At this point, even if the first volume is officially finished, I will make a summary.

Originally, in my outline, the plot of the first volume was 200,000 words, and through 200,000 words to portray the characters and describe the appearance of the entire Star Luo City.

But fanfiction that doesn't fit the original book will make people lose the motivation to read it, and many people who read fanfiction just change the original book to see the protagonist change the original book and write the original book into something different.

So when I got to chapter thirteen or fourteen, I decided to speed up the progress and delete many plot plots, so when I read the whole first volume, I felt that the pace was very bad, and the progress was too fast in many places, and there was a lack of detailed portrayal.

In my original plan, the overall tone of the first volume was tragedy and depression, it was to lead to the goal of the protagonist, but it was not very pleasant to write this way, so I changed the second half of the entire first volume to a climactic outburst, and the original end of the first volume was only tragedy, pure tragedy, and the protagonist was only one of them.

I had three goals before I wrote the first volume, and as long as I achieved these goals, the first volume would be considered a success.

The first goal is to lead to the protagonist's pursuit in this life, what he wants to do, the process must be very soft and smooth, from the confusion when he first came to this world to the later establishment of the goal, the process must be smooth enough to make people read, not abrupt, not contradictory.

Looking at it now, 100,000 words to complete this goal is still too far-fetched, and it feels strange that there is not enough plot support. But the first goal can be regarded as complete.

The second goal is to portray several prominent figures, which must stand up, stand alive. The roles I originally chose were Old Man Lu, Huo Yun'er, Huo Yuhan, the rickshaw driver, and those refugees.

But because of the cut plot and word count, many things can only be abandoned, resulting in many characters not even having a sense of existence.

Huo Yun'er's overall plot is cut off, I originally wanted to portray a tragic character, a standard female image of feudal oppression, and a mother image. But the former was almost completely cut off, leaving only the latter.

The image of Old Man Lu is the standard image of a small citizen, a low-level soul master, a little money, loves to brag, likes to drink and gamble, the image of this character is reflected in many places, but because many plots are not directly involved, the portrayal is also very unsuccessful.

The image of the rickshaw driver and the refugee is that of a civilian struggling in the Douluo Continent. Most of my portrayals of them are directly extracted from the most important factors, and all other aspects are discarded.

I like to write about the characters in certain details, such as the refugee scene, I don't directly describe what happened that day, I just let the reader deduce through the reactions of these refugees.

The refugees' fear of vehicles, their fear of entering hotels, and the dirt between their fingernails are all portrayed from the side. As for Huo Yun'er, judging from her behavior and dress, her daughter was wearing brand new clothes with some fine stitches, and she was wearing patched clothes.

Here to write about Huo Yun'er's love for her daughter, she can get cloth to carefully make clothes for her daughter, as well as sachets she made herself.

However, this kind of writing is very unpleasant and unsuccessful, and it takes a lot of time to guess the person's mental state, living environment, and what kind of appearance he should be in this social field, what kind of clothes he should wear, and what kind of face he should have.

If, after reading the whole volume, you remember a certain person and what kind of characteristics he has, then I am considered a little successful.

Especially Old Man Lu, if I have a little feeling about Old Man Lu's death after reading the entire first volume, even if I succeed a little bit, if I don't have it at all, it means that I have completely failed.

In the next volume, I may use a different way of writing to portray the characters, or I may not bother to portray the characters through the details, and just tell the story well, so that there will be more updates.

The third goal, to portray the entire Star Luo City, must have two attitudes, prosperity and splendor on the bright side, and dirtiness and pain in the corner.

At present, this is a little more successful, at least you can see the two diametrically opposed appearances of Xingluo City.

Overall, the first volume was a failure, and none of the three goals were achieved perfectly, so in the second volume of the story, I will try to change the way of writing and learn some new ways of writing.

Next, let's talk about the shortcomings of the first volume, and each of them that is not done well.

First of all, the author will not write the golden three chapters, which is the so-called necessary things for signing a contract, so there is a high probability that this book will not be signed, and the author is purely for love.

My writing can't highlight the characteristics of the same people at all.,Most of the people in Douluo Douren are here to see the pure cool.,It's to see the novel martial soul and the protagonist blast everything in the original book.。

However, I can't write this kind of thing, because my positioning of the first volume is the process of the protagonist from the confused period to finding the goal, and there can't be too many refreshing clips in this process, just the accumulation of tragedies one by one, and changing his mind in a depressing atmosphere.

In order to improve the reader's experience, I can only cut out most of the plot and release the entire depressing tone of the first volume at the end, so that readers can read it more comfortably, after all, there are not many readers, so I still have to cherish it.

And the author will not throw the whole novel martial soul to the surface, there are some important foreshadowings in it, so in the entire first volume, about the two martial spirits, it seems that there is no sense of existence, and directly dissuades readers who are interested in the novel martial soul.

Moreover, the author's first volume is too long, even if it is only 100,000 words, it is too long, too detached from the plot, and it also dissuades a large number of people.

The author does not break the chapter, and each chapter wants to write a complete subplot, which leads to the reader's lack of anticipation and attraction to read on.

