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[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Author]: Flying under the moon

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[Sweeper]: Internship - Little Demon

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: It feels very profound, because it comes to the countries of the world, it means that it is a little confused, but the author's writing is very good, written in the first person, the sense of substitution is definitely the strongest, but it is also a test of the author's writing, the first person is not written by anyone after all, but the author writes well, the plot is very special, it is about dragon slaying, this is a very highlight! The proper expression directly pushes the text into the arms of the reader.

[Star Rating]: ★★★

[Sweeper]: Ren Qiuming

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: One: Although I am not a player of the old man's scrolling reels, it does not prevent me from hearing about this famous fantasy game, and it does not prevent me, I would like to express my considerable recognition of the author here.

Two: However, recognition is far from enough, the author is an author with materials, and the author also emphasizes his own materials, but there are materials, which still can't be covered up, and the author's barrenness and lack in the field of storytelling.

Three: I have roughly known the context of the author's writing, and affirmed the author's grasp of the rhythm in the writing, from the crash (doesn't the author feel that you changed the crossing plot to the crash is also an act of death and the situation), to being caught and beheaded, the "rescue" of the destroyer of the world, and then to the meeting with the masked man, the author tries to avoid bugs, avoid logical errors, have a considerable degree of respect for a design, and a considerable degree of attainment in the field of fantasy. These are the reasons why I appreciate this article, but I like a novel, but these hard things can not be generalized.

Four: Yes, in terms of soft power, the author shows his own lack and powerlessness. Crash in the wilderness, the protagonist is calm, but there is no normal confusion, in the rendering of emotions, in the performance of the scene, and even when the dragon attacks, the author did not write that powerful and incomparable feeling, I even doubt that this frustrated dragon is His Royal Highness Alduin. The author's writing highlights a single astringent word, and lacks appropriate and moist details to complement the story, so the author does not tell a story of the proper level under the premise that the general framework is quite good.

Five: The author actually does not need to emphasize some of his advantages, in fact, it is equal to a considerable extent in the field of online literature, so the author's dryness of his own writing, after comparing the writing of mainstream novels, should also have a general grasp, the lack of picture sense and emotional value is the author's worthy of criticism, how to make up for it, but it depends on the author's efforts and learning.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Clerk Scan]: Read the tongue

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: I have to sigh that the author's writing skills are very profound, the first-person writing has a high sense of substitution, and many details also reveal the author's profound knowledge. The narrative style is delicate and soft, and the concise and clear description of the picture is very strong, and I was very shocked at first glance, and I really want to know what kind of experience the author of the Tao has to build such a world.

After reading a few chapters of the author's self-description, I suddenly realized, "It turns out that I was reading a wonderful plot strategy." "Although I haven't played The Elder Scrolls before, after reading a few chapters, some of the game's feelings have slowly emerged, such as the plot of being captured and beheaded, like finding the opportunity to escape when the castle is attacked by a dragon, and like walking through a fantasy scene. Everything is restored to a three-dimensional game screen, and it feels like watching a master operate an adventurer, constantly fighting monsters and upgrading in the beautiful scene.

I've been thinking deeply for a long time, why is there such a beautiful language and sense of picture, but I can't give three stars immediately. The reason may be what I just said, like watching other people take risks, fight monsters, and level up, and I, as a reader, can't really participate in the plot.

There are similarities between games and online articles, but there are also essential differences. The similarity is that we must have a complete view of the world, and we must have a beautiful environment and a fantastic experience. The difference lies in whether the character development can be expected and whether the plot drive is attractive, and these two emotions will be compensated for by the player's identity in the process of playing the game.

When playing role-playing games, I naturally want to see the character grow, and I find clues to drive the plot myself, and I am involved in the whole process. When reading online articles, there is a lack of innate attraction for players to participate, at this time, the author needs to use writing techniques such as inhibition and suspense to catch readers, attract readers, and let readers feel a sense of expectation for the growth of the protagonist, as well as attention to the development of the plot.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: Internship - Demon Emperor

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: 1. The journey of the protagonist and the dialogue in the opening prologue are comfortable and calm, which is very good.

2. The scene is realistic, the first-person feeling and clear logic, the sense of substitution is very strong, and the narration of the writing is also very in line with the first person.

3. From the perspective of game novels, the plot arrangement is very good, and the sudden plot change is very appropriate. For example, the protagonist who is about to be beheaded is brought to life by a dragon that suddenly descends.

