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101 On Writing (58) "Setting Off, Accentuating, and Rendering the Difference (Turn)"

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This post 101 tries to take "Zhu Xian" as an example for in-depth analysis to help everyone understand the use of "rendering", "accentuation", and "foiling", because "Zhu Xian" is recognized as a more prominent romance in Xianxia novels, 101 When I read it recently, I was always emotionally fluctuating, sighing for the unfair fate of the protagonist Zhang Xiaofan, and when he broke out, he was excited.

The reason is that the author can make good use of the skills of foiling, accentuating, rendering, and psychological portrayal of the characters.

If your work reads dry, without emotion, without a burning feeling, most likely you haven't mastered these skills.

Okay, let's take a look at the excerpt first:

"Kan" is under the stage, most of the disciples of Fenghuifeng are here, and Zhang Xiaofan also saw a group of senior brothers surnamed Gao. Fenghui Peak is a major branch of the Qingyun Sect, with more than two hundred disciples, second only to Changmen Tongtian Peak and Longshou Peak. Obviously, Feng Huifeng and the others heard something from Zeng Shushu, and they all looked relaxed, and they saw that Zhang Xiaofan was actually very friendly and nodded with a smile.

For some reason, Zhang Xiaofan suddenly felt that the kind smiles of everyone in front of him were so annoying, and they were all a kind of contempt for himself. He walked into the ring with an expressionless face, and everyone in the audience behind him stood on the opposite side of him, this time, even Zeng Shushu was not there, because he himself had to compete.

But even if he comes, he should cheer for his senior brother in the same vein!

Zhang Xiaofan's heart suddenly swelled up with an indescribable loneliness, standing on top of this high ring, looking at the countless eyes around the stage, but he didn't even have a friend.

For what, for what, always face everyone, not even a friend!

The sixteen-year-old boy shouted silently in his heart, bit his lip stubbornly, and lowered his head.

(The above paragraph is a description of the protagonist's state of mind, his loneliness and loneliness, which sets the tone for the description of the scene later, as mentioned in the previous 101 text burning post, what is the scenery and environment in the novel, one is the author's objective description, such as the reaction of the disciples of the wind back to the peak at the beginning of this paragraph, the expression is relaxed, and the protagonist nods and smiles amicably; the other is the subjective feeling of the protagonist, if he is depressed, then the feeling is ridicule, that is, unpleasant.)

The contrast between the two forms a contrast, the objective description is positive energy, and the subjective psychology is negative energy, which is stronger than just writing the psychology of the protagonist. ）

The mountain breeze came slowly and blew on the side of the face.

(This sentence is inserted into the description of the scenery, the gentle mountain breeze blows, the next sentence is a sound, there is a sense of abruptness, and the protagonist's heart jumps, the first thought is Sister Ling'er, this is rendering + accentuation, at this moment, the abrupt bell sound seems to be knocking on the protagonist's heart, reminding him that the senior sister he is concerned about is already in the game.)

First use the gentle mountain breeze to set off the loneliness of the mood above, and then use the abrupt bell sound to set off the hero's sorrow. Imagine.,If you remove the mountain wind and the sound of the bell.,It's just that the hero blindly thinks.,Isn't it a little neurotic?)

"Dang!"

The sound of bells in the distance rang almost at the same time, echoing at the top of Tongtian Peak, far away. Zhang Xiaofan's heart jumped, but the first thought was: Senior Sister Ling'er should also start the competition, she shouldn't be hurt.

Immediately, his heart was sour, and he said secretly: "She can't stand it or not, where is your turn to take care of, don't say that the master and master are there, even Qi Hao also said that he will rush to the opponent as soon as possible." Hehe, solve the opponent as soon as possible, so majestic, so confident, I really treat the opponent as if I have nothing"

Thinking like this in his heart, he forgot that he was also in the ring, until the opponent standing opposite him shouted loudly for the third time: "Senior Brother Zhang!"

Zhang Xiaofan woke up suddenly, looked up, and saw a senior brother standing opposite at some point, tall and mild, but at this moment, when he saw Zhang Xiaofan in a daze, his expression couldn't help but be a little strange.

Zhang Xiaofan's face was flushed, and he only heard a burst of laughter from the audience. (This sentence is a foil, using off-stage laughter to set off the protagonist's flushed face, giving people a feeling of embarrassment and anger.) ）

Peng Chang smiled and arched his hand: "Peng Chang, a disciple of the lower wind back peak, please teach Senior Brother Zhang." ”

Zhang Xiaofan hurriedly returned the salute and said, "Zhang Xiaofan, a disciple of Dazhufeng, has seen Senior Brother Peng. ”

The two of them met the courtesy, Peng Chang smiled slightly, looked Zhang Xiaofan up and down, and then lowered his voice and said, "Senior Brother Zhang, Senior Brother Zeng has already told me about your affairs, I"

Zhang Xiaofan's body shook, and suddenly he couldn't help but burst out: "Senior Brother Peng, please let it go." ”

Peng Chang was stunned for a moment, looked at Zhang Xiaofan carefully, for a while, put away his smile, nodded, and swiped his right hand in front of him, "Zheng", and a sword that emitted red light, almost like a fairy sword surrounded by burning flames.

