In the original plot of "Super Marines", there are indeed a few unreasonable places, such as Xiao Hong's opening scene in the underground robot arena with a routine to win the prize, the miniature robot used to use a handle to operate. However, when I participated in the entrance design competition, it was clear that I already had the equipment for brainwave control robots.

This point is also used in the combination of micro-robots designed by Xiao Hong and finally seized by the professor, which also uses brainwave control. This shows a sense of technological disconnection.

There are many similar scenes, such as when Dabai sends Xiaohong and the professor's daughter out of the portal with a fist cannon in the final stage, it also seems to be a plot for the sake of the plot.

Because in the setting of the movie, Dabai's body is very light. Its bulky form is actually inflated by a lightweight carbon fiber skeleton and polyethylene skin. And when Da Bai sent the two out with a hand cannon, he could completely discard the professor's daughter's crossing warehouse and rely on the thrust generated by the hand cannon to send himself out.

But according to Li Fanyu's description, that is, the way it was expressed in the original movie, it seems that Da Bai's sacrifice is too pale.

And the plot of such a miniature robot combination being made using the principle created by the professor, and the professor not hesitating to destroy the entire exhibition hall to steal this robot combination is also quite abrupt.

Qiao Ai, who is quite accomplished in the plot arrangement skills of the movie, easily discovered these two points in addition to resonance.

Entering her own professional field, Joai changed her previous taciturnity. opened the conversation box from all aspects, and began to refute and provoke Li Fanyu's story with a more prominent plot as the core.

While Li Fanyu was speechless by this little girl, Ma Huan and Zhou Qingyu on the side looked at each other.

Listening to the little girl talk more and more, Ma Rao's eyes became brighter and brighter.

"Based on the story you described, I suggest that you strengthen the design ability of Xiaohong at the beginning, and directly appear a robot similar to the brainwave control method. Maybe you can ask Xiao Hong to fake this brainwave remote control into a headset and use different levels of technology to beat the bullies in that arena.

And on the professor's side, this villain character is too pale, and the means of revenge are also a bit LO. It is recommended that you enrich the character depth before and after unlocking the villain. At least at the end of the film, give the father and daughter the opportunity to reunite and apologize to the protagonist and others, complete the character's self-redemption, and make the overall plot more in-depth.

And, most importantly, finally. The clumsy sacrifice should be meaningful, so as to make the plot more tense. According to your description, the entrance has a huge appeal, so it is better to change it to clumsily throw away all the heavy things, including his own armor and the professor's daughter's crossing warehouse, and then rely on hand cannons to send himself and the two of them to the entrance door.

However, due to the attraction and the fact that the hand cannon ran out of fuel, Clumsy used the fragments of the ruins to poke his ass out of the hole and inflate it with all the power to create thrust.

In the end, Clumsy used all his strength to send the protagonists out of the crossing door, but he was sucked back because he ran out of power. Such a suspense setting, I think, will make the plot more fleshed out and increase the suspense. Well, that's all I found. ”

"Smack,"

"Bang Bang Bang

When Qiao Ai finished speaking, Ma Huan couldn't help but applaud, "Very good suggestion! This kind of modification can really make the audience better emotionally rendered." Whispering is right, you are a gifted and talented child. ”

Li Fanyu also smacked his lips, when he watched the movie before, he was completely fascinated by the cute thing of Dabai. As for the plot, he really didn't pay much attention to these.

It was only after Qiao Ai said this that he thought about it for a moment. It feels like ...... There are indeed a few places that are quite stiff.

He raised his eyebrows and put his hand on the top of Qiao Ai's slightly curly head, "Yo, I can't see that you still have two more moments." ”

Originally, after entering the film field, Joey's face has regained that cool dark girly feel.

But being so like Li Fanyu made her eyes instantly panicked. I wanted to struggle, but the hand that had been raised was put down halfway through. It was as if the body had been affixed with an amulet, and his body trembled as he stood still, and his face flushed with a blush that he didn't know what was going on.

"Hello...... Who wants to ...... Who wants you to compliment!?"

This arrogant appearance amused Li Fanyu. He rubbed Qiao Ai's head vigorously, and when the latter was trembling and tears were coming out, he smiled: "Hey, what's the matter?"

"No, no, no, no, no!"

"Alright. Zhou Qingyu looked at Qiao Ai's abnormal face, and hurriedly stepped forward to open Li Fanyu's hand and took Qiao Ai in his arms, "Don't tease her." ”

"Hmph," Li Fanyu rubbed his nose vigorously with his fingers, made a Bruce Lee-style demonstration expression to Qiao Ai, and then walked to Ma Rao's side.

"How about Director Ma, can this script succeed?"

Ma Rao nodded with a haha, "Although I have never been exposed to this kind of all-age anime movie, and in my opinion, this script lacks depth. But I have to say, it's a very interesting story. And through your screen description, it feels very bright. In a word...... I'll see it!"

"Just look at it!" Li Fanyu patted Ma Rao's shoulder, "The first batch of investment in the American branch has been put in place, so you can take the team to do it! Money is not a problem, I just need a good movie." ”

"You can't tell me about this," Ma Rao said with a wicked smile, "What I can do is to help you do the work of the director." In terms of co-ordination, team deployment, and the rhythm of the whole movie, that must not be said. I can do that for you. But the specific director's work ......"

He snorted at Joain, "I'm afraid you'll have to communicate with this young lady." ”

Li Fanyu raised his eyebrows, got up and came to Qiao Ai, who was still hiding behind Zhou Qingyu with a complicated expression.

He made a reassuring gesture to Zhou Qingyu, and Zhou Qingyu smiled and turned his body away.

Seeing Qiao Ai with a flushed pale face, Li Fan smiled foolishly: "Hey, I just saw that you were still quite interested in this movie." Why don't you join us and make this movie?"

"Annoying...... Bother... Dead!" Joe was a little incoherent, neither agreeing nor refusing.

But she seemed to want to provoke Li Fanyu, and her face made an impatient look, but her body, especially her head, involuntarily moved closer to Li Fanyu.

Seeing this girl like this, Li Fanyu smiled slightly. He stretched out his large hand and covered Joey's head again.

Seeing Qiao Ai look like a cat under his own touch, showing an expression that was so comfortable that he was about to cry, Li Fanyu smiled secretly in his heart.

Soul fade,

It turned out to be a shake M!