4. Summary: There are too many game professional terms, not suitable for readers who have not been exposed to this kind of game, and at the same time I feel a little unpopular, but it is still very interesting for this kind of game lovers, in general, it reads like playing a game by yourself, which I think is very successful.

[Star Rating]: ★★★

[Sweeper]: Yi Han

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: 1, first of all, Yi Haner has not played this game, Baidu understands, even the fur does not understand, if the following comments are offended, I hope the author will forgive me.

2. Strong sense of substitution. The author writes the novel in the first person, which makes me fit into the plot of the novel very well, especially the beheading part, I am very nervous when I see it, for fear of being cut.

3. The mind can't be written too white. There is almost no character dialogue at the beginning, and he has been looking at the novel world from the perspective of the protagonist. But don't write the thoughts in your heart directly, rely on the plot, expressions, and events, otherwise it will only make the article dry and uninteresting.

4. The plot is slow and hot, although there are ups and downs, but it is not attractive enough. There are too many irrelevant plot descriptions, and the plot develops slowly, so I can't continue reading. Cut out some of the descriptions of the dispensable alien world environment and replace it with a compelling storyline.

5. The character is not outstanding. After reading so many chapters, I haven't been able to understand what kind of character the protagonist is. When writing a novel, you must first think about what kind of person the protagonist is. Maybe I thought about it a lot, but I couldn't describe it.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: Shangguan

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: 1. The cover lacks "The Elder Scrolls" to highlight a "sub". The title of the book points out the background of the game, The Elder Scrolls, which is a fantasy-style game. The introduction highlights the selling point and leaves suspense, which can be seen that the author has put some thought into it.

2. At the beginning, the first-person writing was adopted, and I personally felt that the effect was not good. The "-------" dividing line is used a lot, forming a forced plot split. The environmental description and psychological description of the beginning are in place, and the scene has a good sense of picture.

3. The plot is a slow-burning type, and the storyline has ups and downs but is not attractive enough. There are too many irrelevant plot descriptions, and the plot development is slow, which makes me less interested in reading. Personally, I feel that it may be better if I can replace some dispensable descriptions of the environment of the heterogeneous world with a fascinating storyline.

4. There is a certain background in writing, and a variety of writing techniques can be used flexibly, which is very easy to read.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Clerk Swept]: To be continued

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: It's another article that can be divided into two chapters but merged into one chapter, oh my God, it's not good to be dazzled~

I smiled at the sky with a horizontal knife, haha

But I have to say that the writing is good, the first person is rare, and if you don't grasp it well, it will ruin the book, but fortunately, the author has a good grasp of it. But what kind of era this male protagonist has traveled to, I'm still very hazy to see. The Elder Scrolls, it always feels a bit ancient, but it's not like it.

This article seems to be a merger of Chinese and Western, and it is better to put it in the category of game fiction than in the category of fantasy.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: Internship - Little Demon

[Title]: "A Dream of the World"

[Brief comment]: The structure of the plot is very large, but when it is written, I feel that the development is too fast, in terms of historical background, there is too much foreshadowing, and a large paragraph is about history, which inevitably makes people feel a little boring, and it also feels a little verbose, but the verbose part in the back also begins to be a lot less, and the language is slowly streamlined, about the heroine, it begins to feel very vague, but it also begins to be clear later, there is no big problem in expression, it would be better if the plot development could be magnificent.

[Star rating]. ★★

[Sweeper]: Internship - Wind Roll West Curtain

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Advantages]: 1. The calm and elegant atmosphere in the text is blowing in the face, and the elegant style can make the impetuous heart settle down and read slowly.

2. The protagonist's performance after crossing is very calm and calm, and it is my favorite character.

3. The main line is very clear, the foreshadowing suspense is set very cleverly, and many stories can be developed later.

[Disadvantages]: 1. This article looks at the world from the perspective of the protagonist, and it is really unaccustomed to suddenly looking at it from the perspective of a third person. For example, after chapter 4, some of the protagonists are in a coma, and the masked man fights. I read it twice in a row to understand.

2. The author wants to show all the things that the protagonist sees, but the whole plot seems messy.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: Internship - Dashan

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: 1. Recently, there have been a lot of cross-cutting texts, and there are two distinctive features in this article: first, it has increased the scientific and technological content - airplanes, 30,000 feet in the air. Second, after careful observation and careful reasoning, it was prudently concluded that "it has indeed crossed".

2. The picture is very strong, reading it is like being in front of you, immersive! When depicting a situation, if the five senses can be fully mobilized, the effect may be even better.

