Today, I happened to see someone in Longkong post a paragraph about "Yang God", saying how JJ writes a book with momentum, 101 looked at it, and it was really full of emotion, very energetic! So 101's analysis of OCD flare up again, and when I chatted with the people in the group, I talked about the following dry goods. Pen "Fun" Pavilion www.biquge.info

Hey...... It's been cut down a little, let's make do with it! There's still a lot of dry goods in it!

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The 101st rejection (630268437) 23:48:16

"I only want to ask you, how did my mother die? Originally, I wanted to go to the Wuwen Marquis Mansion, or even to the imperial court, to ask you in person!"

Hong Yi faced Hong Xuanji, and finally vomited!

Back then, he was called into the main mansion by Hong Xuanji, and he only dared to make promises, which was the truth that the strength was not enough to support his heart! Now that he has the strength, he can face it directly! Speak freely!

In an instant, Hong Yi felt extremely happy!

"Hmm!"

Hearing Hong Yi's words, Hong Xuanji finally turned his body around and stood face to face with Hong Yi, and the two gathered more than two hundred steps, an arrow away.

Hong Xuanji turned around, and Hong Yi suddenly felt an invisible pressure, pressing on his spirit, and his heart gurgled as if he was about to be crushed.

At the same time, Hong Xuanji's "um", Hong Yi had a feeling of facing the muffled sound of thunder in the sky.

Looking at the big golden spider above at the bottom of the mountain, his body shook suddenly and shook a little.

"It seems that you know everything, your mother is Meng Bingyun, and she is also the Holy Maiden of the Supreme Dao. Hong Xuanji said slowly after a sigh.

The face of this great master still did not change in the slightest, and under such a cold wind, there was no white air in his lips when he spoke.

This kind of scene makes people feel that he is in another dimension.

"Yes, I know everything, now in front of my mother's grave, do you dare to explain it to me in person?" Hong Yi said coldly, the breath in his throat turned into a white mist in the cold night wind, and then was blown away.

"Explain what?"

"Explain how my mother died! That day I left the Wuwen Marquis Mansion, you sent Zhao Han to follow me, but I was caught on the spot! I forced me to ask out! Tell me! Did my mother be killed by Mrs. Zhao! And you! Did you know about this and turn a deaf ear, pretending not to know!" Hong Yi's voice became more and more fierce!

"I, Hong Xuanji, never need to explain to anyone! Not to mention you, a yellow-mouthed child!" Hong Xuanji listened to Hong Yi's words, raised his eyebrows, as if he was about to have a seizure, and when he saw the grave, he endured it again, but his voice was slightly louder, and his eyes stabbed through the air like two lightning bolts!

"Besides, you talk to me like this! Do you still have a father and son! You can't be a brute!"

"Hahahaha!" Hong Yi laughed as if he had heard the funniest joke in the world: "I was in the Hou Mansion and was bullied, at this time, where is your father? You taught Hong Xi and Hong Kang boxing by hand, but forbade me to practice martial arts! I even had to go outside to borrow and copy the books I read! Also, when I was taking the exam, you went to the scene to inspect the place, why did you pull my exam papers down! Fortunately, my local master Li Shenguang promoted me! You killed my mother! Suppress me! Raise me like a pig in the Hou Mansion! He also used his power to interfere in the great ceremonies of the state! You are still a father! If you don't treat me as a son, I will never regard you as a father! The ancient sages said: The king regards his ministers as his siblings, and his ministers as his confidants! The king regards his ministers as dogs and horses, and the ministers regard him as a countryman! The monarch regards his ministers as grass mustard, and the ministers regard the monarch as an enemy! The monarch and the minister, father and son, husband and wife, the monarch and the minister are like this, the father and the son are like this, and the same is true of the husband and wife. You don't regard me as your son, so why should I regard you as my father! Today at my mother's grave, you confessed your mistake to your mother! Go back and kill Mrs. Zhao! Give the Taishang Dao back to the Taishang Dao, and I will still recognize you as my father! We are still the father and the son! If not!"

