"Is there anything that can be said now?" After Koyanagi came to the third floor, Shiina Mashiro's room, he asked straight to the point.

It's not that he doesn't understand the amorous feelings, but he thinks that looking for himself at this time, there should really be something to discuss with himself, Mahaku's personality is a little introverted, and if he is rubbing and shy, he doesn't know when he will be able to say things, he asks directly, which is the most trouble-free.

Shiina Mashiro nodded and said, "I want Koyanagi-kun to help me take a look......"

"What?" Koyanagi asked a little strangely, but his gaze quickly shifted to the paper on the computer desk not far away, which seemed to have comics drawn on it, and there were more than a dozen of them in total.

"Yes, that's it." Shiina Mahaku noticed Koyanagi's gaze, her face was slightly red, but she didn't continue because she was a little shy, but said more firmly: "As you can see, it's a manga I drew, I want Koyanagi-kun to help me look at it and evaluate it." ”

"Oh?" Koyanagi responded in surprise, he didn't expect that Shiina Mashiro would be able to draw comics, which was really unexpected, but combined with the conversation in the afternoon, she seemed to like the look of comics very much, and it seemed reasonable to want to draw comics, and I don't know how to draw?

"During the afternoon conversation, I felt that Koyanagi-kun seemed to understand a lot of things, so I wanted you to help me refer to it......" Shiina Mahaku looked up at Koyanagi and asked, "Is that okay?" ”

"Absolutely." Koyanagi nodded, just as he was a little interested.

Shiina Mashiro listened to the agreement, and suddenly became a little happy, and hurriedly took the manuscripts of the dozen or so comics and handed them to Koyanagi.

Koyanagi sat down in a chair and began to look at the manga in his hand.

Shiina Mahaku sat next to her, a little nervous, her heart was pounding, and she seemed to be much faster, she looked at Koyanagi, waiting for Koyanagi's reading and evaluation.

At a very young age, she had a dream of becoming a cartoonist.

Since I was a child, I often drew some cartoons secretly, but those cartoons were hidden in places that others couldn't see, and they weren't seen by anyone.

It can be said that Xiaoyanagi at this time is her first reader.

Koyanagi looked at the comics in his hand seriously.,This seems to be a girl's manga.,The painting style is very good.,The details are also handled very well.,For a newcomer,It's a little commendable.。

Painting style, characters, angles, body proportions, environment proportions, style, background layout, softness of lines, etc.

These are the things that a comic book must do, and it can be said that it is difficult for some newcomers to complete. And the comic in Koyanagi's hand at this time was unexpectedly completed very well, even much better than some newcomers who had already debuted.

This had to surprise Koyanagi a little.

He looked up and said, "It's a good drawing." ”

Shiina Mahaku listened to the evaluation, and suddenly showed a shallow smile, a little excited. Being watched and recognized for the first time doesn't get much happier than that.

But...... Shiina Mashiro's happiness ends here.

From now on, Shiina Mashiro has been staring at Koyanagi's face, trying to know from his facial expressions what he really thinks, whether he is lying, etc. - but just now, Koyanagi's brow furrowed slightly.

More than that, Koyanagi frowned more and more frequently, and in the end, he frowned directly, and he looked at the original manuscript faster and faster.

In the end, the time to read the first three originals turned out to be exactly the same as the time to read the next dozen or so manuscripts.

This made Shiina Mashiro's heart rise to his throat.

Koyanagi exhaled slightly, looked at Shiina Mashiro's nervous appearance, and said helplessly: "After reading it, it's very bad." ”

"Sucks?" Shiina Mahaku felt like a deflated balloon, leaned softly on the chair, hesitated for a moment and asked, "What the hell is so bad?" ”

To tell the truth, Koyanagi thought that he would see annoyance and anger in Shiina Mashiro, after all, as a newcomer, he is often very arrogant and arrogant, and he can't listen to other people's opinions, even if he is an old man, he will be a little unconvinced if the story is denied. But Shiina Mashiro doesn't have any of that.

This undoubtedly made Koyanagi have some good feelings about Shiina Mashiro, which shows that she believes in herself very much.

Xiao Yanagi pondered for a moment, and then said, "I said earlier, your painting is very good, but why do you say that it is terrible later?" It's all about your character and your story. ”

"This story is bland, almost inexplicable, no theme, no center, no ups and downs, no fluctuations, it's just a story that is rotten to the extreme, even if it's some bloody plots, dog blood stories, it's much better than this, at least that kind of plot, even if it's ostracized, it will make people have a love reaction, and some people will like it, but you are like something like clear water, there is no half of the love reaction at all, and it will not resonate with anyone, it is undoubtedly a very failure."

"I told you not long ago that one of the advantages of comics is that they can resonate with people, but unfortunately, your novels don't have that."

What is this story about? It's said that the heroine met the male protagonist in an accident, and the two fell in love, ate, went shopping, watched movies, then went shopping, then went to school, and then got out of school, and then it was over...... Don't you feel weird yourself? It's just a picture, not a comic that makes up a story, they are related to each other, but they can't be put together. ”

"Not only that, but the bland story is also forgotten, whether it is the male protagonist or the heroine, I can't see their faces, although the character modeling is successful, but the character personality is completely blank, as if it is a blank slate. Make it impossible to see. ”

"Your problem is here, there's no way to create a good character, a good story."

