Pipsqueak, I have a few thoughts on your novel.

First, what is Xiaoyang's style? the all-out attack and defense of the Netherlands, the steel-concrete territory of Italy, the will of the Germanic people, the technique of the Gallic rooster, and the pleasure of Brazil. I don't seem to see Xiao Yang's true style, a good player must have his own style, Xiao Yang's opponents have their own style, Xiao Yang himself does not have his own style.

Perhaps, it's good to have the best of all the best, but if a live player doesn't have his own unique style, he's not a great player. Since Xiaoyang chose the Chinese team, I suggest that Xiaoyang's style should be happy football, happy play, imaginative attacks, surprise tactics, etc. I think Pippi should set a style for Xiaoyang as soon as possible and give Xiaoyang a goal to grow.

Second, I think Xiaoyang's growth should not be technical growth, but also spiritual growth, Xiaoyang has not grown up yet. Should he be infused with something spiritual to make the character really come alive?Will Xiaoyang grow into an emperor superstar in the future?

I can't deny it, but Xiaopi remembers, I don't think Xiaopi should be the invincible Zhou Yunfei, nor should it be the chic and free-flowing Hua Manlou, let alone the defense-oriented 442.

Give Xiaoyang an optimistic attitude to life, a happy live situation, and an imaginative life that can bring the novel to life. Writing a character alive and keeping this character in everyone's heart is a good novel.

Third, Xiaoyang's goal, Xiaoyang's goal should not be to dominate the live world, nor to defeat Xie Hongyu, but to really taste the fun of the live scene. A person's growth is very difficult, Xiaoyang seems to be too smooth, everything is logical, although he has been despised, but I think Xiaoyang is still too smooth.

And it seems that Xiaoyang doesn't have any goals to speak of, he is just a live situation for the sake of the situation, lacking spiritual nourishment. What should be Xiaoyang's goal? I want to say that it is himself. Xiaoyang should not aim for the third place, should not aim for learning what treasure book, should aim for himself, surpassing himself is victory. It doesn't matter what books or quotations you learn, because as long as people create them, there will still be people who create them.

Fourth, Xiaoyang's trick. There are no tricks to win, he shouldn't use other people's tactics, he should use his own tactics, Xiaoyang's creativity is too low. For example, when I play live, I rarely use the same offensive approach in a match. Sometimes long passes, sometimes short passes, sometimes individual heroism, sometimes free kicks go straight into the net, sometimes low crosses, sometimes picks up passes from behind. I think Xiaoyang should not use other people's tricks as tricks, but should use his own creativity and imagination as tricks.

Fifth, Xiaoyang's opponent is very weak, 433 is the first team, but Xiaoyang's opponent seems to be too vegetable. It's like I can win the championship if I go. How to write Xiaoyang alive and how to write his opponent alive depends on the author's imagination and creation. It's not hard to write about a person, but it's not easy to create a living character. Xiaoyang lacks an optimistic attitude, lacks a pleasant live concept, lacks the goal of surpassing himself, and lacks the motivation to move forward [Speaking of which, many leather fans want to spray me].

This seems to be a sick sentence, but how can it be that Xiaoyang really lacks the motivation to move forward. What he fought for. I think we should establish why Xiaoyang is moving forward. It is also important what threads are used to connect the whole story, etc.

Sixth, many people say that this novel is very romantic, but I don't think so. A handsome guy needs the support of a girl, and a girl's heart is actually the strongest, if a handsome guy doesn't have the support of a girl, then I think, he must fail. The romance component is very important, and if you write too many competitions, won't it be boring?

Seventh, I think Pippi should destroy the blood red, not broken and not standing, the blood red is always Zhou Yunfei's, Xiaoyang's own style should be set by himself, blindly attacking and defending the balance will lead to Xiaoyang's lack of vitality. Madness when necessary and perseverance when necessary is a must. The blood red is still Zhou Yunfei's, and Xiaoyang should have his own battle handle. This battle handle should be unique, and it should be Xiaoyang who surpasses himself and flies to the future.

Having said so much, I realized that there was nothing to talk about, so let's write it here.

I wish Pippi's novel more and more success as he writes!!!