Big, remember in the next, it's been a long time, Da has been working silently, this spirit and perseverance, righteous heart sincerely feel admiration, see the work for evaluation is big, can't help but take it, not to talk about the comment, and Da to discuss, or quite gratifying.

Although it is said that the big opening bicycle crashed into the Rolls-Royce Phantom, some are not reliable, but the plot arrangement, language dialogue, and descriptions of all aspects still feel very good, the personality characteristics of the three characters, identity background, etc., from all aspects or positive descriptions, or side knocks, are outlined, giving the reader a very clear outline, which is worthy of praise.

But from Xiao Jian's words, how do I feel about this child, Geng is a little bit of a two, selling kidneys, not to, and, I have encountered similar problems in many works, when a man meets a girl, it is best not to call "Miss", in terms of character setting, it seems to be a little unstable, the protagonist is a little unreliable, if you don't pretend to be stupid, there is really a problem, the sentence "You are the president of Tianlong Group" is against such a young girl, and asks such a question, has it passed through the brain?

In fact, the big work has a lot of words, and it's a bit redundant to say that the character building is now, but, in the next person's opinion, the plot setting of a penny is difficult to beat the hero, it's good, but there is no need to write the character of the protagonist with some soft persimmons, and the Minister of Personnel, a frivolous and impetuous image, it's normal to be a little snobbish in a high position, but the other party asks where the office is, don't you need to laugh, a sentence: "Office? What office? You still want an office as a toilet cleaner, do you dream, young man, "Don't you have it, do you think you think so?"

There is also a problem, in the process of narrative description, there is a very bad habit of repetitive emphasis, repeated use of character names, in the first few chapters, as well as the plot of the staff party, etc., there will be such a phenomenon in many places, I hope to pay a little attention to it when writing.

I don't know if Da Da wants to write a harem text, there are a lot of entangled plots with women, and sometimes the language plot and so on, are very similar, too much to say, Da should understand, men, there should be a man's world, and don't get rid of those women, but to stop in moderation, in the fine is not much, with a big writing should not be a problem, especially when the ability is revealed, when he shows his talents, his ability is not to protect women and save zài, between the two, it is very necessary to think about it, How to go about matching and arranging.

On the other hand, there is too little room for the reader's reverie, many times, you write the character's intentions, feelings, and thoughts too clearly, and leave half a sentence, the meaning of which is not necessarily not expressed, as long as you feel that the reader will associate it, such as later, the plot of Xiao Jian and Johnson's torture on the cliff * confession, the big writing is still quite good, the narrative is relatively less, and the substantive description of the state of affairs is more in place, That's a lot of stuff.

Okay, that's all there is to say, the big writing and conception are very good, if you can refine some superfluous sentences, and make the meaning diagram xiàn thorough and not verbose, it will be quite perfect.

The above are some of Yixin's personal views on the big works, and they are a bit heavy, if there is anything missing, I hope you will forgive me!!