"Passed? Baroque? Wen Xun asked puzzled.

"By the way, it's a bit too much." Lan Yang nodded and said, "When I say over-embellishment, I don't mean how beautiful the writing is, but how heavy the carving marks are. I'll tell you directly here, Wen Xun, your writing is actually very ordinary. But it may be that you have read a lot of high-level books before, so now when you write by yourself, you also subconsciously want to pursue the other person's feeling......"

Hearing this, Wen Xun understood a little. Yes, when he was adding details before, he was a little whimsical and could write as he wanted. Later, when he started to delete and modify, maybe because he deleted all the details that were not so important at once, Wen Xun subconsciously retained some more details of the important plot. Maybe it's just subconsciously keeping too many details in the important plot, which makes people feel a little too much?

"This kind of over-embellishment is baroque to say. This Baroque style is a kind of architectural decoration art in Europe centuries ago, which likes to make details very complex, beautiful and repetitive. Lan Yang lit a cigarette, took a puff, and continued, "If you put it in layman's terms, it's too bloody." There are important points where you use too many repetitive statements to describe over and over again. The consequences of such repeated descriptions do not enhance the tension of this plot point, but sometimes affect the fluency of reading......"

Hearing such a professional vocabulary, Wen Xun really couldn't understand it. Although he has been maturing rapidly recently, no matter how fast he is, he can't understand it right away, and he hasn't heard or seen anything at all, right?

"Reading fluently is like watching a movie. For example, when you want to watch a movie, when you get to the most critical scene, the director repeats the shot two or three times, have you seen this kind of place before? ”

"I've seen it, there were often Hong Kong martial arts movies in the past, and a scene of jumping from the upper floor could be repeated several times...... Wen Xun nodded and said.

"Yes, that's it. I don't know if you've noticed it, but this kind of repetitive footage is not as repeated as possible. If it is repeated too much at this time, it will definitely make the audience scold the mother......" Lan Yang proposed a very vivid analogy at this time.

Wen Xun nodded suddenly, he understood what was going on. Indeed, in some places it seems that he really used a few sentences similar to analogies in order to enhance the lyricism. At the time, I thought it was to enhance the lyricism, but now that I think about it, it seems that it will indeed drag on......

Looking at Wen Xun's teachable appearance, Lan Yang couldn't help it for a while, and began to be a good teacher. He continued to popularize science to Wen Xun: "Now, in the literary and artistic circles, there is a discipline called "Narratology". This discipline is about expression, and it is the study of what kind of expression structure will work best. It's effective enough without dragging ...... too much"

Listening to Lan Yang's popular science, Wen Xun was an eye-opener, he never knew that there were strong people in the world who had studied such a detailed place. For example, according to what Lan Yang said, the experts found that things or narratives of the same level will have the greatest effect when they appear once, and it is not good if they appear more often.

In short, you can't ramble back and forth, you can't ramble more than a hundred words on a question, but in fact, these more than 100 words can be condensed into one sentence. In addition to the "car talk", there is also a typical one that the character's behavior cannot be repeated in a single level every time.

For example, if there is an event that can be used to advance the plot - assuming that the relationship between men and women is already very ambiguous, it is almost like piercing a layer of window paper. At this time, you can add a small misunderstanding to increase the twists and turns, but you can't use the small misunderstanding to increase the twists and turns three times in a row.

Because the effect of the misunderstanding is essentially the same, the repetition is a repetition of the narrative, which will only distract the reader and audience from focusing on the story, and will not enhance the interest of the story......

Listening to such a theory, Wen Xun suddenly felt a sudden realization - no wonder when he watched martial arts movies in the open-air cinema in the town when he was a child, he often mistakenly thought that the kind of scene that was played three or four times was repeated by the protagonist three or four times......

Now Wen Xun, even exaggeratingly, has the feeling of "Chao Wendao, Xi can die", and even he began to think about why he didn't come to Lan Yang to discuss it before he started writing this manuscript - even if he came to Lan Yang to discuss it in a dream, he would gain a lot and take a lot of detours!

