The previous post 101 is all about Jin Yong's book as a skill analysis, today a friend in the group posted a paragraph of Gu Long's book, 101 look, I wiped it, a lot of things are not quite the same as Jin Yong, so I analyzed it on a whim, they are all useful dry goods, everyone endures the chat history, take your time to see it!

The beginning of the white jade tiger

The first auspicious day of the zodiac

Killed husband on March 27, Daji. Pen | fun | pavilion www. ｂｉｑｕｇｅ。 ｉｎｆｏ

Everything.

Zhao Wuji collapsed on the bed.

He rode lightly, galloped three hundred miles, and as soon as he got off the horse, he rushed in, and when he came in, he fell on this bed.

Fragrant and soft bed.

This is Xiangxiang's bed, Xiangxiang is a woman, a fragrant and soft woman, every time she sees Zhao Wuji, she always smiles as sweet as sugar.

The sun was shining outside the window, the weather was sunny, and the wind was scented with flowers.

Zhao Wuji looked at the corner of the blue sky outside the window, and finally exhaled slowly, muttering, "Today is really a good day." ”

Xiangxiang didn't smile today, but said lightly: "Today is indeed a good day, a good day to kill." ”

Zhao Wuji propped up his head with one hand and looked at her: "You want to kill?"

Xiangxiang said: "I just want to kill one person." ”

Zhao Wuji said: "Kill whom?"

Xiangxiang said: "Kill you!"

Zhao Wuji was not taken aback, but smiled, as if he was still very happy.

Xiangxiang bit her lip and said, "I really wanted to kill you, but if I think about it again, it's not easy for you to think of coming to see me today." ”

Zhao Wuji said: "You know?"

Xiangxiang said: "Of course I know that today is the day of Zhao Gongzi's great joy. ”

There were tears in her beautiful eyes: "I also know that Zhao Gongzi came here today, just to tell me that from now on, he and I have already been in a knife, even if I will see him again in the future, I should treat him as a stranger." ”

Zhao Wuji couldn't deny it, and he couldn't help but feel a little uncomfortable: "I also brought something for you." ”

He took out a string of pearls from his body: "This is what I promised you, and I haven't forgotten it." ”

The pearls are crystal round and round, like the innocent tears of the girls.

Xiangxiang took it, stroked it gently, and muttered, "I know you will definitely bring it to me, you have always been a very trustworthy man." ”

She didn't shed a tear.

But her hands were already trembling, she suddenly jumped up, smashed the string of pearls into Zhao Wuji's face, and said loudly: "But who is rare for your string of stinky beads, and who is rare for you little bastard." ”

The string of beads did not hit Zhao Wuji's face, but flew out of the window.

Zhao Wuji smiled again: "Little bastard, it's always a little beneficial." ”

Xiangxiang jumped up and said, "What's the benefit, you say!"

Zhao Wuji said: "The little bastard is at least better than the old bastard, and it is better than the dead bastard." ”

He wanted Xiang Xiang to smile too.

Although there are no conditions or oaths between them, separation is always sad after all.

He always wanted them to smile when they parted.

Xiangxiang still didn't laugh, but the string of pearls that she threw out of the window just now flew back.

Then, with a "grab" sound, an arrow three feet six inches long nailed the string of pearls to the pillar.

On the shaft of the arrow, the silver light was shining, the silver feather at the end of the arrow was still trembling, and outside the window, another short arrow flew and nailed to this arrow.

Although long arrows are strong, short arrows are more accurate.

Xiangxiang was stunned.

It is true that this kind of archery is not often seen.

Zhao Wuji's smile immediately turned into a bitter smile, and he sighed, "My creditors are finally here. ”

Xiangxiang changed color and said, "What are they doing here?"

Zhao Wuji said: "Of course, the creditor is here to collect debts, can't you see that today is also a good day to collect debts!"

It's a small building, and it's spring.

The spring outside the small building is bright and bright, and a hundred flowers are blooming, some are bright red, some are tender green, and some are goose yellow.

