Just 101 shopping in Longkong, I happened to see a small post, the landlord described a thing in life interestingly, and people can empathize. Pen, fun, pavilion www. biquge。 info101 was so inspired that I went into it and learned a lot, and the skills contained in it would certainly add a lot if applied to the creation of a novel.

Here's what the post reads:

I finally know what it means to have a broken liver and intestines, do you want to experience it, you have stones, and I guarantee that you will make this trip worthwhile.

When I was ready to go to bed at one o'clock last night, I began to hurt around my belly button, I didn't pay attention to it at first, I thought it was something that I had eaten, but I had ups and downs all night, running to the toilet, it never went away, and it hurt more and more, at six o'clock in the morning, the pain became more intense, I took the car to the hospital, oh my God, I wanted to pull my hair off all the way, the kind of indescribable pain, unbearable, just like someone stirring your intestines with their hands, I wanted to split my stomach to see what was going on. When I arrived at the hospital, I hung up an emergency room, and after the doctor prescribed medicine, I felt a little weaker, and then I did a B ultrasound, and found that a six-millimeter-large stone appeared in the right kidney.

From: Dragon's Sky

Original article: http://www./thread-787250-1-1.html

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Let's break it down paragraph by paragraph:

I finally know what it means to have a broken liver and intestines, do you want to experience it, you have stones, and I guarantee that you will make this trip worthwhile. (Gimmick, the role is to attract the reader's attention and arouse curiosity)

When I was ready to go to bed at one o'clock last night, I began to hurt around my belly button in my abdomen, I didn't pay attention to it at first, thinking that I had eaten something bad, but I went up and down all night, ran to the toilet, and it never went away, and it hurt more and more, at six o'clock in the morning, the pain became more intense, I took the car to the hospital,

(Here's a story, with foreshadowing, starting with a dull ache, then running to the toilet up and down, and finally more intense, having to go to the hospital.) I believe that many people have this experience, and it is easy to trigger the feelings of readers, but so far it has not revealed the suspense set by the gimmick at the beginning.

Replaced in the novel, if we want to pave a climax, we have to go layer by layer, for example, here it is progressed 3 times, and the degree is higher and higher each time, and the reader will be anxious here, yes? What's going on? Hurry up and go to the hospital to see!)

Oh my God, I wanted to pull my hair out of the pain along the way, the indescribable pain, it was unbearable, like someone stirring your intestines with their hands, and I wanted to split my stomach open to see what was going on.

(This paragraph 101 praises, this is equivalent to the climax of the novel, pushing the foreshadowing that began to progress to the highest point, and the contradictions and conflicts are at their most intense, and the protagonist really can't bear the torture of the crisis, almost to the point of not dying.) And the ingenious and realistic description used by the author also plays a role in setting off the atmosphere to the greatest extent.

Oh my God--- modal words to express feelings;

I was in pain along the way, and I wanted to pull my hair off ---- express the extent of the pain;

The indescribable pain is unbearable, just like someone stirring your intestines with their hands----------- describe the feeling of pain;

I wanted to split my stomach open to see what was going on----- express my feelings again, and set up suspense. ）

When I arrived at the hospital, I hung up an emergency room, and after the doctor prescribed medicine, I felt a little weaker, and then I did a B ultrasound, and found that a six-millimeter-large stone appeared in the right kidney. (The mystery is revealed, and the climax ends, echoing the opening gimmick.) ）

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To sum up:

1. Storytelling cannot be flat and straightforward, it must have a sense of hierarchy, gimmick-foreshadowing-climax-puzzle-solution

2. In a plot paragraph, the suspense needs to be carried out throughout, and it needs to be advanced layer by layer, constantly strengthened, until the climax is completed, and finally the mystery can be solved, otherwise solving it in advance is equivalent to the fish (reader) not taking the bait, swallowing the bait and running away. The suspense here is "how big is the stone in the stomach that hurts the protagonist like that?"

I can't wait to split my belly, and here the suspense is maximized, and it is also the highest point of orgasm.

3. When describing, multi-angle, degree, and feeling, use exaggerated and realistic metaphors to assist strong psychological feelings, so that they are vivid and vivid, and people can empathize with them and evoke strong emotional resonance.

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Finally, try to rewrite this paragraph with friends in the group, experience the subtlety, and list it below for everyone to evaluate and compare!

101st rejection 12:38:38

Oh my God, this girl is unbelievably beautiful, like a fairy descending to earth, and people can't wait to run over and kiss her jade toes to see what it tastes like.

Mumu 12:42:47

I thought Zhang Fei's daughter was as thick and dark as him, but when she opened the door, I was still stunned.

Oh my God, what kind of woman is this? Seeing her, I can't help but imagine what kind of style Diao Chan, who has the reputation of the first beauty of the Three Kingdoms, should be.

Burning Love 12:50:49

When I was getting ready to go to bed at one o'clock last night, I felt that the egg on the left side slowly itched, and I didn't pay attention to it at first, thinking that there was nothing wrong, and it disappeared after a while.

But after a night, not only did it not go down, but it became more and more intense, and it began to become painful, and by six o'clock in the morning, the pain and itching were even more unbearable, so I had to take a car to the hospital.

Oh my God, I wanted to pull the eggs off in the pain along the way, the indescribable itch, the unbearable itch, like someone kicking them and then shaking them back and forth with their hair, and I wanted to split the eggs and see what the fuck was going on.

Finally arrived at the hospital, quickly hung up an emergency, the doctor prescribed medicine to eat, there was no improvement at all, and finally endured to do B ultrasound, and found that a three-millimeter-long small insect was gnawing inside.

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101 Finally, I would like to complain that learning to write can be done anytime and anywhere, depending on whether you have the heart or not.

Well, let's emphasize the biggest and most important writing skill in this post - no matter what kind of description, in order to move people's hearts, it must be connected with the inner feelings of the characters, and this one is worth thousands of writing skills!!

Thank you to the original author @天天叼cigarette for sharing such a good story, and wish a speedy recovery!