As a poet who has published his works in the national "Poetry Magazine", Mr. Cui deserves to give the following comments-

"As we all know, language is just a tool. The poem is based on Zhu Ziqing www.biquge.info's prose "Moonlight on the Lotus Pond", and integrates ancient poetic imagery such as "Ai Lian Said" and "Pu Jia", expressing a feeling of 'expecting and missing'. The combination of antiquity and innovation is better, such as 'cut a break of time, push the heart window, pick down the sorrow' and other poems, as beautiful as Song Ci, very good borrowing and using the expressive skills of modern poetry, if I want to comment, ninety points. ”

When Wang Yun heard this, her face glowed with excitement, as if she had been praised, and she couldn't help but applaud - she was trying to "remedy" her minus points for not trusting Yang Zijian at a critical moment, but unfortunately the other teachers did not applaud, she slapped a few times, and had to stop in a sneer.

While discussing and analyzing, the teachers all agreed with Cui You's evaluation, and then looked at Yang Zijian's eyes that lit up a little - in less than ten minutes, the student wrote a classic poem, this talent, this eagerness, is indeed not something that ordinary people can have, at least they are definitely not good teachers.

Then the leader of the language group, the teacher Zhuang who taught the third year of high school, he was very simple, and directly asked Yang Zijian to write a essay praising Nanjian No. 1 Middle School, more than 1,000 words, according to his words, "School Scenery" is beautiful, but too depressing, not in line with the positive propaganda of No. 1 Middle School, so Yang Zijian was asked to write a prose praising and praising the long history, beautiful environment, good teaching style and brilliant achievements of No. 1 Middle School.

Isn't it just writing an advertorial, Yang Zijian doesn't care, this just happened, when the 60th anniversary of Nanjian No. 1 Middle School was celebrated in the previous life, the leaders of No. 1 Middle School just asked him to write such a commemorative article for publication.

However, he couldn't remember the specific historical time, achievement data and other details in it, so he raised his hand and said: "I need a yearbook of the development of Nanjian No. 1 Middle School, otherwise I can't accurately write the overview, history and achievements of Nanjian No. 1 Middle School." ”

Teacher Zhuang smiled with an appreciative gaze: "Of course it is allowed, if you want to be like poetry, work behind closed doors, chew words, and chant without illness, I will underestimate you." ”

Then, he took out the yearbook and five other historical materials from the cabinet.

Yang Zijian carried them next door and continued to think.

This time Yang Zijian wrote more carefully, due to different times, different positions, the original work can only be used as a reference, he wants to empathize, with a high school student's perspective, with a posture of looking up, with immature worship, with a bold, unscrupulous praise mentality to "brag about the skin". Then he kept deleting, adjusting, retouching, etc., and it took him nearly fifty minutes to finish.

"My Pride, My One Middle School" -

In September 1991, a teenager, with a persistent dream, walked into Nanjian No. 1 Middle School.

With spacious school gates, straight corridors, and layers of steps, it has a long history of 47 years, a park area of 52 acres, 11 functional buildings, and 45 teaching classes.

……

Before coming to No. 1 High School to teach the school, the beautiful Taoli Garden is intoxicating and unforgettable.

When the golden autumn comes, the "seeds" of more than 2,300 students are scattered, 172 loving teachers and teachers have worked hard for three years, they work at sunrise and rest at sunset, selfless dedication, adding wrinkles and white temples.

……

As a result, the surrounding peach and plum trees will always bear fruitful fruits, fragrant, spring and autumn fruits in June of graduation.

This is my pride, my Nanjian No. 1 Middle School!

The camphor forest in front of the office building has strong branches, solemn and quiet, like a principal and administrative administrator in history, they are down-to-earth and noble! They are willing to live in barren land, proud of frost and snow, and continue to create new achievements.

The excellent rate of the first high school entrance examination is higher than 60%, and the acceptance rate of the college entrance examination is more than 90%......

A middle school student won three gold medals in the International Olympiad and two top prizes in the college entrance examination......

This is my pride, my Nanjian No. 1 Middle School!

The path of No. 1 Middle School is like a garden path, curved and thin, and the scenery on both sides is pleasant.

……

The path of No. 1 Middle School reminds people of the maxim of "becoming a talent before becoming an adult" and the school motto of "seeking truth and valuing morality".

This is my pride, my Nanjian No. 1 Middle School!

There is always a kind of passion rippling in my heart, as if I saw the firecrackers roaring at the opening ceremony 47 years ago, as if I heard the school song that has been loud in the auditorium year after year for 47 years:

"At the foot of Danxia Mountain, on the west bank of the Minjiang River,

Attentive listening, sincere party.

……

Lots of fun, lots of hope,

Keep climbing the mountain of science! ”

The 1,600-word essay actually has three contents: the dedication of the teacher, the diligence of the students, and the outstanding grades. However, after expressing it in beautiful and sincere language, it reached the highest level of "substitution infection" of the advertorial, which made all teachers stunned.

Not only because Yang Zijian writes very well, blowing the school environment, teachers' moral performance and student quality, but also because of the speed and quality of his writing, if any of them is a Chinese teacher to write, in such a short period of time, not to mention whether he can write so well, just whether he can write can be written, there is a big question mark.

But Yang Zijian did it, a student who has only been enrolled for more than half a month has almost perfectly described a famous school with a history of 47 years!

This is simply the modern version of the "seven-step poem"!

Moreover, Yang Zijian's "Zijian" is Cao Zhi's word!

At this point, it's recess time.

After Wang Yun finished watching "My Pride, My No. 1 Middle School" and acting as a cheerleader to "cheer" for Yang Zijian, he was sent back to the classroom by Teacher Lin.

Three other teachers also went to class, but four other Chinese teachers who got out of class walked in, vying to see Yang Zijian's poetry and prose, and they were appreciative, appreciative and amazed, among which several Chinese teachers in the high school showed strong enthusiasm and deep jealousy when they looked at Yang Zijian and Lin Kechun.

Students with writing talent are hard to find, the Chu girl taught by Lin Kechun back then was one, but I didn't expect another Yang Zijian to come, Lin Kechun's luck is too good! Teacher Cui You has even begun to think about persuading Yang Zijian to go to the science class next year when he is in the second year of high school, and he will train him personally.

Teacher Lin specially brought Yang Zijian a cup of strong tea, so frightened that Yang Zijian hurriedly bowed and thanked him, Teacher Lin patted him on the shoulder and smiled: "You scared everyone, this essay can be included in the school's records, and no one may be able to write better than you." Now take a good rest and relax your brain. ”

Yang Zijian nodded, and after taking a few sips of tea, he closed his eyes and breathed calmly.