The best ingredients are stewed in a pot, and the taste of stewed vegetables is commented on "Heaven and Earth War Spirit" by Xenophon

Title: A pot of stewed with good materials, and the taste of stewed vegetables - commenting on the content of "Heaven and Earth War Spirit" (I)

Every time I read the toad's text, I will have the urge to scold him. The interesting setting with the connotation of Chinese gods and demons culture, the all-encompassing scenes from heaven to earth, the endless spell moves, and the dizzying fight scenes, the author's rich imagination has created many excellent materials, but when the finished product is made, it becomes a pot of stew, poultry, livestock, seafood, and seasonal vegetables are blurred and flavored with each other, and it is a pity to abandon them, and eat them, not the taste. Those who waste will be damned.

Evaluating beauties, there is a saying that the degree of fiber fit is too fat, and one point is too thin. It's the same with good writing. The layout of the ingenious idea is too dense to increase the first line, and the first line is too sparse, and the text is old, and the increase is too much and the reduction is too little. Therefore, if a novel should be stingy with pen and ink, and the wonderful plot is not savored, let alone reminiscent, it will be like a flash of light, and when it should be brief, it will be sprinkled with thousands of words, as if in the era of planned economy, buying tofu is not paired with two stinky duck eggs, even if the idea is novel and the idea is ingenious, readers like me, although they will not drop the book and not read, but they will have the idea of flattening the author.

1. Ill-placed explanatory text and overly divergent plots can spoil the feeling of reading.

When Kang Mingyu first met a ghost general, he used the "Red Sun Fire Dragon Talisman" to analyze that statement: This Red Sun Fire Dragon Talisman requires extremely high mana to draw it. Kang Mingyu himself does not have this kind of mana, this Chiyang Fire Dragon Talisman was left by his master for his protection. If it weren't for the last resort this time, Kang Mingyu would still be reluctant to use it. (Explain the origin of the fire dragon talisman) At this moment, the Chiyang Fire Dragon Fu was forcibly launched, and it really has the power of a thousand ghosts. (Fire Dragon Charm Power)

Although this fire dragon is only transformed by Nanming's true fire qi, which is very different from the real divine dragon, it is still extremely powerful for these Yin Soul Ghost soldiers. (It is also to explain the power of the fire dragon talisman, the semantics are repeated with the above sentence, except for the irrigation of water, there is not much meaning, the reader originally pinched a sweat for the little Taoist, and now the attention was diverted, and the tension disappeared)

A crimson fire dragon roared and flew through. The dead ghost general Kang Mingyu couldn't help just now, together with the surrounding Yin Soul Ghost soldiers, the wandering soul was rushed by the fire dragon, and they were immediately scattered. The dead ghost general at the head turned into wisps of black smoke and did not form (the fire dragon talisman is really powerful, and the above sentence is even more meaningless). Taking advantage of this opportunity, Kang Mingyu strode away and galloped away like flying. It doesn't matter that there is a monk behind it.

Looking at the part where Kang Mingyu met the seven masters of Daomen, Kang Mingyu successively worked with the brown-clothed man, the brocade-clothed boy, and the yellow-shirted woman, and finally there was such an introduction: Kang Mingyu didn't know what kind of luck he had hit. The seven people gathered in this small restaurant are the seven most famous masters of the Daomen today. Zhong Chonghong, a brown-clothed man, is the first master of the Penglai faction, and is currently the junior disciple of the head of the drum fairy. Not only is the cultivation of this martial arts extremely high, but the water system spells in the sect, and the attainments of the East China Sea Dragon Trick are also extremely high. (The previous borrowing of the mouth of the young man in brocade has said the Penglai faction of the East China Sea Dragon Trick, and the introduction of the brown-clothed man can be completed in the front.) ）

The young man in brocade, although he looks young, his actual age has long passed the age of 100. His master, Peng Zhu, one of the three immortals outside the heavens, is said to have broken through the realm of heaven and man and cultivated into an earth immortal. The name of Yuwen Xingchen represents the seven thousand disciples of Yingzhou Island. (The origin of the teenager has also been explained from the perspective of a bystander in the store.) ）

And the man in white just now is the missing son of the twelve sons of Kunlun. In recent years, his reputation has caught up with the four masters of the world, and he is regarded as a Taoist monk second only to Zhang Qianyao, the great master of Taoism in the world.

And the woman in the yellow shirt who fought with Kang Mingyu was the owner of the sleepless island who was tied with Penglai and Yingzhou among the three overseas factions of the Daomen, and Zhang Qingye, the fairy of Lingxiao. At this time, his ten fingers were vertical and horizontal, emitting a chilling ice spirit divine light sword aura, which made Kang Mingyu unable to raise his head. (At this point, it was the turn to introduce the main owner who was working with Kang Mingyu, and he was really impatient, and the introduction of the brown-clothed man and the brocade-clothed boy in the previous article was only a few words, not impressive, and after reading it before and after, I only saw a group of masters appearing like a marquee, and I couldn't even remember the name.) ）

Poorly placed captions can distract the reader and affect the pleasure of reading, and inexplicably divergent plots can also make people explode.

is still the above plot, Kang Mingyu entered the restaurant, and there were four characters rendered by the author with more pen and ink, and the line of sight of the white-clothed man Lieqi intersected, and the brown-clothed man Zhong Chonghong, the brocade-clothed boy Yuwen Xingchen, and the yellow-shirted woman Zhang Qingye successively started. The scene was lively and beautiful, but after thinking about it, I found that the image of the seven masters of the Daomen was simply equivalent to a bully who was bullying people, with such an identity, he actually took turns to shoot at a hairy boy. The most hateful thing is the woman, as the owner of the dignified island that never sleeps, the little Taoist priest obviously did not mean it, but made a mistake, and actually jumped up and moved his hands and feet, without ladylike demeanor and everyone's demeanor.

If the author does not have a prejudice against the famous and decent family, but intends to portray the seven masters of Daomen as villains, then he must tear tears of sympathy for the seven masters, and all of them will become puppets in the palm of the author's palm, and take turns on stage to perform Taoism.

Looking at Kang Mingyu after he came out of Jingzhou City, there is such a narrative explaining the cause and effect of the incident: although he wondered why Lie Geri didn't chase after him, Kang Mingyu didn't know what the result of his counterattack was when the two fought. But anxious to find the traces of the new master, Dongyizi, Kang Mingyu did not hesitate at all, and according to the direction in his memory, he searched for the place where the Hundred Bone Dao people practiced the law. (Since you can find the direction, why did you run to Jingzhou City inexplicably and fight with the Yuan soldiers?)

There is only one answer, Kang Mingyu went straight to Jingzhou City, just to meet Bai Yingying. Reminiscent of RPG games to find key characters......

Writing this, I suddenly thought of a joke about early martial arts novels, a certain master picked up a cloth bag from the stool after eating, and there is a long note after the bag, the bag is a master's weapon, originally carried on the shoulder, and untied and placed on the stool when sitting, so here is the cloth bag picked up from the stool.

I couldn't help but laugh three times.

(To be continued)

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It suddenly occurred to me that I had also written a review for the Heaven and Earth War Spirit...... Half of it is still unfinished...... Khan and the others watched the Dream Dynasty......