3, the plot is exciting, the protagonist is in danger several times, which makes me faintly worried about whether it will be too innovative and the whole "triple wear" will come out!

4. The pen is light and smart, gorgeous but not fancy, and the pen is smooth and smooth.

[Star Rating]: ★★★

[Sweeper]: Internship-94-Battle

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Advantages]: After reading it, I think the author's writing is very sophisticated, and his knowledge is relatively wide, and at the same time, he adds a little humor, such as freefly.undermoon. After reading this book, you can grow a lot of knowledge, and it is a rare good novel for those who like antiquity.

[Disadvantages]: The shortcomings of this book are also obvious, ancient novels, limited the readership, and the author has too many awkward notes in it, different languages, so that readers are a little unaccustomed to reading, impatient people will definitely abandon the book. There are also no highlights in the early plot.

[Star Rating]: ★★★

[Sweeper]: Purse

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: 1, the title is slightly written and long, in fact, "The Elder Scrolls" can arouse people's reading [***], "Children of the Sky" should be side-by-side with the previous effect, and some lazy analysts will escape when they look at the title.

2. There is no connection in the scene transition, it is easy to fragment, the knowledge is very wide, and the plot design is very medieval charm, but it should have nothing to do with the game class I am familiar with, and the addition of magic further has a fantasy color, but I am not good at the situation a little incomprehensible.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: Early summer morning fog

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: I haven't been exposed to related games, so I'll comment on the novel.

In terms of plot design, the novel has a sense of mystery, traveling to ancient foreign lands by plane, breathing fire and dragons, opening stone gates, and masked strange people.

The scenes of the story are delicately described, such as the crossing scene, the beheading scene, and the opening of the stone gate.

The logic of the story is not good, the protagonist is Chinese, crossing to completely different ethnic regions, the language and appearance are obviously different, and when he was caught by the red camp, the other party did not cause the slightest doubt, and it was natural to treat him as a person from the hostile camp, which is not logical.

The opening chapter is a scroll related to the Middle East and Israel, helping the protagonist to travel to a region inhabited by Europeans. This one is a little weird. Presumably, the author may have liked the Nordic flair. But this also takes care of the rationality of the novel.

The big vein of the novel is invisible, the plane crash was rescued, and the crossing is crossed, after a bizarre storyline, more than a dozen chapters are not seen, and the direction of the entire plot is unknown. The reader will feel very impatient, the Chinese protagonist travels to other people's places and wants to participate in other people's struggles, this is too idle, isn't it more appropriate to set the protagonist as a European?

Overall, the novel has vivid scenes and a story design that can attract the reader's attention. It's worth learning from.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: Internship - Primary 4

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: First, I haven't played The Elder Scrolls, and many things need to be made up by the brain. Personally, I think it would be better to add some settings to the introduction.

2. First-person perspective! The sense of substitution is very weak! It's hard to get into the story, there's no sense of being there, and it feels so dry.

3. It's not that I like the type of text, and I can't grasp it because I feel like I can't understand the story.

[Star Rating]: ★

[Sweeper]: Internship - Xiaobai

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: The author's main point of view is particularly strong in the article, of course, this is the author's own point of view, no one has the right to refute it, who wants you to say that you are serious and lose! But in my heart, I still feel resentful, independent writers will directly express their point of view, but smart writers will get people to agree with their point of view, just like when someone tells you that the earth is actually square, although you don't believe it at first, but when everyone says so, you will start to doubt your point of view.

Next, let's talk about what happened to the protagonist: for a sudden disaster, most people will panic, fall into despair and fear, but the author did not bring these feelings to the protagonist, which is beyond my understanding of ordinary people, then I will think that the protagonist's sense of autonomy is very strong, I don't think he will have a sense of fear or fear, I don't care about him.

Plot:The author didn't set a lot of routines for readers to guess by themselves.,It's really easy to read.,Slowly accept the next problem.,But I began to feel confused about the material and setting of the story again.,The author derives according to a certain material.,But the plot has to have an inseparable relationship with the protagonist.,But I found that the protagonist was taken away.,This is also a separate story.,It's dangerous.?

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: Landlord

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: The cover is very rough, is it a direct typing on a picture? The introduction looks very high-end and atmospheric.

Writing a book in the first person, which is rare in online texts now, everyone says that if you don't have a strong self-confidence and strong writing, writing a book in the first person is equivalent to suicide. In fact, I think that if the first person is used well, the sense of substitution is very strong.