Two men in black stood among the bright flowers, a man and a woman, a young man and an old.

The young man was a strong man eight feet long, and the old woman's back was hunched, but her eyes were still shining.

Two people, two bows, golden-backed black tires, one long and one short.

Xiangxiang stood by the small window on the small building and couldn't help asking, "Who are these two people?"

Zhao Wuji said: "It's the black mother-in-law, with her son." ”

Xiangxiang said: "Who is the black mother-in-law?"

Zhao Wuji said: "He is a person who can shoot an arrow into the eye of a rope ten zhang away." ”

Xiangxiang's face changed, and she said, "This hunchbacked old woman has such a powerful ......"

Zhao Wuji said: "Although her son is not as accurate as her, he has the natural divine power of the two arms, as long as he is happy, he can shoot the two people standing side by side at any time." He sighed and continued: "Golden bow and silver arrows, the son and the mother fly, these two mothers and sons, whoever sees it, is unlucky." ”

Xiangxiang said: "But, you owe them a debt?"

Zhao Wuji smiled bitterly and said, "I have always been unlucky. ”

Xiangxiang said, "What do you owe them?"

Zhao Wuji said: "I owe the two of them." ”

Xiangxiang didn't understand, and said, "How can you owe the two of them?"

Zhao Wuji said: "Once I came out of Minghuchun in the middle of the night after drinking, I saw two little girls fleeing in front, his son chasing behind, and a little girl had been hit by an arrow, and kept shouting for help!"

He sighed again and said, "Seeing such a big man chasing the little girl, of course I have to draw a knife to help them, block them for a while, and let them escape." ”

Xiangxiang said: "What happened later?"

Zhao Wuji said: "Later, I learned that those two little girls were not little girls at all. ”

Xiangxiang didn't understand it even more, and asked, "What is it that is not a little girl?"

Zhao Wuji said: "It's a man." ”

Xiangxiang is stupid.

Zhao Wuji said: "There are flower thieves called 'swarm of bees' in the rivers and lakes, who like to dress up as little girls. ”

Xiangxiang said: "Those two little girls, are they flower thieves?"

Zhao Wuji nodded and smiled bitterly: "Fortunately, the mother and son can finally see that I am not an accomplice of the flower thief." ”

Xiangxiang said: "Of course they won't let you go like this." ”

Zhao Wuji said: "They gave me a three-month deadline and told me to arrest those two flower thieves back. ”

Xiangxiang said: "Now the deadline has arrived?"

Zhao Wuji said: "It's almost there." ”

Xiangxiang said: "Did you arrest people for them?"

Zhao Wuji said: "Not yet." ”

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Let me analyze that passage of Gu Long's text

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Killed husband on March 27, Daji.

Everything.

Zhao Wuji collapsed on the bed.

He rode lightly, galloped three hundred miles, and as soon as he got off the horse, he rushed in, and when he came in, he fell on this bed.

Fragrant and soft bed.

This is Xiangxiang's bed, Xiangxiang is a woman, a fragrant and soft woman, every time she sees Zhao Wuji, she always smiles as sweet as sugar.

Long Aotian (646310825) 0:45:00

the better

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Look at the 101's

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Advantage 1: Short sentences, easy to read

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Advantage 2: Multiple twists and turns, arouse people's curiosity

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The first is that everything is appropriate

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As a result, the second sentence is Zhao Wuji falling on the bed.

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Everyone is curious, you are suitable for everything, why did you fall into bed?

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He rode lightly, galloped three hundred miles, and as soon as he got off the horse, he rushed in, and when he came in, he fell on this bed

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The third sentence is even more strange, running so fast, so far, just to fall into bed?

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The bed is fragrant and soft underneath.

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Looks like nonsense, but it's important in cologne

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Well, interlocking

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He always likes to take out the content that emphasizes the deepening and takes it out separately

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This deepening of the emphasis is often also a turning point

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bed

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Covered in blood

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Oooh

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This is the turning point

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This is Xiangxiang's bed, Xiangxiang is a woman, a fragrant and soft woman, every time she sees Zhao Wuji, she always smiles as sweet as sugar.

