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You may think that the pace of this book is slow, but Erma can't help it! Slow work and careful work! Please don't shoot me! Erma doesn't want to write a running book, so he has been trying his best to create a world of magic and swords that is different from other novels in the past! The whole worldview will be carefully studied to make sure that it is not boring and more convincing...... Maybe Fujima is too arrogant, but please forgive Fujima for this little attachment with a tolerant attitude......

Now, the early stage is almost complete, and in a few more chapters, the old otaku will leave the warm nest and head towards the magnificent world! "Tomb Forest" is actually a relatively stable environment, once he walks out of here, he will encounter a lot of wonderful and interesting stories! Stay tuned!

There is also a small request for the two horses here, the so-called one person is short, and everyone is long. While you are reading the book, please also give your opinions and suggestions in the storytelling area! Please!!

Some time ago, Erma saw a cow post on the Internet, although some parts of this article are a bit extreme, but they are very incisive and reasonable. After reading it, it was very shocking to Erma. So, save it so that you can always spur yourself not to make the same mistakes. Now send it out for everyone to take a look at, and help supervise it, so that the two horses don't be stupid enough to have the same problem!

1, (7.29 Correction) Author's pretend**: I don't know why many people with normal IQ can see things at a glance The protagonist has to pretend not to think, the most typical example is a man dressed as a woman. There are also examples, two people often quarrel, and then the girl likes the boy, and then the author has to describe: "A trace of shyness flashed in his eyes", "Inexplicably pinched me (the protagonist's name)", "Or why does she have such an expression?" To tell the truth, if you were really so tall and mighty, handsome and extraordinary, with an outstanding temperament, or calm at all times, would you write this kind of third-rate novel that is not in the stream, and you don't even need dignity for clicks, recommendations, collections, monthly lists, and weekly lists, and beg readers to vote like dogs?

2. The protagonist pretends to be **,Blindly want to design the conspiracy and mystery with many twists and turns.,In the end, ***** found out that it was a farce.,It's common in third-rate fantasy.,Originally, I looked at a person who was very incompetent, and the protagonist thought he was hiding very deeply.,At the end, I found that I didn't go into the stream at all.,The self-righteous calculating invincible hero.。 What's even more hateful is that this kind of bridge is an idiot who fails to calculate, and the author of the pretending ** also loves to let the protagonist make a mistake at a critical moment, which makes people hate itchy, especially in "How the Bad Guy is Made", there is a time in Shanghai, the girl pretends to be very deep, and he is particularly sure, but ***** almost died in the soul group, or his opponent asked the sky to save him to survive, and he was intercepted by the Shanghai gentleman on the road, what do you pretend to be b if you don't have the ability, the author slapped himself really loudly.

3, hesitating, the benevolence of a woman, indecisiveness, and a vague personality. This kind of disgusting can be described as numerous.,A few days ago, someone recommended a "Holy Gate Fengyun", I looked at it in the spirit of saving the trouble of deleting it after reading it, more than half, I really can't stand it. It's just a **, damn, the stronger the strength, the worse the concentration, and I am surprised at every turn, and the reason for the surprise is that "the gods are extremely smart", I*, don't you know that there is a shortage of people on this earth except smart people?

4, will not use power, power is always proportional to the state of mind, without a strong mind will become a slave of power, I don't understand this point, what kind of YY novel to write, don't believe it? If you are immediately given the power of heaven or astronomical wealth, you will use it? In addition to squandering and dominating society at will, there is absolutely no ending. Not to mention this kind of book, it's all over the place, especially the protagonist in "Heavenly Demon God Tan", it's just a sick brain, sometimes it's obviously, killing one or two to make an example or abolishing it all, he wiped out all the people (the one who just came out of that realm), and sometimes when it's time to kill, it becomes forbearance. I said, with the strength of what you all pretend to be **, one by one are poisoned, all of them are Taoguang Yangyu deep and simple, I don't know from which novel this custom began to become popular, reflecting the general mental state of the Chinese who are now lacking self-confidence and numbness. The reason for these protagonists to commit massacres is often to challenge some boring reputation.,Or to breathe a girlfriend or something like that.,It's rare to have a door full of enemies for profit.,That's it.。 Chong Guan is angry and red-faced, I don't object, but you and your girlfriend are in high interest in shopping, and you have a breathing conversation, you make people blurry on the spot, and you can continue to go shopping with your girlfriend, admiring the cold-bloodedness of the protagonist's girlfriend, and it is really as abnormal as the protagonist.

In short,Can't use power.,It's the main reason why the protagonists don't look normal now.。

5, I don't know how to describe people with high IQ, I said author, you don't want to be too white, if you don't have a high IQ, don't try to describe people with high IQ, learn all the knowledge of college at every turn, never forget it, etc. Do you know what it looks like to have a high IQ? Anyway, there will never be a low-level mistake of forgetting something and leading it, not being able to hear the other party's subtext, and not being able to analyze the situation. You've forgotten about the foreshadowing, but monsters with an IQ of 150 or more can remember everything they see. When writing to learn some common sense, this kind of disgusting is the campus two-step song, I doubt in my eyes that the author of Epsom Jiaquan and the IQ he wrote about Epsom Jiaquan has reached the average IQ of Chinese 1096, record the flow account, useless plot you take it all in one stroke, too much nonsense will distract the reader, and will make the reader disgusted "Modern Strange Man" It's such a bad book.,Mom spoils my sister's hair at every turn.,You don't write a messy H novel.,Why are you describing this?,Please write lyrical prose about family affection.,Or in the plot.,It's like a running account.,I can't stand it.。 Every word in the novel must serve the plot, and it can be deleted if it is not for this purpose.

