Wang Ritian: "There is nothing wrong with the overall plot, and the sense of picture is not bad, but it's still verbose, you try to remove the useless places, and the connection between the plot and the plot is more natural." Pen × fun × Pavilion www. ｂｉｑｕｇｅ。 infoYou see the elements I told you last time, you used more than 1,000 words for almost every one of them, and you used more than 300 words for the description of the place at the beginning. This is completely unnecessary, this part will be summarized, just say the name of the high school, and the reader will naturally make up what high school is like. ”

Yunyang: "Well, what about what you say, but what about other places?" ”

Wang Ritian: "You have to be detailed, time, place, people and events, right?" Time and place are actually a hundred or so words, and you don't need to say too much about this part, the key is the introduction of the world background, because it is a battle scene, so you need to describe the strength of the monster, as well as the strength of the human powerhouse, so as to stimulate the reader's sense of expectation. ”

Yunyang: "That's true, is there anything else?" ”

Wang Ritian: "There's nothing else, you first change this part and shorten it to about 5,000 words, and then I'll tell you about the plot and setting later." ”

Yunyang: "Okay, then I'll change it." ”

About an hour later, Yunyang showed Wang Hao the revised draft, this time it was really much better, everything that should be explained had been explained, Wang Hao nodded with satisfaction.

Wang Ritian: "This time it's good, okay, I'll give you the setting behind it, well, by the way, my setting for this book is very comprehensive, including various characters, levels, plot development, etc., and it is guaranteed to be published if it is written!" But we have to say it in advance, I can't give you this setting for nothing, it's equivalent to me paying for it, you can write it for me, okay? ”

Yunyang: "No problem, I just want to publish a book, of course I won't mind if I can make some money." ”

Wang Ritian: "If you promise, you can do it, for the time being, you will change the score to you when the results of the book rise, right?" He immediately repeated what he had told Jin Sunflower before.

Yunyang: "No problem! ”

Since the two sides passed, Wang Hao summarized the outline of "Devouring the Starry Sky" that he had written before and sent it to Yunyang.

This outline summary is exactly the one Bai Yaning has seen before, and it is very comprehensive.

Yunyang: "......"

Yunyang: ", Brother Ritian, your plot is simply awesome, this book will definitely be published!" ”

Wang Ritian: "Hehe, I dare to come to you without this certainty?" ”

Yunyang: "It's done, Brother Ritian, I'll start writing!" Anyway, it's okay for me to stay at home all day, and strive to write 20,000 words a day! ”

Wang Ritian: "......"

, 1,000 words 15 a day, 20,000 words, that's 300 yuan! Oh my bills......

Wang Ritian: "Don't mind, 12,000 a day, ensuring quality is the premise, don't be in a hurry to make up the number of words!" ”

Yunyang: "Makes sense! If it's written in a stinky and long way, there's no hope of publication, right? I'll have 12,000 words a day! ”

Heck, this is the second book, right?

Hehe, it's really time-saving and trouble--if you go on like this, you can open ten books at the same time!

"Jingle bell—"

I was happy, and suddenly my phone rang, and I looked at the caller ID......

It was actually Zhao Zhenhao calling, what is the situation?

Yesterday when the two of them had dinner at the end, they finally left the phone, and they also gave us a famous watch, and it would not be kind to leave the contact information, right?

"Lao Zhao, what's the situation?" After last night's poker, the relationship between the two was still in the past, and Wang Hao smiled after connecting: "What's wrong?" Looking for me? ”

Zhao Zhenhao returned to that magnetic voice: "I think of you, just call and ask." ”

So polite? That's not quite right.

You should be thinking about the big star of Bingfei, right?

Wang Hao: "You care about me so much?" Don't be polite to me, just say, what's the matter? ”

"That's right," Zhao Zhenhao said, "I want to ask you for a meal, are you free?" ”

I'm, it's eating again, what kind of routine is this?

"Well, it's okay for the time being," Wang Hao thought for a while, and then asked, "Just the two of us?" ”

"Yes, just the two of us," Zhao Zhenhao said with a smile: "It's just a light meal, I know a very good French restaurant, let's go have a bit?" ”

Wang Hao groaned for a while, Zhao Zhenhao's face couldn't be left unwanted, and he immediately asked: "Okay, Cheng, then where can I find you?" ”

Zhao Zhenhao said: "You send me a location, I'll pick you up." ”

It's a special car transfer again, which is good.

Wang Hao immediately sent his location over, and soon Zhao Zhenhao replied: "Okay, I'll be here in twenty minutes." ”

Out of the crew, sure enough, after waiting for about 20 minutes, Wang Hao saw a black Jaguar driving up, and it was Lao Zhao in the car.

"What's the matter with me?" Wang Hao pulled the car door and sat down, and asked with a smile: "You can't plan to kidnap me and ask for some nonsense, right?" ”

"How is it possible," Zhao Zhenhao said with a smile: "You have a lot of weight in Miss Yaning's heart, I won't trouble you unless my brain burns out." Let's get in the car, the spot over there has been set. ”

"Okay," Wang Hao got into the car and said, "Oh, this old man is eating and drinking with you, it's embarrassing to ......."

