Recently, 101 writing found a problem, when the characters are talking and interacting together, just the action, demeanor and dialogue content, how can the characters be so dry, no emotion, and once the dialogue scene is too long, it will be boring, so I turned out Jin Yong's book and analyzed, haha, there is a big harvest!

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101st rejection (630268437) 2:00:54

Have you come to study the emotions of the characters with me?

Anubis (49974601) 2:01:12

Yes

Rats (359814511) 2:01:13

Sentiment?

Anubis (49974601) 2:01:17

But today is coming to the point

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:01:24

Ah Xiu's face turned red again, and she said in her heart: "You should call me 'Xiu Mei', then I will call you 'big brother'." Pen @ fun @ pavilion wWw. ｂｉｑUｇE。 info" But after all, his face was tender, and he couldn't say this, and said, "You can just call me 'Ah Xiu'." What do I call you?" Shi Potian said: "You can call it whatever you like." Ah Xiu smiled: "I call you a big zongzi, are you angry?" Shi Potian smiled: "It's very good, how can I be angry?"

Rats (359814511) 2:01:26

Let's talk about it

101st rejection (630268437) 2:01:47

Ah Xiu's face turned red again, and said, "You can just call me 'Ah Xiu'." What do I call you?" Shi Potian said: "You can call it whatever you like." Ah Xiu smiled: "I call you a big zongzi, are you angry?" Shi Potian smiled: "It's very good, how can I be angry?"

This Q has been stolen (447939743) 2:01:50

You can learn things and have your own perceptions, so you won't follow the path of your predecessors

101st rejection (630268437) 2:02:03

What is the difference between these two ways of writing?

This Q has been stolen (447939743) 2:02:07

It's a real innovation

Anubis (49974601) 2:02:33

Emotional rendering

Anubis (49974601) 2:02:36

I'm still that word

Burning Love (304193492) 2:02:49

First, man is alive

101st rejection (630268437) 2:02:53

Psychological descriptions are added, and there is a little bit of author explanation

Anubis (49974601) 2:03:10

An idea that was recently written

101st rejection (630268437) 2:03:23

Ah Xiu adjusted her inner breath and said, "Although my grandmother and I have opened up the meridians by you, we don't know what year and month we can recover our strength." Shi Potian didn't understand these things of fire and luck, and he wouldn't comfort him with empty words, but said: "I just hope that Grandpa Ding Busi can't find us, then your grandmother's skills haven't recovered for a while, and it doesn't matter." ”

Anubis (49974601) 2:03:17

The psychological description points are over

Anubis (49974601) 2:03:21

Too much...... It's verbose......

Anubis (49974601) 2:03:30

I'm in line with myself, and I have to change it when I go back

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:03:39

Ah Xiu adjusted her inner breath and said, "Although my grandmother and I have opened up the meridians by you, we don't know what year and month we can recover our strength." Shi Potian said: "I just hope that Grandpa Ding Busi can't find us, then your grandmother's skills haven't recovered for a while, and it doesn't matter." ”

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:04:01

This is also to remove the psychological description of Shi Potian, and explain to the author

101st rejection (630268437) 2:04:09

Which one is better?

Anubis (49974601) 2:04:18

It's still the former

101st rejection (630268437) 2:04:28

Why?

Anubis (49974601) 2:04:33

Be brief in both the psychology and the explanation

Anubis (49974601) 2:04:43

One, the conversation flow

101st rejection (630268437) 2:04:58

I'm not going to say short or not, but I'm going to explore why you should include these things.

This Q has been stolen (447939743) 2:05:06

The front is more vivid, but the back is monotonous

Anubis (49974601) 2:05:11

The other, simply narrating the character of the protagonist or supporting character from the perspective of God, is not interesting to readers

Rats (359814511) 2:05:24

The characters come alive

Anubis (49974601) 2:05:27

But when you add a certain amount of psychological description and action response to the dialogue

Anubis (49974601) 2:07:34

Try not to have more than three psychological descriptions of characters in one chapter

Anubis (49974601) 2:07:51

Especially the psychology of two dialogue characters, it is better to use only one of them.

