(Read the first few carefully, and found that there are a lot of contradictions, there should be only 7 of the eight children in the second chapter of Xiliang missing, and the sword is as long as the 6-year-old Xiliang, about one meter two or three, Xiliang should be dragging the sword now, the first time to write a long story, the literary accumulation is not deep, some dialogues, the environment is not well mastered, and the characters are also very badly shaped, and some sentences and wording have to be deleted and changed many times back and forth, and it may still be a sick sentence.)

I deliberately chose the best written overhead Xiuxian Xiaobaiwen, but it wasn't that simple~) It's been two hours, and I have deleted a few lines of words...... The brain went blank.

At first, it was conceived as a bloody story, and then I felt that cultivating immortals should be very bland, but blandness requires complex details to describe, and I can't write it well, so I am entangled.

Xiliang is going to grow up soon.,He's going to die if he's so kind.。。 Do you want him to go to the human army to exercise, he is not a mortal.

。 Yes, you can write that he was arrested as soon as he got off the mountain and went to war, how could it be written like that! It doesn't exist, Lu Dongbin is more handsome, there must be a fox spirit, and there must be a cat demon, the cat demon has to be sticky and ruthless, and the story of taking the cat demon fox spirit all the way home to the west, and when Xiliang returns to the West Village, there will definitely be nothing left, and it will be demolished.

Xijiang must have gone through hardships step by step to become the next lord of Xicheng, why does Xiliang want to cultivate immortals, immortality?

It's really an ethereal ambition.,The first novel I read was Dou Po.。。 Really, it was refreshed once in the bed for a few minutes, a different fire!

Fusion! Invincibility! Xiliang should be very bland in cultivating immortals, after practicing Qi Condensing Dan, and then cultivating a villain or something in his mind, this is a very complete system, innovation is not as simple as changing the name, you can write practice hands, grow shots everywhere on your body, whoever has more hands will be powerful, how to write immortals well, I haven't cultivated it, Confucianism and Taoism really can't understand,, Science?

Do you talk about science in the book of cultivating immortals? Jin Yong's martial arts novels are really good-looking...... Xiliang, the king of Xiliang, the fairy of Xiliang, do you want to write him as a character standing in the pyramid.

。 Or write the story of the cat demon vixen on the road. That's romance. It's so annoying to meditate, and you can practice qi while sitting.

。 This is very problematic, the bar should be a little higher. It's useless to have a sense of anger.,You have to have a master to teach the method.,To insist.,It's very boring,,The book is called Xiliang Xiuxian Biography.,Then he should keep cultivating.,See all kinds of evil demons I imagined.,Experience the twists and turns I designed.,When he finishes repairing.,Or feel that it's boring to live.,Or really don't want to cultivate.,Then over.。

It's much more comfortable.,,It's been more than half an hour.。。 This is useful~ I like to add one at the end of the sentence

"It's a broken habit??