Narrative skills are a very important writing skill, which is generally referred to as writing, that is, the ability to tell a story with words, an ability to express a story, also known as a sense of language. Pen ~ fun ~ pavilion www.biquge.info

Good narrative skills can make people feel like they are really in the world of the novel when reading, while bad narrative skills can make people feel jerky and awkward, and it is difficult to integrate into the world of the story.

In the past, 101 realized that this skill was very important, and always wanted to analyze it, but it was limited to the level and could not be grasped.

After almost a year of cultivation, today 101 will try to analyze and summarize it.

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First, to summarize the types of narratives:

1. Words that outline scenes, objects, and people.

2. Character mental activities and dialogues.

3. Describe the demeanor and actions of the characters.

4. Narrate the progress of events.

5. Explanatory text.

6. Spit from the author's point of view.

The following is a detailed explanation of the characteristics and functions of the five types of narrative content.

1. Words that outline scenes, objects, and people.

This kind of text tells the reader at what time, place, and who is it? to help the reader build a vivid story world, to put it bluntly, it is to build the environment, otherwise the story will take place in the void and be unreal. Generally, this kind of narrative should be as accurate and vivid as possible, and should not be cumbersome. Too many descriptions, inaccurate descriptions are taboo. In addition, when the characters interact, forgetting to explain the changes in the surrounding scenes is also a mistake that newcomers tend to make.

Example:

The sky is blue, like a huge blue jadeite, the midsummer sun is like a big fireball, hanging high in this huge jadeite, looking at the position of the sun, it is estimated that it is about three o'clock in the afternoon.

Yi'an District No. 3 High School.

The five people who looked very eye-catching in the crowd of students at the school gate were led by a young man who was 1.8 meters tall, wearing a white T-shirt and white trousers, and his chest muscles were clearly highlighted. The four people around him, either with strong bodies or with knife marks on their faces, were all fierce figures at first glance. And the young man in white clothes and white pants is one of the three senior students of the martial arts hall of the No. 3 High School in Yi'an District - Zhang Haobai.

2. Character mental activities and dialogues.

This kind of writing is the thoughts or language directly expressed by the characters themselves, which are accurate, appropriate and vivid, and can reflect the characters' personalities and express their emotions. The mistakes newcomers tend to make are the lack of psychological activity of the characters, or the dialogue is not real, and the characters cannot be reflected.

Example:

"There is only one month left before the college entrance examination. Luo Feng said silently in his heart, "In the past, I didn't have the courage or time to chase girls in love." And now in the last month, everyone is busy reviewing for the college entrance examination, and Xu Xin is also a very strong girl. How can I be distracted and fall in love at this time? And in the last month before the college entrance examination, I can't be distracted, otherwise I will regret it for the rest of my life. ”

"Forget it, this crush...... Think of it as a memory. ”

3. Describe the demeanor and actions of the characters.

This kind of understanding is very good, when the character has words and deeds, so that the reader can see his (her) demeanor and actions, which makes the character more real and vivid, and also has the effect of expressing emotions. Newcomers are prone to inaccurate and distorted descriptions.

Example:

"Jealous of you?" Wei Wen touched his nose and smiled, "You dream." I'm sighing, that big guy doesn't know the true face of the 'Senior Brother Luo Feng' he admires. I remember it vividly...... That time on the martial arts competition platform in the martial arts hall, the 'Senior Brother Luo Feng' he admired picked three people in a row, and the three senior students who beat him couldn't get up. ”

4. Narrate the progress of events.

This is the way to tell the story, such as a battle scene, you hit me, I hit you, or what happened in a certain scene. What newcomers don't do well is that they don't write smoothly and naturally, or they don't grasp the perspective well, and they don't seem to have a sense of substitution.

Example:

A huge black-crowned golden eagle is flying from the high altitude of the city, its body is about 20 meters long, like a large fighter jet, the whole body feathers are faintly glowing with a cold metallic luster, the feathers on the head are dark black, as if the black crown is in general, and its sharp and huge claws are also golden yellow.

A pair of sharp and cold eyes glowing with blue light, looking down at the human city below, there was a faint trace of murderous intent.

"Boom!"

The black-crowned golden eagle, which was already flying very fast, suddenly increased its speed, breaking through the sound barrier in an instant, reaching a terrifying speed. At the same time, a high-pitched eagle sound erupted from the mouth of the black-crowned golden eagle, and the terrifying sound wave actually produced a shock wave visible to the naked eye, which quickly spread downward.