"This sword 'Wu Hook' is cast with thousand-year-old fire copper, please teach Senior Brother Zhang. For some reason, Peng Chang's whole face was serious and calm, but he seemed to be speaking to an evenly matched enemy.

Zhang Xiaofan felt the blazing aura coming from a long distance, and this fiery aura was strong and strong, which was completely different from the gentle and righteous qi of Chu Yuhong's Shaoyang Immortal Sword of Chaoyang Peak yesterday, and it was a little more domineering.

Zhang Xiaofan's heartbeat involuntarily accelerated, and he was even so nervous that his body trembled slightly when he thought of the outcome he was about to face, but he gritted his teeth, tried his best to control himself, and took out the black burning stick from his arms.

(Peng Chang and Zhang Xiaofan one took out a Wu hook, which was cast from a thousand-year-old fire copper; the other took out a black burning stick, note that this is from the perspective of the protagonist to write feelings, and once again use the contrasting technique, showing that the protagonist is ashamed of himself and feels inferior.) ）

There was a shrill laugh from the audience. (Laughter is a foil, continue to create a feeling of grievance, don't look at the small number of words in this sentence, but the arrangement is very useful here, which is equivalent to saying that a little bit pushes the protagonist's emotions to a climax.) ）

Zhang Xiaofan felt as if he had been pricked by a needle, and his body trembled.

Peng Chang, who was standing opposite him, didn't smile, glanced at the black burning stick, and said, "Senior Brother Zhang, please!"

Zhang Xiaofan looked at this opponent, behind the burning flames, Peng Chang was like an ancient fire god, the whole person was different, the blazing flames caused bursts of smoke to float in the air, and even his face looked a little blurred.

Holding the black rod tightly, Zhang Xiaofan once again felt the feeling of flesh and blood, as if he knew the master's mood, and the cold feeling boiled again.

The black and ugly burning stick slowly rose into the air, leaving his palm, emitting a dark blue light, although ugly, although faint, it stood in mid-air, facing the seemingly unstoppable, omnipotent and powerful flames in front of it, but it and its owner, did not have the slightest intention of flinching.

One man, a burning stick, faced the whole world!

(This is rendering, the author artificially exaggerates the role, like slow motion in a movie, or close-up, to make the reader pay attention to the role of a certain thing, causing a strong resonance of the reader's emotions, of course, this technique must be used under a large amount of pen and ink in the previous article, all the time to build momentum, all the time suppressed, until the reader's emotions are tense, eager to jump into the book to fight for the protagonist, at this time it begins to erupt, begins to turn!101 Seeing this, the emotions began to ignite.) ）

In the audience, the laughter slowly subsided, and people didn't know why, they held their breath. (The audience's reaction sets off the atmosphere)

The huge flame became more and more vigorous, making people not know what it was burning to burn so vigorously, the disciples of Fenghui Peak who were far away from the stage all felt hot and pressing, and the disciples who were shallower in cultivation even retreated, and some people who were good friends with Zeng Shushu and knew the inside story, such as Senior Brother Gao and others, changed their faces, and everyone could see where Peng Chang seemed to be merciful at the moment, completely looking like he was doing his best and fighting for life and death.

The fire dragon grew bigger and bigger, and its fangs and claws almost covered the air above the ring. From a distance, Zhang Xiaofan standing on the stage, his clothes and pants, and even the ends of his hair and eyebrows seemed to show signs of scorching, and it was conceivable that he felt in a furnace at the moment, which was terrifying.

However, the young man stood there, his face pained but unflinching, his eyes fearful but fanatical, and the fire in his heart seemed to burn in his eyes.

With a roar, the huge fire dragon pounced and devoured everything in the world.

It seems like a moment, but it freezes a lifetime. (Rendering, using slow motion to highlight the solemnity of the atmosphere at this moment)

Zhang Xiaofan looked up to the sky and roared, and the burning stick was as bright as a promise, and rushed into the flames.

The loud roar was deafening in the raging flames.

In the audience, Senior Brother Gao and the others looked at each other, and after a while, they fell to their feet and sighed: "How did it become like this!" (The audience was stunned at this time, and the atmosphere was set off again)

"Good!"

The applause was thunderous, and the "dry" position was completely another world. Everyone was shouting loudly, obsessed with the two beautiful figures on the stage.

The glow of the amber and Zhu Aya, and the endless blue light of the Tianya Divine Sword, reflect this place as if it were a fairyland on earth, and it is extremely beautiful. But what is even more beautiful is the two young women flying around, this competition from the morning until now, an hour has passed, and the two sides still have no winner. Especially Tian Ling'er of Dazhu Peak, under Lu Xueqi's Tianya Divine Sword, has been supported by attack and defense for so long and has not shown defeat, which is very surprising.