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This is progressive, explaining how the fragrance and softness came about

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He is not a mess of turns, and after the turns, give explanations

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At this point, we have doubts

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What did Zao Wou-Ki do on such a good day, running so far, to the bed of a fragrant woman?

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Then Gu Long didn't say anything more

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It's suspense

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The sun was shining outside the window, the weather was sunny, and the wind was scented with flowers.

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This thing went to write the scene

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Why?

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He is well aware that suspense is the hook, and the reader has swallowed the hook

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reasonable

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For the next twist?

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At this time, there is no rush to move down, but to create an environmental atmosphere to make the characters fuller

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Fill out the background of the story

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Without this sentence, there is no taste

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The affection between men and women is gone

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Zhao Wuji looked at the corner of the blue sky outside the window, and finally exhaled slowly, muttering, "Today is really a good day." ”

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The mood of the protagonist is linked to the weather

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Everyone will wonder, what does he mean by what he says?

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Running all the way to the woman's room, just to chat angrily?

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Funny man

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Xiangxiang didn't smile today, but said lightly: "Today is indeed a good day, a good day to kill." ”

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The woman's words took another turn

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It's heart-pounding

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began to speculate, what is the relationship between these two people?

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The twist of the ancient dragon is interesting

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One said the weather was good, the other said to kill someone

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Sharp contradictions are beginning to arise here

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Everyone counted the numbers, but there were only 100 or 200 words, and the contradiction came out

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It's not obtrusive at all, this is good

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The suspense is there

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The atmosphere of the scene was there

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Zhao Wuji propped up his head with one hand and looked at her: "You want to kill?"

Xiangxiang said: "I just want to kill one person." ”

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The feeling of flowers and swords

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Keep pushing

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I can't see anything in these two sentences, it's foreshadowing

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The reader's heart jumps along

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It turned out to be a major event that had a stake in the protagonist!

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Zhao Wuji was not taken aback, but smiled, as if he was still very happy.

Xiangxiang bit her lip and said, "I really wanted to kill you, but if I think about it again, it's not easy for you to think of coming to see me today." ”

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Well, but the aforementioned saying that the weather is so good that it will come and send it to death, which is also an interesting opposite

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At this point, the woman's attitude has changed, and it has turned again

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It turned out to be coquettish, not really to kill

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The man's attitude is still calm, with a kind of calmness that makes fun of girls

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This time, the personalities of the two have also been shaped

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One is rude, one is **

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Well, that's a surprise hook

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Look at it, it's amazing, it's only a few words, and the character has been deeply rooted in the hearts of the people

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yes

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Zhao Wuji said: "You know?"

Xiangxiang said: "Of course I know that today is the day of Zhao Gongzi's great joy. ”

There were tears in her beautiful eyes: "I also know that Zhao Gongzi came here today, just to tell me that from now on, he and I have already been in a knife, even if I will see him again in the future, I should treat him as a stranger." ”

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Now it's time to get down to business

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Generally write a story, first introduce the characters, hook the hook, and whet the reader's appetite

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Now that the opening scene is all done, let's move on to the story

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Get down to business

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Look at it now, Zhao Gongzi quickly whipped up his horse and ran to the woman's bed, and basically guessed a lot

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Well

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The first hook is about to fail, so hurry up and get the second hook down

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In this paragraph, the second hook was placed, and I wanted to know if Zhao Gongzi came to cut it in two

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Zhao Wuji couldn't deny it, and he couldn't help but feel a little uncomfortable: "I also brought something for you." ”

He took out a string of pearls from his body: "This is what I promised you, and I haven't forgotten it." ”

The pearls are crystal round and round, like the innocent tears of the girls.

Xiangxiang took it, stroked it gently, and muttered, "I know you will definitely bring it to me, you have always been a very trustworthy man." ”

She didn't shed a tear.

