Book Reviewer: The History of Being Able to Eat (January 4, 2014)

I wrote a review for you for the second time, and when I looked back, I saw that you were the only one who had commented on the group at that time, and you were still updating...... Emotional!

Come on, come on, come on!

Without further ado, start immediately.

Your last book involved the court, although this one does not know that the Tao will be, but it is all ancient, I believe it is not bad, only read one chapter, sure enough, its ability to grasp Chinese characters has faintly improved a lot, and the details are more exquisite.

But I'm a no-brainer who likes to find faults.

If you look at the end of the first chapter, should the reader's psychology be like this? "It's over, it's over, the heroine's umbrella is dead, and the wicked woman told her that the matchmaker is decided!"

However, the last two paragraphs dragged on. Yes, Lee's reactions are normal, and the heroine's psychology is normal, but they dilute my feelings.

I just wanted to say that it might be better if the last two paragraphs were put in the second chapter, but the beginning of the second chapter is not too different from these two paragraphs.

Ay...... Dare to suggest that you delete it directly.

In the second chapter, Li said, "Dad, take care of your condolences!" It's their unfilial piety, it's their fault! ”

In all respects, there is no problem with this sentence, and there is nothing that needs to be pondered too much. But what I'm thinking about is whether your real vision of this woman is really like that.

As I saw earlier, Li's daughter was married to someone else as a concubine, she was unhappy, and she didn't show how to behave, she was a weak image, and then although she was crying here, although she was sad, but the psychology reflected was very strong, according to me, it should be just crying and comforting without a sentence, but she seemed so strong, is it ......

Of course, this is only a supporting role, just a small corner in this long book, but if it really deviates from the character setting, this is not a bad habit I want to see.

In the third chapter, Liu Lijun said a sentence, the previous description was evaluated as "the most calm", and the content of the later words was really so meaningful, however, he thought it was too much, he couldn't help too much, and the proportion of what he said was greater, and the latter words were like polite words, I suddenly felt that this person was very fine, very treacherous, like a businessman, and changed it to "Although our ability is limited, if we can do it, we will try our best to help!" "I don't know if it's okay, here's a word.

For the first five chapters, there seems to be a problem.

Do you feel that the first few chapters of this are a bit uncoherent? Specifically, at the end of the previous chapter, and at the beginning of the next chapter, they can't do it in one go, although the meaning is like that, but when I read it, I always feel like I woke up from a sleep, thought about what I wrote yesterday, and had a rough idea, and continued with the taste of going forward.

This is not the case with your last book and the content after this fifth chapter, but what are these five chapters all about? It's a little puzzling.

When I saw the twelfth chapter, I felt that you wrote something, as soon as you entered the plot, it would be no problem at all, so let's comment here first.

It's not the first time that everyone has dealt with each other, and I haven't read the content later, because I've been working hard lately, and I'm a big man...... You know.

Writing a review is to help, look up, this time I helped, it seems to be pitifully small, sorry first.

Girl, you are delicate, you can see that after entering the plot, you write more handy, and at the end you will say three words that seem useless.

Come on!

Come on!

Come on!

Well, if you have the opportunity in the future, you will come back to make up the evaluation.

The Luojia Army Commentary Group, you can eat, and I present this comment for you.