Commenting on "For the Proud Tang of the Heavenly Way"

A little sleepy

I read my brother's masterpiece. It's really touching. reminds me of Stephen Chow's nonsense. Nonsensical plots abound in the brothers' writings. It seems that the brothers wanted to create a new style of writing. At the same time, the brother's writing also reminded Xiao Dian of Cervantes's "Don Quixote". As soon as this book came out, there were no more books like Ranger. Could it be that my brother also wants to use this text to make the underworld extinct in the rivers and lakes! Hehe!

Let's talk about my brother's writings. After reading his brother's text, Xiao Sleepy had several thoughts. The first is the duality of the pig's foot image. This is very interesting. However, there are many problems. The second is that there are many elements of irrigation in the brothers' texts. It seems to have affected the development of the plot of the text. Third, the main line of Brother Wenwen is not clear enough. In other words, pig's feet have not really reflected their importance until now. Next, let's talk about it in detail.

First of all, let's talk about the two-sided nature of the pig's foot image. After reading nearly thirty more contents, Xiao Dian found that the pig's feet in Brother Wenwen were two people. In other words, when he is awake, he is Tang Xiaoshi, and when he is asleep, he is Tang Bohu. Hehe, this is really very innovative. It's more interesting than those pig's feet.

This, through the peerless knife, basketball competition, and drinking scenes, the brothers' intentions are vividly displayed. It can be seen that the brothers have put a lot of effort into this aspect. However, Xiao Sleepy still wants to give his brother a suggestion here. At the beginning of Brother Wenwen, it took eight watches to introduce the past of the previous dynasty. This seems to be a bit too much.

You know, we're writing an online article. Commonly known as online fast food. It's important to focus on the word 'fast'. The first three must show the character of the pig's foot. Let everyone have a comprehensive understanding of pig's feet. It wasn't until the ninth watch that Xiao Sleepy found out that Pig's Feet was a lewd teenager. Then, it will affect the interest of the reader.

Therefore, Xiao Dian thinks that the brothers can directly put the content of the ninth update into the first update. The first eight watches can be unfolded in the form of memories in the narrative of the later texts. In this way, the reader will feel that it is the way it is. At the same time, it also makes the reader have a strong desire for the plot of the later text.

Let's talk about irrigation! This must be watered when writing essays. This can be had. However, Xiao Sleepy is here to tell his brother. Don't start with watering! This will make the reader lose interest in reading. Under normal circumstances, the first ten changes, or the first twenty changes, are used to explain the main line of the text. This doesn't need to be watered. Some foreshadowing can be set. Pave the way for the development of the text later.

Your first eight are mainly Tang Bohu's narration, and then the ninth to twentieth are mainly about the four great masters, old things in the rivers and lakes, etc. The main line is not well presented. What is the main line? Hehe, that's what the pig's feet are going to do. What is the value, or purpose, of his existence? That's the third piece of advice I'm going to tell you.

Only with the main line will the reader judge the meaning of your pig's feet or every action of other characters according to the main line. They are able to generate a series of imaginations. So, the main line is very important. Pig's feet are also very important. And the pig's feet in the brothers' texts are just interspersed. There is not as much ink as the second pig's foot Ye Qiu.

That's putting the cart before the horse. However, look at the brothers' texts and texts, there are several amazing appearances of pig's feet. It also added a lot of highlights to Wenwen. This may be the brother's method of Wenwen, and it is not known.

Here, Xiao Sleepy just wants to remind his brother. A pig's foot is a pig's foot, and the other characters are foils. Therefore, the pen and ink of the pig's foot should occupy an absolute position. And the appearance of other characters is to cooperate with the pig's feet. You can't overstep your bounds. Therefore, I hope that the brother will give more pen and ink to the pig's feet in the later texts.

After talking so much nonsense, I hope my brother won't be surprised. Overall, the brother's writing is still good. As long as you pay attention to some details in the future, Wenwen will definitely sell well. Come on!

A little sleepy

2015-7-15