I sorted out the recent scattered comments, with encouragement and suggestions. Hereby make a review of the problem, Liwen here, as the direction of your own efforts.

(1) Suspicion of rhetoric. For example, as pointed out by Blue Blood and Green Shirts and Chi Hengda and Against the Cold Rain, novels serve the characters in the final analysis, and objects and scenes can be detailed, but they must be closely linked to the characters in order to play their role. In some places, a lot of writing is written, but before the pen power reaches that point, it is easy to become meaningless words. How much difference can there be between writing and sharpening knives?

(2) The disadvantages of scene jumping. Many friends have pointed out that the scene in the first seven or eight chapters is very incoherent, and I often look at it and don't understand it and go back to the front to find it again. I don't know how many people have the patience to read it. Well, I admit that such a deliberate jump is indeed too unkind for online articles. I should have been honest and would have written since 10 years ago, and there wouldn't have been such a mess. I have to go back and practice enough to use it. Next, try to jump as little as possible!The ruffian said Qingyue, you stepmother, you always hide me, look at it, it's okay, it's going to collapse, it's going to be messy!(The collapse also collapsed you, ruffian, don't be rampant!)

(3) The lack of weakened martial arts. This, the description of "fighting" in martial arts novels is really indispensable. As a woman who has never liked to fight and kill, I can only learn from scratch. However, since Jiang Shaoyun's appearance in the later part of the first volume, there should be more refinement in martial arts. The second volume still has to learn to write about the Great War, and different martial arts are intertwined or something, and it is being designed. The ruffian said that who let your stepmother give me a sword from the market and use it as a watermelon knife all day long? Hurry up, let me learn something else, such as flying all over the sky like Chu Zi, Dora wind!(Xiao Chu said that the first person to be shot down by a bow and arrow was your black pigeon!)

(4) Redundancy of foreshadowing. Digging a pit or burying a thread or something was originally essential. There are so many pitfalls that it seems confusing to read. This work of digging pits and burying wires is also learned. Although detective reasoning has seen a lot, he has not learned anything at all, and now it is called heaven and earth should not be called ineffective. I was going to hurriedly ask Xiao Xie to invite Sherlock Holmes, but unfortunately the ruffian replied to me directly: I can't speak English, the detective is the most annoying, stepmother, you can go out in person!

I have no conscience, I have to work slowly and carefully, and it is said that grinding foreign workers may not be able to grind high-quality products, but grinding is better than directly bringing a rough blank up!

From that bleak click, I know that there must be N more problems with this book. You are also very welcome to tell me the truth and help me better complete this novel.

No matter how many people are watching, it's always a constant goal to finish it.

Finally, I would like to thank my friends for their great support in recent days.

Here are some excerpts from the valuable long and short reviews since October:

I came to rub it off and watch the masterpiece. The writing is profound, and you can see at a glance that in just one chapter, it depicts a legend of the ronin who is full of vicissitudes and full of chivalry. I collected it, and I wish you an early sign~~

(by Kiyokui)

After reading your work, two chapters, just two chapters, I seem to have returned to the mood I had when I watched martial arts dramas in my childhood. In the gray sky, the light rain fell, the chivalrous man carried his sword, walked on the street, looked at the crowd in a hurry, drank alone, and enjoyed the loneliness. The flowers fell, the cold light rose, the long sword was biased, and the blood was splashed red. ~~~ Eh, I really want to scold, well, I can't write your charm, haha~~~ It's really good, two chapters make me feel surging, come on, sister (uncle) say that you are a man or a woman~~~

(by Moonlight Snow Viewing)

Hey, I've been chasing your progress with my phone recently, Xifeng has decided to settle my grievances without losing the atmosphere, Qingyue's writing is very good, and her ability to control the story is also very strong. A sense of images gradually formed in my mind: the Beacon Fire Ridge full of killings, Paiyun Gorge, and the kind of friendship that will not swerve until death. The fight in the chapter where Chu Tao was injured shocked me. It is hard to imagine that a gentle and sweet woman can grasp the details of the battle so vividly. From the sword light and sword shadow, I can feel Jin Yong's free atmosphere. I take the liberty of asking, does Qingyue like Jin Yong?

Qingyue's writing is more than enough to control this article. If I want to find the shortcomings, or the reason why this article is not very popular. Perhaps because there are too many suspense settings at the beginning and too much jump in the plot, many impatient readers will give up this article because of this. But I believe that the further you go, the more coherent the plot of this book will be, and there should be more and more readers who like this book. Qingyue, don't worry, there are still many people who really like martial arts, and between the lines of your words, I can find Jin Yong's shadow, so I like it very much.

