Thank you for the book review, I am very encouraged by the many words of encouragement in private, thank you.

Although the heroes are far away with the rivers and lakes, there are still people carrying knives here

-------- Commentary on "Romance and Snow Righteousness"

Commentator: Stunning smoke willow

Link to the work: http://www.17k.com/book/2436417.html

Chapters Read: 1~~13

Comment: The structure is grand and the battle is overwhelmed

Number of words: more than 2100 words

Idle talk one

It is said that people who like to write romance novels have a more delicate mind, people who like to write mystery novels have a wiser mind, people who like to write fantasy have a more elegant temperament, and people who like to write martial arts have a more bold mind...... Although it cannot be generalized, there is some truth to it.

It seems that the author should be a man of great heart.

Topic 2

A. Title of the book

Better.

A decent martial arts book title.

"Style" should refer more to the meaning of: love like the wind, coming and going elegantly, chic and free.

"Snow righteousness" should also refer to: righteousness like snow, crystal clear, spotless.

Love is my affection, righteousness is my righteousness, you can drink blood, you can get drunk, you can sing, you can cry bitterly.

B. Cover

Better.

White snow, green edge, red cloak, eye-catching, majestic

C. Introduction

General, general.

Perhaps this has something to do with the author's conception and preservation of the current novel.

D. Text

1. Writing

The author's writing can be described as the best among today's Internet writers, which is better than the writing of most gods, which shows that he is a person who has read books a lot, especially in martial arts such as Jin Yong's novels, and must have read a lot carefully.

2. Rhetoric

Although countless writers don't care about rhetoric at all, and the use of Mao is nothing more than "metaphor, description, and borrowing", it can be seen that the author has put a lot of effort into it.

Reading the author's novel, there is indeed a feeling of brilliant writing, that is because the author not only has a broad vision and is comprehensive, but also has many rhetorical devices and a large number of words, which makes the novel seem so colorful and wonderful.

3. Plot cohesion

Novels are all connected by a plot, and the connection between plots is sometimes a big problem.

The connection is not good, such as a fish in the throat, not vomiting and unhappy.

But every plot of the author is well connected and done in one go, even if it is foreshadowing, it is logical. I admire it!

4. Characters

The characters are on the field and in an orderly manner. Even if it wasn't lifelike, it was roughly outlined—perhaps because I've only read a dozen chapters.

6. Fallacies with the pen of one person.

a. Quote the original sentence: The autumn wind is bleak, and the cold wind sweeps away the loneliness and gloom. ”

It is already "the autumn wind is desolate", and "the cold wind sweeps away the loneliness and gloom." ”

Personally, I think: painting snakes is enough.

b. Quoting the original sentence: "An ancient road winds like a long snake into the distance, and ends abruptly from the city gate." ”

"An ancient road winds like a long snake into the distance"

The perspective should be on this side of the city, looking into the distance.

"It came to an abrupt end at the city gates. ”

The perspective should be from a distance towards the city.

Personally, I think: since "reaching into the distance", why "stop abruptly from the city gate".

c. Chapter 7, there are several places in the "Sword Spectrum to Warward Off Evil Spirits".

There are a lot of such minor faults, perhaps because the author revises them more frequently, and it is not a big deal. (Count me as nitpicking, don't blame.) ）

E. Recommendations

1. It is enough to be able to accurately express the meaning of a sentence, and too much rhetoric is self-defeating. This half is also attributed to the 1 7K layout of the handwriting is too small, a little more than a few words, it makes people have visual fatigue.

2. Remove some unnecessary characters or lines, condense pig's feet, and even if you portray the characters well and are reluctant to kill. (I guess it won't work.) ）

3. Stick to it, keep it up, keep it going. 6. Fallacies.

a. Quote the original sentence: The autumn wind is bleak, and the cold wind sweeps away the loneliness and gloom. ”

It is already "the autumn wind is desolate", and "the cold wind sweeps away the loneliness and gloom." ”

Personally, I think: painting snakes is enough.

b. Quoting the original sentence: "An ancient road winds like a long snake into the distance, and ends abruptly from the city gate." ”

"An ancient road winds like a long snake into the distance"

The perspective should be on this side of the city, looking into the distance.

"It came to an abrupt end at the city gates. ”

The perspective should be from a distance towards the city.

Personally, I think: since "reaching into the distance", why "stop abruptly from the city gate".

c. Chapter 7, there are several places in the "Sword Spectrum to Warward Off Evil Spirits".

There are a lot of such minor faults, perhaps because the author revises them more frequently, and it is not a big deal. (Count me as nitpicking, don't blame.) ）

Concluding remarks three

I read thirteen chapters, I feel that the structure is grand, there are many characters, and there are many lines, and each character must have a certain role in the future, which is not easy to control, and these thirteen chapters may be just an "introduction", the real story has not yet begun, and there are many characters to be included in the book, therefore, without Mr. Jin Yong's ability, it is difficult to write down.

I thought: even if I can't pit myself for the time being, the more difficult it is to write later, and the more I will pit myself, because I have to fill the hole!

If you upload it without a large number of manuscripts, it is to add endless troubles to yourself, as if you have fallen into the quagmire, although you can't get up, you can still breathe, convulsions twice, and you are not willing to give up.

It stands to reason that he has already signed a contract and is just waiting to be put on the shelves, but he knows best how many manuscripts or plot ideas the author has.

A novel with such a grand structure, if it weren't for the accumulation and good manuscripts, it would really make people sleep and eat, and they would be anxious!

Moreover, in recent years, martial arts novels have been declining, although there seem to be one or two great gods who are opening new books in martial arts, that is because they have a large number of fans in hand, and they are not afraid of not being able to sell, but the results are just good or bad, and after all, they can't turn the tide and support the heavens.

This can't help but remind me of Don Quixote or the Overlord of Western Chu, the former is witty, the latter is tragic.

I wish the author to be full of talent, think like a spring, and stick to his dreams.

Although the heroes go far away from the rivers and lakes, there are still knife-carrying people here.

Do it and cherish it.

Stunning Smoke Willow 2016•6•16