Book Review by Tycolili

Published: 2015-07-18, 22:38:00

Link to original book review: http://bbs.qidian.com/show/895992/3#ctl00_ContentPlaceHolder1_updata_box

First, about the title:

The title is simple and concise, pointing out the purpose of the main character's behavior in the novel: Bao - raising the god of guns. As for what the "Gun God" is, I don't know it yet, but I saw that the novel was classified under the "Online Game" section, so I guessed a certain amount of time.

Such a title can be, neither kneaded nor artificial, and belongs to one of the patterns commonly used by authors in all categories, so I will not make more comments.

Next, about the introduction:

The Qing Dynasty people traveled to modern times, or did they still wear souls and become obsessed with online games?! It must be said that the suspense set up by the author at the beginning is quite good, and while pointing out the theme straight to the point, he also takes into account the consideration of "joy", and it can be expected that this story will develop in a relaxed and leisurely direction.

It is also worth mentioning that compared with the stories of traveling through ancient times and other worlds, the stories of the ancients traveling to the modern era are still a small number (a certain Xiu's opinion), so there is much more room for excavation. After all, the imagination of the human group is limited, and now when you look at the story of traveling through ancient times and other worlds, no matter how you look at it, it is the same routine, no matter how "new", I feel that I can't get rid of the shadow of my predecessors. In this context, it should be a wise move for the author to choose the ancients to wear the present.

The middle and second parts of the introduction are a little dragged, but the content of the seemingly "crowd talk" style introduction is also quite marketable? I won't comment much on a certain cultivator here.

The last part echoes the beginning part, which can be regarded as a supplementary explanation for the introduction, and the atmosphere is also consistent. The number of words is a bit too much, so consider removing the part in parentheses at the end.

Then, about "Game Quest Settings and Main Gameplay":

Headache to watch.

You can shake the setting in the work.,But a certain Xiu Ji is very doubtful that how many readers are willing to read such a "setting".

It's not that he doesn't play online games, he played "Rainbow Island" in middle school and high school, and he played "World of Tanks" more in his undergraduate and graduate schools. The various parameters, rules, activities, and rewards in the game, if you don't really intend to understand them, are sometimes really like a book from the sky, and it is quite tiring to watch. A certain Xiu Ji thinks that what readers come here to see will not be the game setting but the content of the novel itself, right?,This pile of things is placed in the middle of the introduction and the text.,How many can readers take to the later text and sit down one by one?

Therefore, if you want to make a suggestion, you should either simplify this part of the content or leave it alone.

About the text:

"The style of writing is very brisk, the details are very prominent, and the sense of life is strong." If there's anything to praise at the beginning of this story, it's all three.

The story unfolds from the perspective of Qin Wanyan, a fourth-year girl, showing her real-life friends and the "second world" in the game to the reader. Although the plot is not rolled out, aren't the memories of college life a precious treasure shared by many people? The immediacy of online games is also coming, and if readers who are also gamers look at it, it will definitely feel a little familiar.

Almost every chapter after the opening section is occupied by a lot of online chat, which gives the reader a strong sense of the atmosphere of the game - friends help each other, rivals are angry and tear each other, and buyers are hungry for hard-to-find equipment...... After such a "round bombardment", even a certain Xiu who has no concept of this game has a rough idea.

Unfortunately, the author seems to be so obsessed with expressing what she has seen and experienced in the game world that such in-game dialogue seems to be the mainstream of the story, and it is inevitably a bit of a distraction compared to the slow progress of the story. A certain Xiu thinks that if the dialogue in the story can be simplified, the plot of the story will not be too seriously affected, and the reduction in length can allow readers to absorb the real content of the story more efficiently.

One of the evidences: Although a certain Xiu Ji skipped the process of some protagonists teaming up to play games, he still read the relatively complete plot of the novel.

The last updated more than ten chapters may be called the "hot point" in this story: the heroine went to work, and at the same time staged a good show of kicking the White Lotus and breaking the money laundering conspiracy. Seeing the highlights, a certain Xiu was also very nervous and excited.

When reading the chapter "The End of Master and Apprentice", a certain Xiu Ji felt a lot of emotion - thinking back to the junior year, the roommates in the same dormitory worked hard and forgot to sleep and eat, so they established their own online game guild with their peers. However, the good times did not last long, because of various contradictions and misunderstandings, the original companions parted ways, and the guild was also facing a fragmented situation. Seeing his roommate frowning all day long and borrowing alcohol to kill his sorrows, a certain Xiu can understand the sad mood of "hard work in vain". No matter how many people criticize the harm of online games, a certain Xiu feels that "love" should not be interfered with, on the contrary, it should be understood and recognized as a real emotion.

At the end, a certain Xiu Ji toasted a cup of "Strange Turtle" here.

And if there is any serious deficiency in this story, it is about the setting of the heroine's identity.

A certain Xiu Ji thinks that the author did not use the setting of this "Qing Dynasty Traverser" well - the ancients wore the present, and what a certain Xiu Ji looked forward to was to see the people of that era, all kinds of interesting things and contradictions and conflicts in dealing with people and adapting to the new life, as well as the application of their talents in modern society. It's a pity that there is no such story in this work, and the protagonist's knowledge of herbal medicine seems to have no other application except for being reflected in the game, not to mention that she is a person who was dressed in ancient times, especially the age of character formation should have been spent in the Qing Dynasty, and the difference in how people and things are handled is basically not reflected in the story, and it is a modern person who is alive! Only the name of the traverser, but not the reality of the traverser, really lives up to the expectations generated by a certain cultivator in the introduction.

According to a certain Xiu's idea, she said that she grew up in a poor village, learned some herbal knowledge, and then came to the city to study at university, and because she was somewhat interested in the history of the Qing Dynasty, she came into contact with this online game - it makes perfect sense in the development of the story. In fact, because of the elimination of settings such as "time-travelers" and the obedience to Occam's razor's law: "If you don't have to, don't add entities", it can also make the plot of the story less burdensome, so that the development clues are much clearer.

Therefore, if it is not really necessary, a certain Xiu suggested that the author simply set the protagonist as a modern person, and as for the so-called "crossing", although it has its popular selling point, it is not something that can be achieved by copying it rigidly.

The last part is a little "shaking the ground", and if the author finds such an offer unacceptable, please ignore it. Above, thank you.

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Author's Note:

The landlord is so right.,You say that.,I'll look back.,It's true that the heroine's character is not well written.。 Maybe it's because I've dug too many pits in front of me.,Writing and writing ignores her identity as a traverser.,If you want to overhaul and change to a modern person.,I'm afraid it's going to take a lot of pains.,Thankless.,Let me think about it carefully.,See if I can do some minor repairs in the previous published chapters.,Write out the contradictions and conflicts between the heroine traverser and the modern.。

Thanks to the landlord for the finishing touch, in one word! Benefited a lot!