7, don't appear in some disgusting jokes, what a tiger body shocks, exudes the spirit of a king, someone exudes a certain momentum (military momentum, high-ranking official momentum, what rich businessman momentum), that's it, but the protagonist wears a shiver and also has this ability, I'm ashamed, you are a half-sized fart child from the countryside (many of the protagonists in the novel are from the countryside), I haven't seen it in the world, and you have no momentum if you don't have fart experience, I think you have a rustic atmosphere! Temperament is the feeling expressed by the way he talks, the taste he wears, the way he walks, and the strength and capital he actually has, and if Bush wears a hlloktty and pretends to be deep at you, I guarantee that you will not feel the "commanding momentum" on him

8. While doing "big things", he pursues a dull life. This blow is extremely wide.,In order to show that the hero is not fame and fortune.,Don't seek power.,Dedicated to the country.,Just want to save the world and other great and noble purposes.,The hero has retired.,Jiri,You're too noble.,You're too superficial.,I don't know "the big hidden in the court.,The middle is hidden in the city.,Small hidden in the wild",Especially those who take the rise of China as their own responsibility.,It's often the beauty who hides the money when he gets it.,Or it's YY.,The world still hasn't changed.,Boss,You can't write it" Since then, he has continued to use his money and talents to fight for the rise of the Chinese nation." Basically, most of Chinese and foreign novels, regardless of genre and vulgarity, belong to this genre. In fact, I don't think the protagonist must be in seclusion to show that he is morally noble, and high morality does not mean that there is no **.

9, the writing is clumsy, the basic common sense is not clear, please, since you have written in the first person, don't write about the psychological activities of the person opposite, it's disgusting, "The whole audience felt my god-like power, God, what kind of powerful power is this" or "My appearance made her heart like a rabbit crashing, and her heart that had never fluctuated actually produced a ripple" Ridiculously added at the end of the sentence "Of course, I don't know about these" FT! "Inhuman Proud World" was first person at the beginning, and then found it inconvenient to write, so it was mixed with the third person, and then simply blurred the boundaries until it finally became the third person. Why bother? A word of advice, the first person is very difficult to write, not a master, don't try, even half a frog has encountered embarrassment when writing the thirty-first episode of the execution field, you think you are higher than half a frog, how much taller are they?

11, and one more thing to add, the fate of the protagonist who has a good feeling and a bad feeling at first sight in the novel is basically determined, Sun Wukong must know that he must dig out his eyes and step on them as a light bulb, especially for some people just because of a small action of others, they judge that they are "not bad" or "deep in heart" admiration, and you can still see at a glance that your heart skills are so deep

12,(7.29 amendment) continues to add,Regarding the depreciation of ability,If the protagonist of an urban novel obtains superpowers (including internal strength),You will find that this thing is worthless,Every handsome guy and beauty around is a person in this way.,And find yourself just the tip of the iceberg of this world.,So all kinds of supernatural struggles followed.。 Damn,You better write fantasy cultivation directly with such a design.,The most attractive selling point of the superpower class should be to use this ability and normal social contact.,So that there is a sense of substitution and drama.,The fundamental reason for many ** urban novels is due to this depreciation.。 This is reflected in the martial arts cultivation and other genres, that is, the hermit alien is rampant, the so-called "top ten masters of the heavenly list" and "sect master" In these elders of a certain generation, it has become a joke in front of the support group, even Jin Yong's novels, but it is just more reasonable (the three monsters of Shaolin in the sky, the lonely and defeating in the Condor, the proud wind is clear, and the yellow eyebrow cleaner of Tianlong), this is the screenwriter's skill is too poor, the pursuit of balance for the sake of balance, neither want the protagonist to be too weak, nor want the protagonist to be too strong, so he can only subvert what he has written before, and constantly slap himself, the predecessors are one after another, and the strength is greatly depreciated, even Rosen's demeanor cannot escape this spell, the balance issue is too worthy of careful consideration, and the best thing to do in this regard is"Dragon Warrior", the balance system is almost perfect, there is no trace of deliberate carving at all, criticizing "Three Kingdoms Xunjiao" by name, in order to make up the word book, fabricated the role of "Hidden Dragon" Gongsun Long to join Liu Bei (Zhuge Liang was dug up by the protagonist), is it necessary, I have nothing to say about directly returning Zhuge Liang to the original owner.

