Review post link: http://bbs.qidian.com/show/1071034

When I woke up in the morning, I saw Dan Feng (the author of the Onmyoji apprentice) swiping the review pictures in the signing group, and when I clicked on it, I realized that it was the result of the review of "Soul Lost Heavenly Master" on the starting point forum.

I clearly remember what Dan Feng said at the time: "Brother, you are a god of books, all recommended!" I haven't seen it yet...... It will be on fire! ”

I don't have a clue about the concept of full recommendation, but being affirmed by so many professionals undoubtedly makes my heart bloom.

Here, I would like to thank all the commentators for their painstaking efforts to provide many valuable comments for this book and give positive results, and I would also like to thank the Danfeng brothers for their timely information.

I carefully read every book review, and your suggestions for enlightenment can be said to point out the advantages and disadvantages of the book.

It seems to be the first time to try first-person writing, and since the main business has always been a screenwriter, I hope that through the constraints of the first person, the way of thinking will be more transformed into the mode of fiction.

The script has as little dialogue as possible, and the scene does not need to be too descriptive, but more about the most direct visual elements such as vision, light, action, objects, music, etc., so that the audience can understand and feel from it...... It is a kind of literary work that is presented first, and then processed by the audience to sort out the contradictions and tensions, playing montage.

Novels, on the other hand, are too different from the script in terms of expression, so since I was determined to write a good novel, I had to challenge and understand the novel more deeply, so I chose the first-person writing mode, and the subject matter was set in the category of the supernatural.

In the process of creating "Soul Lost Heavenly Master", I have encountered many problems, some of which are external problems that have been pointed out by various commentators, and a large part of which are my own problems...... The process of changing your mind is not painful, but it is really uncomfortable to feel that something is wrong but you can't say it.

Fortunately, there are serious and responsible editors around me, author friends at the starting point, and book lovers who have been encouraging and helping.

I am constantly learning, understanding, summarizing, and improving, and I believe that you can also feel a thing or two from my articles, so I believe that this first-person book will get better and better, and I will always work hard to improve it, and I am also responsible for everyone and myself.

There is a lot of gossip, so I will share the results of the comments below:

[Title]: "Soul Lost Heavenly Master"

[Author]: Like

[Sweeper]: MR

[Title]: "Soul Lost Heavenly Master"

[Brief Comment]: The novel is written smoothly, the layout is reasonable, and the scene atmosphere is well described. Generally speaking, novels written in the first person are usually difficult to write well, and the protagonist's mental activities and narration are used too much in the first few chapters, and it feels like the plot is moving slowly, and the word "I" is used very frequently, which seems a little unaccustomed. Personally, I suggest that it is better to write it in the third place, which will be much better, and in terms of the plot, the first few chapters should be pushed faster, and it may be much better to break out into a small climax.

[Suggestion]: Recommended

[Sweeper]: Tibetan style

[Title]: "Soul Lost Heavenly Master"

[Advantages]: A small climax at the beginning, taking the reader into the environment designed by the author, the idea is more ingenious, and the plot is more distinctive, unlike other ghost novels that experience a variety of hi plots, but slowly enter the plot, and each layout is very stable.

[Disadvantages]: The narrative is still a little flawed, and the description of the scene needs to be strengthened. Come on!

[Suggestion]: Recommended

[Sweeper]: Kill Mo Yan

[Title]: "Soul Lost Heavenly Master"

[Brief comment]: The language is concise and neat, and the content is rich.

The title, introduction, and opening of the book all go straight to the topic, and the atmosphere is rendered in place. The characterization of the main character is a little slow.

The airport security check at the beginning, the plot of the inexplicable loss of the jade pendant, has a good sense of substitution. The plot arrangement is not compact, but it is interlocking, suspenseful and exciting. I like this tense and depressing atmosphere, there is no bloody and disgusting thing at the beginning, but there is a strong sense of weirdness. The supernatural events in the great text are also relatively fresh, and the Jueshengmen, Mink, and Yin Qi cultivation feel a bit mysterious. The combination of the supernatural and the fantasy makes it feel better.

[Suggestion]: Recommended

[Sweeper]: Internship - Mumu

[Title]: "Soul Lost Heavenly Master"

[Advantages]: 1. The storyline is more attractive. I really want to continue to see what kind of relationship that Hongli has with that family and why he harms them. 2. Give people a sense of tension. It makes people feel like the vest is cold. 3. The author is more rigorous about his work, and he hardly finds typos.

【Disadvantages】:

[Suggestion]: Recommended

[Sweeper]: Internship - Seventeen

[Title]: "Soul Lost Heavenly Master"

[Advantages]: 1. New material selection, the use of the first person, strong sense of substitution

2. The atmosphere is well rendered, and the psychological activities are described in detail

[Disadvantages]: 1. Professional terms should be listed and explained separately

2. The punctuation marks of some paragraphs are incorrect

[Suggestion]: Recommended

[Sweeper clerk]: Internship - sweeping the floor

[Title]: "Soul Lost Heavenly Master"

【Advantages】:

1. The language is accurate and concise, and the characters are vividly portrayed.

2. The first chapter, which starts straight to the topic, is suspenseful step by step, and successfully hooks up with readers. In the second chapter, the difference between the protagonists and the five souls and seven spirits of ordinary people is pointed out in a timely manner, which arouses the reader's expectations.

3. The atmosphere rendering is very successful, and there is a sense of immediacy when watching ghost movies.

4. After four chapters of thrilling, the fifth chapter turns to a loving interaction with Meng Diao.

5. After experiencing the fear of almost being killed by a terrifying nightmare, the protagonist accidentally received the cute mink again, satisfying the reader's sense of gain.

6. Each chapter is broken to the point and whets the reader's appetite.

【Disadvantages】:

The first-person text has a relatively single perspective, but it has a strong sense of substitution.

[Suggestion]: Recommended

[Sweeper]: Wang Xiong

[Title]: "Soul Lost Heavenly Master"

[Advantages]: 1. The plot is arranged in an orderly manner, the narrative is coherent and compact, and the decisive and decisive style of the protagonist is outlined from the perspective of constantly cutting into the most realistic and urgent problems

2. The narrative of the novel reflects a complete and logically related setting of gods and ghosts, and the continuous relevance of this setting portrays the truth and expansiveness of the story more and more profoundly with the development of the plot

3. The enemy is strong and I am weak in the plot setting, the protagonist's clear understanding and planning of his own position in the changes of events, and his best efforts to relax with the rhythm of the plot, and concentrate on the need for tension, so that humor and tension are tacitly combined.

4. Constantly comparing the focus of events before and after, the difference between the daily scene and the situation in which the story takes place, the changes in the state of affairs from which each emotion and action originates, and many details that I have not seen, make the writing of the novel concise but meticulous.

[Disadvantages]: There is no obvious feeling, although I have a sense of rejection of the unknown that I can't grasp, but I don't feel that this novel has this need.

[Suggestion]: Recommended

[Sweeper]: Internship - no book

[Title]: "Soul Lost Heavenly Master"

[Advantages]: 1. The style of writing is relaxed and interesting, and the sentence description is relatively smooth and natural

2. The character is distinctive, and the protagonist is a bit like - [Innocent] ((>^ω^