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This relationship came out, and people's hearts were touched

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This is a man with affection

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Note that Gu Long was very stingy with a description

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The pearls are crystal round and round, like the innocent tears of the girls.

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He always follows such a deepened description after the words and deeds of the characters

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It's impressive

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Well, that's the style

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She didn't shed a tear.

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It's short, but it's on point

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This sentence is also true

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It's strange, why doesn't this woman cry and pinch?

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Well, there is suspense again

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But her hands were already trembling, she suddenly jumped up, smashed the string of pearls into Zhao Wuji's face, and said loudly: "But who is rare for your string of stinky beads, and who is rare for you little bastard." ”

The string of beads did not hit Zhao Wuji's face, but flew out of the window

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It turned out to be a foreshadowing for this

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Another twist

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Another twist

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If you don't cry, you don't cry, but you have to take the beads with you

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Doesn't it fit the character of the character? As I said earlier, it's a barbaric princess

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It's all said, today is suitable for killing

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I counted it, and I turned it around 5 or 6 times, and it was only 500 words

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How can you not kill someone?

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Zhao Wuji smiled again: "Little bastard, it's always a little beneficial." ”

Xiangxiang jumped up and said, "What's the benefit, you say!"

Zhao Wuji said: "The little bastard is at least better than the old bastard, and it is better than the dead bastard." ”

He wanted Xiang Xiang to smile too.

Although there are no conditions or oaths between them, separation is always sad after all.

He always wanted them to smile when they parted.

Overseer Captain 1:02:41

Narrative twists account for the majority

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Then the male protagonist continued to be calm, continued to be tender, and continued to tell jokes

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The male protagonist's personality traits continue to strengthen

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The male protagonist here still has the heart to break up

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It's a bastard

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Here is the first hook

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Yes, the first hook is over

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Now readers care, the two endings

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Well

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Why do you care? Because the characters are deeply rooted in the hearts of the people

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The order of the two hooks must not be messed up

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Take a closer look, and both of them have lovely things to say

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Well, I don't know about the killing one yet

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The woman is rude and coquettish, and she is very likable

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The tenderness of the man, the fast horse galloping, is also likable

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No matter how a woman loses her temper, he is not annoyed, good man

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He's very good at playing with amorous things

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This is experience

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Right

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Let's see

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Xiangxiang still didn't laugh, but the string of pearls that she threw out of the window just now flew back.

Then, with a "grab" sound, an arrow three feet six inches long nailed the string of pearls to the pillar.

On the shaft of the arrow, the silver light was shining, the silver feather at the end of the arrow was still trembling, and outside the window, another short arrow flew and nailed to this arrow.

Although long arrows are strong, short arrows are more accurate.

Xiangxiang was stunned.

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Here is another twist

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Serious business is starting to come in, and the crisis is coming

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In terms of description, it is still short and powerful

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Well, take care of the aftermath

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Movement and detail, there's it

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A breakup can be written a hundred times, probably this is the experience of the legend, and I finally understand

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The thrown pearls were ordered back, and they were not abrupt at all

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Look at what people are playing

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Connecting link

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Very compact

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It is true that this kind of archery is not often seen.

Zhao Wuji's smile immediately turned into a bitter smile, and he sighed, "My creditors are finally here. ”

Xiangxiang changed color and said, "What are they doing here?"

Zhao Wuji said: "Of course, the creditor is here to collect debts, can't you see that today is also a good day to collect debts!"

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Here start a new hook

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The ending of the two will be put aside for the time being

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Well

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What debt?

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Because of the tenderness, the reader will run

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This is not a romance novel after all

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The way of civil and martial arts is relaxed, no longer emotional, and I began to write tense and exciting

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The third hook is there

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Well

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And then here pay attention to the traits of the protagonist, he is laughing, all kinds of laughter, here is a bitter smile

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If you don't pretend to be forced, can you die?

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。。。

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It's a small building, and it's spring.

The spring outside the small building is bright and bright, and a hundred flowers are blooming, some are bright red, some are tender green, and some are goose yellow.