Needless to say, Tian Buyi, Su Ru, Master Shuiyue and other seniors are all offstage, and even the head Dao Xuan Zhenren is also sitting on the chair, watching the wonderful competition, with a smile on his lips, nodding frequently, and he is very pleased.

Tian Buyi and Su Ru were even more nervous, but seeing that Tian Ling'er's Taoism was smart, he did not fall behind at all, and his heart was also relaxed. Tian Buyi glanced at his wife beside him, saw that she looked nervous, and said softly: "Relax, Ling'er is fine." ”

Su Ru turned her head to look at her husband, smiled slightly, and turned her head to look at the stage again. Tian Buyi shook his head slightly, and suddenly noticed that the disciples watching behind him, and even the disciples of the other veins in the distance, were in a commotion.

He turned his head to look, and for a moment he thought that his cultivation was deep, and he was also stunned for a moment.

(The above plot function is a contrast, with a lively and wonderful fight between the two women, to highlight the tall image of the protagonist, recall that we often see the lively game scene in the movie, the hero walks in with a deep face, and the hustle and bustle of the background at this moment has become a prop to set off his resolute expression, and the cheers of the people around him have become the set.) If you investigate the principle, it is a contrast, and the excitement is used to set off the calm, so the calm is more deeply rooted in the hearts of the people.

Just imagine, a strong character like Tian Buyi didn't even watch his daughter's game, but turned his head to look at the protagonist, isn't it more attention-grabbing?

In a narrow passage where the crowd automatically moved away, Zhang Xiaofan walked over slowly, his clothes were all burnt, and there was even light smoke in some places, and there were large pieces of burnt black everywhere on his face, hands, and body, and a pungent smell greeted him. Everyone could see that he was walking very hard, as if he had exhausted all his strength with every step, but for some reason he still persistently walked forward, walking.

Tian Buyi just watched his youngest disciple slowly come over, and without saying a word, his short and fat body left his seat and stood up, Su Ru felt something, glanced at her husband strangely, and then found that something was wrong, followed his gaze, suddenly turned pale, and immediately stood up.

At this time, more people are looking here.

(The above three paragraphs are all rendered, writing the protagonist from the front, and also contrasting from the side, Tian Buyi and Su Ru's shock.) In fact, it is impossible for a single person to come over to give people such a strong emotional impact, but the author's pen is all about how he walked persistently, although he was scorched and blackened, coupled with the shock and contrast of the people around him, one calm, one shocked, and the effect came out. When 101 first saw this, his emotions couldn't help but get excited, and the stubbornness of a thin teenager seemed to come to mind.

What is he for? Is it just to prove himself?)

Zhang Xiaofan walked in front of Tian Buyi, Tian Buyi looked at this disciple he neglected the most on weekdays, looking at him who didn't know the so-called stubbornness, but a burst of uncontrollable anger suddenly surged in his heart, this anger was so strong that although he tried his best to suppress it, everyone still heard his anger: "Old Seven, which guy actually hurt you so much, isn't it enough to win?"

(This paragraph praises,Use Tian Buyi's anger,To set off the greatness of the hero.,Of course, the hero didn't break out.,And the master broke out.,It's more refreshing!This is pretending.,For example, someone is fighting at school.,Injured back.,The father who has always had a weird personality is angry.,Who beat you like this?As a result, the child said,No,It's me who beat someone else!)

Su Ru's body was shocked, and when she heard that her husband was really angry for this little disciple who he looked down on in the past, she was a little worried, and pulled Tian Buyi, but her eyes immediately fell on Zhang Xiaofan.

On both sides, all the disciples under the Great Bamboo Peak Sect stayed in place because they were too stunned, and forgot to help the junior brother. (The supporting characters are once again stunned)

On the stage, Lu Xueqi and Tian Ling'er were fighting fiercely, and the magic weapon was flying around in the air, and the fairy spirit was awe-inspiring. Of course, the hero's reaction is to take a deep look, and he didn't write too many reactions such as surprise, which also set off his calmness, and secretly pretended to be forced.) ）

Zhang Xiaofan took a deep look at the stage, then looked at the master in front of him, and saw the angry look on his fat face, as if there was still a trace of care.

He shook his head exhausted and whispered, "No, Master, I won." ”

After speaking, he only felt a dizziness in his mind, and in an instant the sky was dark, and he fell to the ground with a thud and fainted.

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Finally, to sum up, in fact, in a fight, there is really not much pen and ink between the two sides, about eighty percent of the pen and ink are used to render, set off and set off the environmental atmosphere and characters, in addition to the psychological activities of the characters also occupy a lot of space.

It can be seen that if a novel wants to write emotions and really move people, it goes without saying what the pen and ink should work on, right?