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13, I thought of one more, there must be some gods and demons in fantasy novels, I am disgusted by the gods and demons, Lucifer's cameo rate is so high that Jesus can be ashamed, you must know that Jesus is the protagonist of the New Testament, and as a result, this guy who fell into the demon world with a third of the angels has become a fantasy almost full-time dragon (even the dragon warrior has ...... In addition, Michael, Raphael, Gabriel, the appearance rate is not low, I say, is it good to use a little imagination, the world structure is too vulgar. Why are there only a few of the seven continents and four oceans on the earth, 200+ countries, and they are all gods and demons every time, alas...... It's too unimaginative. Excellent works can't escape this cliché, such as Inhuman and Dragon Wars. Expect more blasphemy and other writings to appear. －－－on7.27

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14, okay, I think of another one, and it is the one that makes everyone disgusted, taking the plot of the heroine being OO as a sign of the maturity of the work, as a cruel portrayal of real life, as a projection of life's helplessness in the novel, and as an innovation and breakthrough flaunted by anti-tradition. Bullshit, like the Buddha Prince, Werewolf Country, Tiansuo** can't become the Condor Heroes, the Count of Monte Cristo, and the world described by the Dragon Warrior can be called the leader of the dark category, but there is no such plot, but it still makes people sigh after watching it, which is the best proof. Therefore, the maturity of the work has nothing to do with whether the heroine is OO or red apricot out of the wall, as for the author's own ability and experience. There is even a high-sounding saying, at this time, in order to serve the plot, as an opportunity for the male protagonist to mature, I*! A person who matures by such a thing is not really strong at all, Lao Luo has quotes: You can't even adhere to the basic beliefs, you also call it strong? I think so. Learn how a man is strong and mature, and I like a sentence that the golden scale OKY said through the mouth of a monkey: "Responsibility and the understanding of responsibility are a sign of a man's maturity." "For the little whites.

15, the effect of lightning hack on the protagonist in online novels is basically only good and no harm, no creativity, rebirth, soul transfer, time and space travel, boring or not boring. －－－on7.28

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16. When the author is not good at writing structure, or is not good at describing abstract things, character strength, macro things, world background, etc., he will rigidly put his own set of settings in front of him or move them to the book, the most common is such a sentence "It turns out that the world is divided into continents (usually only one piece), countries, they are ,,," and then come "1 crystal coin (or amethyst coin, diamond coin and other things) = 100 gold coins = = 100 silver coins = 100 copper coins" Finally, the most disgusting "swordsmen are divided into: swordsmen, swordsmen (and then the great swordsman, sword master, sword god and the like), knights are divided into (another bunch), and then there are all kinds of messy professional classes" There is an advantage to writing like this, that is, you don't need the author's high writing skills, and when describing the battle, you can say, "The other party is obviously a great swordsman or above" As for what the great swordsman is, imagine it yourself, anyway, it's set for you, just tell you that the great swordsman is stronger than the swordsman.

This kind of author often wants to write the battle picture gorgeously, but it looks like bullshit, and the reader can only fully mobilize his imagination to imagine how "gorgeous" and "powerful" it is. It's really rotten, and fantasy novels that haven't done it like this can basically enter the ranks of excellent works.

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16, hatred of the rich, hatred of the official feelings, although I do not deny that the princes and princesses and those children of the explosive speculators who relied on the country's economic loopholes to get rich in the nineties have almost nothing good, but is it necessary for you to write so exaggeratedly? There is also the description of the children of the aristocracy, which can completely reflect the shallowness and ignorance of the writer, you go to understand some of the existing families with aristocratic blood with a long history in Europe, and see which family can survive for a long time Is the family not strictly educated and attaches importance to cultivation?

Aristocrats (or high-ranking officials, big businessmen) will provide their children with a good home education, so their children may be proud, but generally not imbecile, and generally have a good upbringing (especially nobles, who are generally at least superficially very cultivated), they will definitely not be like mad dogs, seeing who bites whom (directly quoted from the wolf arc)

On the other hand, the protagonists are all sanctimonious, and they never care about spending money on buying things for their girlfriends, this is the face of the nouveau riche (the most typical of the twelve concubines of the financial emperor), and then he hates the gentlemen, and he really laughs at fifty steps and a hundred steps. At least I haven't seen a protagonist who can really be portrayed like a nobleman, with poor taste - everything that is depicted and dressed, either by a tasteful wife, the protagonist has to complain about trouble, or simply attend a high-class cocktail banquet in an ordinary way, others discriminate against him because of the vulgarity he wears, he puts on a show again, and ***** hangs a thin, high title, which is really disgusting! You must know that if you don't dress ceremoniously to go to the banquet, it is disrespectful to the host, which has nothing to do with luxury and publicity, but think about the composition of these online writers now, I don't want to say anything, I don't have basic literacy and dare to write things, I --- on7.29

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17, face-painted characters, "insidious", "wooden", "scheming", "bold", "barbaric", "ruthless", "gentleman", "high-ranking official", "pervert", "French", "Taiwanese", "Japanese", especially Japanese, the appearance is inevitably accompanied by obscene, short, perverted images and the line "バカ" (Baga), when you die, it must be accompanied by a prayer to Amaterasu or Yaqi Orochi, it's too boring. Write the character with tags, and the level of the work will never improve. －－－on7.29

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18, reversing black and white, in martial arts, whenever it comes to the white way, they are all hypocrites who are sanctimonious, pretentious, and only hold meetings and do nothing. In the fantasy, Lucifer always rebelled against the heavenly realm in pursuit of freedom, Michael and others were always narrow-minded villains, or a big country chauvinism, beating mandarin ducks, hating because of jealousy, and the protagonists usually joined the demon world against the heavenly realm, alas...... Now that the light has become a place of filth, can't you experience that feeling that is far beyond human emotion, transcendence from the world, betrayal, hatred, love, jealousy, vanity, these are all things that only human beings, and the Almighty Creator does not seem to have endowed his apostles with these human emotions. There are so few books that can write this, and alas, "Dragon Warrior" is a positive representation ...... such an analysis finds that the Dragon Warrior is excellent in all places, except for the fact that he has not been able to see the whole picture so far.

