It's been more than two years since I saw my father, and the last thing I can forget is his back. Pen Fun Pavilion wWw. ｂiquge。 ｉｎfo[1－2]

That winter, my grandmother died, and my father's messenger was handed over. I traveled from Beijing to Xuzhou, planning to follow my father home for the funeral. When I went to Xuzhou to see my father, I saw the mess in the courtyard, and I thought of my grandmother, and I couldn't help but shed tears. The father said, "This is the case, don't be sad, but fortunately, there is no end to the road!" [1-2]

When he went home and sold his gifts, his father paid off the deficit and borrowed money for the funeral. These days, the situation at home is very bleak, half for the funeral, half for the father's leisure. After the funeral, my father was going to Nanjing to seek work, and I was going back to Beijing to study, so we went together. [1－2]

When I arrived in Nanjing, I had a friend who made an appointment to go for a tour and stayed for one day; the next day, I had to cross the river to Pukou in the morning and get on the bus in the afternoon to go north. Because my father was busy with business, he had already decided not to send me, so he asked a familiar tea room in the hotel to accompany me. He repeatedly instructed the teahouse, very carefully. But he was finally not at ease, afraid that the tea room would not be suitable, and hesitated for a while. Actually, I was 20 years old at the time, and I had already traveled to Beijing two or three times, so it didn't matter. He hesitated for a moment, but finally decided to send me himself. I repeatedly told him that he didn't have to go, but he said, "It doesn't matter, they can't go!" [1-2]

We crossed the river and entered the station. I bought the ticket and he was busy taking care of the luggage. There was so much luggage that I had to tip the porter to get there. And he busied himself with them about the price. I was so clever that I thought he didn't speak very beautifully, and I had to interject myself, but he finally agreed on the price and gave me a ride. He secured me a chair against the door, and I made a seat in the purple coat he had made for me. He told me to be careful on the road, to be vigilant at night, and not to catch a cold. He also asked the teahouse to take good care of me. I laughed in my heart at his deviance, they only know money, and trust them only for nothing! And can't a man of my age take care of himself?[1-2]

I said, "Dad, you can go." He looked out of the car and said, "I'll buy some oranges." You're right here, don't move. "I saw a couple of vendors waiting outside the fence on the platform over there. When you get to the platform, you have to cross the railroad track, and you have to jump down and climb up again. My father was a fat man, so it was naturally a bit of trouble to walk over. I was going to go, but he refused, so I had to let him go. I saw him wearing a black cloth hat, a black cloth coat, and a dark blue cotton robe, staggering to the side of the railway, and slowly leaning down, it was not too difficult. But it was not easy for him to cross the railroad and climb up to the platform over there. He climbed on it with his hands and retracted his feet again, and his fat body leaned slightly to the left, showing the appearance of effort. Then I saw his back, and my tears quickly flowed. I quickly wiped away my tears. afraid that he would see it, and that others would see it. When I looked out again, he had already walked back with the scarlet orange in his arms. When crossing the railway, he first scattered the oranges on the ground, climbed down slowly, and then picked them up and walked. When I got here, I hurried to pick him up. He walked to the car with me and put the oranges on my fur coat. So he threw the dirt on his clothes, as if his heart was very relaxed. After a while he said, "I'm leaving, I'm going to write over there!" and I looked at him and walked out. He walked a few steps, looked back at me, and said, "Go in, there's no one in there." "When his back blended in with the people who came and went, and I couldn't find it anymore, I came in and sat down, and my tears came again. [1－2]

In recent years, my father and I have been running from place to place, and the situation at home has been getting worse day by day. He went out to earn a living as a young man, supported him alone, and did many great things. He was so sad that he couldn't help himself. If you are depressed, you will naturally have to send it out, and family trivialities will often trigger his anger. He treated me differently than he used to be. But in the last two years, he finally forgot about my badness, just thinking about me and my son. [1－2]

After I came north, he wrote me a letter in which he said: "I am in good health, but my arm is in severe pain, and I have many inconveniences in lifting a pen. "When I read this, in the crystal tears, I saw the back of the fat, green cotton robe and black cloth horse coat. Alas, I don't know when I'll see him again![1-2]

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Zhu Ziqing's back, you read it

There's a lot of learning in it

The 101st rejection (630268437) 18:03:34

One is the use of contrast, in order to set off the father's character, or to write a pretending father

The protagonist is used many times to flatter his father

At the beginning, the protagonist cried when he heard that his grandmother had died, and his father said: The matter has come to this, don't be sad

The 101st rejection (630268437) 18:04:35

This is very dragging, and my father's calm and spicy personality comes out

The second time was to send the station, the father bargained with the porter, and the protagonist was disdainful, which once again highlighted the father's thoughtfulness and carefulness

The 101st rejection (630268437) 18:05:40

The third time was to buy oranges

Only when the contrast is used well can the people and things you want to portray can be highlighted

The 101st rejection (630268437) 18:06:40

In addition, what is worth learning from this article is the concentrated use of pen and ink

The words and deeds of the protagonist are brushed aside, mainly writing about the words of the father

The father said, "This is the case, don't be sad, fortunately, there is no end to the road!"

I didn't even write what the protagonist said

The 101st rejection (630268437) 18:08:14

I was going to go, but he refused, so I had to let him go.

This is also abbreviated

I don't know how to use pen and ink intensively, and I can't write it lightly, so it's recommended to take a look

In the end, it is worth learning from the foreshadowing

The 101st rejection (630268437) 18:09:30

At the beginning, he paved his father's stubborn character

He also pointed out that he was thoughtful and thoughtful

quietly wrote that the protagonist has a stiff relationship with his father, because the protagonist plays every day and does not accompany his father

Write about the pedantry of the protagonist who looks down on his father's actions

The 101st rejection (630268437) 18:10:39

The foreshadowing is good, and the following is to buy oranges**

In the end, the father's letter also killed a horse pistol, which sublimated the inner mood of the whole character

The 101st rejection (630268437) 18:11:47

Contrast, concentrated use of pen and ink, abbreviation, foreshadowing, **, theme sublimation

This article can be used for reference

In the second paragraph, the sense of substitution is also very good

The 101st rejection (630268437) 18:12:50

If you want to make the reader feel good about the character, you have to write about what is unusual about him

Just such a sentence: "This is the case, don't be sad, fortunately, there is no endless road!"

The characters are immediately outstanding

After posting it, I read it carefully again, and I think the suspense of this article is also well applied, and the reason for the stiff relationship between father and son is only pointed out at the end, which is also worth learning from.