Anubis (49974601) 2:08:04

However, it is okay for both parties to use it, but it is necessary to be in moderation and depending on the occasion

This Q has been stolen (447939743) 2:08:18

You can add only one side to reflect the other side

Anubis (49974601) 2:08:24

Right

Anubis (49974601) 2:08:27

For example, Mong

Anubis (49974601) 2:08:40

For example, information asymmetry highlights the reader's sense of superiority

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:08:50

Shi Potian hurriedly said: "Ah Xiu girl, don't be surprised. I...... I...... I'm not trying to offend you. Next time I won't dare, I really won't dare anymore. Seeing that he was so anxious that the sweat on his forehead also flowed out, Ah Xiu put his left hand in his thick palm again, and said softly: "You didn't offend me." Next time...... Next time...... Don't dare. Shi Potian was overjoyed, his heart was pounding, but he just held her tender little hand so gently, but he didn't dare to put it to his mouth to kiss it anymore.

Shi Potian hurriedly said: "Ah Xiu girl, don't be surprised. I...... I...... I'm not trying to offend you. Next time I won't dare, I really won't dare anymore. For a while, I was so anxious that sweat flowed out of my forehead. Ah Xiu put his left hand in his thick palm again, and said softly: "You didn't offend me." Next time...... Next time...... Don't dare. Shi Potian was overjoyed, his heart was pounding, but he just held her tender little hand so gently, but he didn't dare to put it to his mouth to kiss it anymore.

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:09:09

Do you see the difference?

Anubis (49974601) 2:09:11

The badass aspect is depicted, facing the protagonist,. He misguesses the motive of the protagonist's actions, resulting in an incorrect response. It's a slap in the face

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:09:21

The first one is the original book, and the second one I rewrote

101st rejection (630268437) 2:10:33

Do you see the difference?

Anubis (49974601) 2:10:39

Aren't the two the same?

Anubis (49974601) 2:10:44

You've made a mistake

101st rejection (630268437) 2:10:54

No, you look closely

Anubis (49974601) 2:10:59

Oh, there is

Rats (359814511) 2:11:13

For a while, I was so anxious that sweat flowed out of my forehead

Anubis (49974601) 2:11:15

For a while, I was so anxious that sweat flowed out of my forehead...... Something is wrong

Anubis (49974601) 2:11:30

After the previous full stop is used, the front and back are broken

Rats (359814511) 2:11:32

Ah Xiu saw that he was so anxious that sweat flowed out of his forehead

This Q has been stolen (447939743) 2:11:33

The first one is fabulous,

Anubis (49974601) 2:11:42

And this sentence lacks a subject, who

Anubis (49974601) 2:11:53

This sentence must be connected by a comma

Anubis (49974601) 2:12:00

But it's still not appropriate

Anubis (49974601) 2:12:33

Shi Potian hurriedly said: "Ah Xiu girl, don't be surprised. I...... I...... I'm not trying to offend you. He was so anxious that sweat flowed out of his forehead for a while: "I don't dare next time, I really don't dare anymore." ”

Anubis (49974601) 2:12:35

I'll change it this way

Anubis (49974601) 2:12:38

If only I did

101st rejection (630268437) 2:12:42

No

101st rejection (630268437) 2:13:03

The difference is that the heroine acts by seeing the other party's reaction

Anubis (49974601) 2:13:26

It depends on the perspective of the object you are describing from

101st rejection (630268437) 2:13:33

The effect of my rewriting, the protagonist sweats and the heroine puts her hand in his hand, and there is no causal relationship between the behavior

101st rejection (630268437) 2:13:43

And it lacks the perspective of the heroine

101st rejection (630268437) 2:13:51

It seems that the two are not related

Anubis (49974601) 2:13:52

yes

Anubis (49974601) 2:14:01

But it still has to be related to the perspective overview in the whole article

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:14:10

So, what do these two examples illustrate?

