Xiao Banxian smiled: "People like me can't be looked down upon by pure monks." ”

The two were talking and laughing to themselves, but Mo Liunian suddenly screamed, and Xiao Banxian immediately flew to her side and asked nervously, "What's wrong?"

Mo Liunian grabbed the little half-immortal's wrist and said, "Little half-immortal, look at them, ......."

The little half-immortal looked at it, the expressions of the innocent and the half-immortal siblings froze in an instant, and a thin layer of ice crystals climbed from their necks to their faces, and their bodies were completely unable to move, and they were rapidly frozen.

Xiao Banxian turned to Mo Yan and just wanted him to be careful, but found that Mo Yan also became motionless, and caught a glimpse of Xiao Fang out of the corner of his eye, and found that Xiao Fang was also frozen.

The entire surface of the lake and the entire valley seemed to be frozen in ice at a breakneck speed.

It's an ice demon! Xiao Banxian didn't expect that it would be an ice demon this time, but also, this heavy snow is the easiest to cover up the aura of the ice demon.

At this moment, the little half-fairy suddenly felt a kind of bone-chilling coldness, and his feet could no longer move, and the little half-fairy knew that it was not good, and immediately said, "Hurry up." As soon as he finished saying these four words, Xiao Banxian couldn't speak, and even his eyes were covered with a layer of ice crystals.

Mo Liunian saw that the little half-immortal was about to turn into an iceman, and as soon as her brain was hot, she hugged her, she only had one thought, if she really wanted to die, let's die together.

But the ice crystals did not climb up her body, on the contrary, the ice crystals did not dare to touch her body, and even the ice crystals on the little half-immortal were rapidly receding.

Mo Liunian didn't know, he just closed his eyes and hugged the little half-immortal, after the little half-immortal's five senses recovered, he saw Mo Liunian in his arms, and the little half-fairy patted her back.

"I'm fine. ”

Hello everyone, what I bring to you today is an appreciation of the beginning of our "Xuanpai Literature Society".

The old members should know that the opening comment is a major benefit of the "Xuanpai Literature Club".

The main core of this benefit is not simply to point out the problems at the beginning, but to look at some deficiencies in the author's creation through these problems.

Including the control of the overall direction, the improvement of the setting, etc., will give certain guiding opinions.

The opening article I saw today just uses some of the concepts I thought about about "systematic texts" before, so I will take it out and exhibit it, and then attach a comment.

If you have a certain interest in the system, you can study it, and I hope it can give you some inspiration.

Chapter 1

Dayan Dynasty, Xuanwu City.

In a spacious and grand mansion, Chen Feng opened his eyes, looked around at the antique rooms, and felt a strangeness, and then there was a strange and familiar memory in his mind, which flashed in his consciousness like a marquee.

"Didn't you die?" Chen Feng shook his head, revealing a bitter smile of self-deprecation.

That's right, he crossed over and possessed the young master of the Chen family who had the same name as him.

In his previous life, he was a senior in country H, but on the morning of the day when he was about to graduate and ushered in his internship, he was successfully touched by an old grandmother, and the verdict was to let him compensate 500,000 yuan, which was a man-made disaster and a natural disaster for him who had no family background and was new to society.

He has no father or mother since he was a child, and he was raised by the old man who adopted him, but the old man died of a critical illness after he entered college, and he didn't even wait for the opportunity to repay the kindness of his parenting. I thought that I was about to enter the society and be able to make some achievements by myself, but unfortunately I fell into a lawsuit.

Unconvinced, he appealed again, but he was about to face a long wait, knowing that even if the final verdict could vindicate him, he would miss out on the best period of career development, like a man from another world.

After years of hard work, he finally saw the light of day, but he fell into the abyss again. So he was ready to meet death, and jumped down, unresolved, but crossed over to another poor person in the True Martial Continent, which made him feel very helpless.

Chen Feng, who was born in this Zhenwu Continent, was once a genius of the Dayan Dynasty.

The aura is extremely dazzling, born with the dragon's chant, leading the nine heavens auspicious thunder, born with visions, since he was a child, he was accepted as a personal disciple by the Cactus Sect, ranking first among all the disciples, and he is a peerless genius.

However, on the night he tried to break through three years ago, everyone focused on him, but there was no genius who was on the rise, only a meteor that fell suddenly. Chen Feng somehow lost his meridians, and he could no longer cultivate in his life, and the so-called genius he once called was like a flash in the pan.

Then, Chen Feng was expelled from the Immortal Gate by his master in public, and his face was swept away.

Later, people learned that Chen Feng's father, Chen Tianxuan, the head of the Chen family, was also missing before that, and people speculated that this was the reason for Chen Feng's unstable mood.

Since then, Chen Feng has been depressed, living behind closed doors all year round, and has completely become a waste.

"That's fine, at least for me, it's a new lease on life. Chen Feng looked at the dilapidated room in front of him, this was the most dilapidated room in King Chen's Mansion, which had been abandoned for many years, but now it was specially given to him, a former genius, to live, and his former room had long been forcibly occupied by his cousin.