I'll catch up with you as soon as possible, come on, Qingyue!

Finally, I wish Qingyue a successful signing again!! claw, claw, claw!

(by Smile Light Time)

For the image of this book,The first is that the writing is good~ and then it is.。。 This author is a man, right...... From the macro opening to the detailed description of the characters, it is impeccable~

(by海靛雅電)

After reading less than half of the prologue, I couldn't help but comment, I didn't think that I was so similar to the big style, it was really fortunate that I would put forward a small opinion, Ha Da second paragraph is a little sparse, if the light is changed to a light like a bean, it will be better? Of course, this is a humble opinion, the big writing far exceeds mine, should have their own ideas, I then look down, with emotion will be re-evaluated, hehe, it is rare to meet such a similar style of authors, really excited. Don't talk about it, bury your head in hard reading......

(by Qin Yuan)

After reading the prologue, although I couldn't help but want to continue looking down, I couldn't open my sleepy eyelids, so let's talk about the feeling of reading the prologue! A passionate martial arts world is presented like this, of course, the long river sinking sand is infinitely embarrassing. I can't help but suggest that it be changed to the chapter name, haha come on, remember to help me read the article and give comments when you have time. Sleep, good night.

(by Qin Yuan)

Try to comment on "The Stormy Waves of the Long River"——

The beginning of this article is extraordinary, the ordinary riverside town, the old swordsmith, and the mysterious stranger immediately attract us to this strange river and lake, a ronin, a broken sword, just like the article says...... The sharper the weapon, the more tragic its fate is.

Sure enough, the rivers and lakes that have been quiet for a long time, because of a murder, will be smoked in the beacon fire ridge, and the rivers and lakes will no longer be lonely. What kind of conspiracy will the ruthless Qin Dashao have? Chu Tao seems to have encountered a great disaster, how will he resolve it, and what kind of person is Shen Yanfei? All these take us into the book, wanting to know what will happen next.

Friends in the description of the character's words and deeds and the development of the development of the situation is very good, the portrayal is meticulous, the slight deficiency is the character's own appearance and appearance, it seems not to be profound enough, the style of writing is old to refined, you can see that you are well-informed, Jin Gu Liangwen's book should have read a lot, but you can't see the style of these grandmasters, it is obvious that friends have become a family of their own unique style, if you consider individual words and sentences, you can do better, Yun Ying read the first five chapters, this nonsense, I hope you forgive me for the wrong......

(by Yunying)

I like the West Wind Jue, but I don't like the ending, maybe the things in the world are so helpless, women, heroes, love, just looking forward to that bit of tenderness, but after all, it's a farewell poem, don't ask when the hero will return, independent west window, looking at the moon to the sparse, tears in the courtyard Xiangfei!

(by Pen Watch)

Earlier, Chi Da recommended two books, the Broken Dragon Tomb and the Laughing Rivers and Lakes, and I looked at it before, and it was really good, and the results were also very good, but recently I found that these two books are getting more and more dismal, and I pondered it carefully, and summarized the two words "Kill!"

This is another recommended book by Chi University, how to say it, I am an almost obsessive martial arts lover, this book has an advantage, that is, the description is very beautiful, rhetoric and sentence formation is very exquisite, but I always have a strange feeling, after all, the novel is a novel, always fill some of the words that are described, is this necessary? Just like the small linden some time ago, it is also full of gorgeous words, but unfortunately I can't read it, watching martial arts, nothing more than appreciating the chivalrous feelings of the rivers and lakes** If you want to read gorgeous words, I might as well read prose poems. Every sentence and every word of the novel should be for the sake of this novel, not for the purpose of embodying anything, not only the gorgeous words are good, Bai Juyi's poems are easy to understand, the world praises his excellent writing, and can even be compared to Li Du, people often say that Bai Juyi has some beautiful words, "not can't, not for also" One sentence, one word, if it is helpful to the plot and characters of the novel, then it should be written, otherwise, it should be succinctly brushed aside, after all, this is a martial arts novel, not a description of the model text in the Chinese textbook, a few opinions, it may not be very good, I hope the author will not be surprised, send flowers, and make persistent efforts!

