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I've finished writing the outline for the first part

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Can you help me see what's lacking?

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Well, send it to see

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At the beginning, Xiaoyun's Lan family in Xueyuan City, a volcano in the northern part of Beihe Youzhou, was an orphan with Yunqing, and they were treated coldly by the clan. Pen Fun Pavilion www.biquge.info Xiaoyun has always wanted to know who his father and mother are. Before the age of twelve, Xiaoyun's cultivation talent was different, but after the age of twelve, he was depressed in his soul, and he did not grow for three years, staying outside the cultivation of the lowest level of martial arts. Then the Lan family test conference, Yunqing became the most talented, and Xiaoyun was still a waste of firewood. Later, Xiaoyun meditated beside the waterfall where he usually cultivated, but he did it for too long, didn't stand firm, and fell into the waterfall.

Xiaoyun woke up and found himself in a large snowfield, so he went against the river and wanted to go back. Later, he encountered a fight between Mingqingzi and Huo Yansheng, both were defeated, Huoyanxuan fled, Mingqingzi was in danger, Xiaoyun pulled Mingqingzi to a leeward corner, and later Mingqingzi's saber and Xiaoyun had some resonance, and Mingqingzi saw that Xiaoyun was also familiar, so he thought that there was a fate and gave Xiaoyun the sword. In fact, it was made of a broken sword, and then told Xiaoyun that heaven and earth are not benevolent, and everything is a dog, so it must be benevolent.

Later, Xiaoyun bowed to the corpse of Mingqingzi three times, and then left, but he couldn't walk anymore and fell into the snow.

(omitted later)

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There is a problem

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Where is the flaw?

14-101st rejection 15:42:58

This outline is just a running account, telling the experience of the protagonist, but I can't see that there are bright spots

14- 101st rejection 15:43:41

The outline will clearly introduce the background of the main characters, the background of the story, the main contradictions and conflicts, and the characteristics of the magic weapon Goldfinger

Frustrated to the limit was fined 15:43:51

oh

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The Lan family in Xueyuan City in the northern volcano of Beihe Youzhou, what is the size of this Lan family?

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This is the content of the second part

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Who are the main adversaries and allies?

14-101st rejection 15:45:14

You're missing an outline, it's just a plot outline

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The whole story is in seven parts

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The martial arts meeting is the first part

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Then the Lan family test conference, Yunqing became the most talented, Xiaoyun was still a waste of firewood,

What impact does Yunqing have on Xiaoyun when he becomes a strong man? Is he an enemy, or a friend?

14-101st rejection 15:46:37

The relationship between the characters is not explained clearly, I can't see what is the use of you putting a cloud in front of you?

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The seven parts are: Wuhui's father's hatred, five treatises on saving people, nine shadows, and dragons destroying the sky

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Don't explain it to me now, write it into the outline yourself

14-101st rejection 15:47:39

If you don't write, it means that you didn't think that the story will be messy and not good-looking, so you write it first, and others will know the context of your story when they see it, and they will know if it looks good or not

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Oh, I see, the outline is all written

14-101st rejection 15:48:20

It's not about writing all for the sake of writing all, it's about having a holistic consideration in your mind before you start writing

14-101st rejection 15:48:27

Be responsible for yourself

Date: 2012/10/21

14-101st rejection 15:50:12

Instead of stir-frying, you find that there is no salt, and then go to buy salt, and the fried dishes will not taste good

14- 101st rejection 15:50:51

The outline in my share is a negative example, the story line is scattered, and I was thinking about it tonight

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Which outline?

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The one with three souls and seven spirits

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Which one is Ye Fan?

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Sky......

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I thought that was the standard

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Write according to that......

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Well, don't you think the protagonist does things purposelessly, east and west?

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I feel that the protagonist has any purpose, too

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That's a miswriting

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The protagonist must have a purpose in doing things, and the reader without a purpose has no expectations

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To say that the purpose is to think about the way of heaven and the way of kings

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The purpose is too big, as if you think about the universe every day, and the reader is not easy to substitute

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It's like a hundred schools of thought

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There are pros and cons

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If you want to, that girl at school has a big ass, I want to take advantage of the fact that day to touch more people, this purpose is very small, very real, everyone has it, then it is easier to substitute

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oh

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It's like everyone has a dream of being the first martial artist in the world

14-101st rejection 15:54:34

Let the purpose of the protagonist be close to ordinary people, and it will be easy to substitute

14- 101st rejection 15:54:52

The first martial arts is too big, and the ass decides the head

14-101st rejection 15:55:05

What position does the butt sit in, so that you can think about something

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Incisive!

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If the protagonist is the 3rd or 2nd in martial arts, he will expect to be the first

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It's like being in the Lan family

I want to be the best among teenagers

14- 101st rejection 15:55:53

He doesn't even know martial arts, at most he hopes that Zhang Tieniu, the butcher in the village, will beat him down, and then rob his family's newly killed pork to eat

14- 101st rejection 15:56:38

The best of the teenagers may be a little big, and they should start to protect themselves and not be bullied

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There is usually a person who bullies him the most, so the first goal is to hit the person who bullies him the most, and then the best among his peers

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Then you say he's a waste of wood

It's time to bring all 300 words of the things before the waste wood

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Did you go to work?