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Is

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These two sentences are wonderful

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It's time to write the scene again

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What does it do?

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Set off the tense plot

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How could something terrible happen to such good weather?

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The view, watching, how do you feel so nervous?

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yes

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contrast

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With a turn of the pen, I went to write about the beautiful scenery

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The stage where creditors appear

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Under the sun

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I'll go, it's more nervous than writing about howling in the wind

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Take it slowly

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Is there a bloody case?

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Well

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Two men in black stood among the bright flowers, a man and a woman, a young man and an old.

The young man was a strong man eight feet long, and the old woman's back was hunched, but her eyes were still shining.

Two people, two bows, golden-backed black tires, one long and one short.

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It turned out to be for the sake of contrast

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Rather, there is a pause, a sign of something great to come

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Two men in black, so murderous

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And it explains why the beads flew back

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Two men in black stood among the brightly colored flowers

Good contrast

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One man and one woman, one young and one old.

The young man was a strong man eight feet long, and the old woman's back was hunched, but her eyes were still shining.

Two people, two bows, golden-backed black tires, one long and one short.

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It's all about contrasts

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Xiangxiang stood by the small window on the small building and couldn't help asking, "Who are these two people?"

Zhao Wuji said: "It's the black mother-in-law, with her son." ”

Xiangxiang said: "Who is the black mother-in-law?"

Zhao Wuji said: "He is a person who can shoot an arrow into the eye of a rope ten zhang away." ”

Xiangxiang's face changed, and she said, "This hunchbacked old woman has such a powerful ......"

Zhao Wuji said: "Although her son is not as accurate as her, he has the natural divine power of the two arms, as long as he is happy, he can shoot the two people standing side by side at any time." He sighed and continued: "Golden bow and silver arrows, the son and the mother fly, these two mothers and sons, whoever sees it, is unlucky." ”

Xiangxiang said: "But, you owe them a debt?"

Zhao Wuji smiled bitterly and said, "I have always been unlucky. ”

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This section is a bit weird

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I don't know what this is written for

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:13:43

That's an illustrative paragraph

101st rejection (630268437) 1:13:47

According to Jin Yong's, it is a realistic approach, and the two debt collectors have already been reprimanded

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:14:00

But the ancient dragon's, with a poetic twist

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:14:04

Explanatory text through the language of the protagonist

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:06:38

Let's see

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:06:50

Xiangxiang still didn't laugh, but the string of pearls that she threw out of the window just now flew back.

Then, with a "grab" sound, an arrow three feet six inches long nailed the string of pearls to the pillar.

On the shaft of the arrow, the silver light was shining, the silver feather at the end of the arrow was still trembling, and outside the window, another short arrow flew and nailed to this arrow.

Although long arrows are strong, short arrows are more accurate.

Xiangxiang was stunned.

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:07:00

Here is another twist

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:07:10

Serious business is starting to come in, and the crisis is coming

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:07:26

In terms of description, it is still short and powerful

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:07:28

Well, take care of the aftermath

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:07:47

Movement and detail, there's it

LKONG's netizen (20654874) 1:07:49

A breakup can be written a hundred times, probably this is the experience of the legend, and I finally understand

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:07:49

The thrown pearls were ordered back, and they were not abrupt at all

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:08:02

Look at what people are playing

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:08:05

Connecting link

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:08:14

Very compact

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:08:21

It is true that this kind of archery is not often seen.

Zhao Wuji's smile immediately turned into a bitter smile, and he sighed, "My creditors are finally here. ”

Xiangxiang changed color and said, "What are they doing here?"

Zhao Wuji said: "Of course, the creditor is here to collect debts, can't you see that today is also a good day to collect debts!"

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:08:34

Here start a new hook

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:08:44

The ending of the two will be put aside for the time being

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:08:44

Well

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:08:50

What debt?

