Author: Short method (with feedback replies from book friends and Guan Pingchao; note: Around 6 o'clock tonight, the ban will be lifted Chapter 18)

It's a good book.

Why? It lies in the author's meticulous craftsmanship of the words, in the fact that the hearts of the author and Zhang Xingyan always beat together, and in the author's love for classical Chinese culture. This kind of text as fresh as pine and bamboo, as light as a clear spring, is rare for me on the Internet. The little childish humor revealed in the text makes people feel even more cute.

The characterization of this book is almost unparalleled in online novels. Whether it is Zhang Xingyan, who is smart and stupid, or Ju Ying, who is not innocent even though he is in the deep palace, or even Rui Niang, who is not a person, and Chen Kui, who is very inward-looking...... They are all living "people". This is the most basic point, which too many online novels can't do nowadays. It's not just the author's problem, it's the reader's problem. When readers are immersed in momentary pleasure, they may become even more empty. Therefore, I would like to applaud this book.

But, in my style, it's always about looking for shortcomings. Although I can't write my own novels well (I've only written 20,000 or 30,000 words so far, but I've revised them four or five times), wouldn't it be nice to talk about other people's novels?

The biggest problem with this book is that there is no clear thread that can tie everything together. Let's take so-sin as an example. I quickly saw the most important conflict--- the battle between the Immortal Dao and the Demon Dao. In this book, Mr. Zhang still works, lives, and studies leisurely...... I don't know if it's 9 to 5?

Some people may say that if it were written like that, the atmosphere of the book would be completely ruined. I said otherwise. The so-called main line does not necessarily have to be so grand, it is the unification of the continent, the war between gods and demons, and the dispute between good and evil--- however, it must have. For example, to eventually reach a deep understanding of the Tao. That's a good thread. The conflict between different immortal cultivators can be written through the changes in Zhang's understanding of immortals, the differences in understanding between different creatures can be written through different exchanges (dragon maids, princesses), and after the story develops, there will also be conceptual conflicts between the immortal cultivators in the imperial court and the folk Xiuxian faction, and Mr. Zhang keeps growing in these conflicts. Looking at the current style of writing, it is closer to the rank of affairs, and far from the novel. As the saying goes, it's almost a chat and a red mansion. Try to write a paragraph: "Zhang's awakening words, less for the hunter, smart and studious, the villagers are praised." One day, traveling with the female chrysanthemum, there are disdainful people in the seat. Zhang negative qi, as " and lyrical. After swimming in the lake, the wind and waves are great, and there are two people in the name, bright as stars. All the beings held a grudge, so they drove him off the boat, but the two of them were fine, and everyone was surprised. "Isn't it like chatting?

I say so much just to show that the current excellent style of writing does not conflict with a clear main line, and there is no need to advance the plot too quickly. There is a way to relax, and the law is formed. When the water flow is slow, it is slow, and when it is urgent, there is no need to worry too much.

In addition, I hope that the author will maintain the current tradition (the distinctiveness of his personality), so that he will write better and better.

This brings me to another issue.

I admire the author's classical culture (I also love these and have written a few, but they are not elegant), but I would like to point out that the background of this book is in the Wei and Jin dynasties, and the popularity at that time was not the poetry of the Tang and Song dynasties, which the author loved. And many of the backgrounds are also inconsistent with the Jin Dynasty, I hope the author will pay attention. Personally, I think that the poems do not need to be revised, and the times can be changed? Of course, the author may have other reasons, and this opinion is only for reference.

The following is a poem for you to laugh at:

A clear stream out of the deep mountains,

No, the giant boat loves the boat;

Mo Dao is lonely and bitter,

Spring comes from the source of peach blossoms.

Where this post is: "Commentary on the Book" of the "Chinese Family" of the "Interactive Community" of the starting point website. A link to the original post of this article is attached at the end of the chapter.

★ Feedback from book friends: The giant boat is also a small boat, who said that this article is a small boat?! Like a red moon

★ Author's feedback: I am very grateful to the book friends for their "short method", and in addition to reading small books, I also took the time to write such a book review with precise views and sincere words. The praise in the article naturally gave me a lot of encouragement, and the shortcomings that I picked out were actually related to my heart. Here's what I think about the main issues mentioned in the article:

On the main issue: Yes, the main line is not very clear now, and there is no violent conflict between good and evil. My consideration is that the protagonist Zhang Xingyan does not bear any fate to annihilate the Demon Dao, as stated in the introduction of this book, "from a civilian perspective", narrating strange and magnificent legends. Of course, there is also a larger main line, in my heart, but the style of writing, the idea is limited, not much has been developed yet, it is difficult to get a glimpse of the whole leopard. Besides, it can't be said that there is no main story so far. It can be said that the process of the growth of an ordinary teenager is a main line, which revolves around the natural growth of a teenager to describe some of the people he met and experienced in the process of growing up.

The words of the "short method" brother can really be described as one sentence: almost chatting about fasting and far away from the Red Mansion. In a letter to a friend two weeks ago, I described the writing of this fairy road as follows: 1/3 * Liao Zhai + 1/3 * Jin Yong + 1/3 * others. Of course, the short brother reminds that he will pay attention to the tracing of the main line in the future - in fact, in the VIP chapter of the fourth volume, the reader can roughly see a line of the protagonist's growth.

In addition, I have to say that the "short method" really understands my small work:

...... For example, to eventually reach a deep understanding of the Tao. That's a good thread. The conflict between different immortal cultivators can be written through the changes in Zhang's understanding of immortals, the differences in understanding between different creatures can be written through different exchanges (dragon maids, princesses), and after the story develops, there will also be conceptual conflicts between the immortal cultivators in the imperial court and the folk Xiuxian faction, and Mr. Zhang keeps growing in these conflicts.

Pingchao can only say that it is too strong, it is really a bosom friend - these are some ideas that I have already brewed, and I will describe them in the future.

As for the poems, I can only say sorry, because although it is not difficult to imitate the style of the Wei and Jin dynasties, I am afraid that the reader will find it boring when it is actually written—the aesthetics of today's poetry are more inclined to like close poetry. Therefore, I took advantage of the causes of all kinds of long and short poems at that time to write some poems in near-body style - alas, this book was originally a fairy tale, a lot of strange scenes, my aunt said it in vain, and the book friends also listened to it~ The matter of changing the dynasty hurts the muscles and bones, and I am afraid the cost is too great.

Of course, in the future, I will try to use some near-body poems as scene poems, and rarely come out of the mouths of the characters in the book.

I like the last poem of "The Short Method", not to mention the brilliance of the poem itself, the meaning of that alone is enough for me to taste - yes, in the process of writing this fairy road, the state of mind is almost similar to that described in this poem - although it is full of loneliness, but I still have to warn myself to be patient and persevere.

Thanks again to the "Short Method" and all the enthusiastic book lovers for their support.

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