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Blood-stained......

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University student......

14- 101st rejection 15:58:46

Well, for example, if your teacher says, study hard, and the first place is submitted to Harvard University, do you believe it or not?

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I don't believe it if you kill me

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Too far away from the goal, right?

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It's realistic to say that the scholarship is more realistic

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And the first ......

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If he says study hard, the first scholarship is 300 yuan, you must believe it

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Right, right

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But you also have to measure whether you can get the first place

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Let's see what comes first

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It's okay to be the first in the class

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Therefore, if you set a target for the protagonist that can be caught right now, you can whet the reader's appetite, why, the protagonist just needs to work hard

14-101st rejection 16:01:10

If you set it too big or too low, it will make people feel unreal, and if you are too big, you will feel that the protagonist S ...... ,Damn,Think so far.,It's so ambitious;It's too low.,Relying on the protagonist's lack of ambition.,All day long for that little profit.

14-101st rejection 16:02:05

It's even more painful if you don't have a goal.,This protagonist is a bastard waiting to die, right?

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oh

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Then you say he's a waste of wood

It's time to bring all 300 words of the things before the waste wood

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Well

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The matter of waste wood should be well written

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I'll post a review of my book, wait

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Do you spend five chapters writing waste wood?

14- 101st rejection 16:06:55

Coolness can naturally be achieved by bullying others, but the premise is that the protagonist bullies others to stand at the height of morality, punish evil and promote good, so it is not too much to bully bad people.

Zenek means that the protagonist is bullied by the wicked, this is where the cool point can be made, because he was bullied, he was aggrieved, and finally overturned the wicked through personal efforts, raised his eyebrows, and the reader followed the cool!

Cool point is to meet the emotional needs of readers, if you are satisfied, you will be cool, and if you are not satisfied, you will be aggrieved, there are many ways.

The general practice is to suppress first and then promote, being trampled on and bullied is suppressed, and revenge is promoted.

If you really don't understand, think about your own real-life experience.

When you take the exam, you especially want to get a high score, and as a result, you achieve a full score through hard work, and you are happy!

Could it be more enjoyable? Yes!

Suppose your grades are very poor, and you are ridiculed and despised by countless people before the exam, thinking that you must not be able to do well in the exam, and even your most beloved girl does not look at you directly, but you grit your teeth and work hard, and this effort is carried out secretly, and finally as soon as the test results come out, you are the first in the school, your classmates are shocked, the teachers are shocked, and the parents are shocked, saying that you cheated, and take the test again, and the result is still the first place!

From then on, your classmates no longer dare to laugh at you, the teacher will focus on cultivating your top students, your parents will reward you with a notebook, and your beloved girl will find you on a date - at this time, your heart will be happy, and you will be extremely happy!

Fiction is to write the above plot into a story, and in reality, not everyone can fulfill the desire.

So you just think that the character of the character, or what kind of gold finger can form a cool point, this is not right, the creation of the cool point requires a series of foreshadowing and plot combinations!

The above examples, although they are all 100 points, one lacks the description of everyone's reaction after stepping on and achieving the goal, and the second is obviously much more refreshing, being stepped on to the extreme, and then holding his breath and working hard, and finally slapping everyone wildly, and standing at the highest point in high spirits.

The manufacturing of cool points is a very complex technical work, and it is better to observe life more when you have time! In other words, there is now a new term - explosive point! It is a concentrated detonation of a series of combined cool points, hehe, amazing, right?

Re: I understand quite thoroughly, you just write a similar one according to what you said, and I promise that your new book will come out directly [***]. In addition, if you are not in the potential group, you can add the potential group next week

[THIS REPLY WAS LAST EDITED BY [MODERATOR]ZENK, ON 2012-09-2114:00:30]

Frustrated to the limit was fined 16:09:02

oh

Be sure to be stepped on

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Yes, remember to schedule an outbreak after stepping on it

14-101st rejection 16:09:27

Do you understand?

Frustrated to the limit was fined 16:09:30

And what about the beginning of the scrap wood?

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You said you had to write well

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The above example is given from the perspective of a student, if you understand it, just apply it to the background of your novel

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My scrapwood starts a little too long

Date: 2012/10/21

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Like you saw yesterday

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Dou Po, the protagonist began to be stepped on, do you experience, how did he do it?

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I'm sticking it, and I've been ridiculed by countless people, haven't you seen it all? This is also being stepped on! Experience it with your heart, I don't believe you can't write a plot where the protagonist is bullied

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Laughed at by everyone

Then the gold finger appears

Then there is a retest

Then hit Xiao Ning

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Then test again

The whole family was shocked

14-101st rejection 16:12:24

Well, step on-effort-burst-everyone was shocked, and the four links were indispensable

14-101st rejection 16:13:07

The personal will of the protagonist in the middle runs through, what do you think when you step on it, maybe it's when Lao Tzu is so powerful that he kills your mother than the whole family!!

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Then there is no need to write down the fight between Mingqingzi and Huo Yansheng at the beginning?