5. Explanatory text.

Explain the setting, or explain some background information and past events in the plot. This part of the content is the most common mistake made by the newcomer author, always unable to be concise and to the point, there is too much nonsense, which dilutes the flow of the plot.

Example:

Nowadays, in the whole world, in every country and region, almost every high school student, in addition to receiving cultural education, will also join the martial arts hall to develop the potential of the human body.

The No. 3 High School in Yi'an District, three grades, a total of nearly 5,000 high school students.

The vast majority of them are junior students of the martial arts hall! Only a very small number of them are 'intermediate students'. There are only three people who can obtain the qualification of 'senior students'!

6. Spit from the author's point of view.

This part is where the author sells private goods, and it can also express feelings, highlight and render the emotions of the characters, if used well, it will make the reader emotional, and if it is not used well, it will be annoying to irritate people.

Example:

"Forget it, this crush...... Think of it as a memory. ”

Crush ......

It's bitter, it hasn't bloomed yet, but it's withered.

Luo Feng just wanted to silently keep all this in his heart.

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Below, an excerpt from Tomato's "Devouring the Starry Sky", let's see how he builds a lifelike story world.

The sky is blue, like a huge blue jadeite, the midsummer sun is like a big fireball, hanging high in this huge jadeite, looking at the position of the sun, it is estimated that it is about three o'clock in the afternoon.

Yi'an District No. 3 High School. (The weather, time, and place are all there, it's still a sunny day, with a few strokes, the environment at the beginning of the story is built, giving people a sunny feeling, and the following story should also be very sunny.) ）

"Ding Ding Ding ......" rang throughout the campus with the loud bell, and suddenly the whole campus sounded a noise, and a large number of students poured out of the teaching buildings, laughing in groups and walking towards the school gate. (First there was a bell, then a commotion, then the students poured out, and finally they formed groups of three or five laughing and walked towards the school gate.) This description is in line with the situation in the real world, and the sense of the picture comes out from this. If the narrative order is messed up, or if the students walk silently towards the school gate, it will definitely feel awkward. ）

"Senior Brother Luo Feng!Senior Brother Luo Feng!" a thick voice sounded.

"Ah Feng, someone called you. (These two lines are very realistic, first hear the sound and then see the person, in the chaotic crowd, it is indeed the first to hear the sound, and then focus on the character, that is, the sense of vision is very strong.) ）

In the crowd of students, the young man holding a book walking with his classmates was wearing an ordinary blue sportswear, and his height was about 1.75 meters, which looked relatively lean. At this time, he turned his head in confusion and saw that it was a boy who called him, about 1.9 meters tall, with a long tiger's back and a bear's waist, and his arms were even thicker. (First introduce what the protagonist is like, and then cut the protagonist's perspective and then look at the guy who shouted people, and see the appearance of this person through the eyes of the protagonist, and soon have a sense of substitution.) ）

"Are you?" Luo Feng looked at the person who came suspiciously, and he didn't seem to know the person in front of him. ("Are you?" with "doubt", which is very appropriate, that is, the visual sense comes out again.) ）

These two people, one is as strong as a black bear. And 'Senior Brother Luo Feng' is just like an ordinary person.

On Height...... (The author's angle of complaining, comparing the two, inserting it just right, in order to set off the worship of the boys behind, here is a foiling technique.) ）

The two are very different. But this boy with a tiger's back and a bear's waist looked a little restrained, he looked carefully at the 'Senior Brother Luo Feng' he admired, and said secretly: "It seems that the rumors are right, Senior Brother Luo Feng, he is very easy to speak." (The psychological activity is still to set off the protagonist, and at the same time point out the boy's personality and mood, and pave the way for the apprehensive words and deeds later.) ）

"Senior Brother Luo Feng, I, I have something I want to ask Senior Brother Luo Feng for help. The stout man said worriedly. (I, I, with "apprehension", the description is very apt)

"What's the matter?" Luo Feng said with a smile. (Short words, accompanied by a smile, show the bold and generous character of the protagonist.) ）

"When I practice boxing, I always feel wrong when I punch hard, I don't know if you have time to give me some pointers. This sturdy boy, Lian said, "According to what the martial arts teacher said, with my strength, it stands to reason that one punch can be 50% stronger." However, when I punch hard, I can't always reach that high. (The boy's "Lian Dao" is inserted in the middle of this dialogue in order to disconnect two different groups of meanings, the first sentence is to express the request for advice, and the second sentence is to indicate the content of the request.) If it is not opened, it will seem unreal, and no one will say such a long thing in a row. Break it off, use "Lian Said", it will make people feel that this boy is very flattered, for fear that the protagonist will not agree, and hurriedly said, wonderful!)

