the comic plot you have conceived into words first, and if you want to be detailed, you can also write down the main points of the character's character, such as his character and so on. Xia You explained.

"It's similar to writing, when the author lacks the ability to control the plot, it will be much more convenient to have a detailed outline, which can effectively prevent the story from collapsing. ”

"How many words are written in that outline?" asked Shiina Mahaku.

"Hmm...... It depends on personal needs, some want to write in detail, tens of thousands of words are fine, and some want to write briefly, hundreds of words are OK. ”

Xia You thought for a while and said, "As for Zhenbai, you should limit a number first, at least a hundred words!"

He was worried that if he didn't limit the number, maybe Shiina Mashiro would hand in an outline of more than a dozen words, just like the manga just now - the hero and heroine met, then fell in love, and finally decided to date.

Well...... A plot that can be summed up in no two words.

Shiina Mahaku nodded: "I see." ”

"After I'm done writing the outline, can you help me look at it?" she asked.

"Okay, but don't write it now, it's going to be dinner later, you better wait until you're done eating, anyway, there's no hurry. Xia You said.

Shiina Mahaku snorted softly and responded as a response.

Then she asked, "What about you, brother?"

"I have to go back to my room and get my clothes off and take a shower. Natsuyo shrugged.

Then he didn't say much, and after instructing Shiina Mashiro to go downstairs to eat, he went back to his room, opened the wardrobe to find a change of clothes, and wanted to hurry into the bathroom to take a shower.

Although it has entered autumn, the temperature is still very high, and today is crowded in the crowded Disneyland all day, Xia You naturally sweated a lot, not to mention that his body became sticky, and the smell of sweat was also very strong.

is also because of this, when he hugged his girlfriend and kissed, he was actually quite worried about whether he would smell too bad.

Fortunately, Nishikino Mahime didn't say it, otherwise Xia Yu would be embarrassed.

And the amazing thing is that it is clear that Nishikino Mahime is also like him, he sweated a lot all day, but there is no smell of sweat on his body at all, it still smells very good, and there is a kind of floral fragrance.

When Xia You was holding her, he was almost intoxicated.

"It seems...... Is the beautiful girl not only sweet in her mouth, but also sweet in her sweat?" Xia You thought for a moment, and then shook his head, feeling that he couldn't think about it anymore, he felt so perverted.

So he picked up his clothes and went downstairs into the bathroom.

The hot water in the bathtub has been placed, and Xia Yu raised her eyebrows, it should have been put by Ayase, only she would be so considerate.

However, he did not rush to take a bath, but first took off his clothes and washed his body before soaking in.

Unlike China, which has a lot of land, Japan is a country with scarce materials and very little water, so in order to recycle, you must wash your body before you can take a bath.

In other words, the whole family bathed in the same tank of water.

To be honest, Xia You still resisted this, if he was allowed to take a bath with other men in a tank of water, he would rather not soak it.

But fortunately, there is no such thing, he is the only man in the family.

Calculate carefully, at present, Xia You has also soaked in Ayase, and the water used by the two of them is just a sister, so it doesn't matter.

Ah, when I was still living in my old apartment, there was a time when Megumi Kato was invited by Ayase to stay overnight, and she also took a bath at that time.

However, after hesitating to the end, Xia You still didn't have the courage to soak in the bath water that Xiao Huihui had soaked, so he gritted his teeth and let it go.

Well...... As soon as he finished it, he regretted it.

"Whew...... It's so comfortable. ”

Soaking into the bathtub, the water overflowed in one breath, and Xia You breathed a long sigh of relief.

Today, I played crazy with my girlfriend at Disney for a day, and he was indeed a little tired, especially his feet, which were super sore.

On the contrary, there is nothing wrong with Nishikino Mahime, she is usually used to muse practice, and her physical strength is very good.

When she thinks of her girlfriend, Xia You can't help but think of kissing, that feeling is really amazing, and her brain will really go blank.

He subconsciously touched his lips: "It turns out that the kiss is like this...... No wonder some people online say it's addictive. ”

In fact, Xia You feels like he's almost addicted.

Obviously it was the first kiss, so I kissed her several times in a row, and before parting with Nishikino Mahime, I hugged her and kissed her fiercely, as if I knew the taste of the marrow.

The only thing that makes people feel a little sad is probably ......

"My tongue will be bitten by Mahime every time, and it hurts a little if I bite too much......" Xia You couldn't laugh and cry.

However, he will also accidentally bite the little fragrant tongue of Mahime, so he has no face to say, and can only admit that they are too unskilled.

For this reason, Theo decided that he would have to kiss Nishikino Maki more (fist clenching) next

Then he didn't soak for long, and after about ten minutes, he got up, changed his clothes and walked out of the bathroom.

In the living room, Ayase and Kirino are bringing the dishes to the table, and Shiina Mayahiro is sitting obediently motionless, like a delicate and cute doll.

"Ah, brother, you can come over for dinner after you have taken a shower. Ayase smiled.

"Hmm. ”