Some authors are confused that what they write has no sense of picture, and 101 their own experience is probably because the details given are not sufficiently described, right?

Writing is an abstract activity that uses words to elicit the reader's associations, and the more detailed, accurate and full the text, the more vivid the story world depicted by the author. Pen ~ fun ~ pavilion www.biquge.info

So, how can the text be detailed, accurate, and full?

Meticulous: It is to use the five senses to depict things, because people feel the world through sight, hearing, smell, taste and touch, plus a series of psychological activities, so to depict things, we must follow the five senses method, and try to use writing to depict a thing from the perspective of the five senses.

Accurate: It is to try to grasp the characteristics of things so that they are easily reminiscent.

Full: It is necessary to have very delicate brushstrokes, which make people feel something when they look at it.

For example, when writing about the wind, can you see it? "The tumbling wind rolls up countless dust and sand, covering the sky and the sun, making people marvel at it. ”

This passage is described as visually as possible, the wind can roll up dust and sand, creating a scene that obscures the sky and the sun, and then people are amazed when they see it. This is a more general way of writing.

But it can be done in more detail, what is the color of the dust and sand, what is the shape, how it makes the sound, whether it hurts on the face, whether there is an earthy smell in the air, and can the characters react to the object in a more exaggerated way?

For example: "It was as if an invisible hand suddenly rose from the ground, crushed the sand dunes in front of you, and then swayed into the sky, suddenly obscuring the originally dazzling sun, and the sky and the earth were dark." Woowoo...... The sharp wind howled like a ghost crying wolf, and like a whole army of thousands of horses, which shook his scalp numb and trembled all over. The cold sand and dust crackled on his body, like a knife cut, and the thick earthy smell made him want to gag.

'What a sandstorm!' he said, his face as white as paper, and he ran with his head in his hands, trying to find a place to shelter from the wind for a while.

Under the wrath of nature, human beings seem so small that all they can do is save their lives, and they are powerless to fight. ”

Above is the 101 class with an axe, a little text written casually, and it is smiling and generous. If the pen is more clever than 101, please don't hesitate to give advice, and you can also write a paragraph describing the wind.

However, it is not advisable to describe in too much detail, 101 thinks that it is better to focus only on the most important places, and to keep the rest of the places concise and fluent, otherwise it will make the reader bored to read.

Finally, post a wonderful description of "Covering the Sky", in which the dialogue between the two is the main content, the wonderful background changes from time to time, the two talk while walking, and the portrayal of the characters is accurate, amazing!

When 101 read this paragraph, it seemed that I really followed the protagonist and experienced the illusory story world, and I was deeply touched by what happened to that friend, and that character was brought to life!

It can be seen that writing scenes and writing things still serves the characters, and the final foothold is still on the character characteristics you want to express, which you must not be biased.

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Zhang Wenchang led Ye Fan into the Yuding Cave, which was very magnificent, the verdant fairy mountains were like green jade, the brilliance was dotted, the fairy mist was swirling, and there were waterfalls falling down, and the white horses were condensed like starlight.

On many misty mountain peaks, you can vaguely see some palaces and towers, which are very ethereal and have the charm of fairyland.

And the most surprising thing is that there is a snow-white mountain in the middle of the mountains, the whole body is like jade, there is no grass, flashing a little luster, and the shape is like a round tripod.

"It's been three years apart, and today we must get drunk. Zhang Wenchang looked very excited and happy.

"Do your sects of cultivating immortals have wine and meat?" When Ye Fan was in Lingxu Cave, he and Pang Bo were vegetarians every day, and it felt like a torment during those days.

"Don't worry, there is wine and meat, now that I have officially embarked on the path of cultivation, I don't need to be a vegetarian like a beginner disciple. ”

The Yuding Cave is very vast, passing through several mountains, Zhang Wenchang took Ye Fan to a peach blossom forest, and there are many taverns next to it, which looks very poetic.

"Monks are human beings and need to relax. Zhang Wenchang explained with a smile: "Of course, it is impossible to be as rich in wine and lust as in the world, we can only drink and taste some delicious food here." ”

"That's good. Ye Fan nodded and said with a smile: "Otherwise, I really thought that the monks would cut off the seven emotions and six desires." ”

The two of them found a small wine shop and sat down, the pear wood eight immortal table, the peach wood four-legged chair, it looks antique, it is placed on the side of the road, facing the peach blossom forest, there is a lot of artistic conception. The same is true for other wine shops, where tables and chairs are set out in the open air.