Well, if you really want to give me something good, I won't be polite, hehe.

"You're welcome." Zhao Zhenhao smiled, and started the car.

Wang Hao's family lives in the South Third Ring Road of Zhonghai City, which is generally a city center location, so it didn't take long to arrive at a Western restaurant called Paris Fashion, when they arrived, there was a row of luxury cars parked at the door, and the grade of Lao Zhao's place was high!

Without Bai Yaning present this time, Wang Hao finally knew how charming this Zhao Zhenhao was!

is worthy of a tough version of Song Joong Ki Oba, when he appeared on the stage, the girls who were eating in the Western restaurant turned their heads in unison, and their eyes were as bright as a 200-watt bulb!

"Look, look! Big handsome guy! God, look how charming he laughs! ”

"Oh my God, it's so handsome, I ...... I can't! ”

"It's Young Master Zhao Zhenhao of the Zhao family! He's actually here! ”

"Who is that turtle following him? Could it be Zhao Dagongzi's follower? ”

Listening to the whispers around him, Zhao Zhenhao also smiled back, occasionally waved his hand to salute, and instantly burst with aura, how did Wang Hao look like his little brother when he followed him!

This script is not right, Nima! You're the main character, aren't you?!

"That's it," Zhao Zhenhao took Wang Hao to an empty table and sat down, and said with a smile: "I went home yesterday and thought about it again, and I think it is necessary for us to get acquainted again." ”

After saying this, Zhao Zhenhao stretched out his hand first: "Zhao Zhenhao, twenty-five years old, the only son of Zhao Changsheng, a branch of the Zhao family, is currently running an Internet technology company. ”

"Hello, hello," Wang Hao smiled and stretched out his hand to shake him, and said, "Wang Hao, twenty-four years old, works as a temporary worker in a crew." ”

As soon as they were introduced, the difference between the two was suddenly as big as that of a pheasant and a phoenix......

"Actually, I invited you here this time to have a good talk with you, and apologize to you by the way." Zhao Zhenhao didn't say anything about this, he was quite calm: "I did have a little bit of caution when I gave you the Omega watch for dinner last night, and I didn't hide it, I saved some hostility towards you before I went yesterday, so the price of that watch is 444,000, this is indeed my faux pastime, please forgive me." ”

As he spoke, he stood up and bowed to Wang Hao very solemnly, which was regarded as an apology.

When the girls around saw this noodle, they fried the pot on the spot!

"Isn't it?! What is the identity of that young man? Can you actually ask Zhao Dagongzi to apologize to him?! ”

"God, haven't I woken up today? What the hell is going on here? Is the sky falling?! ”

"There must be something strange today, the eldest son of the Zhao family will actually apologize to someone!"

Others were surprised, and Wang Hao was also quite surprised.

In fact, he knew that Zhao Zhenhao didn't seem to have any good intentions when he gave him this watch, but he didn't expect this product to say it so calmly, and he apologized to himself like this!

"That...... Look at you," Wang Hao was a little embarrassed: "You are doing this like what I have done to you." Actually, it's nothing, I don't mind this very much, and didn't Concubine Bing say that she was going to give me a piece too? The two pieces add up to 888,000, which is a good number......"

In other words, this Zhao Zhenhao is really unusual, and if other people are represented, it is estimated that he will not apologize for this kind of thing - he has to apologize for sending a watch of more than 400,000 yuan, this is not an ordinary pit......

"I apologize mainly because of my careful thinking," Zhao Zhenhao sat down again, and then said with a smile: "After I went home yesterday, I communicated with Uncle Bai, and he said that you ...... Well, you are indeed pure friends with Miss Ya Ning, this matter is still said by Miss Ya Ning herself, it is said that you sent Miss Ya Ning to the hotel that night not only did not take the opportunity to take advantage of it but also gave her a song, so she will take so much care of you. ”

So that's the case? Oops, we're all embarrassed to say it, send Miss Ya Ning to the hotel, as if I was going to do something to her......

"I think a person with normal three views should do this, right?" Wang Hao scratched his hair: "It's nothing, friends can't take advantage of the opportunity, right?" ”

"Yes, I think so," Zhao Zhenhao nodded, "That's why I think you are a friend you can make." If you don't mind, would it be nice for us to be friends? ”

That's a lot of weight......

"That, you don't mind if I'm from a low background," Wang Hao smiled: "If you're friends with you, you have to count me as a high climber, hehe." ”

"No, no, no, I think it's my honor," Zhao Zhenhao said, "It's not easy to have a really good friend who is open-minded and not intrigued." ”

That's something that only you wealthy people have, where do we little people have so many calculations......

"We have to have a drink at you," Wang Hao said with a smile: "Many friends and many roads, hehe." ”

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Today's four more will be sent! Everyone is in a hurry, there is another alliance leader today, plus a monthly pass, and tomorrow will continue to be the fourth watch! (To be continued.) )