The first volume is over, and as a rookie writer, this is the first time I have written so many words in a novel. Pen ~ fun ~ pavilion www.biquge.info to commemorate, let me write a small summary.

The first volume is about the adaptation stage after the protagonist Luo Rin crosses over, so it is written relatively shortly, and it does not reach the budget of 100,000 words after cutting out some plots that I personally think are unimportant. Luo Rin's upgrade speed in the first volume may be too fast, and he will basically be promoted to a big level after a fight, this is because the name of this book is "Blue Fist Arbitration", and the protagonist is not a full profession but just a blue fist saint, so the skills that have nothing to do with the boxing method in the front are written in too much detail, and for the important characters that will appear in the second volume, I can't omit the skills of other departments, so it caused the current situation, and sure enough, I still won't deal with it.

Speaking of problems, although no one said it in the book review area (it is estimated that most of the collections are only placed on the shelves, and those who are willing to read it have a tolerant heart), but I know that there are a lot of problems, and I know from the collection that has been dropped.

The first point is that the protagonist has no sense of presence in a large number of articles. This is an old problem of mine.,When I tried to write a novel before, there were 20,000 words that had nothing to do with the protagonist.,Only give him a passerby character to forcibly brush up the sense of existence.。 After that, I tried to write another story, and that time it didn't have this problem, but when I started writing "Blue Fist Arbitration" online, the old illness returned. The reason is simple, in the story where there is no problem, there is no character I like more than the main character in the tens of thousands of words I wrote. And in the first volume, I liked Matthew, Michelle, and Bloody Hand very much, so I put Luo Rin aside when it came to reflecting their characteristics. In the subsequent writing, there are characters that I like very much, and I will try my best to adjust them so that Luo Rin will not be soy sauce all the time.

The second point is about villains. Maybe it's because I'm the author, I don't think these villains are cool enough to kill except for the last priest. Because I want to determine the character of the protagonist at the very beginning, Luo Rin is as long as the enemy hurts others, whether it is because of psychological shadows or tragic encounters, otherwise even if Luo Rin will sympathize, he still has to let the other party be punished! There will be retribution for doing bad deeds, and there is no reason for others to pay for your pain. Maybe my writing scum doesn't show it, and it's even worse in this case.

The third point is that the protagonist looks weak. The protagonist looks quite weak.,The two villains in the back of the first volume.,Bloody hand Luo Rin is paddling soy sauce.,When facing the priest, he was still the only one present who was suppressed by the phantom god.,And the first volume fights in the holy domain, but the characteristics of the protagonist's holy envoy can't break through the holy domain.。 What I want to say about this is that it's still in a small place, and you'll find out when you get out...... The current Luo Rin is ridiculously weak compared to those true geniuses. Instead of constantly launching "geniuses" who are not geniuses at all in the eyes of the real strong to step on the protagonist in the early stage, it is better to directly show the gap with the top geniuses. Actually, I think it's normal.,As a traverser, the gap between more than ten years of people can't be regarded as nothing.,What the protagonist wants to do is not the earliest person to laugh but the person who can laugh to the end.。

The fourth point is the setting of the god system, no way, how to write about the clergy without God. The juxtaposition of multiple gods and the existence of the Holy See give the impression that it is Western magic, where various gods fight each other or something. Here I would like to assure you that God generally does not intervene in the continental struggle, nor does it always press on the heads of the mainlanders like a big mountain. The Holy See and the other gods are not in a relationship of good and evil, and their struggle is not to expand their sphere of influence for missionary purposes.

That's all the problems I've found so far, if there are any other shortcomings, please leave a comment.

The next second volume is called "Blue Fist Holy Messenger", and it is finally about to officially enter another world!

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