"Due to time constraints, I only watched the first 20 verses, and I feel that it is okay. Have a few comments for your reference, I don't know if you would like to hear them? ”

"I can't ask for it"

"The pace is a little slower. Online articles are produced in the fast-paced era, and in a vulgar phrase, the hero and heroine are not interested in meeting for two days without going to bed...... Song Ha and Han Yun's progress slowed down a bit...... In addition, the plot of Song He's abandonment of his ex-wife must be strengthened, and you will weaken the character traits of the male protagonist by passing it off like this...... In addition, your writing is too literary, and you are still an Internet writer. Let's go back to the topic.,I think it's time to upload.,Isn't your last book finished? ”

"It's over. I didn't think you were quite expert...... That's a vetting pass, right? I've already contacted the online editor, and they want me to upload a new book as soon as possible. Actually, I've already compiled the outline online, and I think it's okay...... Hey, it looks like I'm going to write Song Ha as a villain, I'm really a little uncertain......"

"Successful web novels need to have a strong sense of substitution, right? What do you say is the life that those teenagers want most? ”

"Wealth and beauty," he thought, isn't that what adults want?

"Exactly. But that's not the main thing, I'm asking if they want to be a good guy or a bad guy? ”

"What do you mean?"

"I think they're more willing to act as the bad guys our age group thinks. Why? Because in the real society, good people always have more tribulations, and good people are burdened with more family and social responsibilities. But the bad guys are different, at least they can do it spontaneously. You write Song Ha as a talented scoundrel to everyone's taste, right? And, do you think that the real tyranny is a good person in the traditional sense? I think you portrayed Song He's psychology too bookishly, he shouldn't have so many concerns, and he won't be too thoughtful in doing things, and he will act after making a decision. If you figure out everything before you do it, the daylily will be cold ****** early! The history of East Lake is full of fraud and luck. No one has mercy on the loser, that's just the way it is......"

"Entrepreneurship is like a conquest, I understand that. But if Song Ha is too much in his love life, will it affect the work? ”

"I don't think so. Of course, you can't write him as a guy who thinks completely on the lower half of his body. He pursues women for a purpose, and you should be able to handle this well. By the way, let's tell a true story that just happened, have you heard of a singer named Lanny? ”

"Nope"

"It's out, isn't it? You do this, don't you know what kind of industry you do in the entertainment industry? Indispensable material. You can look up who Lannie is online. What I'm going to say is that there are some stories about this singer and Song Ha, do you want to hear it? Maybe it will help you with your subsequent plot design? ”

"You wait...... Song River and singers? ”

"Just two days ago. Do you know the Wanshi Hotel in Beiyang? ”

"Know, but haven't been"

"The location of the story is there. Lannie's fame is on the rise. This year's 'May Day' held a concert in Pingquan, and you can find it casually. Song He and Miss Lan Ni were dating at the Wanshi Hotel, but they were caught by a reporter from Beiyang Metropolis Daily, and there was a conflict, Song He beat the reporter fat, and the photos were deleted......"

Sun Dunquan didn't say anything.

"Why don't you speak?"

"Didn't I listen to you?" Sun Dunquan felt that this story was not new.

"I think you can write this story in," Zhang Hongqin paused, "If you are willing to listen, I can tell you how things were handled, of course." This is not the end of the matter. It is said that the reporter also has a background, and it is very interesting to relate to the situation in the ****** of our province, and I hope you will pay attention to this matter......"

"Then let's hear you talk about it......"

Ten minutes later. Sun Dunquan ended the call with Zhang Hongqin. That incident didn't sound new to Sun Dunquan, and the real life of the singer Sugar Daddy is definitely not news, and Tang Yikun has multiple female companions is almost ironclad, with his net worth status. Guarding a wife is news. What is worth learning is the process of dealing with this incident after it happened, but it can be written into the work. Therefore, Sun Dunquan did not have a very strong feeling about Zhang Hongqin's narration. There was no comment on the phone.

According to the agreement, Sun Dunquan's new book should be approved by Zhang Hongqin before it is released, and Sun Dunquan did so. He copied the manuscript of about 200,000 words to Zhang Hongqin, waited for more than ten days, and finally got Zhang's reply, but she only looked at 50,000 or 60,000 words and thought it was okay. Sun Dunquan fully admits the slow pace of Zhang Hongqin's problem, but he is not ready to revise it, this is a problem that is difficult to solve in online novels, online literature is different from serious literature, in a sense, it is the number of words, if a good story is told within 300,000 words, the writer may not be able to earn money at all. What's the solution? That's the reality.

The second author of this book is Zhang Hongqin, and she is fully involved. Even the names of the heroes and heroines were given by her, and the insinuation is very obvious, accompanied by the plot, if it is an employee of East Lake or someone who cares about East Lake, it is very easy to sit in the right seat. This made him a little uneasy, he was not worried that Tang Yikun would find this book, he estimated that Tang Yikun would not read the online article at all, but the people around him, such as his secretary and the like, might find this novel that "denigrates" Tang Yikun, because according to Zhang Hongqin's suggestion, Song He, the hero of this book, is basically a villain in the traditional sense.

