Li Yuntao's new writing is relatively slow, and it took more than a month to write less than 50,000 words.

On the one hand, because the old books are not over yet, updating the old books every day takes up a lot of his time.

In addition, he wants to polish the new book, not pursuing speed, but pursuing quality. Of course, with Li Yuntao's limited writing, one person works behind closed doors, no matter how he polishes it, it is impossible to come up with a masterpiece.

Therefore, Li Yuntao saved a certain draft and asked the editor in charge on QQ: "What a beautiful girl, I have written tens of thousands of words, can you give some advice?"

"Send QQ mailbox. The editor-in-charge replied succinctly.

Li Yuntao sent the manuscript to Mo in a hurry, and it was only less than 5 minutes later.

Mo Mo replied: "I read the draft, and the idea is very good, but it is not well written. It's a bit of a running account, and I don't dig into the character of the character well. ”

"How can you be specific?" asked Li Yuntao with a bit of a shock.

Mo Mo quickly gave advice: "The male protagonist Li Qing, you set up a person who was hurt by feelings, but I only saw him playing games all day long, sighing, but there were no other impressive characteristics. This paragraph of the original text (a few thousand words omitted here), please read carefully, is it too banal to write like this?

After the appearance of the intelligent AI Xiao Ai, it was a little better, but you didn't discover the cuteness of the intelligent program Xiao Ai.

Stayy, cute, growing, this is Xiao Ai's selling point, if it's an animation, you can dig out the cuteness through dubbing.

But this is fiction, and you have to make it really alive through words. It's not okay to make up for it by yourself, it must be expressed through words. Although the difficulty is very high, it should be quite good if it is really well written.

In short, now that I start uploading like this, I feel that the probability of hitting the street is not low. ”

"Okay, I'll think about it seriously!" Although Li Yuntao felt that he had been hit enough, he still seriously chewed on every suggestion of the editor.

Although it is not possible for an editor to create a substitute for a writer, his advice is certainly more objective and professional than that of the writer himself. The author may be too narcissistic to see his own shortcomings.

However, as a bystander, the editor has seen more works, and has analyzed many popular works and street works. Naturally, it is known that if you avoid some of the common ways of writing street books.

"Come on, don't let me knock you off. Mo Mo sent a cute expression to comfort again, "The wandering frog of the god-level author, it is said that the beginning of the work has been changed more than 50 times on average, and some of the beginnings that he is satisfied with have been changed more than 20 times on average, and he will not upload it until he is the most satisfied. ”

"Thank you for the encouragement, I'll cheer up!" After ending the conversation with the editor-in-charge, Li Yuntao felt that he had been appeased after being beaten, and his fighting spirit and confidence were raised again.

The wandering frog, Li Yuntao knows, and the beginning is very well written. However, most of the later stages are to be unfinished, hence, there is a nickname for the unfinished frog.

Even so, the success of the unfinished frog further proves that the most precious thing about a book is often at the beginning.

In any case, it is also necessary to polish the beginning to the limit of one's ability, so that the results of the new book can meet one's expectations.

If even the face of a book, the tens of thousands of words at the beginning are mediocre, if you want to succeed, you can only have it in a dream.

"Start construction!" Li Yuntao clenched his fists, slashed and killed the articles that the editor pointed out to be inadequate, and began to ponder again to express them in a better way.

I fought for seven or eight hours in a row, and when I saw that it was 11 o'clock in the evening.

Although Li Yuntao felt that he could continue, he still went to bed for the sake of the dog's life.

......

The next morning.

Li Yuntao opened the APP of Wanjie Jiayuan.com.

A new message pops up.

After Li Yuntao opened the message, he found that it was Huang Rong who sent him a message back: "What do you think of flash marriage?"

This......

Sister Huang Rong actually sent me this kind of message.

How do I reply, wait online, I'm in a hurry!

Unable to calm down the inner turmoil for a long time, Li Yuntao began to think crankily, that? Could it be that Huang Rong's little Lori is interesting to herself?

Or is it that he is actually a buried male god, and the girls who have rejected him before are blind?

Li Yuntao began to brew emotions, and only after a while did he stumble and reply: "That...... Although I'm not too much against flash marriages myself......"

Nonsense, if it's a girl like Huang Rong, he agrees with 10,000.