(by Against the Cold Rain)

The long river is turbulent, and just looking at the name has revealed domineering. I couldn't help but read it carefully, but I didn't expect that the prologue would attract Xiaosheng. I like this prologue very much, and I have to say that the author's portrayal of the environment is perfect. In the dark night, the prodigal son in the wind and snow and the old man who forged the sword seemed to come at hand, but they always made Xiaosheng read a kind of coldness. To be honest, Xiaosheng likes the prodigal son in the prologue, hehe, I don't know how I like it. What did the prodigal son do in twenty years? Why did he change this way? I wondered, so I looked for answers. I suddenly remembered a sentence in the book: If the world can be as simple as a flowing river, then people will be wanderers in the river who don't know where they will go, between ups and downs, and taste all kinds of tastes. That's how the prodigal son came along...

(by Decadent Musicians)

Just reading the introduction of the page and the author's words made me feel a lot. The sentence that martial arts have died expresses a faint sense of sadness, which resonates with me. The description of the scenery at the beginning is a rare wonderful pen in the online article, giving people an immersive feeling. I won't say much about the praise, but I will only express my humble opinion here. 1. Chivalrous women are soft, gentle and delicate, and have a lack of chivalrous style. 2. The description of martial arts scenes needs to be improved.

(by Flower Xie Baixi)

First of all, praise one~\(≧▽≦)/~

I don't pay much attention to martial arts. The only text I like very much is the one of the moon. Though. It seems that hers is partial to romance.。。

The opening was very appealing to me. Extraordinary. I like it, I like it.

What is the beginning and what is the end. Perhaps, this is a contradiction and a matter of course.

The depiction of the environment is very good for the portrayal of the outside world.

Not.. Because I'm not a fan of martial arts. So, my suggestions and reviews may not be on point. The author just laughs it off. ~

Xie Junhe must be a very simple and free person.

Chu Tao. In modern times, it's a black belly~

All kinds of likes do not explain ~~

Where there are people in the rivers and lakes, there are struggles, and where there are rivers, the rivers and lakes are the rivers and In the author's pen, everything is confusing. There is really a bloody and righteous river and lake with real feelings.

I have a lot of thoughts when I read the text. Not. Some places will be a little ignorant, and then go back and rewatch.

Looking at it repeatedly, the last words that can be said are the two most frequent words: come on.

I really like it.。。

- The above is purely a personal opinion.

Rookies who don't understand martial arts float by.

(by Qingsang Junxi)

For martial arts, it seems that I chased it for a while in high school, and I only watched it for two people, Cangyue and Bu Feiyan, I thought that the books of these two people had reached the point of perfection, and it was difficult for anyone to compare with them, so I suspended my dedication to martial arts. Until recently, I had the opportunity to rewatch martial arts, just this one, I couldn't help but be shocked, there are people outside the world, there are heavens outside the sky, and it is true.

The opening chapter is impressive.

As soon as I opened the book, I felt that this book was domineering, but it was gentle and delicate. The brief and plain description of the environment creates a seemingly calm but undercurrent scene, which lays the foundation for the appearance of the characters. The arrival of strangers is both the beginning and the end. Who is the stranger? What does the long river mean? Where does the broken sword come from? What happened in January? It all tells the fact that it all ended before it began, and this little bit became the reason to read this book.

After reading the text, I couldn't help but sigh at the great ability to control the text, the shaping of the characters, and the rendering of the scenes, all of which were convincing, especially when describing the scene of the long river, I seemed to see the scene of the Yangtze River flowing endlessly. The language and personality of the characters are well matched, the somewhat ruffian Jun He, the innocent Xiangxue, and that Chu Tao, how do I think that if his identity fades, he will be more ruffian than Jun He...

I have always been very envious of the relationship between men, they can quarrel and fight, but the public is public, private is private, and the distinction is clear. I'm glad that in this book, I saw such feelings, between Chu Tao and Xie Junhe. Martial arts has always been a man's martial arts, and the rivers and lakes have always been the rivers and lakes of men, but the people who write martial arts are women. But a woman's pen has a vast mind that is not inferior to a man's, and the pen is even more magnificent!

I read this book in the way of a reader, and it reads naturally at a glance and ten lines, and some of the plots are not real, so suggestive words or renderings should be used as little as possible, so that I read the back and found that the front was a little inappropriate, so I came back and looked at it, and it was good to be quick to read the text, and to be more straightforward.

The above is purely personal opinion, if you are offended, please Haihan.

Written to 2009

2012，11，10

(by written for 2009)