Today 101 read "Blue Blood Sword", there is a short dialogue in it, and the taste has changed greatly after being left blank, I think it is very interesting, and I will release it for everyone to see. Pen, fun, pavilion www. biquge。 info

Original:

Qingqing stared at Yuan Chengzhi for a moment when he went out, and said in a low voice: "Brother Chengzhi, the Tartar Emperor is really good at stabbing, and if he can't stab, it's just fine, you must take care of yourself." You know, in my heart, a hundred Tartar Emperors can't match a single hair of yours, if I never see you again......" As he said this, his eyes turned red.

Yuan Chengzhi wanted to let her be relieved, reached out and plucked a hair on his head, and said with a smile: "I will send a hundred Tartar Emperors to you." As he spoke, he passed his hair over.

Qingqing smiled, but tears fell.

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The feelings between the characters in this paragraph are very delicate, especially the emotional changes of the heroine, first staring, whispering, and then halfway through speaking, the circles under her eyes turned red, and finally she was amused by the male protagonist, but the tears fell.

By reading this paragraph, 101 learned that the dialogue of the characters is not separated, but organically matches the facial expressions, and develops with the emotions of the characters. The kind of dialogue with an action look, and there is no progressive development relationship between the action and expression, really makes the character feel like suffering from ADHD, fake!

Look at the 101 rewrite:

"Brother Chengzhi, the Tartar Emperor stabbed it really well, and if he can't stab it, it's just fine, you must take care of yourself. You know, in my heart, a hundred Tartar Emperors are not as good as a hair of yours, if I never see you again......"

"I'll send you a hundred Tartar Emperors." Yuan Chengzhi pulled out a hair and handed it over.

Qingqing smiled, but tears fell.

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This paragraph 101 felt bad at first.,Only the dialogue is the main body.,A lot of other characters' facial expressions are omitted.,But after reading it to the authors in the group.,They all said this was interesting.,Reading it, I also sneered.。

101 read it carefully, and I also felt that Yuan Chengzhi looked very cute and interesting, Qingqing was sad on it, he hit the snake with the stick, and immediately answered a sentence, highlighting the laughter, and finally took the heroine's reaction, which felt very prominent.

This paragraph is handled in blank space, the mentality and expressions of the characters and the like, all rely on the reader's own brain to make up, highlighting the excitement of the dialogue, the different artistic conceptions, and giving the reader different feelings about the characters.

Send another paragraph of four dislikes:

Qingqing stared at Yuan Chengzhi for a moment when he went out, and said in a low voice: "Brother Chengzhi, the Tartar Emperor is really good at stabbing, and if he can't stab, it's just fine, you must take care of yourself." You know, in my heart, a hundred Tartar Emperors can't match a single hair of yours, if I never see you again......" As he said this, his eyes turned red.

"I'll send you a hundred Tartar Emperors." Yuan Chengzhi plucked a hair from his head and handed it over.

Qingqing smiled, but tears fell.

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In this paragraph, because Qingqing's words are matched with a lot of facial expressions, Yuan Chengzhi's simple sentence looks stunned, and there is no blank outstanding effect.

Finally, the author's comments in the attached group -

I17:45:53

The first focuses on the sweetness of the two at the same time, and both personalities are portrayed

The second focuses on the humor of the male protagonist, and there is a feeling of faint pretense

The third one is not focused, and I don't know what I want to express

P.S. If you want to be delicate, you should be delicate, if you want to be simple, you should be simple, and if you want to be delicate, you will be fine.