Whether a person is beautiful or not is generally rarely disputed.

Because the human standard for defining beauty and ugliness is relatively different, there is not so much difference.

Whether a script is good or not, there will be a lot of controversy.

People who like it feel that there is only one in the sky and on the earth, try to find it, and can always find the point they like from it, and then blow it up!

People who don't like it think it's just a piece of shit, and if they want to pick thorns, they can always pick out some, so angry that the author jumps to his feet.

The point is, this thing is very different.

Everyone has their own set of judging criteria, and they don't agree with others' judging criteria.

Alain's script format is quite standard, it seems that he has worked hard, Ni Bingyan has no language troubles, and it looks very fast.

The story is simple, a little boy misses his father, a story about love and peace.

Mom always took Adrian to the bank to withdraw money, and every time he withdrew money, he would tell him that Dad was working hard in a distant place, and it was really hard to support us!

Adrian was still held in his mother's arms when he appeared, and slowly, he began to learn to walk, and later, he grew to the height of his mother's shoulders.

He always asked, why didn't Dad come back?

Mom would make all kinds of excuses and tell him that there were all kinds of difficulties in the family, and Dad had to work so hard to support the family.

At first, he believed it and was proud of his father, and often patted his chest and assured his mother that he would become a person like his father when he grew up, and would work hard for the happiness of his family.

Mom looked at him with tears in her eyes every time, nodded her head and said yes.

When Adrian grew up, he was not so good, and he began to know how to think, so he would ask his mother:

"What does Dad do? Why doesn't he work in our city? ”

Mom told him that Dad worked on a sea boat and traveled the world every day.

He believed it at first, until he heard from his classmates that her father, who was a seafarer, was finally going to take another vacation.

Adrian felt very uneasy, and found his mother again on his birthday, and persistently asked why his father didn't take a vacation?

He kept begging for an answer, until he was a big boy, and his mother told him:

"Dear Adrian, you are old now, I have to tell you that your father, when you were one year old, died because of the war, every time your mother took you to the bank, she took the pension from the government, and they will raise you in place of your father until you are an adult."

Although he had a foreboding premonition in his heart, Adrian still cried silently when he knew the news.

He covered his face and ran breathlessly to the bank door in the afterglow of the setting sun along the stone-paved alleys of the seaside town.

He was going to ask the people in the bank whether his mother had brought him to get the pension all these years, or if his father had sent him money back from afar.

But when he walked to the door of the bank, he did not dare to go in.

At the end of the story, it is open-ended, and in the last scene, Adrian is standing in front of the bank, and the night slowly engulfs him.

After thinking carefully, Ni Bingyan opened his mouth and praised: "The idea is very good, war will destroy peace, and it will also destroy ordinary families, so that children will lose their fathers......"

Alain's eyes visibly gleeed, and then he looked at her with an encouraging expression, hoping that she would say more.

"A happy childhood can warm a lifetime, but an unhappy childhood needs a lifetime to heal, and the last scene, I think it's really great, if it's in the cinema, it will be very tear-jerking."

"Yes! In my imagination, this scene is the place where the whole short film is sublimated, leaving a lot of room for imagination and visual impact. ”

"You can choose a beautiful seaside town to shoot, the sunset has a special atmosphere, and the beauty of the picture can add a lot of points."

"Yes, yes, yes! I thought so too! ”

After Ni Bingyan read the script, his biggest feeling was that the story line was too simple, there were too few characters, and it was a bit thin to support a complete movie.

She had to fill it with something, but she couldn't say, "I think ......."

When the writer seems to humbly ask for the opinions of others, he usually has only one purpose, and that is to prove that he is right, not to really want to hear whose ideas he thinks.

Ni Bingyan began to discuss the plot with him from the beginning, guiding him to think about various details in the script repeatedly.

"What does Adrian's mom do? Easy or hard? Are there any elderly people in the family? Is her burden heavy? Does the money she goes to the bank every month matter to her family? ”

Alain was a little confused at first: "I didn't think about it. ”

"That's a really pity, when I imagine the role of my mother, it's hard to have a three-dimensional image in my mind."

"It should be a lot better to add some profiles."

Alain took another laptop and opened it, and began to crackle and refine his thoughts.

He is a meticulous and lonely person, he can meticulously polish jewelry for a week, and he can ponder the script repeatedly for a long time.

It's rare to find a friend with good taste to discuss with him, and he thinks it's good.

"How can Adrian's dad be more three-dimensional? If his sense of existence could be stronger, when the truth was told by his mother, it would definitely be even more tear-jerking. ”

"Maybe I can try to deepen the portrayal of war? Dad's identity can also be more specific. War is so cruel that no one will like it......"

Seeing Alan enter the state, he hugged the notebook and changed it, Ni Bingyan also opened a document and recorded his thoughts and thoughts.

For example, in Adrian's growing environment, was he bullied by other children? Did he go when other children went on trips? Other children are holding their father's hand and walking on the road, is he very envious?

[He unconsciously followed his classmate Amon and his father, watching them walk away holding hands and walking away, standing on the street and looking around blankly, but he didn't know where to go.] ]

This story is really great, now Alan is busy, Ni Bingyan has nothing to do, so he wrote down some of his thoughts, hoping to bring a little inspiration to Alain.

[Mom kept following him, and when he turned around and walked home in disappointment, he saw his mother standing next to a cluster of roses representing longing with tears in her eyes, looking at him tenderly, and waving gently to him. When he walked to his side, he gently touched his head and said angrily, "Why is it so late?" I've been looking for it for a long time." ]

Ni Bingyan was poked by the imaginary picture, and tears appeared in his eyes unconsciously.

When she was young, she fantasized countless times that her mother secretly watched her on her way from school, and when she found out, she smiled at her gently:

"Classmate, are you lost? Why don't you go home? ”

Alan was excited to change the script, and when he saw her bow her head and wipe her tears, she couldn't help but snicker, feeling that her script was successful at the same time, she was a little embarrassed.

"Hey, I thought it was pretty good before, but as soon as you said it, I felt that there were still a lot of things that could be improved, this is a big project, I have to wait for you to go and then slowly revise it, and you have to give me advice again."

"I'm sorry, I was just moved by the imaginary image, you are really great, Alain, you can write such a good script, you are a natural screenwriter! I'm looking forward to the final product, to seeing it at the festival, and really, for a moment, I even thought that if it was made into an animated short film, it would be enough to apply for an Oscar! ”

"Oh! Oh! Oh, my God! To stay calm, I think we should go to dinner now, and I'll have to talk to you later! ”

"No problem! It's a pleasure to witness you unlock your new identity, Mr. Alain, the screenwriter. ”

Alan was so excited by what she said, he covered his heart exaggeratedly: "God, next time anyone tells me, Orientals are very reserved, I will strangle him directly!" ”

Ni Bingyan waved his hand: "I'm just telling the truth, this story touches me very much in details, even if you haven't really finished it yet." ”

Can Alain say that he has changed it eighty times, and this is the final draft?

No, of course not!

He felt that he still had room for improvement!