The earliest people wrote that decency was sanctimonious and deceived the world to steal fame in order to reflect people's true temperament, and now online novel writers draw tigers and do not become anti-dogs, and they are too fake.

This kind of ideology comes from the current Chinese social ideology, and it is inevitable that the text will violate the ban, so I will not analyze it, everyone can understand it, and if you don't understand it, you should not see it.

Anyway, don't think that you are all ancient dragons, but unfortunately you can't write Jiang Beihe, and you can't write Long Xiaoyun, your pen only has dissatisfaction with society and full of complaints reflected by changing direction.

19, and I don't know why the protagonist is afraid of guilt, maybe it's hard to find a Chinese girlfriend now, all of them are afraid of melting, holding for fear of falling, so projected into the novel, the protagonist is a woman playing a little sex, principle, IQ, and will are gone, and seeing a beautiful woman is a pig brother, as for it, I think I'm a pervert, and I have to see and contact a lot of beauties every day, but I never show my pig brother appearance to a beautiful woman, and I won't even look at it a few more times, that's it, think about what you look like in reality, and when you see a beautiful woman, you will be a pig brotherEspecially when the protagonist has a high status or has been through strong winds and waves, and his mind is very mature, this is even more incomprehensible, and I can only say that the author who writes about this kind of protagonist who forgets his soul at the sight of a woman is writing with his lower body. －－－on7.29

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20. I like to do idiotic things when I fight. For example, shouting the name of the move, or shouting or something, it is purely SB

reminds me of the idiot anime "Saint Seiya", which is a classic to the point of being a mess, and the lines that must be there every time you fight are "what", "impossible", and "useless". "How is that possible?" And then there was Seiya Idiot yelling "Pegasus Meteor Fist", I couldn't stand it, it seemed that modern fiction writers were poisoned, and the war was written to death by idiots. I think that the dialogue of a classic battle can only be the dialogue that serves the battle, and the dialogue that serves the plot should be placed before and after the battle. At the moment of life and death, there is also a heart to explain the performance of moves to the injured enemy, to give the enemy a chance to breathe, I can only say that this character is an idiot, and wants to put the name of the classic move you designed, please put it in the narration. I think the most classic description of the battle in the online novel is "Dragon Warrior" from DARK to see the emperor's poison hair, and until the battle in the return of the eight changes of the moon, which vividly embodies hatred and despair, and releases the contradictions that have accumulated for a long time at once. Anyway, I choose to watch the results of this kind of boring battle, and it's better to watch cartoons, play games, or watch Hollywood movies to find excitement. －－－on7.29

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21, if the writer who writes fantasy divides the elves into "natural elves" and "elemental elves", then he must be an ignorant guy, usually said that the slender and handsome, superb archery skills, and indisputable race is called LF in English, translated into Chinese should be written "elf", and the kind that helps the protagonist use magic, in charge of a certain system of energy Dongdong is called "ltal" in English from the elements of ancient Greek, the power of nature, translated into Chinese should be called "crystal spirit" These novelists with little common sense don't know which game to play (inferred to be eternal legends), and as a result, the two things are mixed together by force, and the explanation in "Jupiter's Phantom War" almost choked me at the time, and I was interested in flipping through it.

In terms of false rumors, most of the people who write fantasy now have completely mixed these two things together, and I can only be helpless about this. ”

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22, after being ambiguous for a long time, he finally pushed the woman into someone else's arms, thinking that he was Li Xunhuan, he was really not a man enough! Wu Ailin filled the emptiness with each other like that in the golden scales, and then fell in love with Zuo Fart. The most disgusting protagonist obviously has a wife, and he doesn't accept the life or death of the other woman, and in the end, in order not to embarrass the protagonist, the ***** woman found someone else to marry, or honestly waited for her sister alone, really**. "Otherworldly Search", "Only I am an Immortal" is a representative of this kind, it's so disgusting, it's better to die than like this. (0n.7.31)

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23, there is also the protagonist's "Wang Bazhiqi" released, or the "Tiger Body for a while" in the future, the famous general of the famous town continent, the little brother of the protagonist with a lot of titles and titles, is here, it is better to be single-handed...... Is it the little brothers who are cheap, or is the IQ low? The low IQ can't become a famous general, the Magister, then it can only be explained as cheap......