"But that's what the comics are all about." Koyanagi said seriously: "Interesting comics can only be serialized and published, and comics, as long as they are interesting, it is enough." ”

Listening to Koyanagi's comment, Shiina Mashiro was speechless for a long time, she pondered, as if she was sad and seemed to be thinking.

"That'...... Am I still far behind? Shiina Mahaku sighed, and asked in a slightly trembling voice, she didn't expect that just the first time, she would be denied like this, obviously she was praised just now, and now such a hundred and eighty-degree change is really unbearable. However, Koyanagi's evaluation and analysis are really very reasonable, but he can't help but ask this kind of thing, which is really a bit capricious.

Xiao Liu sighed, although he wanted to coax her, but it was a pickled girl, maybe it would make her happy, but not for her good.

Koyanagi said, "You're still far behind, at least in terms of plot characters. ”

Shiina Mahaku bit her lip, this lost look, almost crying, it was really distressing.

"Comics, it's not as simple as you think, and it's a strange thing to become a cartoonist if it's so simple." Koyanagi said.

At this time, Shiina was really white, with his head down, and his expression was very lost, which naturally made Xiaoyanagi feel a little distressed.

He asked, "Is that how you want to be a cartoonist?" ”

Shiina Mashiro nodded: "This is my dream......"

She raised her head, looked at Xiao Yanagi, showed a smile, obviously cheered up, and then said: "Thank you for your comment, I will work hard, the dream, it is not so simple to achieve, but I will make it come true, one day ......"

"That's right." Xiao Yanagi nodded, feeling that he had nothing more to say, so he said, "Then I'll go." ”

Koyanagi, who left Shiina Mashiro's room, lingered in her mind with her lost look, and sighed a little depressedly.

He muttered, "I really can't look at it, forget it, I'd better help her...... By the way, make some extra money and save it for emergencies. ”

An hour later, Koyanagi knocked on Shiina Mahaku's door, but no one responded.

"Not there? Or is it out? Xiaoyanagi muttered and twisted the handle, but now there is no lock.

Koyanagi hesitated, but walked in.

Koyanagi who came to the room, and now there is a sound of drenching water in the bathroom, and it is obvious that Mashiro is taking a bath......

However, you can't do that with nature...... The doors are not closed.

"Shiina-san!" Koyanagi shouted outside.

"Huh? Koyanagi? What's up? The real white inside asked in a strange voice.

"Let you see something."

A few minutes later, Mahaku, wrapped in a bath towel, walked out of the bathroom.

"What's that?" Shiina Mashiro walked over and asked a little strangely.

Xiao Yanagi looked at the approaching Shiina Mashiro, and couldn't help but be a little suffocated, she was here, but she was wearing nothing, and her fragrant shoulders were stained with a little drop of water, so naked. Exposed in the air, the delicate and small collarbone symbolizes cuteness, which makes people can't help but play with it, the chest underneath, slightly bulging, the wet head, sprinkled at will, slender arms, slender thighs, it is really a unique posture. No, it's simply tempting. People are at the extreme, okay......

Koyanagi swallowed his saliva, handed the paper in his hand to Mahaku, and said, "That's it, this." ”

Mahahiro took the paper, sat on the bed, and looked at it.

"...... this?"

Xiao Yanagi sat not far away, because Shiina Mashiro's eyes turned away, he could look at her unscrupulously at this time, which made him a little excited, but after watching it for a while, he felt a little guilty, it was really contradictory. But in the end, I couldn't take my eyes off, after all, such a picturesque and rare beauty bathing scene is not something that can be seen casually......

"This is name." Koyanagi said. 'name' is the manga outline of a manga artist, that is, the central content of a work, commonly known as storyboarding.

"I know, but you drew it?" Shiina Mashiro asked after a pause.

"Well, I drew the name, didn't you just say it? Your dream,It's to become a cartoonist.,But the story is too bad.,Want to grow up.,From scratch.,I'm afraid it will take at least three or four years to make a little success.,So I want to help you.,It took a little time.,Draw a name.,A total of 5o sheets.,With your painting style.,Draw it.,Even if it's a shonen Jump.,You can also publish it! I'm still confident in this. Koyanagi said.

"But why? Why give it to me? Shiina Mashiro was moved in his heart, looked at Koyanagi with gratitude, and asked.

"Because you draw very well, it's a pity that you can't become a cartoonist with such a picture, so, I drew this, of course, it's not for you, I'm saving zài as an original, you are saving zài as a painting, so to speak, we are a kind of duo." Koyanagi said with a smile.

"Of course I know that, but ...... Your work is so good, don't look for me, there are a lot of other cartoonists who are willing to draw, right? Shiina Mashiro said with some hesitation.

"You think too much, I'm not that famous yet." Koyanagi shook his head and said, "I think your drawings are no worse than those cartoonists, so don't hesitate to make your debut with this!" ”

"Debut...... Debut. Shiina Mahaku read these two words, a little excited, the previous malaise has been swept away at this time.

"Thank you!"

Shiina Mahaku stood up suddenly, obviously overjoyed, and made a ninety-degree bow to Koyanagi.

However, at this moment, because the range of action was too violent, the bath towel draped on Shiina Mashiro's body was scattered on the ground all of a sudden......

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