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:08:54

Because of the tenderness, the reader will run

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:08:59

This is not a romance novel after all

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:09:17

The way of civil and martial arts is relaxed, no longer emotional, and I began to write tense and exciting

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:09:19

The third hook is there

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:09:24

Well

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:09:42

And then here pay attention to the traits of the protagonist, he is laughing, all kinds of laughter, here is a bitter smile

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:09:47

If you don't pretend to be forced, can you die?

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:09:57

。。。

101st rejection (630268437) 1:10:01

It's a small building, and it's spring.

The spring outside the small building is bright and bright, and a hundred flowers are blooming, some are bright red, some are tender green, and some are goose yellow.

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:10:04

Is

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:10:08

These two sentences are wonderful

101st rejection (630268437) 1:10:14

It's time to write the scene again

101st rejection (630268437) 1:10:21

What does it do?

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:10:37

Set off the tense plot

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:10:56

How could something terrible happen to such good weather?

101st rejection (630268437) 1:10:57

The view, watching, how do you feel so nervous?

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:11:02

yes

LKONG's netizen (20654874) 1:11:12

contrast

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:11:13

With a turn of the pen, I went to write about the beautiful scenery

Captain Overseer 1:11:17

The stage where creditors appear

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:11:20

Under the sun

101st rejection (630268437) 1:11:27

I'll go, it's more nervous than writing about howling in the wind

Overseer Captain 1:11:27

Take it slowly

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:11:31

Is there a bloody case?

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:11:33

Well

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:11:47

Two men in black stood among the bright flowers, a man and a woman, a young man and an old.

The young man was a strong man eight feet long, and the old woman's back was hunched, but her eyes were still shining.

Two people, two bows, golden-backed black tires, one long and one short.

101st rejection (630268437) 1:11:57

It turned out to be for the sake of contrast

Captain Overseer 1:12:00

Rather, there is a pause, a sign of something great to come

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:12:07

Two men in black, so murderous

101st rejection (630268437) 1:12:23

And it explains why the beads flew back

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:12:27

Two men in black stood among the brightly colored flowers

Good contrast

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:12:39

One man and one woman, one young and one old.

The young man was a strong man eight feet long, and the old woman's back was hunched, but her eyes were still shining.

Two people, two bows, golden-backed black tires, one long and one short.

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:12:42

It's all about contrasts

101st rejection (630268437) 1:12:56

Xiangxiang stood by the small window on the small building and couldn't help asking, "Who are these two people?"

Zhao Wuji said: "It's the black mother-in-law, with her son." ”

Xiangxiang said: "Who is the black mother-in-law?"

Zhao Wuji said: "He is a person who can shoot an arrow into the eye of a rope ten zhang away." ”

Xiangxiang's face changed, and she said, "This hunchbacked old woman has such a powerful ......"

Zhao Wuji said: "Although her son is not as accurate as her, he has the natural divine power of the two arms, as long as he is happy, he can shoot the two people standing side by side at any time." He sighed and continued: "Golden bow and silver arrows, the son and the mother fly, these two mothers and sons, whoever sees it, is unlucky." ”

Xiangxiang said: "But, you owe them a debt?"

Zhao Wuji smiled bitterly and said, "I have always been unlucky. ”

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:13:23

This section is a bit weird

101st rejection (630268437) 1:13:29

I don't know what this is written for

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:13:43

That's an illustrative paragraph

101st rejection (630268437) 1:13:47

According to Jin Yong's, it is a realistic approach, and the two debt collectors have already been reprimanded

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:14:00

But the ancient dragon's, with a poetic twist

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:14:04

Explanatory text through the language of the protagonist

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:14:07

Let the two characters pause

Overseer Captain 1:14:12

The two were very calm

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:14:18

Waiting for the two protagonists to introduce first

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:14:22

At the same time, further momentum

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:14:32

This is not in line with the reality

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:14:34

He is a man who can shoot an arrow into the eye of a rope ten feet away

Overseer Captain 1:14:46

Slow talking

Overseer Captain 1:14:50

Lots of nonsense

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:15:03

Such a person, when he comes to find the protagonist, will there be a miracle thing?