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24, related to the previous article, why do the protagonists in novels rarely have friends now, they are generally younger brothers, or they are bad friends, it is difficult to find the kind of friends who have difficulties to help you in reality, and are silent without difficulties. These writers who spend all day on the Internet are probably withdrawn, autistic, and lack self-confidence, because they have no friends and no achievements in reality, so they are here YY

25, the title of the book is not vulgar, the general title of the book if the definite words appear "Creation", "Online Game", "Rebirth", "Underworld", "Leisurely", "Merry", "Encounter", "Beautiful", "God and Demon", "Holy Demon", "Another World", "Fengyue", "City" of Xiuzhen, or what appears in the subject, "Rogue", "Rogue", "Demon God", "Emperor", "Flowers", "Color", and the subject and subject can be, such as "Immortal Demon", "Fengyun", "Hunting Yan". Regardless of the reviews, these books are all vulgar, clumsy, negative, or idiotic, except for a few of them with such names. Several of the above terms can be found in the books of these names. Of course, there is no shortage of "selling mutton with a dog's head", such as a memorandum of understanding and the like, everything is not absolute, but there are rules at all. In the general name, the "of" is either the author's first time writing, or it is a ** author.

The title of a book is the façade of a book, how can it be nonsense, without a good title, the book is easy to give a bad impression.

Recently, I have gone down to some**"Urban Godman", "Holy Gate Fengyun", "Urban Ability: Merry Boy Nie Feng" (this accounts for all), "Demon God Purple Star", "God and Demon Change", anyway, I can't stand these books, ** to death. Let's take a look at the title of the book

I don't want to have a good title, but I can see that there are tens of millions of words...... If the title of the book is not good, the attitude of writing is not good.

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25, Explosive Bean Atmosphere: The protagonist's strength is not good, but he doesn't know whether he wants to provoke a strong enemy, or because of various SB reasons, he will lose his advantage, he can't beat it, and he doesn't know how to self-reflect, complaining about what people say, "I'm unwilling", "Why can he control my life and death", "I want strength", "I want to go against the sky", "I want to live" ,So the author heard the howl of his believer.,Give a miracle.,The protagonist broke out in the small universe.,The combat power is doubled.,The incomparable reverse angle of B KO.,You say he always has to pay a price like this.,No,The protagonist not only won't have sequelae,But also "because of this experience between life and death,Realized,From then on, the strength has been raised to a new level...... or what is in the protagonist's body, "Ancient Divine Beasts, the bloodline of the ancient gods or seals, the explosion of the small universe will be stimulated, and it will become stronger and stronger......" , This "explosion" that Saint Seiya began to "explode" is really disgusting, even if you want to experience any feelings between life and death, the opponent's strength can't be too different.

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26. I don't know how to write bad guys: while saying that I am a hooligan, I am shameless, I am despicable, I exterminate humanity, while doing good deeds, worrying about the country and the people, and feeling the cruelty of the world, this kind of protagonist is more disgusting than the protagonist who fights for dominance in the world and makes money while cultivating demons and martial arts, while saying that killing people is for survival. (The best boy is disgusting enough) has already labeled himself as a hooligan.,Demonic means.,It's good to be dark.,Look at the sanctimonious guy on the other side is more ruthless than you.、(This is a real hooligan novel.,Not a pretending hooligan novel)

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27. Shopping with women is really tiring, not necessarily, but you have never felt the happiness of strolling down the street with your loved ones and rejoicing in some discounted promotional items. Those who have transformed their bodies will not get tired, and those protagonists who are strong-willed and will not be annoying, no matter from a physical and psychological point of view, they can't understand the feeling of smelling and shopping and changing colors. About shopping, on "The Days of Living with a Flight Attendant" Write the best, don't write yourself one by one more men, how unsuitable for shopping, in fact, this is a kind of don't know how to love your girlfriend Xiàn, you don't know how happy they are when they see you helping her carry a big bag (of course, the loser girl who is dedicated to making you pay the bill is not in this category), mentality analysis, this kind of author is usually a virgin, or even a person who has never been in love, I heard others say that it is very tiring to go shopping with a girlfriend, in fact, people tell you that this is just a modest show-off. But you take it seriously, go and fall in love first, and then write **, don't be disgusting.

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28, I myself never read online game novels, but does online games have to be virtual reality to be the basic condition for creation?

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29,(8.12) does not describe love, this is probably the most criticized place, in almost all literary works, love is an indispensable part, but few people have mastered the method of describing love. Although I don't think I can get to the point of twisting it easily, it's just that I can't stand those psychological descriptions to write about love. It's really boring.,Love.,The highest level of description is to have no tricks to win.,Write the dialogue and action.,It's best to let the reader parliament.,The inner world of the characters is written out It's very fake.,Because there's no space.,And lose the uncertainty of love.。 There is a saying that is widely circulated by everyone, but few can really be reflected in the text - "no one can say exactly what love is", in this case, why are the protagonists of these authors all reflecting on why they fell in love with the girl in front of them. As long as there is a girl's true feelings for the protagonist, a large section of mental description, reflection, and self-breakthrough will come, which is really boring. Psychological description of this thing should not be excessive, too much is very fake, human thinking is very complex, and the text has a high degree of precision, why use precise things to forcibly describe vague things. Therefore, when it comes to the description of love, there is no trick to win!

30, (8.18 add) add another ridiculous and generous common sense error, the authors of the little white do not know much about the origin and development of European civilization, or even do not understand at all, when writing Western-style fantasy, they make up the names of countries. So the joke came that the supreme ruler of the "principality" was actually a king, or an emperor. I'm dizzy, do you know what the principality is?

