The out-of-print textbook in Xianxia Wen - looking at "Xianlu Smoke and Dust" from the perspective of online literature

by: Watermelon tourmaline

In a good work, readers will unnaturally slow down their reading speed and spend more time reading intensively and carefully, and appreciate the touching or shock brought to us by the author. To tell you the truth, I usually read a book of one million words, and it is easy to read it in one day, but this one has been reading for three days, and the progress has been stuck at 15%.

Writing a book review before reading the book feels a bit irresponsible, but as far as the plot I am watching so far, I have a little experience to share with you in addition to praise.

After reading the 150,000 words, I have an overall impression that is: accident. Yes, what other readers see is an antique, fresh and elegant beautiful text. And I think the reason why this book is a masterpiece and is recommended by too many people is largely due to the fact that there is a big gap between the characters and the plot and those books in the world that have not become popular. "Smoke and Dust on the Fairy Road" is red, not unreasonable.

Now, from the perspective I can think of, I will briefly make a comparison.

1. Beautiful beginnings VS ordinary beginnings

(In order to avoid the author feeling that he was shot while lying down, he will not mention other titles)

People who read books treat books a bit like blind dates, when they see a girl or a man, they see the first face, and the most attention must be the face. The first chapter of the book is like a person's face, whether you want to continue reading it or not, it all depends on the edge. The blind date is pleasing to the eye to understand the following, and the same is true for reading, the beginning is beautiful, and it will attract people to continue reading.

Look at the beginning of "Immortal Road":

"I implore the immortal chief to include the kid and list the door wall for the time being!"

"Your Excellency has no fate, and you have no chance with the fairy road. Please come back!"

"Woo woo woo ......"

"Please take me as an apprentice!"

"Poor Dao has nothing to do with you. ”

"Alas......"

"Dao Chief, how about accepting me as an apprentice?"

"The quota is full. ”

......

Such an opening can already kill a lot of articles of the same genre in seconds. Why do you say that? These dozens of words look simple, but they can be read with several meanings.

The first point is that this person who begs for adoption is not discouraged and knows how to persevere. Su Shi said well: Those who set up great things in ancient times not only have supernatural talents, but also have perseverance. An excellent protagonist will eventually succeed, and there must be outstanding traits in his personality that influence him. And a common problem in many Xianxia texts is that after ten chapters, they can't see what merits the protagonist has that is worthy of being cultivated into a generation of immortal masters. Describing a lot of scenery at the beginning or introducing a slightly new setting with a lot of ink is a flaw of many novels. In my opinion, the most important thing to do in the first ten chapters of Xianxia is to highlight the protagonist and show the character before unfolding the plot.

The second point can also be seen that the person who seeks immortals is a person who is knowledgeable and reasonable, and he is rejected and does not entangle.

Good attitude, polite people are likable everywhere they go. On the contrary, it is strange that those who feel that they have the spirit of a king, who have not learned any skills, who do not understand any manners, and who are blindly arrogant and arrogant, will be liked by readers. Of course, it is not necessary to be gentle and elegant in cultivating immortals, but if a protagonist can't find a trace of merit throughout the whole story, then the author really needs to write it?

A good protagonist is half the success of a book.

The third point is that it is not that the author opens through the flow of dialogue, but the effect is often unsatisfactory, largely because there are too many dialogues of the characters, and they are eager to convey all the background to the reader through simple dialogue, and hope that the difficulty and pain of describing the characters will be reduced by only dialogue. And the same dialogue flow, "Fairy Road" is concise and to the point, and the effect expressed is first-class. The beginning is concise and less nonsense, and it is right to say something.

Of course, there are factions in Xianxia texts, and if you have to learn from the author to write like this, there is no ink in your stomach, and you must be painting a tiger and not an anti-dog.

However, I feel that what I just said does not conflict with the style of the faction. The personality of the protagonist is something that every book emphasizes. An N...... 's protagonist, even if the plot of the book is good, it's for nothing.

Second, the ideas of the characters are different

Moving on to the character:

The family is not suspicious, self-reliance - born in an ordinary peasant family, the family is poor, but the parents still attach great importance to the child's character cultivation, looking for relationships everywhere to give their son a good name, worship a good teacher, born in such a family, quality education is very good, naturally will not be extreme. Before he had an adventure, he had been working hard to be a runner and make miscellaneous payments for Taoist priests to supplement his family.

Diligent and thrifty - highlighted in the section where Juying feeds the chickens with rice, although he is a distinguished guest, in the face of extravagance and waste, the teenager still expresses his dissatisfaction:

"Do you know what you give to the chickens? That's rice! My father went over the mountains and drilled the ditches, and had to catch a lot of prey before he could get to the city for a small bag of rice. These rice, my family is usually reluctant to eat, only when the guest comes to the mother will cook rice porridge. ”

......

"My mother picks wild vegetables and chops them up to eat, and even people are reluctant to eat this rice, so how can they still feed it to the chickens! In fact, it is really thanks to you, the last time I ate rice porridge. It was probably more than two months ago......"

Seeing this passage is both sad and shocking, I can feel the excitement of his mood. Caring for his parents and respecting labor, Brother Zhang's three views are very positive.

There are also smart and studious, respecting teachers, sticking to principles, brave and strategic, chivalrous and courageous, and pure in heart...... Zhang Xingyan said that these advantages, in ordinary books, how many things can the protagonist do?