The sturdy boy looked at Luo Feng expectantly. (A single sentence describing the boy's expectant demeanor gives a deep impression, as if he really sees a big man looking at the protagonist, which is in line with the boy's nervous and uneasy psychology.) Jin Yong often uses this technique to write someone's demeanor in a single sentence, in order to emphasize and stand out. ）

"Oh, that's the case......" Luo Feng paused slightly and nodded, "That's it, you look for me when you're in the martial arts hall on Sunday afternoon this week." (Oh, that's right...... With a "slight pause", it is also an appropriate sense of immediacy. Then he "nodded" and agreed to the other party's request. This is in line with the characteristics of a person who needs to think about it before replying, and it is very true. It also shows the calm character of the protagonist. ）

"Senior Brother Xie, Senior Brother Xie. The stout boy thanked him. (Repeat the thank you twice, with "even thanks", which is another visual sense.) ）

Luo Feng smiled and left with his classmates.

Seeing Luo Feng leave, the sturdy boy showed excitement, slammed his fist, the green tendons on his arms burst out, and he roared excitedly: "Success!" (first eye, then excited, then a fist, then a bruise, and finally excited and roared: "Success!", in line with a series of reactions of a person, with a short word "success", it is also a sense of immediacy. ）

"Senior Brother Luo Feng, it's so easy to agree?" said a boy in a school uniform in surprise.

"The rumors are true, Senior Brother Luo Feng is very talkative, and he is also a very good person. The stout boy grinned.

"But...... That's not right, among the 5,000 students in our third high school, there are only three who have won the title of 'Senior Martial Arts Student'. Among the three senior students, the other two 'Zhang Haobai' and 'Liu Ting' are very proud, and they are not willing to waste time guiding us at all. The boy in the school uniform wondered, "Senior Brother Luo Feng's temper is so good?"

Nowadays, in the whole world, in every country and region, almost every high school student, in addition to receiving cultural education, will also join the martial arts hall to develop the potential of the human body.

The No. 3 High School in Yi'an District, three grades, a total of nearly 5,000 high school students.

The vast majority of them are junior students of the martial arts hall! Only a very small number of them are 'intermediate students'. There are only three people who can obtain the qualification of 'senior student'!) (These three lines of explanation of the martial artist setting are just right, because it said that the big guy asked the protagonist to practice boxing, and said that many high school students are practicing boxing now, and the reader will be curious, what kind of world is this, so this setting is given according to the reader's interest.) It is better to be short in the setting, these three lines just explain the questions brought to the reader by the above series of plots, not a word of nonsense. ）

"Hearing is false, seeing is believing. Hmph, see it, Senior Brother Luo Feng is different from the other two. The sturdy boy pouted and said, "That Zhang Haobai and Liu Ting, the family is rich." I spent a lot of money to cultivate it from a small family to be so strong. As for Senior Brother Luo Feng, it's different from them!"

The boy in the school uniform also nodded: "I also heard that Senior Brother Luo Feng is the same as us, his family's economic conditions are average, and he still lives in a low-rent house." ”

"Yes, Senior Brother Luo Feng, to get to this point today is completely hard cultivation. I practiced it by myself. Which is like Zhang Haobai and the two of them. The sturdy boy clenched his fists and took a deep breath, "My goal is Senior Brother Luo Feng, I must pass the martial arts hall assessment within four years, that is, before graduating from college, and get the title of 'senior student' in the martial arts hall!"

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Summary:

Through the above line-by-line analysis, you should see that in fact, a good narrative technique is not to interrupt the flow of the story, as if the story can be clearly demonstrated only by the interaction of the characters.

Therefore, the flow of the story itself accounts for more than 70% of the narrative content, including the above-

2. Character mental activities and dialogues.

3. Describe the demeanor and actions of the characters.

4. Narrate the progress of events.

Left, 13%

1. Words that outline scenes, objects, and people.

12%

5. Explanatory text.

5%

6. Spit from the author's point of view.

In addition, there must be a sense of sight, that is, the words and deeds of the characters and descriptions should be appropriate, the actions should be coherent and natural, the development of events should be hierarchical, the perspective of the characters should be natural, and the psychological activities should be appropriate.

To do this, in addition to writing more and practicing more for many years, the most important one is to enter the play when writing a book, first substitute yourself into the story world, and your eyes seem to be able to see what is happening, so that you can describe them one by one immediately.

If you can't enter the play, the narrative will be naturally blunt and artificial, and the characters will not be vivid and vivid.