101st rejection (630268437) 2:14:23

Why do you add psychological descriptions and explanations to make the characters lively?

Anubis (49974601) 2:14:28

If it's all from the perspective of the heroine, then your rewriting is inappropriate and a failure, of course, no one will look closely

101st rejection (630268437) 2:14:38

Why is it vivid to tell a story from the perspective of a character?

Anubis (49974601) 2:14:49

This has to be analyzed from the type of narrative

Anubis (49974601) 2:15:06

From TV movies to seeing them with our own eyes, we can make judgments by seeing the demeanor and demeanor of the characters

Anubis (49974601) 2:15:17

It's 3D, or 2D

101st rejection (630268437) 2:15:28

I've been pondering Jin Yong's narrative techniques recently, and I rewrote it myself, and I really found a different flavor

Anubis (49974601) 2:16:03

1D if it becomes the letter. All the information obtained by the reader depends entirely on the writer himself, and if the author does not say it, they cannot make the connection between the previous sentence, or any of them, and the cause and effect of this sentence

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:16:40

I believe that the words and actions of the characters need a motivational explanation

Anubis (49974601) 2:16:39

The psychological description and the analysis and explanation of the motivation of the character's behavior are a rendering of the character's behavior

Anubis (49974601) 2:16:54

In 3D technology, it's rendering

101st rejection (630268437) 2:17:18

If there is no motive, just words and actions, the reader has no sense of substitution, just like watching a play

Anubis (49974601) 2:17:30

The 3D stereoscopic itself is an infinite number of squares that make up the object, and it is necessary to call colors, textures, and textures to reflect the image of the object itself

Anubis (49974601) 2:17:38

The same goes for novels

101st rejection (630268437) 2:17:46

The use of the character's perspective to tell the story has a stronger sense of substitution

Anubis (49974601) 2:17:53

Conversation flow: This is the other extreme

101st rejection (630268437) 2:18:20

Isn't it meant to represent the content of the conversation?

Anubis (49974601) 2:18:23

Speaking of which, you already feel it

Anubis (49974601) 2:18:52

In order to write a good dialogue flow, the cause of the event must be fully reflected in the dialogue, because there is a lack of rendering

101st rejection (630268437) 2:19:04

Well, I used to write character dialogue, which is action + expression, lacking the inner thoughts and explanations of the characters, and it looks dry

Anubis (49974601) 2:19:05

Of course, this process can also be left to the reader's own brain

This Q has been stolen (447939743) 2:19:14

The second one doesn't connect cause and effect, reaction, and looks monotonous and stiff

Anubis (49974601) 2:19:23

It can be said that this is a way after the Japanese anime has been passed on

101st rejection (630268437) 2:19:34

Also, appropriate descriptions of the scenery must be interspersed

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:21:14

Out of more than ten zhang, has entered the depths of the woods, at this time the sun has not yet reached, the forest is filled with a mist, look out of the hazy ground, trees, grass, A Xiu's body, face, seems to be covered with a layer of light veil. The forest was silent, and only two people stepped on the dry grass, making a slight rustling sound.

Ah Xiu didn't answer, walked a few steps, reached out to hold a tree trunk, and cried even more sadly.

Ah Xiu raised her left hand and looked at her palm, when the sunlight shone into the forest from between the leaves, reflecting her fingers as transparent as agate. Shi Potian couldn't help but grab her palm, put it to his mouth and kissed it.

Anubis (49974601) 2:21:18

My way now is ...... Voices, movements, small scene descriptions, bring in characters, start dialogues, intersperse actions and demeanors, and then dialogues, and interact with small objects. Small objects change the subject, and then act

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:21:40

See, here the author borrows the sun, the mist, the woods, the trunks, the leaves...