In stark contrast, some books will be written like this: the family is poor, the protagonist wants to leave home, and when he meets a master who wants to hug his thighs, he will feel resentful and wait for an opportunity to take revenge; How hard work is performed, and there are few links that have finally succeeded in breaking through; Write at length about how wonderful the fairies you have encountered; Looking at him, he will one day make his sister kneel and beg for mercy, regretting that he looked down on people at the beginning......

Please, your parents don't owe you, your master doesn't owe you, and the unlucky heroine doesn't owe you, it's not terrible to have low self-esteem, it's terrible that you don't even know how to self-esteem, self-improvement and self-love, that's really a bad thing.

Let's talk about the female characters who are currently appearing, Li Xiaomei, who plays soy sauce, has no possibility of becoming the protagonist when she looks at her name, so she won't mention it. As far as Ju Ying, Lingyi'er, and Qiong Wei are concerned, is it also unique and distinctive? Qiong Wei brought me the most surprises, I thought it was a fox, but it turned out to be not, and the good-natured transformation of the cuteness felt very much like a slightly larger cat, and I always felt that she was saying: Qiong Wei brand young beast, you deserve it.

3. The plot settings are different

Judging from the current progress, the development of the story can be described in one word: stability.

opened a golden finger, which must be to let the protagonist digest it moderately, and then move on to the next one. When there is a master, he also gives one or two pointers, and the rest are self-taught, which really fits the sentence: "The master leads the door, and the cultivation is in everyone". You must know that there is no false on the road to becoming an immortal, and the author can only be temporary when he helps the protagonist cheat. When a girl came, she wrote a girl seriously, and the appearance of the girl was also to serve the plot and upgrade the protagonist.

It's not like the ordinary: the code baby is collected in one go, and the competition is decisive in killing and killing, and it can only fight; when I see the girl, the sperm is on the brain, and I can't walk on the road, and I just want to push it down, how to collect it......

The author's sincerity is reflected in the plot, we don't mention the kind of anti-heaven god who is good and fast, just talk about this book, and readers can still feel the steady and thick way to promote the development of the story.

Speaking of which, let's give two examples to confirm the difference between the plot settings of the author and the general author.

Example 1: When the road is uneven, clever ways to help

In the sixth chapter of the first volume, Li Daitao's stiff affair is more than Qili, the father and daughter of the medicine farmer in Dagushan were fraudulently robbed and imprisoned by the officials, seeing this, on the established thinking of the online article, thinking that the protagonist should shout: Slowly, he rushed forward to pretend to be 13, and reasoned with the facts for the bad guys, "Save" people out of the fire pit. Well, as it turns out, I was wrong, the protagonist still has a mind and chooses a way to solve the puzzle once and for all, with no aftermath. You must know that many people who draw their swords to help when they see injustice on the road are doing unlucky people a disservice, making the fate of those who are like duckweed even more miserable.

I really like the author's habit of explaining to the characters in his pen, whether it is Chen Banzhu, Lu Xianling or Rui Niang, since it takes time to write, arranging a good or bad ending can also inspire people. Especially the difference in the fates of Chen and Lu after the accident can still make readers feel emotional. Example 2: Chapter 6 of Volume 4 Riding away the smoke and dust, the Jiayuan Club in the heroic spirit of the young man in the spring shirt will be compared:

"Uh~ This Jiayuan will be a big competition, that is, once every three years, on the birthday of the Yuan Shi Tianzun, the head of the three Qings of my teaching, gather the three major gates in the world: Shangqing Palace, Miaohua Palace, and Tianshi Sect, all of which select outstanding disciples from the younger generation under the door, gather together, and hold two comparisons: a fighting method, and a talking about the scriptures. The contest of studying the scriptures and the righteousness is not enough, but the contest of Taoist spells is the most eye-catching. ”

"Well, I will also have to follow the elders in the door in the future and study the Dao art well - if the Dao method is a small achievement, I will also go to the big competition, and do my best to win face for our Shangqing Palace!"

......

"Don't you know - Brother Zhang Dao, you are the master of the 'Four Seas Hall'; in my Shangqing Palace, like the heads of the Chongde Hall and the Dharma Propagation Palace, you can be regarded as a Taoist Venerable - this, how can you re-enter the door of others to learn Taoism?"

"Huh?!"

"Not only that, but when it comes to that big competition, I'm afraid you'll still be one of the judges on that throne - it's really impossible to talk about this comparison!"

......

Here, I made the mistake of empiricism again, thinking that this time Brother Zhang must be going to participate in the big competition, using the flute to use the extra two chapters of spells, the tiger's body shook again and again, won the first place, and the table was full of surprises, and then got a lot of loot, cultivated and cultivated, and became an immortal. In this small plot, the author is not going to the ordinary path again, so after guessing wrong, he laughed, laughing that he really read less good books and was brainwashed too badly.

Being different in detail is also one of the ways to win the reader's favor, provided that the setting is reasonable. If Zhang Xiaoge, who has no background and has not been promoted to the head of the hall, becomes a judge of the big competition, you say, is this science? Will readers be scolded for being stupid......

In the end, the reason why "Smoke and Dust on the Fairy Road" was praised by many readers, in the words of a netizen: "The concept is stable, the text is meticulously crafted, and the pattern is orderly." The author uses the keyboard to describe an ethereal and secluded world of Xianxia, the book is an old book, and the advantages in it are worthy of reference by many authors. A book worth cherishing usually starts with the author's sincere management, and how can a familiar plot stand the test of time.

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