14-101st rejection 16:13:44

When I worked hard, I thought: What is this, even if I practice to death, it is better than being ridiculed!

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The sword that Mixed Kiyoko gave him was the Golden Finger

14-101st rejection 16:14:05

When I broke out, I thought: Hahaha! Cool! you!! all die!

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When everyone was shocked, they thought, "Hmph, you know you're scared now, right?" Who made you look down on me in the first place?

14- 101st rejection 16:16:09

Then there is no need to write down the fight between Mingqingzi and Huo Yansheng at the beginning?

What do you think is the use of fighting for the protagonist? Readers look at the protagonist, how useful is it for you to arrange for two soy sauce players to come out and grab the protagonist's role? No matter how wonderful the supporting role is, can it bring out the protagonist?

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Because I think the protagonist will fight with the flames later

Come up and write how awesome it is to extinguish the flames

14- 101st rejection 16:17:38

That's to avenge the teacher

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You don't need it, just take it with you

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That passed him goldfinger

14- 101st rejection 16:19:31

You must know that readers are impatient now, the first chapter is 2000 words to introduce the background of the story and the life experience of the protagonist, the second chapter is 2000 words to introduce the contradictions and conflicts, and the third chapter is 2000 words to take the golden finger to practice.

Do you think you can do this with your outline of 6,000 words?

Frustrated to the limit was fined 16:20:10

I get it

It's just that it's not important

Just tell the scene after the fight

Inherit the golden finger

14-101st rejection 16:20:14

A lot of red books, fast hot books, basically at this pace, go to see the martial arts, endless magic skills, and the Shaolin abbot after the 80s

14- 101st rejection 16:21:03

When you read it, mark it out with a pen, which plots are the background introduction of the story, which ones are about the protagonist, and then the contradictions, gold fingers, and a look at it after the stroke, just 6000 words

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500 words

Goldfinger appearance

14-101st rejection 16:21:30

It's easy for newcomers to write quick and hot books

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Chapter 2 is 500 words

Goldfinger is about to appear

14- 101st rejection 16:22:03

500 words out of the golden finger is not good, the role of the golden finger is that after the protagonist is bullied, it is better to call the earth and the earth to be ineffective every day, and it is not right to be early or late

Frustrated to the limit and fined 16:22:28

Then I think it's better for me to write about the protagonist's past in a flashback style

14-101st rejection 16:22:30

If it's early, you don't cherish it, and if it's late, the reader can't stand the abuse

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Good positioning of the appearance of the gold finger

14-101st rejection 16:23:29

Okay, that's a lot to say, you can take a good look at the books I said, find the feeling of the beginning, and then reorganize the outline

14-101st rejection 16:23:49

I'm going to put this conversation in the group share and learn from everyone, are you okay?

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No comments

Frustrated to the limit and fined 16:24:09

Thank you for our education

14- 101st rejection 16:24:20

Well, it's not your final outline anyway, and I won't post the final outline, I'm afraid you'll spoil it

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Well

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But let's cut it

14-101st rejection 16:24:50

Writing a book depends on one's own understanding, and if you don't understand it, it's useless for others to say more

14-101st rejection 16:25:08

Well, okay

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Thank you

14- 101st rejection 16:25:43

The last suggestion, combined with your time to think about life, the refreshing and unsatisfactory in life, you will know how to write a novel

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Real life

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Well

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Got it

Frustrated to the limit was fined 16:26:02

I'll try to think about it

14- 101st rejection 16:26:21

So I'll give you an example of a scholarship, and you'll understand it at once, but if I give you a career example, you may not have an experience

Frustrated to the limit was fined 16:26:22

The outline of the star change is good

14- 101st rejection 16:27:11

The outline has a clear purpose and result context, and after the plot outline is completed, it will take such an outline to come out

14- 101st rejection 16:28:36

A complete outline includes a lot of things: plot outline, setting outline, character cards, world structure, doing deduction memo, protagonist elixir magic weapon memo, summary of main contradictions and conflicts...

14-101st rejection 16:29:46

It's all rich while writing, some are there at the beginning, some are recorded as they are written, and the plot outline at the beginning should even be delicate enough to be conceived in chapters, so as not to write wrong at the beginning

14-101st rejection 16:30:26

Some people say that you can write without an outline, I think 20-300,000 words really don't need an outline, but if there is no outline for more than 300,000 words, it is easy to write a collapse

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Stepping on - Excited-Explosive-Cool

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Well, it's the way it goes, and it goes on and on

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3000 words of origin

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6000 words out of the golden finger

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A small climax appears within 10,000 words

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At the very least, defeat a passerby

14- 101st rejection 16:32:34

Almost, after 6000 words, you have to practice 2 chapters, and this rhythm is okay

14 - 101st rejection 16:33:04

It's okay to stretch it a little longer, as long as it doesn't make the reader feel like the protagonist is idle and has nothing to do

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Thank you

Frustrated to the limit was fined 16:35:34

I'll change it now

14-101st rejection 16:36:07

You're welcome, if you have an understanding, you will improve, take your time, usually read more books, ponder more, you will definitely be able to sign a contract, come on!