In a blink of an eye, August 15 is approaching, and Shi Xiangyun was also taken to Rongguo Mansion by his aunt and grandmother Jia to celebrate the festival.

After greeting Jia's mother first, Xiangyun went to Daiyu's room to talk to her.

Zijuan Snow Goose was not there, and she didn't know what to do, so Xiangyun sneaked in to scare Daiyu.

Quietly pushed the door in, but saw Daiyu reading the pages of paper at the table, frowning and thinking for a while from time to time.

Xiangyun tiptoed over, and suddenly patted Daiyu's fragrant shoulder and said, "Bah! And what to see! ”

Daiyu was startled, and the manuscripts in her hands were scattered.

Only then did he see that it was Xiangyun, patted his chest and said, "You dead girl, are you going to scare me to death!" ”

Xiangyun smiled: "Where is it really scared to death?" Sister Lin, what are you looking at? ”

Daiyu hurriedly picked up the manuscripts scattered on the ground and said, "It's nothing! ”

Where is Xiangyun willing to believe, picked up a page and read: "Mirror Flower Yuan? What is it? Is it a new story written by Brother Lu? ”

"It's not! Don't be blind! Daiyu snatched it and grabbed the rest indiscriminately.

"Hey, Sister Lin, what are you doing here? You look crumpled, don't you? "Xiangyun is not good at snatching it from her, for fear that it will be torn.

Daiyu didn't care about it, so she sorted out the manuscript and hid it behind her.

Xiangyun looked at Daiyu with an expression of being caught doing something bad, and asked with a grin, "What the hell is it, can't you show it to me?" ”

Daiyu said angrily: "Phew! You girl is getting more and more unruly, and she doesn't knock when you come in! ”

Xiangyun didn't seem to hear it, and lowered his voice and asked, "Is there something like that in the new story written by Third Brother Lu?" ”

Dai Yuqiao's face turned red: "Phew! What kind of thing? I don't understand! You want to see you find your own way, and the third brother is going! ”

"What the hell is that? Can't show me yet? ”

couldn't help Xiangyun pestering again and again, Daiyu had to say, "Yes...... I'm scribbling a ...... to play."

"Huh? Sister Lin wrote it? You'll have to show me! Xiangyun was even more energetic when he heard this.

"Also...... I can't say I wrote it, it's ......"

Daiyu told her how Jia Lu fooled her to write about the mirror flower.

Jia Lu dropped the outline and the outline and went to study in the Guozi Prison, Baoyu didn't know what was crazy, and he didn't come to Daiyu's house much in recent days, I heard that he hid in his house all day long.

Therefore, Daiyu was also clean during this time.

After thinking about it for a long time, she finally started to write, but after writing it, she looked at herself and was not satisfied, so she inevitably secretly burned and rewrote.

In this way, it took two months to write three chapters.

Today, thinking that Jia Lu Bacheng will return to Rongguo Mansion for the Mid-Autumn Festival holiday, if he comes to find himself, he will pretend to be seen by him inadvertently, and then let him take a look and listen to his opinion.

Unexpectedly, Jia Lu didn't come, but he waited for Xiangyun.

Xiangyun listened to Daiyu's words and wanted to watch it even more, so he hugged Daiyu's arm and shook it:

"Good sister, didn't you write it out just to show people?

Could it be that it was written to be pressed into a box waiting for rats to bite and eat insects?

I've read a few books, so I can help you see the good and the bad, right? ”

Daiyu had no choice but to say: "If you see it, you can't go outside and talk nonsense!" Otherwise, do you think I will ignore you? ”

Xiangyun hurriedly assured that Daiyu gave the manuscript to Xiangyun with some reluctance.

Xiangyun hurriedly took it in his hand and read it, and finished reading the three chapters in less than a cup of tea.

"Anything else?" Xiangyun looked unsatisfied.

"No, just these three chapters ......"

Seeing that she had worked hard to write the manuscript for two months, and was read by Xiangyun after dividing it by two, Daiyu still felt a little uncomfortable in her heart.