"But...... According to the laws of the People's Republic of China, the age of marriage is 22 for men and 20 for women.

Little sister Huang Rong, you are only 16 years old.

It does not meet the minimum age for marriage under our current marriage law. ”

Li Yuntao gritted his teeth and typed out this line.

After sending this message, Li Yuntao admired his own ideological consciousness, a gentleman loves beauty, and love is in a good way.

Lori can only be watched from a distance, not blasphemed.

The so-called Lori control,It should only control the two-dimensional Loli.,And you can't think about the three-dimensional Loli.。

A minute later.

Huang Rong sent a new message: "I didn't send it just now, it was the system that sent it on my behalf, how could I send such a stupid message......!"

"Hehe, it's okay. Li Yuntao replied.

"Hehe, uncle, you are a good person, let's pay attention to each other. Every day we visit each other and increase the charisma value. Huang Rong said.

"Okay!" Li Yuntao didn't say a word, and clicked "Follow" on Huang Rong's information page.

Soon the system popped up a message again, gaining the attention of "Huang Rong".

"Uncle, you should be a person from the technology world, right? Do you have an iPhone over there?" Huang Rong said.

"Yes!" Li Yuntao replied, "What's wrong?"

"It's nothing, I want you to buy me something, 10 glass mirrors, an Apple phone, and a solar charging panel...... Huang Rong made a bunch of lists at once.

"This ......" Li Yuntao couldn't help but doubt, this is not a routine, right?

The mirror is good to say, the worthless thing should be the most important thing to get the ancient fraud.

The Apple mobile phone is so expensive, he himself is reluctant to buy an Apple mobile phone, but Xiaomi.

It's not impossible to send a girl's Apple phone.

The key is, just know and send it, and you are not a local tyrant?

"Ah, I was negligent, I asked you to buy it on your behalf, and I didn't give you money. Huang Rong quickly clicked on the "gift" column, paid 1 Jiayuan coin as postage, and sent the physical object to Li Yuntao.

"Ding Dong, Huang Rong sent you a gift, do you accept it?"

A message pops up.

"Yes!" Li Yuntao clicked to accept, and after that, he saw a gold leaf, a book, and a porcelain bottle in front of him.

"Did you get it?" asked Huang Rong.

"Got it!" Li Yuntao said.

Gold leaf should be regarded as a hard currency, and at present, the domestic gold price is about 270 yuan per gram. This piece of gold leaf should have tens of grams, and it is more than enough to buy an Apple 8.

As for the porcelain bottle, Li Yuntao opened it and smelled it, there was a smell of medicine, it might be the medicine practiced by Huang Yaoshi.

That book made Li Yuntao feel a little interested, it was actually Huang Yaoshi's mastery "Lingao Step", which was a superior light skill created by Huang Yaoshi.

The most rare thing is that this light skill is actually both internal and external. As long as you practice according to the light exercises, you will gradually accumulate internal strength.

Of course, this also depends on talent, without the talent of those young heroes in the martial arts world, even if you get the magic cheats, you may be stuck at this level of entry.

"It's good to receive it, the gold is a deposit for you, and the medicine is Jiuhua Yulu Pill, taking it not only has a blood circulation and veins, but also has a miraculous effect on bruises and internal injuries. Moreover, it also has the effect of prolonging life and assisting in the cultivation of internal forces. Huang Rong said, "There are 9 in the bottle, each of which can withstand a month's penance and internal strength." People who have a foundation in internal strength, combined with medicine, should practice "Lingao Step" to get started. ”

"Thank you for the gift, I will buy what you want soon!" Li Yuntao said, "But, then again, you are an ancient person, what do you want a mobile phone for?"

"Of course, it's used to visit Wanjie Jiayuan.com!" Huang Rong couldn't help but doubt Li Yuntao's IQ, "Although the system can access the website in your own consciousness, if you operate it consciously, it will do too much harm to your body." And the OPPO mobile phone I use now is not only high price and low configuration, but also the battery life is not good. After a few charges, I collapsed. There was a foreigner named Grandpa Qiao who asked me to change apples. It's just that I can't contact Grandpa Qiao recently, so I'll ask you to buy it!"

Wait a minute......

That Grandpa Joe.

It can't be Steve Jobs?!