First of all, I would like to thank Comrade Di of the sweeping group for patiently and carefully reading the article, commenting professionally and pertinently, and finding out a lot of my shortcomings, thus clarifying the direction of rectification and reform, and giving me confidence ^_^ to a certain extent.

Among them, there are many accusations of deficiencies in the book, and now I post it to remind myself to work hard to rectify, if it can also help everyone, it is really excellent~

[Sweeper]: Internship - Huang Yan

[Title]: "The Fierce Love of the Wealthy"

[Advantages]: I don't like to read girls' essays very much, but this article makes me feel refreshed, the article is very exciting, very substitutional, it feels like watching a TV series, the text description is very vivid, the layout is very reasonable and appropriate, the character description of the characters is vivid, the text is written very carefully, and there is a desire to watch it.

[Disadvantages]: Some of the opening articles are not very good, and some places feel that some flames are lacking, and some points that make readers catch fire.

[Suggestion]: Recommended

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[Sweeper]: No fish

[Title]: "The Fierce Love of the Wealthy"

[Brief comment]: Subjectively thinks that the introduction is too long, and it may be good to leave only the heroine's perspective. Leave the reader with suspense, whether the heroine can succeed or something.

After entering the story, I feel that it is very different, and the story begins with the female protagonist writing step by step to attract the attention of the male protagonist, putting aside the routine setting of the previous president's article, which is innovative. The heroine's personality is also very individual, kind, courageous, and ambitious.

Logically, it feels weird for the male protagonist to invite the female protagonist as his assistant casually, although the female protagonist's performance is very good. But that doesn't mean she's up to the job of assistant. I feel that the male protagonist's personality is not rigorous. Even if it's a playboy, I don't think it's interesting, so I'll recruit it. I feel a little frivolous when I try it. Where to put the group, can this kind of person be the president! Both of them are actually seniors, these are all innocuous details, and it's good to be appropriate, and the girl will probably like it.

The story develops with a sense of rhythm.

[Suggestion]: Recommended

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[Sweeper]: Internship - Monday Strategy

[Title]: The fierce love of the wealthy is like a burning

[Brief comment]: I haven't read the article of the female frequency, so I don't know much about it, so I can only talk about my feelings in general.

1. Writing. The author has a good foundation, revealing a strong self-confidence between the lines, the control of the plot is very good, and the description is accurate, not verbose at all.

2. Details. Many small details are written very specifically, and there is a kind of atmosphere of petty bourgeois movies such as "Waiting for the Wind" and "Little Times", which should be more in line with the aesthetics of urban white-collar workers.

3. Characters. The characters are all typical office style, very good and easy to substitute.

More than ten years ago, I read a few first-person novels of the heroine in the altar, and it was very popular at the time, and the author's style was very similar, and it should be in the same lineage.

Recommended

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[Sweeper]: Yun Shiyan

[Title]: "The Fierce Love of the Wealthy"

[Advantages]: 1. The title is fierce and love-like, which makes people feel burned by love. The profile is brilliant and quite eye-catching.

2. The language is concise and the rhythm is bright. There are many short sentences, no nonsense. Writing in the first person not only has a great sense of substitution, but also controls the speed of the plot development, which is very refreshing.

3. The characters are vivid and vivid. The female protagonist "Fu Qingyu" is smart and decisive, bold and careful, and the male protagonist "Si Tianzhe" is wise and profound. There are other supporting characters who also perform their own duties and are interdependent, which leaves a deep impression. The author is good at portraying the character characteristics of the characters through their appearance, demeanor, actions, language, psychology, etc. This is something I can learn from.

4. Be good at creating and resolving contradictions. From the heroine's latent to the disclosure of her identity, to the love-love secret, to my girlfriend chasing the man, Miss Sina's secret love......

[Disadvantages]: 1. Some English words pop up in the text from time to time, which makes me very unhappy. It is strongly recommended that the author write in pure Chinese. It's not because I don't know each other, of course it's just wishful thinking on my part.