Take a look at the citation point

Qot: Principality:

After the Holy Roman Empire was divided into three, Europe was divided into territories full of princes, such as Italy, Germany and Russia did not have a unified state, a large number of nobles continued to use the noble titles left behind, and relatively independent territories, such as the marquis's princely state and the duke's duchie, to the Middle Ages, the situation gradually became clear, France and Britain strengthened the centralization, France later evolved into a kingdom, although the nobles in the territory still have territories, only the fiefdoms, no longer have the right to complete independence, Italy is gradually divided into many city-states, Some of them are still governed by dukes, such as the Duchy of Milan, and Germany is still divided, and some of the duchies have developed into grand duchies, such as Poland and Moscow, and Russia has been crowned by the Orthodox Church after it has grown and abandoned the title of duke, Austria is also a grand duchy, but Austrian Prussia and a large number of small states of the Rhine Confederation together form the Holy Roman Empire, among which the electors with the right to vote for the king are called electors, and the more famous ones are the Duchy of Weimar (Goethe's homeland) and the Duchy of Bavaria, where the emperors of the Holy Roman Empire were chosen by the kings of each country from among the electors and crowned by the pope, and among the many small states of the Rhine Confederation there were both principalities and princes.

The head of state of the duchy is the grand duke (the grand duke is the duke, but not all dukes are called the grand duke, only the prince and the head of the duchy are called the grand duke), the duchy is similar to the vassal state, but not exactly the same, the duchy is an independent state.

The word "kingdom" is the same, and each has a specific historical background and reasons for its formation. The reason why kingdoms and principalities exist on earth are because they have a common root - the Holy Roman Empire. So Xiaobaimen will make up for history first. I want to laugh when I see the "famous generals of the principality" in "The Proud Record of the Aliens", and some people stupidly ask, when will the principality be established? I don't think Cohen will be stupid enough to demote himself from emperor to duke. Mingmei may have noticed this problem, or maybe he threw away this foreshadowing at all, anyway, the book is almost over now, and he has never mentioned the "principality" again. Since I talked about this issue today, I will pull it out and expose it. +

Also to correct the previous historical errors:

Qot: "The Holy Roman Empire in the 4th and 4th centuries BC." ”

The Holy Roman Empire was founded by Otto the Great in 962 and is known as the Holy Roman Empire of the German Nation or the Holy Roman Empire of the Germanic Peoples. You should be referring to the ancient Roman Empire, which is called "the Senate and the Roman people". Legend has it that Rome was founded in 753 B.C. and entered the era of kingship. In 509 BC, Rome overthrew the king and established a republic, and in 27 BC, Octavian was given the title of "Augustus", and the Roman Empire was officially established. This Roman prefix does not contain the word sacred. If the word sacred is added, it is the invader who led to the fall of the Roman Empire, and the state founded by the Germans. Deutsche.

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31,(8.19 Additional) Now these authors,As long as you encounter H plot, it's "hot", "doppelganger", "firm", "jade pillar", and then it's "Snow Peak", "Snow Buttocks", "Flower Path", "Garden", I said, can't you be generous, who did you learn from this, or you just jump over, come to a "after a **" and "after one night", or you have something new, to be blunt, now you haven't seen anything, why pretend to be a good person? Occasionally play a beautiful game, you use these Fengyue words, lustful but not obscene, the whole Fengyue vocabulary is a hypocrite. This trend is from "Wind $V Moon V Big ~ Lu VV"**, and the whites have made a painting tiger and not become an anti-dog, which is really **. "Dragon Warrior" first had a colorless version, and then the frog stopped writing, "Jiri, isn't it just writing a yellow book?" To quote OKY's point of view, I'd rather be a real villain than a hypocrite. Pretend to be an elegant author, what do you pretend to be**?

33, (8.29 addendum) specifically for the "Three Kingdoms of Commerce" to say something, the Three Kingdoms of Commerce is very despised in the tradition about the lack of a tile on the house, deliberately leaving flaws, deliberately imperfect, etc. However, he also pulled in the siege of the three missing one, and strictly disdained it, and the three missing ones were psychological warfare, and all sides were all around, so in order to survive, the enemy must fight to the death, leaving a way to live, then the enemy was bent on escaping, and there was no will to fight, and the army could take advantage of the situation to cover up and reduce casualties. Read Shang San again and find that many things look unpleasant, forbidden Zhou Yi? and do not say anything else, how to say that this is also a kind of traditional Chinese culture, more is also rich in the unique overall philosophy of the Chinese, Chinese medicine also has many theories, such as cold and summer, yin and yang, etc. from this, yes, yes, Ya simply rejects Chinese medicine, you must know that many diseases Western medicine is helpless, but Chinese medicine can delay. The philosophical concepts of the two are incompatible, Western medicine starts with the lesion, and Chinese medicine regulates the overall immune deficiency of the human body.

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34,(9.3 Additional)Self-deception,The author himself writes a vulgar paragraph in the article.,And then add a parenthesis at the end (Reader: Evil ~~ Author: Everyone should get used to it.,He's so shameless) This kind of thing.,It's really boring.,The author loses the protagonist.,What's the difference between performing five and one on the street.。 Write in the first place, keep making some brackets and talk to yourself, and now the reader is much more disgusted, and I don't feel at all when I look at this kind of vulgar paragraph. There's a fandom called "I Came to the Holy Demon Continent".,Damn, I'm tired of watching this kind of thing.,Throw it.。 Everyone wants to play creatively, just make a symposium or something after writing each episode, and don't entertain yourself in the article, it's really boring.