Let's talk about the author's writing, the author's writing is too vulgar and pompous, and many places are stacked with meaningless adjectives. The best thing to hear is to imitate the legacy of Bingxin, and the bad thing is to commit a literary disease. The writing is not concise enough, and many places are water word counts.

However, the author's level cannot reach the kind of precise and concise writing, and can only be piled up with adjectives to make the article look not so innocent and not so unsightly.

After talking about the shortcomings, let's talk about the general structure of the whole book, as well as the answers to some doubts.

The value of a literary work lies not in its pure literariness, but in the ideas it conveys.

There are no purely literary works in the world, even in the last century, many works that claim to be purely literary and do not contain any ideas contain ideas.

Man creates a literary work, and the literary work itself is limited by the nature of man, and the product of thinking must have been processed by the mind and limited by man himself, even if it is a work that claims to be purely literary.

These people, or writers, always claim that they are simply freeing their minds, that their minds are free, and that they do not imply any class.

But what about the pure free mind there? Any person's thinking is limited by his social class, political form, life experience, life understanding, state system, and so on.

Literary works have been strongly marked with the mark of a writer since birth, and he is the symbolic embodiment of the writer's spiritual form.

So, let's take a look at online literature, what kind of ideas does it contain.

The ideological values within online literature are almost all pure little bourgeois thought supremacy.

This is the case with our common fantasy novels, where the author symbolizes the contradictions of real life into the world of fantasy novels. The worldview of the entire fantasy novel is described as an alienated jungle society.

It seems that the people here are not human, they are just monkeys who have no enlightened mind, they don't understand what is called the desire to explore, what is called the understanding of the world.

They don't even have the slightest progressiveness, they don't even embody the resistance and freedom of man.

Their focus is often on the one protagonist, the child of destiny, the lucky one who can break the barriers.

It gives people illusions and tells people that the world is like this, that other people are strong and rich because they work as hard as the protagonist of the novel, and that the world is like a jungle society, where the weak are eaten by the strong.

Wake up, this damn social Darwinism has been torn apart, crumpled, and criticized and rotten by generations, and even the essence is clearly analyzed.

As for the other kind of entertainment literature, that is, the extreme alienation of people, the only idea it conveys is the alienation of money from people, and people's thirst for money.

I can only say that it is very realistic, but it is also very unreasonable, and I do not deny that this kind of thinking can develop rapidly in the commodity economy even without dissemination.

I can't deny that there are also excellent works in online literature, such as the red dawn, a typical high and low walk, and made many mistakes in the later period, which is too imperial tendency, but it is also undeniable that he was excellent in the early stage.

The author's values are normal and correct, I will only write what I think and agree with, so the author can't and won't write something that doesn't meet my ideas, and I'm disgusted to look at it myself.

Finally, I would like to make a reply to some readers who have commented on certain comments.

First of all, suppose you have crossed over, your crossing is very dull, you have come to a real Douluo Continent, and the civilian life here is like this, miserable and difficult.

Secondly, you don't necessarily have any golden fingers, you are just an ordinary person, you came to this world, your parents are civilians, and the probability that you can gradually martial arts is less than one percent.

It just so happens that you are the lucky one, you are a genius, a genius like no other in ten thousand, you can cultivate martial spirits. So, is it the Virgin that you have sympathy and sympathy for the common people?

If you don't have this kind of feeling, you are just the lucky one, you are from a commoner's background, and then once you ascend to heaven and think that sympathy for the common people is the Virgin? Didn't you put down the bowl and scold your mother?

Secondly, some people believe that even a commoner can get ahead in this turbulent world, talk about what kind of business, what kind of economy, and become rich.

Please, you keep saying that I want to take a closer look at a certain huge book on macroeconomics written by Mr. Ma, but you don't know anything about it.

This kind of thinking of yours is completely in this social environment, and you take it for granted that it is also applicable in the social environment of Douluo Continent.

You think this way simply because under the development of the productive forces, mankind has stepped into the era of capital, in which money and power violence are equivalent, the economy is the basis of violence, and money and power violence are reciprocal.

And is it applicable here in Douluo Continent? This world is a world of extreme individual heroism, where a powerful individual can sweep through everything, nothing can restrain him, no fragile flesh and advanced technology, no cannons and gunpowder.

If my book is a world view of Dou San or Dou Si (I haven't read Dou Si, I don't know what kind of world it is, but I feel that it should be more developed), you can be forgiven for saying this.

After all, the soul guide has been fully developed, and the commodity economy and the form of money have also been developed, where money can almost be equated with violence and power.

But this is Douer, this is feudalism, there is no developed technology here, and there are no measures that can directly convert money into violence.

Hey, tired

All in all, thank you to everyone who reads the book, and my words above are not sarcastic and scolding to those who comment, but answers, because of some sensitive mechanisms, my comments can't be posted, so I can only answer them through this single chapter.

Thank you all for reading my book, and thank you to everyone who gave your opinion, and thank you to everyone who commented.

If you are really interested in the above things, you can go to the original book, and you can take a look at Elder En's anti-Duhring theory about violence and money.

Finally, thank you again to every reader who reads my book, every reader who reviews. Thank you for your support and keeping me going for so long.