Is that good? Sun Dunquan was a little unsure. This is not the case with the protagonists of the two works he has completed, although the protagonist of the second, the novel set in the historical context of the Republic of China, is a loser, still a good man in the traditional sense, at least morally in line with tradition.

Recently, Zhang Hongqin has provided him with a lot of materials, including the news just spread. There is only one direction to these materials, that is, the founder of the "Xiyuejiang Company" is not commendable except for the superb means used to crisscross the shopping mall.

"Xijiangyue" is the East Lake in reality, and its main business is also real estate, and it is the only industry, which is convenient to narrate. Thanks to Zhang Hongqin, she gave him a lot of professional knowledge that cannot be found on the Internet and books, which helped him a lot. Now he believes in the idea of literary theory that the most important thing in a novel is not the plot, but the details, and the plot can be made up, and the details cannot be made up. Those Chinese and foreign masterpieces are all amazing in details, and in this sense, only details are art.

Sun Dunquan's feeling now is completely different from before. He felt the "extraordinary" of this book, which was not only a challenge for him in terms of creation, but also a challenge for his life. Looking at the chapters that have been completed, he thinks he has made a breakthrough, and the quality is much better than the previous two works. The main thing is that there is something to say, and the fate of the protagonist is full of variables, there are many things that can be written, and it is full of tension. He thinks that he is not an old bird in this industry, and the two works he has completed are also lackluster, so he doesn't need to think about the famous mountain. The key is that his wife Yin Yutao has less and less confidence in him, which makes him very anxious. It is said that money is a person's guts, especially for men. The two books together earned less than 50,000 yuan, and it was even worse than him working in Red Star every month, resulting in cigarette money and oil money having to be begged from his wife, how could he be embarrassed? But this online article, tentatively titled "Far Mountain", has restored some of his ambitions, and it is unknown whether he will make a comeback in terms of income. "Far Mountain" has many of the necessary ingredients for a successful web novel: a huge fortune from a strange source, a bewitching beauty, and a life full of intrigue and calculation...... It has the potential to be red! However, it has the potential to touch the behemoth of Hiraizumi, and now that he finds that the documentary nature of the work is too strong, will this be a problem?

He seriously doubted Zhang Hongqin's identity, if she was just an ordinary clerk as she said, she should not have mastered so many secrets of the East Lake - she told him a lot of big names of the East Lake Industrial Group and the contradictions and struggles between them, which of course helped him greatly to complete the novel, without contradictions and conflicts, the plot could not be advanced, but fantasies and imaginary things can never be compared with what actually happens in life. He acknowledges that the leaders of East Lake are charismatic figures, and everyone is in high spirits. Each story is thrilling and full of charm.

But for the source of the "first pot of gold" in East Lake, which he "tirelessly" pursued, Zhang Hongqin avoided it, and whenever he asked about it, the other party always talked about him left and right, which made Sun Dunquan feel more and more that the "first pot of gold" was indeed famous. Because "Far Mountain" adopts the structure of flashbacks, it has not yet touched the path of the development of "Xijiangyue", and there is time to conceive, but Sun Dunquan is not satisfied with the several plans he conceived. He believes that the real story must be better than his own fiction, how can he get the truth?

What is her identity in East Lake Industrial Group? How did she know so much about the leaders of East Lake, like living around them? Why did she create such a character as "Song River" like this? Will such a character be recognized by book lovers?

The webmaster was a responsible person who kept in touch with him, urging him to start a new book before his last book was finished. Unable to withstand the editor's request, he sent the outline of the new book (which had not yet been named), and the editor thought it was okay, saying that there are many such subjects at present, but there are not many perspectives like yours, so it should be okay. The editor gave him advice on the current situation of increasingly strict network management, which is the so-called positive energy problem, because the hero and heroine in the outline are a little "biased", because their identity is the boss of a private company, and it is okay to be appropriate "deviant", but the red line must not be crossed. It's better to have a traditional positive character contrast. Regarding the direction of the plot of the work, the editor also put forward his own opinions, urging him to upload it as soon as possible to pass the review.

Now Zhang Hongqin also agreed to release it, but Sun Dunquan hesitated. I feel more and more that it is a very good suggestion for the editor to find a character to "foil" Song He.

The "foil" character is around, and he is Tao Tang. Sun Dunquan recently ate an invitation from Han Ruilin, listened to Han Ruilin's dissatisfaction with Tao Tang, and heard some negative rumors about Tao Tang that he didn't expect. He was surprised to find that it had only been a few months in the cave, and that it had been a thousand years in the world. Closed at home every day, so many things have happened in the Red Star Factory! Of course, these changes are all brought about by Tao Tang, and Tao Tang, who is in the whirlpool of contradictions, does he know what the following is about him? Sun Dunquan wondered if it was time to talk to Tao Tang, if Tao Tang was written as a prototype into the novel, would the structure need to be overhauled? (To be continued.) )