Friends in the group said that Lao Jin's dialogue is always so-and-so, but the content is very vivid and vivid, asking what's going on?

In fact, this phenomenon 101 has noticed it a long time ago, but although it can be analyzed, it is not good for itself, the dialogue should be vivid and vivid, reflecting the characteristics of the characters, this is a basic skill, and it can only be practiced slowly. Pen @ fun @ pavilion wWw. ｂｉｑUｇE。 ｉｎｆｏ。。

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Pawn 0:27:37

Duan Yu and Wang Yuyan were taken aback, the two of them held hands, hid behind the tree, and looked at the place where the voice came from, only to see Murong Fu sitting on top of a mound, wearing a high paper crown, with a look like a face.

Seven or eight country children knelt in front of the grave and shouted in a disorderly manner: "Long live my emperor, long live, long live!" While screaming and bowing down, some stretched out their hands and shouted, "Give me sugar, give me cakes!"

Murong replied: "All Aiqing is flat, I have revived Dayan, and I have become a great treasure, and everyone has a reward." ”

There was a woman standing beside the grave, it was Abi. She was wearing a light green shirt, and her bright face was quite sad and haggard, I saw her take out the candy cake from a blue, distribute it to the children, and said: "Everyone is good, come to play again tomorrow, and there will be candy cake to eat!"

All the children clapped their hands and cheered, and they all said, "Come again tomorrow!"

pawn 0:31:44

I found that when Uncle Jin described the characters and spoke, he directly said Murong Fudao, Duan Yu Dao, Qiao Feng Dao, which was very concise, but he did not lose his taste, why is this?

If I write, I guess I will write, Murong relapsed and had a disordered hair, but with a hint of color on his face, he said: I am rejuvenating Dayan today, and everyone will be rewarded.

Why did Uncle Jin directly write so-and-so, but he felt that the taste was stronger?

Pawn 0:32:31

The children clapped their hands and cheered, and they all said, "Come back tomorrow!"

The 101st rejection (630268437) 0:57:36

Language content and tone

Lao Jin has worked as a screenwriter

Long live my emperor, long live, long live!

Give me sugar, give me pastry!

All Aiqing is flat, I have revived Dayan, and I have become a great treasure, and everyone has a reward.

Hello everyone, come back tomorrow to play, and have candy and cakes to eat!

Tomorrow again!

The dialogue is distilled, the logical relationships, and the emotions are all out

Shouting long live our emperor is a serious and serious thing

The second sentence asks for sugar and cakes, which forms a contrast, and it is obvious that children are making a fool of themselves

And some want sugar, some want cakes, which explains the chaos

Murong Fu's reply was calm and stable, very emperorly

also said that there were rewards, and he didn't realize the banter of children, which shows that he is crazy

Never Stop Stupid Xiaofeng (2454643062) 1:03:19

I'm definitely going to shout "chicken leg chicken leg"

Never stop stupid Xiaofeng (2454643062) 1:03:43

Truly......

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:03:47

As for Abi, let's first say that everyone is so well-behaved, which reflects the people she found to cooperate with the show

Never Stop Stupid Little Maple (2454643062) 1:03:56

It's complicated

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:04:23

The child shouted at the end, "Come again tomorrow", simply and concisely

There is no shouting here, giving people the feeling that children are being coaxed into being very obedient

Therefore, if the dialogue is well written, you can just read the dialogue, and the emotions of the characters will come out in your head

Jin Yong never uses a lot of modifiers to write so-and-so

Generally speaking, it is laughing, angry, angry, loud, shouting, and so on

But he will use one or two sentences to outline the demeanor and mood of the characters after the character's language

As a complement to a certain way

The word order is also very particular

Long live our emperor and ask for sugar and cakes are connected

If my emperor takes Murong Fu long live, he can't look like a child, Murong Fu is very sick

Abi's forbearance and gentleness can't be revealed

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Murong Fu sat on top of a mound with a tall paper crown on his head and a look like one.

Seven or eight country children knelt in front of the grave and shouted in a disorderly manner: "Long live my emperor, long live, long live!" While screaming and bowing down, some stretched out their hands and shouted, "Give me sugar, give me cakes!"

Murong replied: "All Aiqing is flat, I have revived Dayan, and I have become a great treasure, and everyone has a reward." ”

Murong relapsed into a disordered bun, but with a hint of color on his face, he said: I revive Dayan today, and everyone has a reward.

Comments:

Murong Fu's sentence without moving expressions is a blank technique, causing a kind of shock, which is the same as the previous 101 analysis of Wei Xiaobao's shock after hearing Kangxi's edict.

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Moreover, 101 felt that Murong Fu should not have a disordered bun, because he thought that he had become an emperor, how could he not pay attention to his appearance?

What's more, Lao Jin explained earlier: Murong Fu sat on top of a mound, wearing a high paper crown, and his expression was as good as ever.

In short, if you leave it blank, it means that others use rich pen and ink to write the action expression, and when it is the turn of the character to be highlighted, he should not have an action expression, just one sentence, but it is highlighted.

Wei Xiaobao had a conversation between the two in front of him, without any facial expressions, and put a separate description of Xiaobao's expression in the back.

The reason why these two kinds of white space are strong is that they also use contrasting techniques.

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Lao Jin posteriorly retouches the description, this 101 has been rewritten in two paragraphs, everyone can see the effect, Jin Da can highlight the emotions of the characters more.

Wei Xiaobao said: "Yes, yes!" only smiled bitterly. (Original)

Wei Xiaobao smiled bitterly: "Yes, yes!"

Ah Bi said: "Hello everyone, come and play again tomorrow, and there will be candy and cakes to eat!" whimpered between the words, and a tear fell into the bamboo blue. (Original)

Abi whimpered, and a tear fell into the bamboo blue, "Hello everyone, come and play again tomorrow, and there will be candy and cakes to eat!"