Why do you say that some of the books of the great gods make people look at them unconsciously, while some of the new authors' books can't be read no matter how you look at them, and they feel awkward, and narrative skills play a key role in them!

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Finally, in order to help you better understand narrative skills, the following 101 is not afraid of embarrassment, excerpts from a street book written last year, and compares and analyzes it, so that you can see where the shortcomings are.

Tian Yuan City.

The third largest city in mankind, with a radius of more than 100 square miles and a population of tens of millions.

At this moment, the entire Tianyuan City was shrouded in a gray-black mist, looking dark and gloomy.

Suddenly, countless lightning flashed on the edge of the gray-black mist, reflecting the entire Tianyuan City as bright as day, and immediately showed the dense array of soldiers squatting on the head of the city and in the trenches outside the city, all wearing helmets and armor, and there were millions of them at a glance.

Everyone raised their heads and looked up at the lightning in mid-air, with a look of horror on their faces.

"Everyone scrupulously abide by their posts, obey the orders, and don't panic! The Heavenly Demon will officially attack the city until at least tomorrow morning, and now it is only the demonic qi that has invaded the city, and it has been blocked by the great array of city protection!" Suddenly, a voice as bright as a bell resounded throughout the audience, and the voice was full of undoubted majesty, making the listener involuntarily settle down. (The speech here seems too long, full of two groups, the former is to tell everyone not to panic, and the latter is to explain that the Heavenly Demon Siege will not be until the next day, and now it is just the demonic energy attacking the city.) It seems that the characters are relatively fake, but in fact, the author pretends to explain the background of the story through the mouths of the characters. In addition, why did the Heavenly Demon attack the city, what happened here, the reader is still clueless, and the explanation is not clear. ）

Everyone lowered their heads, their expressions became calm, and under the leadership of their superior immortal elders, they were nervously and orderly preparing for the battle. (At this point, the reader has no sense of expectation, inexplicability, and no idea what these people are doing, so it is better to move forward in an orderly manner above the starry sky, and build a story world that is enough for people to integrate into after school.) ）

Lei Zheng lurked near a fortress, hiding in the shadows at the corner of the trench, and there was no one around, only the lightning that constantly streaked through the sky reflected the ground in the snow.

Karala ...... Karala ......

Two more big thunderbolts rolled over his head, Lei Zheng was shocked and shrunk his neck, and his body happened to show half of his body from the shadows, and he saw that he was about sixteen or seventeen years old, wearing a tattered shirt, and was so cold that he curled up and hugged each other, revealing thin arms and legs like hemp rods, his unkempt hair was mixed with straw sticks, and his face was so black and thin that he couldn't even see his original appearance. (The name of the protagonist is pointed out first, and then "See him ......" is written later, explaining his appearance, causing a tear in the sense of substitution, because the reader has already substituted for this character, and then the appearance will be stripped out of the sense of substitution.) The best thing to do is to give your appearance and name first, and then don't just swing it out. ）

It was a young man who was too weak to fall at any moment, but his eyes were shining, staring at the corner in front of him, and he was patiently waiting for a team to pass.

"Father, mother, the child escaped here after nine deaths, begging the soldier to take him in and feed the horses, the heavenly demons will attack the city tomorrow, the child is not afraid of death, but who will avenge you two if the child dies?

After a while, the immortal chief here will lead a team of body refiner teenagers to pass by, it is said that it is to select outer disciples for the formation gate, the children must seize this opportunity to enter the formation gate, and learn a fairy family ability to avenge the two of you!

Please bless the child with success!" (The character's psychological activities are too long and too fake, which seems abrupt, and the author forcibly pulls the characters to do background information explanation, in fact, there is no need to do such information here, but let the story flow first, and wait until it is over, after the reader is interested in this character, you might as well explain these contents, or from the following character interactions, this part of the information will naturally be brought out.) ）

Lei Zheng fanned his chapped lips and muttered to himself, his eager eyes kept turning back and forth between the corner in front of him and the fortress, he counted clearly, thirty-three teams of teenagers had passed, more than ten in each team, and there were already four hundred and twenty-nine people in the fortress, almost to the limit of the capacity, so he knew that at most he would pass through the last team, and rush to the last to beg the immortal chief to lead the team, it should be easier to speak, right?) This belongs to the author's complaint, not the inner activity of the character, it seems awkward, it should be - he thinks that this will be easier to speak. ）

"For the revenge of my father and mother, even if I kowtow and kneel, I will let go!" Lei Zheng clenched his fists fiercely and said secretly.

