(Foreword)

First of all, if you can see this, Nagai is deeply honored. Thank you!

As a novice, insisting on updating is one of my own responsibilities, and I wrote 15w words, and many places may be like that, but I will try to do better.

(About Volume I)

Actually, I think it's too boring to do this again.,I guess no one will continue.,The plot is not compact.,But because it's a double male protagonist.,So you have to pave the way from all aspects to deal with the future development.。

As for the place where the pit was left, in order to prevent forgetting, basically every character or certain position, I will make a record in my own notebook, and the ending is also ready, and I think the ending should not be too bad.

In fact, the content of the first volume is actually very boring.,It's that the protagonist meets a nobleman.,And then recover your memory.,But it's also a favor.。

He wanted revenge, so he found the person who had helped him, and the other party was a big man, who clearly used him as a pawn, and the two of them took what they needed.

Originally, according to the arrangement, he could become stronger without worry, but for some reason, he thought that he had entered a place where he shouldn't have entered, and as a result, he had hidden dangers when he came back, so the other party recommended him to go to the Boundless School Palace.

For the big guy, it's actually very simple to help him deal with it, but what the other party wants is not an obedient Erha, so naturally he takes the opportunity to hone for him.

From another point of view, he is bent on revenge, so he basically doesn't give him any branch lines during the first volume, and even if he has it, he will ignore it.

So when Hua Xiaoyu secretly found a mountain bandit to test him, he would get angry, as for the reason, there is a bloody plot behind it, hehe!

Next, the acquaintance with the second male and others, the protagonist will be invisibly involved in various events by the people around him, and the branch lines will be enriched, but he is mostly in a passive state.

As for the protagonist setting, the first male protagonist is actually equivalent to a young man, after all, he is also twenty-five or sixteen, and he has been tortured by illness since he was a child, and he is actually equivalent to seeing many things.

In terms of personality, he was an optimistic person in the early stage, but because of the amnesia that he received, he didn't like to talk very much.

Slowly it became the feeling of social barriers, and it was also a small and transparent feeling in the crowd, with a very low sense of existence, and sometimes because I shared a part of the memory with Xiaoyu, the memory was confused, so the style of acting sometimes seemed abrupt.

is wary of people, and his sister Yun Kite is the first key to open the door of his heart, and there will be others after that. (I hope I won't be broken)

"Nonsense"

It's bad, but I still want to continue, although except for the confession of so many friends, basically no one will click on this book.

Everyone has had a dream, and my dream is in the world, right here, and I continue to do it.

At present, it seems that there are still many problems, so I would like to summarize a few points of encouragement.

1. Character building

The worst aspect has always been the mastery of the details of the characters, whether it is the image description or the emotional grasp, it is completely impossible to write the characteristics that should be written. Maybe maybe except for myself, basically no one will have an impression of such and such a character after watching it!

2. The plot connection is too messy.

I didn't write an outline, because I had a plan in my mind for the place, the world, that I wanted to depict.

So I've thought about every plot very seriously, but when it's written, there's still a feeling of inexplicability.

This also leads to the plot in many places, which looks like a stiff patchwork and has no logic.

3. Lack of choice of words and sentences

Many times, when describing a certain aspect of the word, it is obvious that you can usually have a lot of words at your fingertips, but when you really use it, there are only a few ordinary words, which is the most terrible.

Those who are interested may have noticed that I have repeated some of the descriptions several times, and the second volume will begin to improve.

So when I look at these things, I sometimes feel that although the characters appear a lot, they can't highlight everyone's settings, but they all look exactly the same, and this will slowly change.

4. The branch line arrangement is too few or even bland

Although he positions the protagonist as a person bent on revenge, I personally feel that he definitely doesn't like to be delayed in the process, but it also leads to character contradictions, conflicts, and these are not written with appropriate branches, and the plot seems very monotonous.

5. The timing is messy

In many places, in fact, it has been revised many times, because the grasp of time has become very vague, and the rationality of this time has been forgotten all of a sudden.

6. Not knowing what you're talking about

Writing and writing, I will always fall into a strange circle for some reason, and I don't even know what I want to say anymore, just like now!

......

There are many, many such things, and there are many shortcomings, so I don't have to worry about them all.

I like not to eat it as a meal, so I deserve to be hungry.

For me, it's nice to be recognized.

If one day, someone suddenly sends me a message: "Hey, you're awesome with this story!"

Well, I guess I'm going to be too excited to sleep.

In the past few days, I've been thinking about where the second volume of "Yunqi" should be launched and in what way, but several of them were not satisfied, and finally gave up, maybe this is the disadvantage of not having an outline.

But even so, I'm going to do my best to continue the story and keep telling these people in the way I like best.

It's not a good thing, but now, I'm facing not only a turning point in this story, but also another turning point in my own life.

Therefore, I can only introspect, the road is in front of me, the choice is my own, and I should be responsible for it in the end, so even if no one cares, I will be my most loyal reader.

There is too much nonsense, and in the end I am confused by myself, so let's stop here.

Continue to codewords and think about the new volume.

If someone is lucky enough to see it and happens to find a lot of unreasonable places, I hope they can tell me without hesitation, so that I have a chance to improve.

Thank you!

Serve it to you!