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35,(9.4 Additional) Add another common sense question,Those protagonists who travel to ancient times are generally indiscriminate.,For example, Huangliang Three Kingdoms was named after the place name of his hometown.,Three Kingdoms Houhei gave Dian Wei the "Xiaoqiang". Such as Xi Zhicai, Gao Shun and others are even more varied. Big brother, the ancients had regular words, either complementing each other with the name, or the opposite meaning of the name, looking at Cao Cao, the word Mengde, Cao, ethics, ethics is not morality, so people are called Mengde, Cao Ren, Zixiao, Zhang Fei, Yide, Guan Yu, and Yunchang. This is complementary to each other, and there are also such as Han Yu, the word retreats, don't remember much. How can the little whites come in chaos, Yan zhòng 鄙shì. Please travel back in time to ancient times, don't show your feet during the census of the Time and Space Administration. (PS: There is still an hour 9.4, this is tomorrow)

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36,(9.6 Additional)Too much explanatory text, affecting the fluency of the article, whether it is in parentheses or outside the brackets, too much explanatory text will affect the fluency of the article, especially if you are playing, brackets, start to explain the principle of the move or the author's setting, just like watching a martial arts movie suddenly paused. Then a host popped up and shouted "CT", and after an introduction, he shouted "acton". Very depressed.,The more representative is the otherworldly emperor line (parentheses),The legend of the tycoon (direct explanation of the school),The tycoon is a good book.,It's because some places are too professional.,The explanation is more verbose.。 Slightly less affinity. Its author's political judgment is very good, and he is also very knowledgeable, praise one.

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37,(9.6 Additional) (Proposed by Brother Essay) Qot: Language Communication Problems ~~~ Obviously the protagonist is an ordinary person at the beginning ~~~ (Maybe you have to deliberately render "ordinary" ~~~) Then officially started yy ~~~ Suddenly found that the protagonist did not have any communication problems after going abroad~~~ There is no cultural generation gap ~~~ An ordinary person has limited English ~~~ can actually run around and talk everywhere~~~ Of course, there are hooks up everywhere~~~ Some outrageous encounters with beautiful women PC pads and the like are all understanding Chinese ~~~ The strongest thing is to see a certain author move the classic passages of Chinese into the text ~~~ These authors love to use a parenthesis in order to facilitate the use of Chinese later, and then what idioms and allusions pop up. There is no grammatical habit of Westerners at all, and I am depressed to death. This is a good point for the Inhuman, and the conversation in the middle of the conversation is very similar to the style of the European aristocracy in the past, but since reading Alexandre Dumas's book, I hate this way of speaking, and I don't think it's strange to speak in French and Italian. Translate those honorific titles, as well as the self-centered, unstoppable feeling of speaking that foreigners have to offer, but they are unpleasant to look at and procrastinate. Cultural differences, foreigners love to speak with their heads held high, their chests held high, and their tone is arrogant to show themselves. We who are accustomed to a culture of humility cannot understand it.

38,(11.18 addendum) (Non-time-traveling protagonists rarely have clear strategic goals, and they are generally not protagonists who drive the development of the plot.) So everyone likes to use "the gears of fate start turning", I said, can't you let the protagonist be the mastermind behind the scenes, and push the boss of the wheel of fortune or something?

The anti-heaven in the power of light is not interesting, but the anti-genius in the strategic vision is good-looking. For example, the time travel category is aimed at unifying the "troubled times of China" and "changing modern history", while the rebirth class such as "Live a Good Life" in "The Legend of Rebirth" and "The Rise of Hong Kong Films" in "The Legend of the Tycoon". How good, always stick to one main line. There is a game called "Legend of Fate 2", the protagonist's goal is to become a hero, which is a bit vulgar, but it's much better than those who "eat and wait for the dead bubble beauties, and find happiness at ease". "****" likes one, calling on everyone to write a black-handed protagonist to ensure that it is a blockbuster. But don't be self-defeating and write it as a pretending ** type or a stupid ** type

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39. (08.1.2 Additional) Bad paragraph written in urban novels, the protagonist and the woman are eating in the house, and someone happens to visit, so in order to avoid embarrassment, the woman hides, and the visitor will find the woman almost without exception after coming in. And I found that the reason was basically that the tableware on the table was confiscated, or there was an extra pair of shoes in the entrance, vulgar, vulgar......

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40. (2.26 additional) The characteristics of the intermediate protagonist who can't stand it. Why haven't I seen an ambitious protagonist, even if the protagonist of the crossing is an emperor, he also has the purpose of making beauties or saving China. And the protagonists of urban novels are even more scornful of power, or they are forced to do so. It seems that in the eyes of everyone, it is more important to be carefree and beautiful. I really can't stand it, and I really want to read pure revenge novels. Or novels that are purely for the realization of ambition or **, can give away beautiful women as things, and treat love as dung. I'm please, don't write a mold printed protagonist anymore, how can it be the same as the standard production line!Call for diversity, call for challenges and breakthroughs, call for ambition**, call for revenge, call for trampling on love!