"Are you finished?" Hong Xuanji's eyebrows became more and more raised, "According to the law of etiquette, you are just a concubine in the Hou Mansion, and you can't compare to Kang'er, Xi'er, do you want me to treat you like Kang'er and Xi'er? Besides, I have 16 sons and 7 daughters! There is no more than one of you, and there is no more of you! Your mother is a demon saint and a saint of the Dao, and she is a troublemaker! Trying to control the artifact of Sheji! And she will trap me in injustice! Besides, she is a concubine with a humble status! Even if you talk about heaven and earth, can you still talk about this truth and win? The state society, she dreams of Bingyun, a little woman, and she wants to interfere but can't do it? Since you don't recognize me as a father, how can I, Hong Xuanji, care about you, a rebellious son? You read and talk about righteousness, what is righteousness, don't you understand? Little beast!

Hong Xuanji was speaking, his eyes were full of disdain, and there was contempt!

"Okay, well said! In front of your mother's grave, you still dare to say such a thing, good! Very good!" The anger in Hong Yi's heart was completely ignited. "Hong Xuanji! You have a humble status! My mother is a dignified and supreme saint, and she is married to you! And what are you! It's just a despicable villain who wants to steal the Taishang Danjing! Hong Kang, what kind of good thing is Hong Xi? Hong Kang is in Shuiyang, and he has received eighty percent of the silver from the fire, and he has made a land of fish and rice, a rich land, and the people want to sell their sons and daughters! A person like you? You still talk about governing the world! It's a big joke!"

"Great righteousness, family and country in the world," Hong Yi muttered: "If there is no home, where does the country come from? The family cannot protect it! How can it govern the country! Can it level the world?"

hush

Hong Xuanji let out a long sigh and said to the grave: "Meng Bingyun, your son is rebellious, you also saw it in front of your grave today." But I don't have such a son! Don't blame me for getting rid of this little brute. ”

The author has to use a lot of pen and ink to write the word "um" in the mystery

Writing about its momentum, it gives the protagonist a psychological feeling

I read the best-selling book Writing Tips mentioned that the author can consciously slow down time

Well, here I slowed down the time and wrote it with a lot of pen and ink, and at this time the reader seemed to see slow motion in front of his eyes, and the-for-tat momentum of the two people was vividly written

Slowing down time and writing more details will give the reader a strong impression and an artificially deepened feeling

If you add a little time interval after the scene-disaster is over, no matter how long or short, as if the person in focus is stunned, it can often create special effects, such as:

"I told you, Ed," she said, "I won't go with you." ”

Time seemed to stop, as if this moment would never end. When he was finally able to speak, he found that he had nothing to say.

He turned and walked across the sidewalk and back into the car.

Here's an example from that book, where the protagonist doesn't need to talk back, and inserts a sentence as an interval, which works great

It's much more subtle than writing about what the protagonist is stunned, speechless, or angry

Left Eye on Fire 23:56:17

Well, it seems that this method is also used in time pause, and it can be displayed from multiple angles

101st rejection 23:56:27

That "um" of the god machine has a similar effect

Mumu 23:56:34

I haven't been able to find a way to insert a lot of information in the middle of a conversation, and this is good

Fire on the left eye 23:56:34

truly

101st rejection 23:56:38

There I really saw that time stood still and slowed down

"Bestseller Writing Tips", everyone better buy it and take a look

Combined with the analysis of online texts, it is very useful

The 101st rejection (630268437) 23:59:53

Well, in this section of the divine machine, everyone doesn't care about Xiaobai, it's still verbose, and the momentum is very strong

Many of us write books, and we don't have momentum

Mu Mu 0:00:22

Questioning and contrasting

The 101st rejection is 0:00:48

The guy who pretends to be forced just mumbles and has to write a lot of pen and ink

That's momentum

Left eye on fire 0:00:53

101 is talking about momentum, creating momentum from the pause of a um

Captain Overseer 0:01:22

Uh-huh. The shorter it is, the more powerful it is

In the case of writing in place

101st rejection 0:01:42

There are also in the back, Hong Yi asked step by step, and Hong Xuanji likes to ignore it, that kind of hanging look

Still put on a show, just rely on you to reason with me?