Captain Overseer 1:15:05

There can also be time to sigh

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:15:10

This paragraph is a foreshadowing and continues to build momentum

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:15:14

Can the protagonist do it?

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:15:45

Xiangxiang said, "What do you owe them?"

Zhao Wuji said: "I owe the two of them." ”

Xiangxiang didn't understand, and said, "How can you owe the two of them?"

Zhao Wuji said: "Once I came out of Minghuchun in the middle of the night after drinking, I saw two little girls fleeing in front, his son chasing behind, and a little girl had been hit by an arrow, and kept shouting for help!"

He sighed again and said, "Seeing such a big man chasing the little girl, of course I have to draw a knife to help them, block them for a while, and let them escape." ”

Xiangxiang said: "What happened later?"

Zhao Wuji said: "Later, I learned that those two little girls were not little girls at all. ”

Xiangxiang didn't understand it even more, and asked, "What is it that is not a little girl?"

Zhao Wuji said: "It's a man." ”

Xiangxiang is stupid.

Captain Overseer 1:15:48

Pretending

101st rejection (630268437) 1:15:55

This is the turning point, the turning point

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:15:57

Ha ha

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:15:58

Right

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:16:17

Started pretending to be grandchildren

Captain Overseer 1:16:40

There are more deliberate twists in the narrative

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:17:00

Zhao Wuji said: "There are flower thieves called 'swarm of bees' in the rivers and lakes, who like to dress up as little girls. ”

Xiangxiang said: "Those two little girls, are they flower thieves?"

Zhao Wuji nodded and smiled bitterly: "Fortunately, the mother and son can finally see that I am not an accomplice of the flower thief." ”

Xiangxiang said: "Of course they won't let you go like this." ”

Zhao Wuji said: "They gave me a three-month deadline and told me to arrest those two flower thieves back. ”

Xiangxiang said: "Now the deadline has arrived?"

Zhao Wuji said: "It's almost there." ”

Xiangxiang said: "Did you arrest people for them?"

Zhao Wuji said: "Not yet." ”

Xiangxiang looked at him, shook her head and sighed, and said, "There is a kind of person in this world who always seems to like to catch insects and put them in their hair, why are you this person?"

Zhao Wuji said: "It doesn't matter if there are only one or two insects. ”

Xiangxiang said: "What else do you have in your hair?"

Zhao Wuji sighed: "It seems that there are still five or six scorpions and seven or eight poisonous snakes." ”

Xiangxiang didn't ask again.

She was so frightened that her voice was hoarse.

Captain Overseer 1:17:01

Normal people don't talk like that

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:17:05

You can watch it in one breath without feeling verbose

Overseer Captain 1:17:10

It worked

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:17:39

It's a link between the previous and the next

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:17:52

A second wave of creditors came out

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:18:03

Hook the fourth

101st rejection (630268437) 1:18:22

I don't want to analyze it later, I feel a little scattered

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:18:30

Well

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:18:34

There are three waves in total

101st rejection (630268437) 1:18:39

And it's always been a conversation between the two, and the enemies are all standing and watching?

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:18:47

No, no, no

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:18:53

Interesting later

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:18:55

But everyone has learned the basic techniques, right?

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:19:01

In the first chapter, there is the rush of Infernal Affairs

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:19:15

I share things

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:19:20

Jin Yong's is also a lot of twists

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:19:22

You have to read the first chapter to understand

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:19:30

I didn't send it all

101st rejection (630268437) 1:19:53

The first few hundred words are really a pearl!

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:20:05

Well, it's no problem to write online articles

Captain Overseer 1:20:10

Jin Yong's turning point is mostly a substantive turning point

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:20:16

Be sure to hook the hook early, and then hurry to shape the characters

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:20:19

Jin Yong's beginning...

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:20:22

Write an online article and hang up

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:20:30

There are also contrasts

LKONG's netizen (20654874) 1:20:32

What about the substantive turn?