Anubis (49974601) 2:21:44

yes

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:21:50

The environment and the characters interact

Anubis (49974601) 2:21:59

Scene rendering, if it is simply rendered, will become redundant

Anubis (49974601) 2:22:08

You have to interact with people or events

101st rejection (630268437) 2:22:52

And the last one, the language in which the characters speak can also express a kind of emotion, colloquial and full of emotion

Anubis (49974601) 2:23:07

All these are just theories, and they are only guiding ideologies, and the author needs to know this situation, and then slowly experience and apply it when writing on the ground. There is no point in just knowing

Anubis (49974601) 2:23:18

inevitable

101st rejection (630268437) 2:23:23

I think if you grasp these elements, the characters should not be dry

Anubis (49974601) 2:23:48

I personally write that I find myself with a stream of eyes...... Too accustomed to depicting the look of the character's eyes...... This is not very desirable...... But for the time being, it is still in the process of reversal

Anubis (49974601) 2:23:55

yes

Anubis (49974601) 2:24:00

But there's one more thing to remember

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:24:08

And the mouth, the nose, the movements

Anubis (49974601) 2:24:12

Character ...... determines the usage and usefulness and depth of these renderings

101st rejection (630268437) 2:24:31

Even if you don't write about the actions and gestures, you can add explanations from the author's point of view, which can be accompanied by dialogue

Anubis (49974601) 2:24:31

You first have to have a good character setting in order to play these renders well

Anubis (49974601) 2:24:39

yes

Anubis (49974601) 2:24:55

However, if any method is used alone, it will be routine for a long time, and it is not easy to use

Anubis (49974601) 2:25:04

It has to be used alternately, depending on the occasion

Anubis (49974601) 2:25:28

Sometimes, a single way of depicting also has the effect of highlighting the compactness of the plot.

101st rejection (630268437) 2:25:33

Well, when writing, you have to blend into the situation, and you can see the picture to write, so that it will be realistic

Anubis (49974601) 2:25:41

This is another topic, the action, the demeanor and tone, which sets off the atmosphere form

This Q has been stolen (447939743) 2:25:51

All in all, the lotus leaves set off the beauty of lotus flowers,

Anubis (49974601) 2:25:51

That's all for today, you have to get up early to open your shop

101st rejection (630268437) 2:26:09

I have a question, though

101st rejection (630268437) 2:26:43

The online text emphasizes the sense of immediacy of the protagonist

Anubis (49974601) 2:27:00

I just said that

101st rejection (630268437) 2:27:04

So, do you need to add the psychological depiction of the supporting characters?

Anubis (49974601) 2:27:05

This kind of thing, not too much

Anubis (49974601) 2:27:17

It depends

Anubis (49974601) 2:27:27

When you slap your face, you don't write, how cool is it?

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:27:43

There's no supporting character psychology at all, it's all about the protagonist's side figuring out the psychology of others, okay?

Anubis (49974601) 2:27:48

When you are killed by the protagonist, you don't have to describe how to set off the hero's power in the heart of the person who killed you

Anubis (49974601) 2:27:53

Not good

Anubis (49974601) 2:28:04

That's pseudo-third person, which is a first-person thing

The 101st rejection (630268437) 2:28:12

What are the bad effects?

Anubis (49974601) 2:28:19

The main thing in writing is to use doping

Anubis (49974601) 2:28:33

Why do some people always say that Sanshao is still a god, and the role is always XX laughing and the like

Anubis (49974601) 2:28:45

The depiction rendering is too simple, and the reader is used to it.

101st rejection (630268437) 2:29:14

Well, that makes sense

101st rejection (630268437) 2:29:46

What I just said,It should be regarded as a technique of describing the category.,Alas。。。 I haven't posted it lately, otherwise there will be enough of a post

101st rejection (630268437) 2:31:59

Forget it, let's send it, my hands are itchy, and I can get enough for 40 stickers