I read the climax he wrote, and the sense of expectation was not good, and I told him that one of the ways to create an orgasm is to lay out a very strong expectation in advance, so that people can't wait for the protagonist to do that, so that once it is done, it will be very cool. Pen Fun Pavilion wWw. ｂiquge。 ｉｎfo

I told him, why don't you write a paragraph about eating hamburgers very coolly! As a result, he wrote a relatively simple paragraph, so I also wanted to challenge it, and wrote a paragraph, comparing the two, let's understand the relationship between creating expectations and refreshing!

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He wrote:

Eat hamburger and meet a girl? That's what I thought of.

Waiter, get a big burger!"

101 said aloud, "It's really busy today, it's noon, and he hasn't even eaten breakfast."

When the burger was served, 101 started immediately, and the food was hearty and swallowing thousands of miles like a tiger.

At this moment, a girl sitting next to him burst out laughing.

Very hungry, the burger is very tempting, eating the overlord meal, eating domineering, amusing the girl, fooling the girl to pay for a treat, cheating money and sex.

I wrote:

I've been hungry all day, and I only have one steel hammer left in my pocket, enough to buy a bag of mustard.

But I don't want to eat mustard, I've been making steamed buns for a week, and now I feel sour water in my mouth when I think of the smell of mustard.

I...... I'm going to eat a burger!

I saw the billboard on the side of the road, and the bright lights lit up the photos of the burgers

Two slices of bread sprinkled with sesame seeds, round and plump, golden brown

Sandwiched between bright green vegetables, ah...... It's like a girl's eyes, watery

Underneath the vegetables, there's a chunk of beef, the kind of beef patty, and take a bite into the tender and juicy beef patty

I could also see the fragrant slices of cheese and the white mayonnaise

If I want to take a bite, my tongue must be numb, my mouth must be saliva, my throat must be moaning, and my stomach must be squirming

I want to take a bite!

I couldn't wait to run into McDonald's, with only one thought on my mind, eat a burger!

However, when I had sent a team for ten minutes, and when it was my turn, I pulled out a steel hammer, and the young lady's disdainful look made me want to die

I walked into the corner depressed, surrounded by strange eyes

What are they looking at? When I'm a beggar?! Lao Tzu is just a street writer

I was sitting in the corner and I heard the mother next to me say to the child, "Keep an eye on your burger, this brother will steal you."

The little one had mayonnaise in his mouth and crumbs of beef and breadcrumbs hanging from his shirt

The milk nodded milkily and said, "Okay mother."

Yes!

I screamed in my heart, and I wanted to pounce on the kid's burger and eat it

The child took his mother's hand and walked away

I felt soft, my stomach was twitching, and I wanted to eat burgers even more when I smelled the smell of the burger joint!

I inadvertently glanced at the wall, and the mirror reflected me, my eyes glowing with wolf-like hunger, my cheeks twitching

I want to eat a burger! God, give me a burger!

My eyes were fixed on the mouths of the diners around me, watching them chew and swallow

My heart twitched with every crumb of bread that fell

I can't wait to stretch out my mouth and continue

Finally a diner had half a burger left, I waited for him to leave, pounced on him, and just as I was about to grab it, the cleaner took it away

Yes...... I collapsed weakly...... I don't think I'll ever be able to eat a bite of a burger until I'm dying

Suddenly, I heard something, I got up and saw a super beautiful woman on TV appear

People flocked to her for autographs

I didn't look at her, my eyes fell on the burger at the next table, and his owner went to find the beautiful woman to sign it

This hamburger is my big beauty! I pounced on it, clutched it tightly,

Open your mouth wide and bite it off, oops......

It's delicious!

I cried...

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Summary:

99% of the ink was used in the production

Eat to the mouth, just a word

If you analyze it carefully, some of them objectively write about the color and smell of hamburgers

Some are the subjective psychology of the protagonist

Some are supporting roles, such as the little girl and her mother

Every time I want to eat, but I fly, the most torturous

Repeatedly tug-of-war, repeatedly whetting the reader's appetite

He said

Cool, but that big beauty has read the book I wrote, and in turn asked me to sign an autograph and slap the audience in the face, I will feel more cool.

I say

This is the unexpected joy,

The most important thing is to be emotional

The protagonist is not a tabula rasa figure, he has his own story

By writing about the desire to eat burgers, I actually created a character with a story

If the characters can't be identified, the plot will be blind