Xiangyun looked at it carefully again and then said: "It's a good writing, but it's a pity that it just started, and it's not enjoyable to read!"

Sister Lin, would you like to tell me about it first? ”

Speaking of this, he hesitated for a moment and said: "Hey, don't talk about it, I'm waiting to see what you write is interesting, Sister Lin, you have to write it quickly!"

If I really write three chapters in two months, I'm afraid I won't be able to finish writing it until I become an old woman! ”

"This ...... Really interesting to write? Lin Daiyu looked at Xiangyun's eyes and asked.

She still doesn't think the three chapters are well written.

"Naturally interesting! Can I still lie to you? ”

As he was talking, he heard Jia Lu's voice outside: "Is Sister Lin in the house?" ”

Daiyu was a little nervous, and subconsciously wanted to put away the manuscript and hide it again.

Xiangyun smiled: "Why do you want to hide it again?" Didn't you say that you want to let the third brother Lu take a look? ”

Because he said outside: "Third Brother Lu, Sister Lin is in the house, she said please come in and talk." ”

Daiyu gritted her teeth and twisted it around Xiangyun's waist, but Jia Lu had already come in with a smile: "Ouch, Big Sister Shi is here too?"

Shi Xiangyun smiled and blessed: "Third Brother Lu, I haven't seen you for a long time, but it's good~"

Jia Lu had already seen the manuscript in Daiyu's hand, and after greeting Xiangyun for a few words, he stretched out his hand and said, "But how many chapters have you written?" Hurry up and show me~"

Daiyu said a little twisted: "I always feel that the writing is not very good...... I want to change it again......"

In the end, he still gave the manuscript to Jia Lu.

Jia Lu looked at it carefully and asked, "Is there anything else?" ”

"No, only three chapters were written......"

Jia Lu shook his head and smiled bitterly: "It's good, it's good, it's just that it's too slow." ”

Daiyu said: "Third Brother Lu doesn't need to coax me, where is the writing good, I just feel that I am not this material." ”

Jia Lu said, "What are these words? Why is it not good? Sister Yun, have you also watched it? Do you think it's good? ”

"Naturally, it's good, I also urged Sister Lin to write it quickly!" Xiangyun followed.

Daiyu didn't look like they were casually perfunctory, so she believed it a little.

Jia Lu said: "But I want to give Sister Lin some advice, I don't know if my sister is willing to listen?" ”

Daiyu said: "Third Brother Lu, please speak." ”

Jia Lu said: "I know that Sister Lin is the most poetic, and several poems in these three chapters are also very well written.

It's just a script, in the end, everyone listens to a story, not a poem.

Sister Lin doesn't need to put too much thought into this. ”

Daiyu said, "Where's the good?" You don't have to think much about this kind of poem, you can write a thousand! ”

Jia Lu smiled and said, "How good it would be if you could share some of Sister Lin's talents in poetry?" When I was taking exams, I was worried about writing poetry. ”

Daiyu smiled and said, "I don't know those poems." Third Brother Lu, don't interrupt, what else is wrong with the writing? ”

Jia Lu thought for a moment and said, "It's not good, it's not good, it's just a little trick you can try." ”

Daiyu Xiangyun asked at the same time, "What technique?" ”

Jia Lu smiled: "It's best to leave a buckle at the end of each chapter, commonly known as Kavin!" In this way, it can attract people to look down, right? ”

Daiyu frowned and said, "Isn't this deliberately hanging people's appetites?" How do you keep this? ”

Jia Lu said: "It's just that don't finish talking halfway, I always want people to scratch their ears and cheeks and want to know what will happen next."

For example, when you listen to those storytellers, don't you always add: 'Predict what will happen next, and listen to the next breakdown'? ”

Jia Luzheng was explaining to the two, but he heard Baoyu shouting outside: "Sister Lin! Sister Cloud! Are you all together? ”

"I Have a Catalogue of Ghosts and Gods"