Hello Pippi, I've been reading this one you've written, and I love it. During this time, I have also accumulated some opinions and suggestions, and I hope to put them forward and communicate with you.

First of all, thank you to Master Pippi for bringing such a wonderful film to everyone.

In terms of subject matter, this film is based on Pro Evolution Soccer, but the content is not limited, beyond the game itself, it can be described as a novel and unique theme. The description of the live itself is also on point, and for those of us who are used to playing live with a controller, it really looks like a sight to behold. In the scene of the confrontation between the middle and high masters, the passion of the duel between himself and his friends arises spontaneously, but there is a kind of "bystander clear" mentality, which may be like the sentence behind "blood red", "it is better than a drunk life"! This greatly resonates with the reader, and it can be seen that even though Pipsqueak is not a master of live action, he does play his own thing from the live situation.

In terms of technique, echoing, foreshadowing, suspense and other techniques are mostly used, which greatly mobilizes the curiosity of readers, and also makes the plot twists and turns, ups and downs, and suspense. Whenever you go to the key places, there will always be accidents, although it is unpleasant, but it is also evocative. But there is a saying that "beauty is not in the quantity but in the degree", I hope that the author will not use this technique too much, and can push through the old and bring forth the new, and the overflowing things are always boring.

In terms of style, the author has been committed to bringing the dynamic game to life on paper, and has also achieved good results. Many places are also very poetic, and the names of the battle handle and the special move are also very atmospheric! But some places are indeed a bit single, and some netizens have also put forward it, hoping that Pippi will improve. There is also a description of the battle. Indeed, this is a dilemma. Too many technical terms and keys will be boring, too popular obviously distorted to satisfy the appetite of many players, how to find a balance between the two, is indeed a problem left to the author! But I think it is not an explanation, and the majority of readers will understand.

In terms of content, the character portrayal of the protagonist Su Xiaoyang is very good, introverted, inferior, but with a strong desire to survive and refusing to admit defeat...... At the same time, Lin Xiao, who is good at psychological warfare, Chu Tian, who seems to be a bit strong and capable, Chu Xiaoxiao, who is playful and cute, who is afraid of loneliness, and Liu Bingbing, who is indifferent and resentful...... The portrayal of these characters is just as distinctive. Maybe you don't necessarily like every character in it, but you can always find the character you like! But for the third person, it is not so easy to describe a person's psychology, I hope the author is not limited to direct description, try more side descriptions such as demeanor and details, and portray the characters in a multi-level and three-dimensional way, which will produce better results.

Structurally, I think the structure is a little loose and not compact enough. There are some places where the time span is a bit large, or not very reasonable, and I hope the author will pay attention.

The above is purely a personal opinion, and I hope that Master Pippi will laugh at it ^_^

This book was first published from 17K, the first time to see the genuine content!