"It seems that it is the same everywhere, once a person is unlucky, he is not as good as a dog. ”

If it weren't for the containment of the Council of Elders, the position of the head of the family would have been snatched away by his two uncles, but even so, this Chen Wangfu had already changed hands unconsciously.

After fusing his memories, Chen Feng already understood that he was now in a world where strength was respected, there was no right or wrong, only strong and weak. The strong are the only truth, and the weak are doomed to be deceived by others.

"However, this body is really weak, so completely useless... It's a bit tricky. Chen Feng tried to get up hard, but the soreness made him feel helpless again.

Thinking of some particularly profound faces in the memories that have just been fused, those people are extremely indifferent regardless of their old feelings, and once they lose their power and strength, they no longer regard him as a human being, and at this moment his heart is mixed with an extremely strong sense of anger and powerlessness.

"Ding! Bind the host Chen Feng, the Heavenly Thief System has been successfully activated!" A cold mechanical sound sounded in his head, and the frightened Chen Feng suddenly shook his spirit, and immediately looked ahead, and at this moment there was a light curtain panel suspended in the air.

Host: Chen Feng

Identity: The down-and-out young master of Chen Wangfu

Cultivation: Mortal

Physique: The meridians are destroyed

Item: Starter Pack

Skysteal Points: 0

Chen Feng stared carefully at the panel, the information displayed on it was accurate, and then he aimed his gaze at the words 'Newbie Gift Package'.

"Ding! The system has detected that the host's strength is too poor, if the status quo continues to be maintained, the chance of death in one day is 99.8%, do you want to open the newbie gift pack?"

Without thinking about it, Chen Feng nodded directly, and at the same time was surprised in his heart, this system is so powerful?

"Ding! The Starter Pack is successfully opened, and you will get rewards: Sky Thief Points*100, Number of Chances from the Sky*1. ”

In view of the initial binding of the host, this system will give a chance to transform the physique. ”

Before Chen Feng could think about it, he felt a trace of warmth surging through his body, as if the power of the Heavenly Dao was poured into his body, mysterious and obscure, and the soreness of the past gradually disappeared, replaced by an unprecedented ease of comfort.

"Ding! Congratulations to the host, the Heavenly Thief's Body has been successfully transformed!"

"The host has the body of a thief, and if you kill the enemy in the future, you can convert the enemy's yuan power into thief points and use it for your own use! In addition, when there is a strong person around you to break through, the host can steal the power of the escaped Heavenly Dao with the help of this system and obtain the thief points! Finally, this system will issue a task for the host in a timely manner, and after completion, according to the difficulty of the task, you can also obtain the corresponding thief points!"

"Consuming Heavenly Thief Points, the host can steal Heavenly Dao opportunities, exercises, martial arts, weapons, Yuan Force, including divine generals, and even mysterious adventures that even this system does not know, everything is possible!"

For Chen Feng, this is great news, now that his physique has recovered, it means that he can embark on the path of cultivation again. And this so-called chance from heaven seems to have unlimited potential!

"Summon the Heavens!"

At the same moment, the long sky seemed to be moved by a mysterious force, and wisps of ethereal qi converged towards Chen Wangfu, but the pedestrians on the road could not perceive it, only a few of the strongest people in heaven and earth faintly sensed it, and they all looked at the sky in the distance and marveled.

Chen Feng stood in the antique room, and his feeling was particularly obvious, as if at this moment he had become the center of heaven and earth. He watched the colorful ethereal qi creeping into the cracks of the doors and windows, of different colors, and he stared at the white air flowing in front of him, and grabbed it.

"Ding! Congratulations to the host for gaining 10 points of vitality and being promoted to the first level of the Tongmai Realm!"

Chen Feng is happy, what does this mean? It shows that he can not only obtain exercises and other props through the system, but can even upgrade directly through the system!

In this True Martial Continent, only strength is the eternal law, just like his predecessor, even if he was brilliant, but once he lost his strength, he would be bullied, and even the master who was once proud of him regarded him as a worthless waste, let alone others.

And now that he has the Sky Thief System, he doesn't have to worry!

"Go with confidence, leave your regrets and hatred to me to complete for you. ”

"Those ungrateful villains, the white-eyed wolves who fell into the well, none of you can escape!"

Chen Feng's face was heavy, and what he fused was not only memory, but also the revenge of his predecessor that could not be avenged.

1. Being touched by the grandmother, and then committing suicide with grievances is not very good......

I feel that this protagonist is quite a scumbag, and the first impression is not good, so it may be better to wake up from a sleep and inexplicably cross.

2. What is the reason why the protagonist's muscles and veins are broken?

3. The way the protagonist relies on the system to obtain abilities is too simple, which will lose the sense of coolness and will seriously affect the future plot creation.

To put it simply, even if there is a system, we must follow the principle of "pay to gain".

Otherwise, you won't be able to write a story at all!

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