Suddenly, a rush of footsteps came, Lei Zheng's whole body immediately tensed, only to see a sharp-beaked monkey cheek immortal chief appear first, followed by a team of young men in Xuanyi, the lightning in the air from time to time reflected their appearance, all of them were seventeen or eighteen years old, all of them were born with tigers on their backs, their eyes were like lightning, and their spirits were vibrant.

When the teenagers were about to enter the fortress under the leadership of the immortal chief, Lei Zheng gritted his teeth, rushed to the front of the team, and begged on his knees: "Immortal Lord, please let me go in too!" (It is not to tell the story from the perspective of the protagonist, it should be - seeing that these people are about to enter the fortress, Lei Zheng gritted his teeth...... ）

As soon as Lei Zheng appeared, he immediately brought a breath of horse shed, and all the young men in Xuanyi frowned and covered their noses, looking at him with disgust.

The immortal chief who led the team frowned, recognized that this young man was a small man who fed horses nearby, waved out the sleeves of his robe and pushed him aside, and said impatiently: "We are all enough! This is the last batch, you go quickly!"

"Immortal Elder, I heard the adults inside say that they want you to find all the young people in the city who practice martial arts, do you think I can do it?" Lei Zheng looked at the Immortal Chief and pleaded. (It's unnatural here, being pushed by the sleeves of the fairy robe, there is no reaction, and there is a lack of description of the state of some characters.) ）

"You?haha!Don't be funny, you're just a little guy here feeding the horses to the alchemist soldiers, if you can do it, you can do whatever you want!" The fairy chief glanced at him contemptuously, and waved his hand away: "Get out! Don't smoke my clothes!" (without the immediate sense of a tomato, it should be—"You?haha!" The fairy chief laughed disdainfully and said contemptuously, " Don't be funny, you're just a little guy here feeding the horses to the refiner soldiers, if you can do it, you can do whatever you want!"

"Please, Immortal Master! My father and mother died tragically at the hands of the Heavenly Demons, I want to worship at the gate of the formation, learn the spell of subduing demons and eliminating demons, and avenge my father and mother! I ...... I haven't tested the spiritual root yet, so please test it for me and see if I'm qualified to become a disciple of the Formation Sect!" Lei Zheng said this, kneeling on the ground, his head like pounding garlic, and pleading with the immortal. (It's still a poor sense of sight, the previous words are already pleading, but they only kneel on the ground when they finish speaking, and the words and actions do not closely match.) ）

"Haven't you been tested for the spiritual root? How is it possible! All the young people in the city have been tested a while ago, and the young people with the spiritual root have already been selected by the sect! This time, we are selecting a young man who is a physical refiner who practices martial arts, looking at your black and thin appearance, you are not qualified at all, get out of here!" (The three groups of minds, lacking a matching demeanor in the middle, appear fake, and do not have a strong sense of immediacy. ）

With a wave of the sleeves of the immortal robe, a stream of true qi pushed Lei Zheng tumbling and hitting the wall of the tunnel, and immediately slammed, and his forehead was hit with blood.

"I really haven't done the spirit root test yet! Two days ago, I was washed by the Tianyuan River, and I was rescued by the patrolling body refiner brother, and I was taken in here to be a little boy who fed the horses and did chores, so I only knew about the spirit root test!"

Lei Zheng rolled over and got up from the ground, the blood flowing from his forehead stained his face red, setting off his expression more resolute, shouting explanations while blocking the way of the team.

"You two stop him, save him from messing around here, teach him a lesson and come in again!" Immortal Chang's face was angry, and he casually pointed to the two tall young men in the team, and the two immediately obeyed the order and went straight to Lei Zheng, while Immortal Chang led the rest of the teenagers to the gate of the fortress without stopping.

The two young men in Xuanyi, who had long been impatient, had a hideous look on their faces, the two looked at each other, and one of them reached out to grab Lei Zheng's arm, put him away from the vicinity of the fortress, and then pressed him face down on the ground, and beat him hard in a remote corner.

"Phew! This little guy can't help but beat! dirty our hands!" the two young men in Xuanyi scolded, thinking about rushing back to the fortress as soon as possible to return to the immortal chief, so they threw down the fainting Lei Zheng and hurried to the direction of the fortress.

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I probably analyzed my past novels, and found that the sense of immediacy was really bad, long-winded, and there was no substitution of characters at all when I wrote it, purely from the author's point of view, and the characters' personalities and emotions didn't come out at all, and they were very ugly, alas...... I hope the new book will make great progress!

Work hard to the level of tomatoes!Come on! One day I will be a god in 101!