Left eye on fire 0:02:16

This should be the shaping of the character

The 101st rejection is 0:02:20

That's momentum

You pay attention, Hong Xuanji's speech is not accompanied by his facial expressions, but just words, giving people a feeling that his brain is making up for this person's expression

Left eye on fire 0:03:58

I think this brain supplement should be an effect from the previous momentum shaping

Without the shaping of the front, such a brain supplement cannot be formed in the back

Mu Mu 0:04:49

Those who haven't seen the Yang God can only make up the →_→ in their brains

Left eye on fire 0:05:40

Although I didn't finish reading this book, I found that many of the places in it were unreasonable, so I couldn't read it, but the use of techniques and so on was really good

101st rejection 0:06:28

Also, in conjunction with the previous part of Mithril

In his fragments, the three characters, the father, the son, and the protagonist, do not form a-for-tat contradiction

So it's not intense enough

The plot of Yang Shen, if you just look at the dialogue, is getting more and more intense

For example, 2 people scolded and quarreled -

You bastard!

You're a bastard!

You scold again!

I'll just call you a bastard, what's wrong?

You scold again!!

You......

Syllable!

Left eye on fire 0:08:53

Well, there are feelings

101st rejection 0:09:04

The contradictions in the content are raised layer by layer, coupled with the action expression, the pen and ink set off something, and the mood of the people is getting higher and higher

It's like a fire in the heart, stirring up little by little, and the more it burns, the more it burns

Left eye on fire 0:09:53

Pure verbal use, but deepening emotions through the well-known meaning of words and phrases

The 101st rejection was 0:10:08

Yes, the language content is progressive

At first, the protagonist said less, and then the more he talked, the more excited he became, and he kept talking, which is in line with the characteristics of reality

Captain Overseer 0:11:25

After here, the two of them will face off, and then the son will kill his father?

Left eye on fire 0:11:26

And I found a phenomenon that seems to be the five most commonly used narrative techniques when we write books, and this kind of pure language description is one of them

Captain Overseer 0:11:56

What are the remaining four?

101st rejection 0:11:59

No, I killed my dad at the end of the book

Yang Shen's results at the starting point were very hot, and Zongheng poached him because he saw that Shenji's results were so good

Left eye on fire 0:12:39

1. Explanatory description of behavior (behavior explanation can be long or short, as long as one or two paragraphs, as short as one sentence)

2. Mental description + language description

3. The description of words and actions

4. Pure verbal description

5. Brief description of transitivity

101st rejection 0:12:47

I have to say that the atmosphere of the god machine is very hanging

Left eye on fire 0:13:03

JJ is the former August monthly pass champion, and his popularity is too high

Captain Overseer 0:13:37

How was the conflict between him and his father finally resolved?

That's what his father said

101st rejection 0:13:54

Well, almost, what type of scenery and atmosphere are accentuated?

Captain Overseer 0:14:01

How he crushed

101st rejection 0:14:42

The two then got into a fight

Left eye on fire 0:14:39

I really haven't thought about the scenery clearly, hehehe, after you reminded me like this, I should add it.

101st rejection 0:14:47

Each has its own winners and losers

Anyway, the enmity is even greater

Overseer Captain 0:16:13

I feel that this father-son feud is unsolvable

Mumu 0:16:26

Scenery is not commonly used

101st rejection 0:16:46

Scenery is very common

Mumu 0:16:46

Many newcomers have no scenery to describe

101st rejection 0:17:04

Every time you switch scenes, you need to bring an environment

Character interaction, in order to be more realistic, also has to interact with the environment

In this, Hong Xuanji and Hong Yi were talking, one spewed white gas, and the other did not have white gas, which was to consider environmental factors