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Sitting in front of the computer, I suddenly didn't know what to say, and after thinking about it, maybe it was more of a thanks!

First of all, I would like to thank 17k for giving me this opportunity to write a story I like on the Internet!

Thanks to the guidance given to me by the instructor for ten years, I almost gave up after two visa rejections, but he told me to persevere!

Thank you to my contracted editor, 'Future', for giving me a chance to continue writing about my dreams.

I would like to thank my family for their silent support. Finally, I would like to thank all the readers for giving me the reason to keep creating!

Thank you very much! I wish you all good health! I hope you will continue to support me.

Speaking of learning experience, after writing down for half a year, I really felt that I was naïve when I just wrote the book, I didn't feel anything at first, I felt that everything was not empty, what three less, what Ye Shen, cut down in minutes.

Looking back now that I am really naïve, what I wrote is really unbearable, and I will want to doze off when I read it myself, and the character theory given by the instructor for ten years is really to the point.

But one of the reasons why I don't want to change it is because this is a trajectory I have traveled, and I want to keep this memory. Just like the diary of a child, looking back may reveal a lot of precious things.

I also want to make it a reference for myself, always remembering that I still have a lot to grow and sharpen!

The commentary at that time was classic, and I will quote it.

Review content:

The beginning of the novel is long.,Just pass it over the changes in the family.,Directly enter the game.,Because of the bad mood.,Passively chose the profession of doom mage.。

After the protagonist appears, there is no need for the introduction of the game, especially the introduction of CS, but a new game, and the new game is not a one-shot introduction of everything, mainly suitable for newcomers.

The process of the protagonist's gold finger is the reward of the system.,Get the main god ring.,At the same time, it's a doom mage.,This itself is two gold fingers.,It's okay to highlight the doom mage at the opening.,As for the ring of the gods,You can let the protagonist complete the system task later.,It's more convincing.,It also saves the last player from such a setting.。

In the beginning, for the introduction of newcomer attributes, don't explain all the attributes, form a big data package, and mention the attributes that are closely related to the protagonist, and occasionally explain the rest when you are promoted.

On the whole, the beginning of the theme is slow, and the introduction of the golden finger is many and cumbersome, so you can be concise, enter the novice village, and complete the novice task.

Grading Criteria:

1. Whether the text is in correct and smooth word order, accurate wording, and rich vocabulary (this is the so-called fluent text, the so-called writing): b writing is average (smooth, no mistakes in the use of words, and the vocabulary is generally rich) +1

2. Whether the narrative clues are clear and prominent, and whether the plot rhythm/narrative rhythm/narrative structure is simple and clear: the narrative clues are clear and complex +1

3. Whether there is an obvious dramatic conflict/foreshadowing of the plot content or a concentrated flashpoint of the conflict (that is, the so-called small **)/turning point: The dramatic conflict of the plot content appears but is not obvious +1

4. Whether the details of the character are full and can be clearly perceived, and whether the words and deeds of the characters are consistent with their characters (that is, whether the so-called character creation is distinct, natural and vivid): The details of the character are clear but not vivid and full +1

5. Whether the dialogue is vivid and appropriate is not superfluous: the dialogue is vivid and natural +1

6. Is there any novelty in the worldview/props, equipment and skill settings: The worldview/props, equipment and skill settings are new and logically self-consistent, and the innovative settings are +2

7. Is there suspense at the end of the fragment or chapter/unfinished/implying that the plot ** is coming: There is suspense at the end of the fragment or chapter, but it is not obvious +1

To be honest, it seems that Ten Years Old really helped me revise it seriously at that time, and I saw all the faults in my novels. And made a sincere review of my novel.

A big thank you to my instructors: 10 years of graduation

Thank you for your teaching! Thank you so much!

This book was first published from 17k, the first time to see the genuine content!