They ordered some wine and food, began to drink to each other, came to this strange world, and saw their former classmates again, both of them were very emotional, and had endless words.

"Coming to this strange world, I couldn't sleep all night for a long time, I dreamed of going back, I missed my parents, I missed my friends, ......" Zhang Wenchang, who was wooden by nature, said a lot today and revealed his true feelings, as if he had seen his relatives.

Li Xiaoman's indifference, Zhang Wenchang's enthusiasm, and the comparison between the front and back made Ye Fan very emotional.

"Perhaps, in the future, we can go back. Ye Fan said.

"Go back...... I don't have that illusion anymore. Zhang Wenchang shook his head bitterly and said, "In the past three years, how have you lived, are you living in the Lingxu Cave Heaven or in the mortal world, how did I hear that Pang Bo has disappeared?"

Seeing his old classmate, Ye Fan wanted to tell the truth, but he couldn't help it, his experience was very complicated, and what he said would bring trouble to both of them, so he could only nod and say, "Pang Bo has indeed disappeared, I'm very worried." I have long since left the Lingxu Cave and now travel all over the world. ”

"Alas, it is not easy for us, it is not easy for mortals, and cultivation is not as beautiful as imagined, it is very boring, and we may face all kinds of life and death tribulations in the future. ”

"You have to be careful, it's better to practice more and go out less often. Ye Fan reminded.

Zhang Wenchang nodded, and then said with a bitter smile: "I can see that no matter where I am, I will not get ahead, it was like this in the past, and it is still like this, I can only live a mediocre life in this life." Perhaps, one day I will leave here, go to the world of ordinary people, open a tavern, and live the rest of my life in peace. ”

"Don't be so negative......" Ye Fan advised.

"You don't know, the world of monks is cruel, and if I don't leave, sooner or later I will die at the hands of other people. When the time comes, I will die silently, like an ordinary wave in the river, no one will know, no one will cry for me, only I know that I am not in this world. ”

After hearing this, Ye Fan felt that he had not really stepped into the world of monks, and now it seemed that it was really cruel.

Zhang Wenchang sighed: "I heard that Lin Jia, Zhou Yi, Wang Ziwen, and Li Xiaoman are all valued by their teachers, and it seems that some people can shine no matter where they are." ”

The two chatted while drinking, talked about a lot of past events, and talked about the current predicament, and finally Zhang Wenchang was completely drunk, lying on the table and crying, "I really want to go back, I don't want to stay in this strange world, when I left, my wife was already pregnant, our child was about to be born, and when she needed me the most, I disappeared and came here......"

He couldn't control himself, like a child, and cried bitterly.

"I really want to go back...... My child, who should be three years old now, dreams of seeing him, picking him up, kissing him......"

Seeing Zhang Wenchang in such pain, crying loudly, Ye Fan's heart fluctuated, and he kept speaking steadily.

14-101st rejection (630268437) 16:24:48

There are several outstanding points in this paragraph, one is that the two of them are talking, and the scene of talking and walking is very well handled

The technique he uses is to insert descriptions of the surrounding scenery into the dialogue, and it changes from time to time, creating the feeling that the two are moving forward

14-101st rejection (630268437) 16:25:55

This is much more vivid than two people standing there and talking all the time, and the sense of picture is very strong

14-101st rejection (630268437) 16:26:58

The second brilliant thing is the reunion of old classmates, everyone has experienced this, and it will definitely be mentioned that so-and-so classmate is doing well, and so-and-so classmate is not satisfactory, here I look at it and it has caused a strong emotional resonance, and the author has grasped the main points very accurately

14- 101st rejection (630268437) 16:28:16

The third is the portrayal of the protagonist and the supporting role, the supporting role is obviously a puffed bag, holding his stomach, seeing the protagonist can be regarded as being able to pour down, opening the gate and releasing water, saying a lot, and the protagonist's reaction is not much, comfort-oriented, this feeling is very good, when you meet an old classmate and pour bitter water with you, you must have the same reaction

So the details of the great god are well done, the story is really good-looking, I finished reading this paragraph anyway, and the shooting is amazing!