[Suggestion]: Recommended

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[Sweeper]: Dream chaser

[Title]: "The Fierce Love of the Wealthy"

[Brief comment]: The introduction of the content at the beginning of this book is very layered, highlighting the conflict between the male and female protagonists, which can catch people's attention, but it is a bit cumbersome. The author writes from the heroine as the first point of view, the male and female protagonists meet very interestingly, very attractive, mention my interest in reading, the author has a strong ability to control this kind of beautiful urban literature, the content is delicate and smooth, very fresh, worth a look, suitable for girls to see. And the chapter titles of the book are very poetic,

[Suggestion]: Recommended

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[Sweeper]: Yin Chen

[Title]: "The Fierce Love of the Wealthy"

[Brief comment]: The poetic language is intoxicating, and the nuanced character portrayal makes people taste it repeatedly; The cold business war makes people shiver coldly; The author writes whimsically and arrogantly.

It's just that there are so many English in the back, which is difficult to read, and it also destroys the poetry like water and the moon, which is regrettable.

The image of the character is nothing less than fullness, which comes from calculation and countercalculation. The poetry between the lines wants to express the love for Si Tian, right? But the progress is too slow, and by chapter 10, there hasn't been much progress, which makes people feel off topic.

[Suggestion]: Recommended

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[Sweeper]: Internship - Su Moming

[Title]: "The Fierce Love of the Wealthy"

[Advantages]: 1. After reading the first ten chapters written by the author, I found that the whole article was written very distinctively, and the just right speed of writing and the sense of tranquility gave people liked very much.

2, the male and female protagonists are very characterful, Fu Qingyu and Si Tianzhe, Fu Qingyu has a mysterious background, everything in the past has been washed away, and Si Tianzhe is a rich man, almost the embodiment of beauty, both of them are still students, the sense of reality is a little worse, but it is acceptable.

3, the rhythm and content of the plot are substantial, and the rivalry between the male and female protagonists is very exciting, although the heroine has been falling behind, looking forward to the follow-up plot, hoping that Fu Qingyu can gradually become stronger, and Si Tianzhe has the strength to play against the table.

[Disadvantages]: 1. Some places are too cumbersome and detailed, such as Si Tianzhe as their own prey, which has been emphasized too many times, and it is recommended that the narrative can be detailed and appropriate, and some places give readers space to think, and try to avoid repetition.

[Suggestion]: Recommended

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[Sweeper clerk]: Internship - fish run

[Title]: "The Fierce Love of the Wealthy"

[Advantages]: The beginning is tall, giving people suspense, attracting people to want to read, the writing is also good, and it looks very smooth.

[Disadvantages]: The previous plot is a bit bloody, and some are not quite reasonable, which makes people feel that they are hard to spell, and some sentences are not smooth, which affects reading, and it is good to look at it in the future, but it feels like it is relatively flat and not attractive enough.

[Recommended]: Not recommended

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[Sweeper Clerk]: Internship - Contradiction

[Title]: "The Fierce Love of the Wealthy"

[Advantages]: At the beginning, I thought it was another bitter love for the rich and handsome, and I tried my best to paste the male protagonist's drama, who expected it to be in the second chapter, which showed that the female protagonist did not like the male protagonist, but used the relationship, which gave the reader a big surprise, and couldn't help but look forward to the next plot more, in addition, the author's writing is very good, the first person is used superbly, there is no delay between the plot transitions, the writing is extremely smooth, and whether it is the characters, scenes, or atmosphere, they are all described very well, making people feel like they are there, the writing is smooth, read carefully, it gives people the feeling of watching a live idol drama, without the slightest disobedience, continue to work hard, the princess will be able to become the queen.

[Disadvantages]: The supporting characters also need a clear face, and the English dialogue similar to Chapter 9 can be reduced at some discretion.

[Suggestion]: Recommended

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[Sweeper]: Yuan Yuan Yuanbao

[Title]: "The Fierce Love of the Wealthy"

[Advantages]: The author's writing is good, and the language in the article is relatively beautiful. The opening chapter is also new and eye-catching. The portrayal of several male protagonists in the article is also good, with distinct personalities and impressive edges and corners.

[Disadvantages]: The article has always felt relatively bland, with contradictions and conflicts, but it did not burst out with that kind of cheerful feeling. Some plots don't feel very reasonable, especially in Chapter 10, where the heroine is attacked and warned by a hostile small company, and the identity of the granddaughter of the chairman of the protagonist Lin Meng Group has not even been found out by Si Tianzhe, but she casually lets a small company find out, which is obviously unreasonable. Besides, to warn Si Tianzhe is also to warn Si Tianzhe that it should be effective, if Si Tianzhe is attacked, the heroine accidentally saved him, and is it more reasonable to be injured or something?

[Recommended]: Not recommended