Overseer Captain 1:20:34

The ancient dragon is mostly a narrative twist

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:20:38

Write the scene

Overseer Captain 1:20:53

It's a turn of events

Captain Overseer 1:21:05

Gu Long, this is an example

Overseer Captain 1:21:18

Enemy attack counts

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:21:39

I'm telling you, when your writing skills reach a certain depth, you can see the needs of the reader and know that there is an invisible attraction

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:21:56

Know how to stay attractive, and every word will not fall apart

Overseer Captain 1:21:58

Then he said that a group of people had come to him for trouble

Overseer Captain 1:22:18

Everything else is a narrative twist

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:22:32

The most interesting is in the back

Overseer Captain 1:22:36

Deliberately bent the words down

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:22:42

By the way, Gu Long pretended to be forced by the protagonist at the beginning, and the reader pretended to be forced by the protagonist

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:22:44

You will find the complete surprise

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:23:01

Because you think these people are looking for trouble with the protagonist

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:23:06

See now

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:23:14

Everyone thinks that the person who comes must not spare the protagonist

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:23:39

It's a storytelling technique

Overseer Captain 1:24:01

Well

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:24:01

Gu Long's rush is to make you deny yourself

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:24:12

In the end, I realized that what you were thinking was not right

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:24:23

It's like a coin player

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:24:30

You think it's on the left hand

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:24:34

Actually, I didn't have it in my hand

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:24:44

And it's reasonable

Overseer Captain 1:24:48

But let's be honest, these tricks are gorgeous

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:24:50

Today is a good weather, Zao Wou-Ki ran to find Xiangxiang not to be sad, he was going to break up with her, he was too tired from running, so he collapsed on Xiangxiang's bed to rest first.

Xiangxiang was very upset and said that she was going to kill him, and threw out the beads he gave.

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:25:08

It's storytelling without skill

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:25:15

Read the first chapter

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:25:20

interesting

Overseer Captain 1:25:21

One thing is told a thousand times

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:25:25

I read the first chapter

LKONG's netizen (20654874) 1:25:27

For me, his focus was on the collision between interesting characters, and I didn't expect so many technical things

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:25:32

Learned a lot

101st rejection (630268437) 1:25:37

Today is a good weather, Zao Wou-Ki ran to find Xiangxiang not to be sad, he was going to break up with her, he was too tired from running, so he collapsed on Xiangxiang's bed to rest first.

Xiangxiang was very upset and said that she was going to kill him, and threw out the beads he gave.

101st rejection (630268437) 1:25:52

Let me refine what skillful storytelling looks like

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:26:56

It's a good day, everything is fine.

Zao Wou-Ki was lying on the bed.

It turned out that he had come from a long distance and was very tired at the moment.

This bed is so fragrant, it is Xiangxiang's bed, Xiangxiang is a beauty.

101st rejection (630268437) 1:27:17

Got it?

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:27:32

~

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:27:46

One thing, knocked down, first throw out the result, and then give the reason

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:28:08

And the previous event and the next event contradict each other

Captain Overseer 1:28:19

Well. The 101 analysis is very good

101st rejection (630268437) 1:28:24

The previous said that everything is suitable, and the following said that the protagonist lies in bed, forming suspense

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:28:25

The most powerful thing is that it is very compact

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:28:38

You'll find nothing obtrusive at all

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:28:45

Our turn is often blunt

101st rejection (630268437) 1:28:54

If you look at the core of this matter, it is that it can't be more ordinary

Overseer Captain 1:29:00

Well

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:29:15

Today is a good weather, Zao Wou-Ki ran to find Xiangxiang not to be sad, he was going to break up with her, he was too tired from running, so he collapsed on Xiangxiang's bed to rest first.

Xiangxiang was very upset and said that she was going to kill him, and threw out the beads he gave.

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:29:29

Fuck it, this is a shitty shit!

Rain and Dust (2581681556) 1:29:32

Ha ha

The 101st rejection (630268437) 1:29:41

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:29:41

Yes, it can be written like an ancient dragon

Rain and dust (2581681556) 1:29:43

It's so rare