The author's writing is really good, the writing is also very skillful, and the plot is handled very naturally, especially in the opening dialogue, which is well written and connotative, and it can be seen that the author is a very knowledgeable and knowledgeable person.

After reading some of them, there has always been a feeling that the author is narrating alone, telling a story that he has personally experienced.

This article is a little less dynamic, and due to the limitations of the perspective, some things are not very easy to understand, especially for me who has never played this game.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: Internship - Little Frog

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Advantages]: 1. The introduction of the title of the book exudes a strong historical and literary atmosphere, which made me immediately put away the look on my face, solemnly and rigorously correct my mentality, and pressed the click to read! Author: Your opening is very high, there is wood!

2. The author very calmly expounded his contempt for Black Bama, first express my admiration for the author, courage is commendable, you are definitely not dying, I wish you a smooth journey!

3. It is very bold to use the first-person narration technique, the text reveals a sense of calmness, and it is vaguely with a little nobility, which makes people dare not be arrogant, and the aura is strong, I wish you a smooth journey.

4. The plot is very interesting. The main line of the article is very clear, revolving around the fact that the male protagonist got a mysterious scroll, and there are very good hidden lines buried everywhere, so that the follow-up development is understandable, I have to say that the author is very rigorous in the plot design.

[Disadvantages]: 1. Article classification. Wenwen is obviously an otherworldly fantasy category, why would it be placed in the game competition? So will we be told later that the protagonist has traveled into the game?

2. The description is intermittent, which makes people tired to watch. Since the article is based on 'me', then the visual angle will definitely follow the protagonist, but the author is too greedy, and the scene he wants to show is not ordinarily large, and there are interludes from time to time, so it seems that the scene is not an ordinary chaos, and it is recommended that the author start from a point first, and do his duty first, and no one will complain about you.

3. The article is too blunt. Understand that the protagonist is a good man with iron and blood, and he should have been enthusiastic about fighting and upgrading his experience, but it is difficult to have a sense of identity in the first person, and the author can't let go of his body when he writes, and he feels that the protagonist himself is calmly watching the drama and expounding the experience of himself and the people around him, and there is no sense of substitution, so I can't integrate into the text.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: A thousand rains are looking for the tide

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: 1. The title of the book reminds me of that little game, it's not very good, the introduction is average, and it doesn't have much attraction to me.

2. The author's writing is commendable, and the story described has a strong sense of picture, but I don't have the feeling of reading online articles, and I want to think that the elders who have been baptized by the years are narrating their experiences under the moon.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: Call me the Ninth Master

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: The first perspective used by the author, at the beginning, always feels a little bit of the protagonist himself is entwined, the first few chapters are the strongest, but the later part does not have this feeling, the advantage of the first perspective is a little reflected.

It can be seen from the author's narrative technique that the author is already weakening the threshold of this article, but the author should know the Tao when choosing, The Elder Scrolls has its own unique world, and if the author wants to use this world, he must use the protagonist's own view of the world, and in the beginning, although there are few terms, but the protagonist's perspective is to reveal the ancient world view, resulting in an extremely lack of early substitution, if it weren't for the game die-hard estimate, it would not be clear what the previous paragraph was (I have played the Elder Scrolls, Still ......==

The author actually has his own grasp of fantasy, and under the rendering of the atmosphere, the author actually does a good job, and you can recognize the fantasy theme if you choose from it at will.

[Star Rating]: ★★

[Sweeper]: Thorn ball

[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Brief comment]: One, a very good name, I feel so novel about the Elder Scrolls, which makes me feel like I am worshiping the god list again. After reading the introduction, I realized that Lu Dao is actually a Western text, a Western fantasy text? I definitely don't understand the myths of the West. 、

Second, the author, do you know the Tao? When I read your book, I felt like I was listening to a story from a knowledgeable person, and it was a sense of serenity that was telling a story. I love it. The way you write is something I admire.

Third, the plot transitions naturally, the plane crashes and then the protagonist accidentally enters an unknown area, and then comes into contact with some novel events that have never been experienced. Straight out of the gold finger, reels! And the inexplicable appearance of the great dragon is a sudden lead, is it directly related to the inexplicable disappearance of the scroll? It's worth looking forward to

Fourth, the whole story is a bit messy, and each chapter part of the author seems to be independent, which cannot give the reader a unified understanding. Background, characters, prescribed bits. It's hard to find the feeling of the backbone.

[Star Rating]: ★★

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[Title]: Children of The Elder Scrolls Skyrim

[Author]: Flying under the moon

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