However, no matter how Wen Xun asked, Lan Yang would not put forward any specific rectification suggestions for Wen Xun's novel - he only said where it needed to be changed, but he would not say what it needed to be. This made Wen Xun a little angry, but Wen Xun, who was a big fire, knew that Lan Yang was doing it for his good. Because after all, it was Wen Xun who wrote the book himself, not Lan Yang, if Lan Yang personally instructed Wen Xun in everything, should Lan Yang's name be written in the final signature? If he relied on Lan Yang's guidance for everything, and left Lan Yang in the future, he Wen Xun would not write books?

In the end, Wen Xun woke up from the dream with great satisfaction. He didn't care about washing and dressing, so he rushed to the desk and briefly wrote down the knowledge that Lan Yang taught him in his dream.

After writing it, Wen Xun looked at the written narrative knowledge points with satisfaction, and at this time, he suddenly wanted to realize something - you can also learn in dreams? If you can learn all kinds of narratology from Lan Yang in your dreams, can you also find other teachers to learn other knowledge in your dreams?

In the end, will he become a super strong man who has never learned anything in reality, but in fact, he has learned everything in his dreams? This feeling seems to be very bad! It seems to be very convenient to use to trick people......

But let's put this thought in general, the most important thing for Wen Xun now is to revise the novel. He first re-read his novel, and took a pen to take notes little by little. If you say that when you read your novels, you are still reading them as a reader, and you are directly looking at the direction of the plot. So now Wen Xun is more like reading the novel from the perspective of an author, when he focuses on the structure of the plot according to what Lan Yang taught, he suddenly has a feeling that the mountain is not a mountain!

Yes, all of a sudden, he had a feeling similar to that of Ku Ding's cow, as if the cow he saw was not a "whole cow" as ordinary people, but a mixture of muscles, bones, and tendons. Now Wen Xun reads his novels, and only finds that what he sees is fragments and materials, and the functions of these materials are similar and different......

After spending two hours slowly reading his novel, Wen Xun had already marked all the fragments, plots, discourses, descriptions, and functions of words in his 5,000-word novel. The things marked out are simply more detailed and thorough than the analysis of the author's intentions in middle school Chinese teaching.

Wen Xun stretched his waist and looked at the mark analysis he had made with satisfaction, but just when he was thinking about starting to analyze and delete the plot, he suddenly found that it was already 8 o'clock! "Late!" This was Wen Xun's first thought, "Why didn't Li Liuyun come to call me?" This was Wen Xun's second thought. Ge Laozi, today turned out to be Saturday...... "This is Wen Xun's third thought......

After a false alarm, Wen Xun simply put down the novel and went to wash up and eat breakfast with peace of mind. After all the earthly affairs were done, he sat down at his desk again and began to revise his novel.

Now Wen Xun has marked all the points that can produce an effect in the novel, and marked the role of all the points. He is now slowly starting to choose between these points, and he is beginning to think about which plots, descriptions, sentences, and words with the same effect should be removed, which of these points with the same effect will work best, whether it is the best to leave the effect, or to merge several relatively good ones into a new ......

It took a whole day of work for Wen Xun to revise and edit these points. Now his manuscript paper is densely covered with small print, and it looks like a class note. Before it was time to go to bed, Wen Xun re-transcribed the entire novel according to the revised points.

I have to say that after such a major overhaul according to Professor Lan Yang's method, Wen Xun only felt that he almost didn't know his novels. It is no exaggeration to say that when Wen Xun transcribed it, he had a bit of "Is this the novel I wrote?" "The feeling of it!

He just felt that the story he had transcribed was ready to be published in a publication like "Story Club"!

"By the way, when you go to bed at night, you can see if you can meet Editor Lan in your dreams. If you can touch him, let him help take a look at the modified things again......" Wen Xun suddenly had such an idea. Yes, if he ran into Lan Yang again in his dream, why couldn't he let him look at it again? It is estimated that the draft changed today will definitely surprise Lan Yang, right?

After transcribing the novel, Wen Xun put the new manuscript on the bedside, and then fell asleep with the idea of being able to dream of Lan Yang. Soon, Wen Xun found himself standing at the door of the Lanzhou ramen restaurant in his dream last night, and inside the ramen restaurant, there was a man whose shoulders were as high as his ears were eating ramen.

Wen Xun was about to say hello, but was surprised to find that he didn't seem to have a manuscript in his hand this time!