The description of a thing should follow a certain order, such as the description of the scene from far to near, the combination of movement and static, the narrative in the scene, the lyricism in the narrative, etc., these things must be advanced layer by layer, orderly integration together, in order to achieve the best effect on the description of a certain thing. Pen, fun, and www.biquge.info

The following is an excerpt of Yi Lin's appearance in "Smiling Proud Jianghu", and try to analyze the layering of the character description.

At this moment, a delicate voice came from outside the door, shouting, "Master, I'm back!" Ding Yi's face changed, and he shouted: "It's Yilin, get in for me!"

Everyone looked at the door together, to see what kind of character this little nun was who was openly drinking in the restaurant with two evil thieves. When the curtain was lifted, everyone's eyes suddenly lit up, and a little nun quietly walked into the flower hall, but seeing that she was delicate and vulgar, and her complexion was shining, she was really a beautiful beauty. She was only sixteen or seventeen years old, with a graceful figure, and although she was wrapped in a wide robe, she still couldn't hide her slender and graceful appearance. She walked in front of Dingyi, Ying Ying bowed down, and shouted: "Master, ......" As soon as the two words came out, she suddenly burst out and cried. Dingyi said with a calm face: "You do it...... How did you come back?" Yi Lin cried, "Master, disciple this time...... This time, I almost won't be able to see your old man again. Her voice was very coquettish, and her two slender hands grabbed Dingyi's sleeve, which was as white as transparent. Everyone couldn't help but think, "How did such a beautiful woman become a nun?"

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Before the description, it is necessary to determine the characteristics to be highlighted in this description, for Yi Lin, that is, the delicate voice, the graceful figure, the slender and graceful posture under the wide tie - which gives us a delicate and pitiful image of the little girl.

Then Ying Ying bowed down, called the master and cried, which deepened the impression of softness and gentleness from the behavior

Below, the voice was coquettish, and the slender hand grabbed the master's sleeve, which was so white and transparent, how coquettish this is

It is interspersed with the psychology of the people

If you want to convey the spirit of the character, you must hold an impression, and then all the brushwork and ink will work this impression, and the final impression will come out.

Hierarchical Analysis:

1. Give the overall impression first

The eyes lit up

2. Then take a closer look, how old you are and what your body is

This is in line with the habit of observing people, the first sight must be the brightest place, followed by the face

Look at your face first, and then if your breasts are big, focus your eyes on your breasts

The butt is cocked, and the focus is on the buttocks

Here Yilin is curvaceous

3. The next thing is to speak in words and deeds, and here highlights coquettishness and pity

So I called Master, and I cried

4. Then grasp the most prominent physical highlight of this character to strengthen the impression, which is the pair of slender hands that are white and transparent

5. At the end, comment on the opinion of this character with everyone's psychology, echoing everyone's first impression.

This is the layering of the description, which is the same as the description of the face of the opening Fuwei dart game

The combination of dynamic and static, layer by layer

After reading it, the overall impression of this person is roughly coquettish and gentle, with a thin figure and an extremely white complexion

There is a kind of delicate cuteness, which also points out the intimate relationship between her and Master.

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In the end, in order to figure out Jin Dada's penmanship, 101 tried to rewrite it and see how it worked.

Everyone looked at the door together, to see what kind of character this little nun was who was openly drinking in the restaurant with two evil thieves.

When the curtain was lifted, everyone's eyes suddenly darkened, and a burly nun strode into the flower hall, but seeing her full of face, thick eyebrows and eagle eyes, she looked like a hungry tiger when she was looking forward to it, and she was really a frightened and ruthless character.

She was about thirty years old, and her body was sturdy, and although she wore a loose coat, she could not hide her muscular appearance.

She walked up to Dingyi, hugged her fists, and shouted, "Master......"

As soon as the two words came out, it was like a thunderbolt in the middle of the day, which shocked everyone in fear.

Dingyi said with a calm face: "You do it...... What did you do? How did you come back?"

Yi Lin glared and said, "Master, hehe! The disciple almost entered the men's bathhouse this time!"

Her voice was very hoarse, and her two big hands were clenched into fists, waving in the air as she spoke, as if she was about to beat someone.

Everyone couldn't help but think, "How did such a female man become a nun?"

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The layering of the scenery description is similar to the description of the characters, so I won't repeat it, and the opening description of the Fuwei dart game in the appendix is for everyone to understand......

The wind smokes the willows, the fragrance of flowers is intoxicating, it is the spring season in the south. On the West Gate Street of Fuzhou Mansion in Fujian Province, the bluestone slab road stretches straight out and leads straight to the West Gate. Before a magnificent mansion is built, a flagpole of two feet high is erected in the two stone altars on the left and right, and the green flag flutters on the top of the pole. The yellow silk thread on the right flag is embroidered with a male lion with teeth and claws, and a majestic demeanor, and the flag is waving in the wind, making the male lion more vigorous. On the top of the lion's head, a pair of bats embroidered with black silk thread spread their wings and fly. The left flag is embroidered with four black characters of "Fuwei Dart Bureau", with silver hooks and iron strokes, and the strength is extraordinary. The vermilion lacquer door of the mansion, the copper nails the size of a teacup on the door are shining, and the plaque on the top of the door reads "Fuwei Dart Bureau" four large gold lacquer characters, and the horizontal book below is "General Number" two small characters. At the entrance, there are two rows of benches, and there are eight men who have finished their strong suits, all of whom have straight waists, showing a heroic spirit.