41. (08.1011) Remembered by clodb74's post

There will always be some religious organizations such as temples mentioned in the fantasy books, which have their own armies, and some even have the right to rule, but they hide filth and dirt. Moreover, the three or five countries mentioned in the Xiaobai book, judging from the fact that they do not fight many wars, do not have the historical conditions for the formation of such religious organizations at all. It makes people laugh at once, let's take a look at the rise and succession of Western religions in reality, and the reasons why religion is in power

In ancient times, the divine power was greater than the royal power because the decadent rule of the Roman Empire was overthrown by the Visigoths of the Germanic people, and the decaying Roman temple was replaced by the new Christianity when the royal power was in an era of instability, so the royal power had to recognize the status of Jesus' state religion around the 4th century. From then on, the theocracy broke away from the control of the king, and began a long period of religious rule.

The decay of religion refers mainly to the Roman temple

The strength of religion mainly refers to the Catholic Vatican

Xiaobai doesn't understand anything, scribbling, if it weren't for the instability of the king's power, how could the divine power have a chance to stand up?

(08.10.8) I put up with the foul language of the little white authors, I was overly depressed at school, and the tutor of the only child was really flattering. This is your own question of suzhì. But please, if you are ignorant, you can hide it, and don't show it off. A few days ago, when watching a certain poisonous weed, an ancient girl asked the protagonist: "What does 'I rely on' mean" The protagonist pretended to be B's answer: "It's my hometown dialect, relying on it means a kind of venting." I immediately sprayed, come on, Teacher Yuegui is here to solve everyone's doubts, and see what the words that everyone has been talking about all day long think are harmless

42. (08.6.27) Everyone loves to pretend to be poets, and the heroine sometimes expresses that she wants to draw a line with the protagonist for reasons of necessity. Or maybe it's just that the protagonist misinterprets the meaning of others. The protagonist looks like the whole world is doing something to him, and then runs to chant some inexplicable poems, then smashes the glass and flask, and then smirks "chicly". I said who learned this from, pretending to be B was struck by lightning, and I don't know if I know it. Sour or not......

43. (08.6.25) I've always wanted to say that apart from the traversal and the reborn, there are very few protagonists who can take their lives into their own hands. (It's okay to export the SByy protagonist who is wandering around with Wang Baqi is not in the discussion). Their common characteristic is that their life course is pushed by other people or things, such as "Evil Awe-inspiring" that ended this year, the protagonist probably never thought that he would embark on such a path as a Chinese gangster in Canada, right? There is also the dust of history, always carrying the black pot, betraying others, and embarking on the road of fate arranged by others. Such a book is structurally failing, and there is a sense of depression that today does not know how tomorrow will be. The protagonist should have a goal, or an ideal, or explicitly or implicitly. Then there will be a hope, a theme. In ancient and modern times, most of the protagonists in good novels have goals or objectives, such as the revenge of "The Count of Monte Cristo", the prominence of "David Copperfield", "How Steel is Made" "How to make yourself into low-carbon ferroalloy", and in online novels, "Golden Scales" is to let "Chinese industry and commerce not be so grandson" (the university was stimulated, and the world market share of Japanese automobiles was more than 70%, and it was stimulated by the smug expressions of the little Japanese classmates. The ideal of the protagonist in "The Legend of Rebirth" is similar to Mr. Lu Xun's abandonment of medicine and literature, what he wants to do for the Chinese, and the support of Hong Kong movies in "The Legend of the Great Gatsby", (uh...... There are many who travel through ancient times, in order to change Chinese history, and so on. They all struggle with a clear purpose, no matter how twists and turns in the middle, how bumpy they are, everyone has a benchmark in their hearts when they look at it. And those books that go with the flow are not like that, a hammer in the east and a mallet in the west, a princess of a small country every day, helping a group of brain-dead orcs to gain human rights, or spending a lot of crystal coins to beat up the dumb kids. There is no structure at all, and some authors' writing and insight are already extraordinary, but this is very poor, so the book still makes people look at it. The goal of the protagonist is, in most cases, the theme of the novel, don't always let their fate be rounded and flattened, the last stream!

44. (08.6.17) The reasons for the protagonists of various novels may be different, whether it is practicing the trick and being favored by a certain ancient god as a prostitute, or being favored by an old monster who is overflowing with futile desires, or "unintentionally" recognized by the elements. In short, these heroes who wander around the world in a chic way and eat and drink without worrying have a peerless magic weapon with the same function. You say it's a holy sword? Phew, that's a big thing. The protagonist is invulnerable when the knife is lost, you say the god armor? In fact, it is a very inconspicuous thing, some are worn on the fingers, some are pinned to the waist, and some can be grabbed out of thin air, haha, you guessed it, that's right! The names may have their own merits (Nine Dragon Rings, Qiankun Rings, Dimensional Bags, and Mustard Sumeru are generally these names), but there is only one function, which can hold all the things that a person wants to use. No wonder the protagonists love to go around.,Put,Nonsense.,Don't worry about luggage, I also love to travel.。 With this summary,The hero's army can even be grandiose without a supply line.,No wonder all kinds of surprise attacks with less wins are done by the hero.,Cheating! With this thing,It doesn't reflect the hardships of the journey.,It should be resolutely resisted.

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